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Francine

Sun 6th Mar 2011 16:06

An Interesting read, Dave - Intriguing personality!

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Francine

Sun 6th Mar 2011 15:55

I have to agree with most comments...
I like the idea of 'rooms'... compartments.
Your words impress upon the reader an interesting series of feelings and thoughts!


Especially liked:

'waltzing in nausea'
'bent from lack of sun'
'Tulip tourettes - and everything comes undone'

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Banksy

Sun 6th Mar 2011 13:51

ya dirty bugger - go and have a cold shower forthwith.
... ah, the aroma - probberly just last night's curry announcing it's presence :X

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Banksy

Sun 6th Mar 2011 13:46

we don't get many birds singing at night - I'd have suggested maybe a nightingale - but I don't think it's the right time of year ?

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Banksy

Sun 6th Mar 2011 13:31

thanks for the very kind comments Cyn - but I think you're in a minority of one there ! xx
(stand-up)

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Banksy

Sun 6th Mar 2011 13:31

thanks for the very kind comments Cyn - but I think you're in a minority of one there ! xx

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:43

very chirpy poem Cynthia :-)

my cat would have a field day in that holly tree.
I felt the poem came to an end a bit abruptly but love the imagery with the jumping back into bed.x

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:37

Hi Julian, your comment on my hair poem is about as flippant as the poem itself. What are you up to!?

thanks :-)

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:35

Hi Laura, thanks for comment on my hair poem and for pointing out the typo - doh! :-)

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:28

Hi Isobel, thanks for comment on my hair poem. I see your point on the title. Further explanation beneath poem if you care to see.xx
:-)

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:27

Hi Cynthia, thanks for comment on my hair poem :-)
you are not far out with your interpretation. Further explanation beneath poem if you care to read again.x

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Janet Ramsden

Sun 6th Mar 2011 12:24

Thanks for comments :-)

Isobel - the title is meant to be flippant in the sense of the number of snips to shape a new style and is also the number of syllables in each line of the verses :-)

Julian - what are you up to?!

Cynthia - you're not far out at all in your interpretation except the bit about growing an inch of grey being devastating. My hair grows too quickly and false colours are expensive :-)

This is a much shortened version of an older poem i wrote about my marriage break up of 8 years.x

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Isobel

Sun 6th Mar 2011 11:49

A very cheerful chirpy poem Cynthia - perfect for this time of year. The sun is streaming through my clean windows and it's sounding good! xx

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Philipos

Sun 6th Mar 2011 09:57

Hi Winston - yes something in the air - influences of Betjeman still abound I guess - although not quite Joan Hunter-Dunn

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Philipos

Sun 6th Mar 2011 09:54

Hi Winston - re: Scent of a Maiden - yes something in the air - influences of Betjeman still abound I guess - although not quite Joan Hunter-Dunn

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Catherine Brogan

Sun 6th Mar 2011 02:12

Thanks very much Winston! its an honor to be on here, dont know why its taken me so long to get round to it! the admin of poetry life eh?

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sun 6th Mar 2011 02:07

Lynn! You are so dear! Thank you very much for your correction.I will change it immediately. Love, hugs and warmest wishes, Larisa

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Lynn Dye

Sun 6th Mar 2011 01:32

Enjoyed this poem, Larisa.
(Hope you don't mind me saying, passers-by would sound better than passer-bys.)
But a really interesting story, well told.
Love, Lynn xx

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Dave Bradley

Sun 6th Mar 2011 00:00

Bird song at night is so evocative. And thank you for the reminder to find something to appreciate, if possible, in what is initially irritating.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Sat 5th Mar 2011 23:25

Thank you, dear Stefan! Love, hugs and warmest wishes, Larisa (Odessa girl)

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 5th Mar 2011 23:20

what a very interesting poem Larisa.very different.Thank you.xx

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 5th Mar 2011 23:13

ta Benjiboys mammy for commontatering twice-so thanksx2..Stefxx

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 5th Mar 2011 20:11

So, we are now on Twitter.
Delightful, Cynthia, even with a sock on your head!

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Greg Freeman

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:48

Very cheery, Cynthia. Reminds me a bit of that Thomas Hardy poem, The Darkling Thrush.

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Gus Jonsson

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:47

Thank you very much Dave
Enough with the Stilton cheese already .... specially just before I hit the ole scratcher.


However dreams are the catalyst of inspiration for many of my creative ventures.

once again many thanks

Gus

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Gus Jonsson

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:46

Thank you very much Win

Enough with the Stilton cheese already .... specially just before I hit the ole scratcher.


