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raypool

Tue 26th Sep 2017 19:30

It is an original and brave poem that puts consciousness there in the womb Desmond and as Colin says that sparks strong feelings. I often wonder about previous lives and the continuance of spirit experience so entailed.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 26th Sep 2017 19:12

LIke the puns etc Col. Massive difference in meanings goes to show how variable our language can be. This only happened the other day!

Thanks Hannah. I get talking so easily to people that my days are always full of chat!

Mark, it is so important we keep up human interaction - I see supermarkets are beginning to phase out tills in favour of self checkouts. One more link closing off. Thanks folks for the likes too.

Ray

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 18:43

Fantastic poem !

Thank you for your comment on my poem. Really appreciated.

Hannah

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 18:41

Autumn evokes many feelings. Enjoyed this poem very much.

Thank you for your comment on my poem.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 26th Sep 2017 16:30

Atmospheric and appealing in equal measure.

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 26th Sep 2017 16:22

I've still got my 45rpm disc of Telstar!
This is a parallel universe of the soaps on TV. Trivia
taken seriously because it can matter for the way we
measure and value our connection with others in this
funny old life.
Recently, I bought a used car and the salesman and I
found ourselves talking about everything but the car!
But he made a sale and I left with a smile from common
interests visited in the process.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th Sep 2017 13:52

This is very well thought out indeed. I would shorten the last line though, it looks to wordy compared to how succinct the rest of the work is.

Good work.

Graham

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Stu Buck

Tue 26th Sep 2017 13:25

a fine choice and you come across as a genuinely caring bloke who just loves writing and reading. and lets face it, the world could do with a few more of them.

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DESMOND CHILDS

Tue 26th Sep 2017 12:35

Thank you Colin for your comments. I can imagine that your prose night was a very emotive, it is a very controversial subject whether to allow terminations or not. I belive ultimately a woman has the right to choose. But as you say it is a very emotive issue.
As for saying my poem makes you think of Kate Bush's 'Breathing' I take that as a great compliment, she is one of my favorite artists. Thanks, Des.

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 12:24

well done to everyone - quite a few names I recognise there - look forward to seeing some pictures of the poem posters.

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David Taylor-Jones

Tue 26th Sep 2017 09:25

I loved this one right from 'a rock doesn't in the river run'

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 09:00

I don't know why I still like this but I do

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:48

love those last three lines NS. makes me want to drive off into the sunset on an adventure...

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:39

I was listening to a live reading of a piece of prose last night given by two people - one read the voice of the mother who was waiting to receive the morning after pill and the other read the voice of the unborn child who also lamented the loss of previously terminated siblings. It was very effective and emotive. As is yours Desmond but for obviously different reasons. I can't help but think also of Kate Bush's 'Breathing'. Thanks for posting. All the best, Colin.

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Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:07

thank you Mr Old / New / Warn Out Shoes - I do love the way your name is so interchangeable (depending on your mood?) Buttocks and bacon? You make me sound like I'm a cannibal! Hope all is well in your neck of the woods. All the best, Col.

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New Shoes

Tue 26th Sep 2017 07:11

awesome and gave a good smile

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Raj Ferds

Tue 26th Sep 2017 07:06

Ooops, what I meant is "The theme is close to my heart since it lifts human bonding..."

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Raj Ferds

Tue 26th Sep 2017 06:51

I love this Kay Li.

The theme is lose to my heart since it lifts human boding and intimacy to a higher plane. I'd like to see some more.
It flows sweetly too. Thank you so much.

Raj

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New Shoes

Tue 26th Sep 2017 05:11

Colin, Colin, Colin, I really don't know what to say. but you are a pretty swell dude. and if I knew anything about real poetry, I'd critique the hell out or you right now. you always strike the feeling in your work. and on a personal note; I have always said the two best things in life are boobs and bacon. But in your case it looks like it's buttocks and bacon.

Write on brother

Warn Out Shoes, OUT!

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Greg Freeman

Mon 25th Sep 2017 16:41

Like the T-shirt, Nigel - they could catch on!

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Nigel Astell

Mon 25th Sep 2017 15:59

The Journey

A young writer starts a journey
towards a dream to come true
getting her very own book published

Rain or shine snow or hurricane
W O L poets on Marple open mic
beer and poetry what a night!

