so where was he,Nicola? and did he ever come back? if not remember for someone as beautiful as you there are plenty more fish in the sea and probably more trustworthy. Well written and so heartfelt. Thank you.Jemima.

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Original item by Nicola Byrnes

tough spot to be in no doubt about that, continue to write and eventually I promise your thoughts and feelings will turn into something else....

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Original item by Nicola Byrnes

Thank you Hannah. Appreciate that.

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for the comment Jennifer, glad to hear you liked it!

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Original item by Jennifer Malden

Hi Jon,
Many thanks for your comments. I remember when writing it that the structure slipped into place quite easily. That's a good reason, I think, for using one's own experiences as the foundation for engaging your audience.
All the best,
Chris

Comment is about 'Great White Heron' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Hanna,
Thank you for your generous comment. I think your advice to read the poem three times is wise and useful. Most creative efforts return a second or third viewing to an audience. There is usually plenty more to absorb.
Chris

Comment is about 'Great White Heron' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Cheers Suki, David and Ray.

Thanks for your comments and feedback. It's always useful to see how people react to poems. This one took a while to get right, since its first incarnation which was rejected by a couple of magazines. I must say though, I was pleased I could manage a poem out of such a mundane situation.

Comment is about BISCUIT FACTORY (blog)

Original item by john short

Hi Ray and David,

Cheers so much for your feedback.

David, you aren't far off at all. I was by a field and a vivid scarlet chiffon scarf was floating around a pylon ~ an other worldly slow-step tango. The sky was an almost luminous charcoal, casting an eerie light on the straw field. I just let my imagination run with those images..

This is an old poem that I re-edited as a little bit of an exercise.

SS

Comment is about The Pylon And The Scarf (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Yes,

Looking forward to the old solar return of our dark twin. Time to reacquaint ourselves with Annunaki poetry and the like.

I'll get my coat.

Suki

Comment is about Breathe. (blog)

Original item by Javis T.

Hi John,

I really like this - especially some of the vivid descriptions around fate and boredom:

like vivid nomads finding pasture,
needs met, horizons ending here..

Poignant too.

Suki

Comment is about BISCUIT FACTORY (blog)

Original item by john short

Hi Ray,

This would work well on that old satirical show from the nineties, Spitting Image. They used musical parody/satire often. Shame it's not around anymore, this would work brilliantly with all the puppets and all..

Suki

Comment is about THE LAST NOEL (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Ahh thanks Patrick that's super sweet of ya and drop by anytime u want to you hear!

Sure do appreciate it!!

Comment is about She's Trying (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Thanks for the prayers for my beloved Lily but I will pass that along to her father because I'm not married anymore and thank you for the comforting words expressed in your comment and maybe one day we will have ☮️ peace but I doubt that but in all due aspects thanks


Have a great day now you hear!

Comment is about My Forever Sleeping ? Angel Daughter Lily (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

prayers to Lily always in God's grace, and for you and your husband may he give you peace and comfort even though the reasons for all of this is completely out of reach.

in God's name we pray amen

Comment is about My Forever Sleeping ? Angel Daughter Lily (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Live Long & Prosper

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Original item by Neil Ormesher

A strong atmosphere in this poem.
Brilliant.

Hannah

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Original item by Sarah Mae

I love this poem Laura. I guessed it was about your father.
The strength and bravery when he was young, then the loss.
Brilliant piece.

Hannah

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Love this one.

Hannah

Comment is about Fly (blog)

Original item by Vanessa Grosz

A very special poem. The beauty and the danger.
Read it three times.

Hannah

Comment is about 'Great White Heron' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The act of purchasing any property, let alone one with an
important literary and community connection, without the
means in hand to achieve the objects of the purchase,
deserves close examination of the absence of any fully costed business plan and the steps taken nonetheless to
go ahead, with the result and uncertain future that is now reported.

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Droll, and neatly rhymed! I was
waiting for a hacking cough to play it out! :-)
I've been living and working in the East End and West End
of London since I was 16...an asthmatic child of another
time. I've spent hours patrolling its formerly foggy, traffic-laden streets
and even now in my 8th decade, live in its heart near the
busiest arterial roads into the city. Yet I feel no ill effects
and wonder if there is something akin to an inoculation
process that has a part to play to acclimatise the body
to its surroundings. Perhaps not being a smoker, a drug
abuser, or alcohol-addicted has helped - who knows?
But London wasn't known as The Smoke for nothing and
its concentration of traffic has always been a fact of life
from - and before - the time chimney emissions and manure on the roads gave way to petrol fumes.
I am aware that income from trumpeted policies provides
the mayor with useful encouragement in his role of
health crusader.

Comment is about THE LAST NOEL (blog)

Original item by ray pool

amazing I will only come back to read this like a hundred times...

Comment is about She's Trying (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

I like how the transition switches between first-person, and third-person for you the writer, and the trapped bird. Very intriguing take on a subject some people take years to master. Good poem

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Original item by Vanessa Grosz

Perfect title for the perfect emotion. Great poem.

