You may burn and rave...but make sure you keep writing
Comment is about Burn and Rave (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
There is a sort of other worldliness in this Karen. Transcendant - and what you describe seems to reveal a kind of acceptance , a maturity regarding what may be inevitable. There is such a lovely round and lyrical feel to the poem. (I'm enjoying your book !)
Ray
Comment is about And We Begin (blog)
Original item by Karen Ankers
Stand out stuff Laura. Hell is respect and if etiquette still exists it ain't here . A cracking poem and i'm sure will massively effective in a live reading, but then you know that!
Ray
Comment is about Burn and Rave (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
The grinning fool shrugged "i dont know what it is but i liked it"
Comment is about Wonderland Nightmare (blog)
Original item by Jacklyn Turner
Interesting how lines can be like lyrics - an idea that fills me with trepidation . I think maybe as I thought of the first line it just seemed to flow so off I went to pad it out. Thanks Suki.
Cheers Col. I feel elevated and I know you like songs from the heart; thanks for the clip. Funny being a muso I can't marry words to music readily. Appreciate it all the more.
Uplifting thoughts Laura, thanks. Salvation awaits for those with determination and individual guts - some of us do get stuck in a previous experience and don't move on .
You make a serious point Eric thanks. Often a victim needs a victor to make a pair. Then again, the roles can be reversed by self examination and rise again! My brother when his marriage broke up said he thought relationships were based on mutual neuroses.... i'll leave that one with you!
Stu, sounds like you appreciate the predicament - shining armour a bit of a fallacy all round!
David, God forbid - me manipulating words for effect? How dare I, - but then again..... Thanks pal.
Many thanks also Tom for your liking!
love to all you lovely contributors. Ray
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Mishal Das
Sat 21st Oct 2017 19:07
Beautiful lines my dear...??? so beautiful??
Comment is about ~HOME FARAWAY~ (blog)
Original item by priyakhi barbara
Nicola Beckett
Sat 21st Oct 2017 17:14
Stu - a beautiful representation of inevitability. A bird's eye view of mankind's trudge toward godlessness. As an atheist, I say its about time too. You capture the final defiant fight so well I am envious of your words. Thanks for this one.
Rob
Comment is about death poem (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Hi Stu,
It really isn't easy to write a poem about this subject ~ so many pitfalls, but this is excellent.
The last verse, to my mind, is as good as anything you have written. Nice one, and thanks for sharing!
Suki
Comment is about death poem (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Nicola Beckett
Sat 21st Oct 2017 00:35
Yes it's about my nephew, he's an ? Angel in my life x
Comment is about Angel (blog)
Original item by Nicola Byrnes
Thanks Stu, glad you liked it, always worth digging out your old Gong
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Hahahaha. Laura you have just climbed to top of the table as my favourite anarchist.
Go girl.
Raj
Comment is about Burn and Rave (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Well someone had to do it!
Makka Pakka Akka wakka Mikka makka moo!
Makka Pakka Appa yakka Ikka akka ooo.
Hum dum
Agga pang In gang ooo.
Makka Pakka Akka wakka Mikka makka moo!
(The Night Garden)
Comment is about A silly ditty... not by me! (blog)
Original item by mike booth
And one of my favourites...
There's holes in the sky
Where the rain gets in
But they're ever so small
That's why rains so thin.
:-)
Comment is about A silly ditty... not by me! (blog)
Original item by mike booth
Follow your dream Linda follow your dream and leave those begging letters in the recycling bin till you are well on your way!
Comment is about Learning to write better poetry - and having a drink - with Carol Ann Duffy (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
love it! fuck going down without a fight!
Comment is about Burn and Rave (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
wonderful. my first ever gig was the grateful dead when i was 10. i never quite recovered, and camembert electrique by gong is being dug out tonight just to be able to read this while listening.
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
lovely words ray. blast those handsome knights and their unfulfilled promises!
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
lovely stuff. i read this under a depressingly grey welsh sky but your words transported me exactly where you wanted them to
Comment is about The Eye of Morning (blog)
Original item by Chris Hubbard
Hi Helen
As Graham said above, the poem has charm. Also the reader is transported immediately to that experience. We can imagine being there. Reminds me of the days when I used to go fishing in Portugal except we took wine. Well done!
Comment is about 'How to Catch a Fish in the Solent' by Helen Elliott is Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I really enjoyed this. I agree with Laura's comments; for me it feels like watching someone maturing, getting ready to cast off the social "training wheels" that guide our first efforts at relating to people, and it easily evokes that sort of disappointed frustration that it's so easy to feel looking back on my own mistakes.
Reading it, a thought came to mind of a companion poem, written from the perspective of the handsome knight. What have they both lost? Were they both using and being used? Thoughtful stuff, and fluent.
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
(on feeling successful) Haha, yes! ?
Thank you both for the kind words. It feels good to share, and to take inspiration from all the amazing art being poured out here.
Comment is about Held (blog)
Original item by Eric Maynard
Sorry to be late back Suki - all's well thanks for asking. That hay fever is a bummer; I started to get it and now take cider vinegar every day , failing that local honey. Worked a treat for me . I love the light variation in spring and autumn!
Dr. Pool.