Well done Linda and you too Nicola with your new book!

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Duncan McKenzie Ross

Mon 25th Sep 2017 13:39

I thought this started off as a nice night time stroll, then boom, surprise. I enjoyed this very much. Thank You.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 25th Sep 2017 12:18

Thanks Stu and Karen.

Stu - you disgust me ?

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Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:59

I like the way this pings and flips between the first and last who's. Good stuff. Life certainly can be like a game of pinball some days. Col.

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Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:54

as seen through the eyes of the poet

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Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:48

excellent

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John Coopey

Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:33

Harry,
Benny WAS guilty of crimes against entertainment.

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Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:31

Thank you all very much for your kind words. I hadn't realised I'd written so much in answer to the questions - it seemed less in the email but more on here!

Graham, I thought a lot about knickers and panties and decided I liked them both equally. Just saying knickers and panties out loud makes me giggle. I know I should grow up!

Jonathan, I like the comparison. And I like British social dramas. I think Fish Tank fits into that category well enough.

Col.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 25th Sep 2017 00:09

John, John!
That huge piece of graffiti on the wall just outside of Euston station...`BENNY IS INNOCENT`... was it you?

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 24th Sep 2017 22:40

Oh! By the way, in V1 I would have said knickers not panties, we're British ?

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 24th Sep 2017 22:38

Colin, we had visitors last weekend and I missed this as it got buried quickly in the prolific blog section in just a couple of days. Thank goodness POTW has pulled it out for further appraisal.

The really clever bit in this is how it passes back and forth from narration into personal involvement.

As usual you've crept up on a subject and kidnapped it.

Great work

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raypool

Sun 24th Sep 2017 20:00

A sense of justice with this choice, as you have a pioneering quality that always brings an edge to your work - there must be peaks Col. Congratulations. I am so chuffed about the live reading - while you draw breath in Laugharne I'll be in Waterstones in Guildford fanning the flames of enthusiasm over a hot coffee!

All the very best to you. Ray

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terry l shuff

Sun 24th Sep 2017 19:18

WE all learn some things the hard way. you won't have to wait for the next life Shaaklera,to be wise. you are wiser now.

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kJ Walker

Sun 24th Sep 2017 18:49

congratulations Colin on POTW. no-one deserves it more than you, not only for the great work that you post, but also the way that you encourage others with your well thought out comments.
in your Q&A you talk about the WOL community. I like to think that that is what we are, but only because of the generosity of yourself and others like you.
thanks Kevin

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raypool

Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:51

Thank you Mark for your exhaustive resume to fulfil my curiosity. That is certainly a massive expansion financially into stricken territories - the expression "by the balls" comes to mind re the American "investing" military hardware and personnel and its consequences. A most interesting and enlightening account thank you again. To think it only took a cyanide pill and one bullet to put paid to the man that started all that.
Ray

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:15

Brilliant !

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:14

Love this poem, love through the seasons and the realization of love.

Thank you for your comment on my poem Shadows. Very much appreciated.

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:09

It's great when people open up and tell you about themselves. I love all the detail.

Thank you for your comment on my poem Shadows, really appreciated.

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:03

Thank you for your message to me.

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DESMOND CHILDS

Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:01

Congratulations Colin,on poem of the week. You do write really good poetry and have been an encouragement to me.I appreciate your comments as I am sure many others do. ?

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Martin Elder

Sun 24th Sep 2017 16:00

Thanks Ray, Nat, Randy, Col, Stu and Patricia for comments and thanks to Desmond for liking
Ray this guy that I saw certainly had attitude, he didn't give a monkeys

Nat
I know what you mean about people watching. people are fascinating ad good material for writing. I would have love to have met some of the characters that Dickens mentions in his books.

Randy
You are right about no gaps to small , plus some people are just chancers anyway

Colin
I saw a programme a while back about some bikers in London who seemed to take it as a sport to ride wherever and whenever they want to abandoning any sense of danger , through red lights etc. As ray points out reminding us of the recent episode when a guy on a fixed wheel killed a woman crossing the road

Stu
I think that there is something voyeuristic about us all at times we just don't like to admit it

Patricia
now you are bringing back memories of not only choppers and they way they were ridden but also space hoppers.

