Hey thanks everybody! Gratifying that you read my little poem and also hopefully watch me looking bloody sexy and up for it on the telly. (joking obviously).
Good stuff Cynthia, thanks for enjoying.
Works well, Col - shaken and stirred!
You're a wise man Tony. I couldn't tempt with to the Hairy Bikers then?
Hilarious, David. You've got the idea!
Love to all. Ray
Comment is about BRIE de MERSEY (blog)
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Sat 10th Feb 2018 20:41
I am so sorry to hear this news, please accept my condolences.
Comment is about RIP Harry (blog)
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Belated Birthday greetings Ray and ditto thanks. ??
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
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terribly sad news. harry was an excellent wordsmith and always came across as a genuine and warm person. i will miss his poetry and his kind and constructive approach to other peoples work.
Comment is about RIP Harry (blog)
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Very enjoyable, conjuring up a genuine time capsule moment. A nice easy flow that sweeps us along.
Ray
Comment is about Aberystwyth Scenes, 1970 (blog)
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Beautifully down to earth John. I was only commenting on the cost of kitting out for any of these events, let alone taking part. Not for the working classes surely.
Ray
Comment is about THE GODS OF COMEDY (blog)
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Harry's writing was always a pleasure to read, showing an agile and inventive and indeed a young mind. Very sad news. I am sure there will be many who will raise a toast to a lovely man.
Ray
Comment is about RIP Harry (blog)
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Indeed, MC. I must be careful not to offend anyone!
Comment is about THE GODS OF COMEDY (blog)
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You're on thin ice with the gods (oops - better include goddesses) of Olympus with this one, JC !
Comment is about THE GODS OF COMEDY (blog)
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This poem has an excellent elemental vividness that takes the reader right into the experience and I like the central idea of raking up the past which suggests more than one level of meaning. If it was my poem I'd probably leave line 6 as "The shrill of a panicking blackbird" just to avoid a build-up of gerunds but that's just my opinion. There are probably quite a few magazines on the circuit that would love this, it's the kind of poetry that goes down well.
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Sat 10th Feb 2018 13:43
Good stuff. A sad indictment of the times I'm afraid, but don't let the bastards grind you down.
Comment is about New Mills No Frills Handy for the Hills (blog)
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Sat 10th Feb 2018 11:07
ta muchly for the invite Marc but Asda and Tesco are beckoning!
might catch you later?
Rose ?
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Belated Birthday greetings Ray and ditto thanks. ??
Comment is about snip snip (blog)
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Hi David, I don't think I saw your comment on this poem at the time. Thank you very much for it, and for sharing your experiences. Best, Greg
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Sat 10th Feb 2018 10:37
Tina, just because I've printed this off for reading again and again and again and again doesn't mean to say I like it!
?
Rose ?
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 10th Feb 2018 09:39
delicious with a bowl of hot scouse
Comment is about BRIE de MERSEY (blog)
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Good stuff Eve, and welcome to WOL! X?
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Nicola Beckett
Fri 9th Feb 2018 19:49
Not a word wasted here David. Every line tells a story and takes the reader in. Great
Comment is about 'Roots and branches' by David T Jones is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Welcome to WOL, Maki. I admire your honesty. Thinking is essential to poetry, so you are off to a great beginning. And writing definitely helps to 'sort things out'. You may find a 'free style' is a good way to start, without being hassled with rhyme. But, maybe, you actually enjoy that challenge. Whichever, always read over what you've written and ask yourself, 'What is here that I can say with fewer words, better ones?' I think that was the best advice I ever got. And I try to practise it always. So - have a thesaurus handy, the writer's best friend. And use it. Broaden your 'well of words' every day. Your mind can express only as much as your words allow. They are your 'tool' for building ideas for your own eyes and for others to share.
And a pure 'love of writing' is a wonderful thing - very demanding, but so rewarding.
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Good luck to Nicola Hulme
Who will be at - - -
Harry Potter Book Festival being held at Stockport Art Gallery
11 am - 3 pm Sunday 11th February
All young Witches Warlocks and Wizards are wellcome
as long as they drag Mums and Dads with them too!
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
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Strong and true. Well said. The final line is excellent.
Comment is about Hijacked (blog)
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Clever - much appreciated.
Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)
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Discarded
Blue brown yellow green
silver sweet paper wrappers
they fly without care
like absent minded eater
enjoying flavours more than
harmful action they take
while always walking past
eager to take bin.
The theme for Monday night is - - - running in the wind.
Comment is about Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)
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Really clever take on the fantasy that is the printed garden, unavoidably hopeless and fruitless for me at any rate. Success in the garden comes at a heavy price. I especially like it as it appeared on my birthday, Tommy! (Is that a good sign, fingers crossed).
Ray
Comment is about snip snip (blog)
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Welcome to WOL, Saniya. That is a lovely name. Does it have a special history, or is it a delightful new way to be just 'you'?