Comment is about AFTERMATH (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Laura - I came away from the gig knowing I had to catch it somehow!
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Fri 20th Oct 2017 10:15
This is lovely, I have nothing else to say, but a like didn’t seem enough
Comment is about Held (blog)
Original item by Eric Maynard
Thanks alot Phil , very pleasing , cheers
Comment is about Dragging my Life to School (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
big thanks Tom , glad it hit a cord , cheers
Comment is about So many are falling from the skies, of comfortable lives (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Nice one Helen! ? Lovely poem and a very worthy winner. So glad you're back with us for a while ?
Comment is about 'How to Catch a Fish in the Solent' by Helen Elliott is Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Great idea for a poem! You capture the night well. I've seen Damo Suzuki several times, and he always manages to make me lose my shit ? Also lucky enough to catch a jampacked gig at a festie a few years ago by System 7.
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
She'll go back to education, get a degree, or go travelling, or open a donkey sanctuary, or work with the homeless, or any number of things, and hopefully gain a sense of self/identity that doesn't revolve around being an object ?
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Cheers chaps ? Just trying to cheer myself up in the midst of writing a string of miserable poems!
Comment is about Burn and Rave (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi Philip
Thank you for your recent remarks on my page. Weirdly enough, I did a poem in January 2012 with the same title. I'm not gonna blog it but here it is:
WALK TO THE SHOPS
Slip into the sprinkle of a drizzle-filled day
Plastic bag crisp in hand, aiming for the shops
Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Carry on
Past the step
yellow tread
bearing Bulmers: lippy-stained
halfway drained
Pavement decorated in
a strange shade of sick
J’arrive at ‘The Parade’!
The Mean Street of Thatto Heath
Stench of piss and pizza
wraps itself around my mouth
as I kick along the papers
that cradled last night’s chips
Pit-shaved grinning princess,
billboarded, looks down
From within her perma-tan, she oozes
anonymity
Blinding me with bleachy teeth and peachy poreless face
I hope to fuck my DNA does not contain that kind of clean
Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Past the bus stop;
betting shop;
fag shop; tat shop;
takeaway; SALON;
takeaway; TANNING;
takeaway, takeaway;
CHIPPY.
Luckily:
‘health advice for minor conditions’ -
free inside the pharmacy
There’s no water in the fridges of the takeaway shops
And I didn’t want pop. They looked at me weird.
Social pariah, for wanting water.
Feet to floor
Pavement pound
Homeward bound
Past the salon
Chip fat alley
Tan tat fag bet bus
Ministering pharmacist
Past the step
yellow tread
Bulmers gone
Small red shoe there now instead
… wonder who..?
Tiny tatty lone red shoe
Torn too. Wonder if she’s..?
Nearly home
Nearly there
Rid my mouth of piss and murk
Home from hell on earth
a walk to the shops
and a musing or four
And then I recall
I forgot
what?
I went for
Comment is about Phils Words (poet profile)
Original item by Phils Words
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 20th Oct 2017 09:04
some groan out loud one liners in there David and all good fun. Thanks for posting and good luck with the therapy. Col.
Comment is about Halloween Support (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:50
agree with Suki but it needs another verse and a chorus to make it a top ten hit pop pickers. I've probably posted this link before but it's worth (IMO) posting again and your poem reminded me of it. Both lovely. Thanks. Col.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CkCn7jF7hnE
Comment is about LOOKING BACK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:40
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 20th Oct 2017 08:31
more like Flying Teapot David!
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Hi Andy - very amusing. "There's nowt so queer as folk" - T?
Comment is about Life in a small cul-de-sac (blog)
Original item by Andy Smyth
I'm glad you posted this Steven, I picked up "Your Name Here" a week or two ago, second hand just on Ashberry's name, your essay is a timely guide in. Looking forward to it now, an approach prepared.
Dom.
Comment is about John Ashbery: an appreciation (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hi Colin - I spent a couple of days there. Stayed just off the Plaza de la Reina. Pleased that I evoked some mostly positive memories for you. Thanks for your feedback. Gracias. T?
Comment is about Viva Valencia (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Thanks for your comments Suki, much appreciated
Comment is about Acid mothers Temple, Lewes, 18/10/17 (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
Frances Macaulay Forde
Fri 20th Oct 2017 05:20
Absolutely agree with every comment here.
Very clever and well done, Ian.
Comment is about Safety Off (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Frances Macaulay Forde
Fri 20th Oct 2017 04:57
I think we've all felt like that! Ha-Ha!
Comment is about Ain't Broke, Yet ( A comical composition of a real life event many years ago! (blog)
Original item by Duncan McKenzie Ross
Cheers fellas!
Ray, you are very kind. I packed a lot in, hoping it will at least put a smile on the reader's face. Thanks again.
David - the new Blade Runner film is out now. I understand that the original is based on Do Androids dream of Electric Sheep, although the novel had the usual PKD humour running through. I love his stuff. What a compliment!
SS
Comment is about Telepathic Parrots Can Read Your Dreams (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Rich
Sun 22nd Oct 2017 08:34
Lovely poem and an excellent subject. I really like this one.
Comment is about Three Wishes (blog)
Original item by Erica