That said folks I am a regular bike rider and have to confess to riding on the pavement at times as it is a lot safer than some of the roads as some motorists view cyclists as the enemy. I am always careful to watch out for pedestrians I might add and tend to give way to them. I do not condone in any way any sort of reckless behaviour.

once again thank you all for taking the time to read and comment. very much appreciated
Cheers
Martin

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Martin Elder

Sun 24th Sep 2017 15:45

Love this one Col. There is as you say a kind of unspoken knowingness between the unseen figure that she is pointing at her and the daughter has no idea what went on the night before. Congratulations on POTW mate

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John Coopey

Sun 24th Sep 2017 12:08

I think you are right about my version being "dung dung dung dung dung". I have re-recorded the audio since my original. I thought I'd take advantage of a cold to replicate Lenny's low-pitched grumble.

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 10:32

Really liked this poem. Haven't seen the film, but it brings Sillitoe's Saturday Night, Sunday Morning to mind. Well done Colin. Good stuff!
JH : )

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Sun 24th Sep 2017 08:40

from carpet bombing to carpet selling - I can see a thread here. Thoughtful as ever Ray and certainly suitable for Sunday morning. Have a peaceful day good sir. Col.

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M.C. Newberry

Sun 24th Sep 2017 02:53

In fairness, the Marshall Aid Plan was intended to be the
basis for the regeneration of a cooperating Europe and
went to 16 countries including the UK. Russia feared its
intention was to exert and extend US influence/power
and refused to participate - using its own influence to
affect those lands within its grip to play ball with its
own policies. The aid was a mixture of grants and loans
and Germany was seen by the US as essential to the
ongoing political and industrial security of Europe. The
Organisation for European Economic Cooperation (OEEC)
and the European Coal and Steel Community (which
excluded Britain) were the forerunners of the EU, and
in 1953 Germany obtained a 50% debt reduction payable
over 30 years - not too onerous as its industrial rebirth
was going well. It's reported the UK had a direct loan
total of 4.6 billion USD, together with its Marshall aid in
post war Europe, and Ireland faced a debt repayment
obligation on its economy that was still running into the 1970s.
In short, the US considered its interests were best
served by bolstering the recovery of the countries most
affected by WW2 in Europe via pro-active financial
muscle amounting to over 140 billion USD in today's
values. How these were allocated and on what terms
had varying effects on the countries involved and most
in need.

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Andy N

Sat 23rd Sep 2017 21:48

very good. can really relate to this.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 23rd Sep 2017 18:15

Stu, thanks for your most recent comment. I've changed the'poem' a bit, and I'm only hoping I've not spoiled what you liked.

It refuses to be 'categorised' as any 'type' of form. It just fights back. And so I let it be what it is. I'm not sure it's 'poetry' at all.

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raypool

Sat 23rd Sep 2017 17:39

Cheers Martin - I like to do weird ideas - i'm pleased it was well received.

Natasha, thanks a lot. Well spotted - slight feeling of shoehorning but if read with that in mind I hope I got away with it. Be a fan always!!

Thanks Col. Yes, at it again as usual. Can you make that pounds though?

Nice to have you look in Stu. Stir in a little mad imagination and apply liberally! Hope you're doing ok..

Philip, you flatter me . Welcome to my wacky world where anything is impossible.

A nicely rounded comment David. That makes you a reprobate and cad sir. I think a nice piece of graffiti verse is just the ticket. I recall a trumpet player who ended up in a psychiatric unit scribbling music (a complete score of jazz all round his room. It was photo'd and transcribed by enthusiasts and was faultless. (What does that say about musicians?)

You're very kind Karen. I appreciate any comment from a scribe such as yourself.

Love all round. Ray

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 23rd Sep 2017 16:51

Hazel,
I like the metaphorical possibilities of the `harbour` figuration in this. And also the reality of `letters` needing to `nestle up against each other` before they can make enough sense to embark on an understandable voyage.

I think I like most that it is a `natural` metaphor which - unlike so much of the strained `metaphor-icity` which is so fashionable these days - is so much more `traditional`.

For instance: the wideness of the sea and the`cogitative` closeness of the harbour are more universally (and also poetically) accessible to the human heart.

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