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Original item by Lewis O'Brien

Hi Joe, have a weak spot for Limericks. Like no 2 especially!

Jennifer

Comment is about Four Limericks (blog)

Original item by Joe Williams

Hmm. For me that doesn't scan so well. Also I wanted it to chime with the last line of the first verse. Thanks though.

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I see.

I think I would have finished it......

A dandelion without a wife, perhaps?

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks Graham.

Ah, as I say, this is in a series of poems about my Dad (to be included in the next book), and this was written when he was still alive and my mother had just died, hence the last line. How does it sit now, knowing that?

Really?? Wow. Which ones? Seriously tough job that.

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I really like this piece a lot Laura.
Whether it’s because I don’t get something but the last line doesn’t sit well for me ( the wives bit).

Strangely, my dad was a stoker on destroyers too.

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Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Chris
Beautiful poem. I came away with a sense of wonder for the Heron due to your description. Very clever to start and end with both the Heron and then people fishing.
Also the bird itself being visually seen as part of a shadow puppet type display (for a moment a dimmed backdrop to un ombre chinoise) is worded stunningly.
Well done also on Poem Of The Week. Well deserved.

Comment is about 'Great White Heron' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

This is an edited version of a previous poem in a series. Just wanted to see what folk made of it.

For some reason, the 'together' seems to want to place itself in a weird position. That wasn't intentional.

Comment is about Clocks (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Very well sung. Made me laugh. You should do stuff for the news quiz!! Lol.

I laugh but it's a proper serious issue . Satire is a very useful tool to address failing politics.
There will be a lot of very sick people this winter due to poor air quality. There will be many extra deaths and bereft families. Not such a happy Christmas for them?
Sorry to be so heavy.
Beno.

Comment is about THE LAST NOEL (blog)

Original item by ray pool

This is a new kind of read for me. I'm new in to poetry. I really like this. Really, really liked it. It's got a real rhythm and music to it. Real attitude too. I need to read it some more. Might get back to you with some more comments later. Thanks very much Jarvis. Beno.

Comment is about Breathe. (blog)

Original item by Javis T.

Thank you Jon,your comment is appreciated.

All the best des

Comment is about Leaving Ambiguity (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Touching tribute to a special pet lost. Very thought provoking.

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Original item by old shoes

Keep it up man, and thanks for the feedback, always appreciated. If you haven't already, you should consider compiling your stuff into an anthology.

Comment is about Breathe. (blog)

Original item by Javis T.

Cool poem. I bet it'd look good overlapping a picture like the one you have next to it, especially with the imagery.

Comment is about Back To Infinity. (blog)

Original item by Javis T.

Hi Martin,

Thank you so much for your kind words. There is nothing quite like the critique of one's peers to provide reassurance that you're on the right track.

It is a privilege to be able to provide enjoyment (and receive appreciation!) through this excellent online community, and beyond.

Chris

Comment is about 'Great White Heron' by Chris Hubbard is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

HI Jon. So pleased you appreciate this one, as it is all about mood really. I think you got close to the intention with your comment. It always chokes me to read goodbye in a poem so perhaps I used it as a sort of indulgence !
Hope you're well .

Ray

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Original item by ray pool

Hi Ray
Beautiful wording. Love the way you personalise the intent of the soil especially and the plane as a silver pen is an amazing image.
Maybe the crisp goodbye is a way of masking feelings? Or maybe not.
Anyway, a lovely poem mate.

Comment is about LAST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you so much ☺️

Comment is about His Writing (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Hi Desmond
Interesting poem. Says a lot without the need for over explanation.
Great last three lines which sum up the fragility of the situation very well. Nice one.

Comment is about Leaving Ambiguity (blog)

Original item by DESMOND CHILDS

Thank you,

I'm so glad you did feel it all the way through and I do so much appreciate the nice comment back on it and please have a great day Patrick D Ortiz ☺️☺️

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Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

I'm sorry Suki but I'm leaning on David's excellent impression to do justice - bit jaded at the moment, but I will say this is an enlightening experience (no pun indended)with all the hallmarks of your fervent imagination.

Beautiful imagery out of such a simple item!

Ray

Comment is about The Pylon And The Scarf (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

This is what I would call muscular John. A sort of no nonsense approach ; very interesting for me and quite unusual in that it does not duck too much into self absorbtion - which I always like. It reflects much of initiation and how it affects us en masse. Lovely stuff, keep em coming.

Ray

Comment is about BISCUIT FACTORY (blog)

Original item by john short

absolutely amazing, I felt this one all the way through.

Comment is about His Writing (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

Amazing write felt it all the way through...

Comment is about His Writing (blog)

Original item by Chiari Warrior Soldier

(re the last line) and the same to you Jane!
great poem and great to see you posting again.

best of my regards to you.


Rose ?

Comment is about A Child is not just for Christmas (blog)

Original item by jane wilcock

Oh just found it, thank you ♥

Comment is about Realities (blog)

Original item by Nicola Byrnes

Great imagery, and very concise.

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Original item by Miranda Fegan