However dreams are the catalyst of inspiration for many of my creative ventures.

once again many thanks

Gus

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Gus Jonsson

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:45

Thank you very much Dave / Win

Enough with the Stilton cheese already .... specially just before I hit the ole scratcher.


However dreams are the catalyst of inspiration for many of my creative ventures.

once again many thanks

Gus

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John Coopey

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:07

Thanks for your comments on Fix, Dave. Did you have to get out of the bath to write them?

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John Coopey

Sat 5th Mar 2011 18:01

Hello Lynn. Thanks for your comments on Fix.
It does seem to be a lot harder being a parent now the kids have grown up.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:59

I haven't heard it, but I love the page version. Situations that have pathos can turn on a word to bathos. Perhaps that what reading it aloud does, by the intonations. Real humour is always edged with sharp truths. I think this work is super and so relate-able.

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John Coopey

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:54

Thanks for your comments on Fix, Cynthia.
You're right about the grammar. In perfprmance I retain the singular "was" but replace "and" with "or".
It did seem a whole lot easier being a good dad when the kids were little!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:49

Janet, I'm still not sure what this is all about. I don't see 'cutting hair', more like 'losing it' in 'the time it takes to grow an inch of grey'. I think it is far more devastating than just a snip job. And the bold beauty embraced by the final lines, the bravery and confidence, is very gripping. And I'm probably 'out to lunch' with this idea.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:41

You are so good. I think this has real depth with thought and wit. I like its flow as though mumbled over the fourth pint, still drawing on an educated mind.

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winston plowes

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:36

Do you remember the Numskulls in the Beano? More seriously another classic Marianne. Well done. Win x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:33

Fabulous. Amazingly novel, and completely 'sucking in' the reader to follow your metaphorical ideas.

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:30

Marianne I thought this was one of your best so far. You seem to have unravelled a bit so that you let us further inside (or am I just getting a little less thick).
Waltzing in nausea, and I particularly like the way you handled a tricky couple of lines
"too tight is the outside,and too loose is what is in"
Very well done again and always admire your work.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:28

Great story told with verve and skillful crafting. Super diction.

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winston plowes

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:28

Quite a collection of words Gus. Burnt out gas blue fantastic. win x

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winston plowes

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:24

Spring is in the air... Steady Philipos! Win

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:19

I, also, know exactly what you are saying. And it goes well past twenty-one. Very well expressed. Small point: change 'was' to 'were' since you are referring to two persons. Or - change 'and' to 'or'.... either way.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 5th Mar 2011 17:10

I thought it time to 'lighten up' a bit, in the interests of balanced sanity.

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Winston (Admin)

Sat 5th Mar 2011 16:44

Hi Michael, Welcome to our site. Hope you enjoy exploring and contributing to it. Winston

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Julian (Admin)

Sat 5th Mar 2011 15:04

Speak for yourselves. In my case, such a shame it does not grow back!
Perhaps that is why I have managed to "let go" so many lovers?

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Isobel

Sat 5th Mar 2011 12:12

This reminds me of that South Pacific song 'I'm going to wash that man right out of my hair'. There is something very therepeutic about shedding hair - it does lighen the soul in some odd way - such a shame it all has to grow back.

I didn't like the title - would have preferred something more tied into the letting go of a lover or the past. I do like the idea being linked to the cutting of hair though. x

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David Franks

Sat 5th Mar 2011 11:56

"Like they too have given up on poetry." (Lucy)...typing prose, hitting the return button a few extra times, and calling it "poetry". And, in China, they need a socialist revolution to get rid of the "Chinese Capitalist Party"!

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 11:07

How lovely, John, sad but true, agree with Dave's comments about this being effective in its simplicity. x

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 11:03

Hi Ann, thank you for recent comments on my poems, you are very kind. (By the way, forgot to say, we both love palaminos!)
Just read your " Lament for a dead badger", I so identified with that one, as the times we drive past bloodied animals when out and about, and just want to bury them all, but so impractical in our busy lives... Love, Lynn xx

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 10:52

Hi again, Petrova, just been reading a few of yours, and have to say I really enjoyed Butterfly, Sunday and Waking Whispers, they are beautiful, and I shall have to read more...

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 10:41

Hi Petrova, thank you so much for your kind comments on "Knowing When to Surrender", much appreciated. Lynn x

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Lynn Dye

Sat 5th Mar 2011 10:39

Hi Banksy, thank you for your comment on my latest, I too am hoping it was really true x

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