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I love the way the media conveys news that minimises any advantages the UK may gain from withdrawal from European rules and regulations, thus strangling the new born at birth, even during its conception. Plenty of vim, harpic and hot towels need apply, Steve. In any case, the Math Haiku is intriguing itself. The title is excellent, a sort of dumbing down.
Ray
Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Ha ha! I do feel like an idiot. But never mind - nothing new about that. You do have a fine flair for words.
Comment is about I Can Be That (blog)
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is the answer 42?
Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)
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Just spotted your like, Jonathan. Much appreciated !
Ray
Comment is about INERTIA (blog)
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Written following the government report which claims that, in the event of a no-deal Brexit, the West Mids economy will shrink by 13%.
Comment is about Complex mathematics, Oldbury (blog)
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Now meeting at South 16 in Buxton.
Review is about Spoken Words on 6 Mar 2018 (event)
Hi
I have always written my poems with the sound in mind - what you should hear if they are read. So the broken and indented lines are structuring the relationship of one block of text with the former - acting as exaggerated commas or parentheses, if you will. I hope it works! Perhaps it comes from some years writing computer programs!
Some of my poems rhyme too!
Comment is about Aberystwyth Scenes, 1970 (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Perfectly expressed Tom. We all need a space however small as long as it is private. As I get older, I find it a rarer occurrence, and more valuable. I've seen wasps doing this, but never a bee!
Ray
Comment is about Coffee Break (blog)
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Thanks Stu and Pat , really glad you liked this one. Much appreciated.
Laura Steve and Des i'm most grateful for your likes too.
It means a lot.
Ray
Comment is about INERTIA (blog)
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It has never been lost on me how the lunacy and brutality
of war seem destined to advance knowledge and the
products of progress at a rate not experienced in peacetime.
Comment is about A QUESTION OF WAR (blog)
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TYPE III
Colonial history will still dictate how the men around here
Practice love through hate
For aesthetic purposes; an ethnic marker
Gender controlled by husband...son...father
Against my will.
I can let nature take its course, the uneasiness in how I pass
Bears nothing to your immoral force with which you open me up
Your gateway to a selfish pleasure
And I once believed that being loved
Was close to being treasured
I am as trapped as a bird in a cage
Modified and made ugly by your commission
Disfigured by tradition and religion and holy wars
And chained by the fear that renders me yours
Against my will
My sisterhood grows, from northeast Africa
To the sub-Sahara
Young and joyless and bound by doctrines
No pursuit of happiness. No pleasure to come
No great expectations. Nothing foretold
Nothing that has been or gone
Objects more of control than desire
My eyes that once shone with innocent love
Now burn with hate fuelled fire…and all because...
You denied me a fall from grace, you denied me self discovery
No different to putting scars on my face
Or is that too much a public recovery?
You denied me womanhood. You denied me choice
I censor my thoughts and silence my voice
And I think of our mothers and their mothers
And of the honour and pride they felt
When this exact same fate to them was dealt
And why did they not feel humiliated? Abused?
Mutilated? Used?
Maybe when we live in a world without light
We relinquish our strengths and fall prey to our plights
Enlightenment and knowledge, I was lead to believe,
Are the roads to freedom
Our mothers learned nothing other than to serve and to please
And here am I, enlightened but sedated
Imprisoned, captive, segregated
Dysmorphic now, a victim still
And all of this against my will
Comment is about HEY THERE VAGINA (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18980)
Thu 8th Feb 2018 16:33
What's the reason for the broken lines?
Comment is about Aberystwyth Scenes, 1970 (blog)
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Jon,
thank you for this kind comment. Your Dad sounds remarkable. The Bible gives us an allotted time of three score years and ten but eighty if we are strong. That says a lot for Dad.
Keith
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Hi Keith
A brilliantly worded piece, it has much in common with everyone's experience I should imagine.
Me Dad always says the Bible says we should live threescore years and ten but he's ninety one this year!
He reckons he's out of date.
A stunning last stanza mate.
Jon
Comment is about Three Score Years & Ten (blog)
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Thanks to everyone who read, commented and liked The Close. I never intended to make it so lengthy and revisited it loads of times to edit and chop it down a bit.
I almost didn't put it on because of it's length but it's done now anyway. Cheers again everyone for taking the time out to read it.
Jon
Comment is about The Close (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Wow, that was quite affecting! Excellent work ?
Comment is about Letters (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
My heart goes out to you, I'm so sorry for your loss. This is a beautiful, winsome, densely-coloured poem, that reverberates with profound emotions, and has a wonderfully original feel to it. Well, of course it does, you've never written this before, and you'll never write anything like this again.
Comment is about Above (blog)
Original item by Maia Moon
Marc Hawkins
Sat 10th Feb 2018 22:23
"BAD ANGELS" Kindle edition available on Amazon
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