Thu 19th Aug 2010 14:42
I like this poem very much - a nice piece of evocation.DO you know the song? My young love said to me/"My mother won't mind...one of our haunting melodies but the words were from Padraig Colum.
Lovely creation yours.
Comment is about he moves through the fair (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thu 19th Aug 2010 14:37
Hi Ann hope alls well with you..have left a comment on ..on being emily dickinson... lv bernadette xx
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 14:31
Hi Ann what a brill poem..am i right in thinking it is about unfulfilled dreams tinged with sadness ...lv bernadette xx
Comment is about on being emily dickinson (blog)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 14:16
really enjoyed reading this steve and as one who has difficulty with sleeping throughout the night I can relate to this poem well ! really good poem..best wishes bernadette
Comment is about Night Watch (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:41
Hi jean what a beautiful poem this is and so meaningful and thought provoking..bernadette x
Comment is about Woman of the Flowing Hair (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:32
Hi Larisa. JotSpeak is a new online community for spoken (and written word). It provides a platform for writers & (non-musical) performers. Just sign up on the main page - it's all free and they are planning to add premium content so that writers can ear a few pennies from their work. BTW I love your work :)
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:11
Thanks Anniepoo, that all seems so far away now...I have still had to do my own ironing...tsk! :)
Love and peas (sweet ones)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:10
I felt a bit like Miss World (only fatter and older) and could quite easily have cried a bit!(cringe)
It's fab though, hell of a confidence boost,great for days like today when I have just this minute received a rejection email from a publisher who got my name wrong!:)
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thu 19th Aug 2010 13:04
Well done for winning the Wigan Slam, Rachel! Seems to me it's a bit like winning the FA Cup. Onwards and upwards!
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Thu 19th Aug 2010 12:11
Excuse me! Could you please tell me a bit more about JotSpeak.com? I am very much interested in it.
With warmest wishes,
Comment is about Once in every while (blog)
Original item by Steven Dark
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:59
Thank you Larisa :)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:55
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:49
It was hugely complimentary in all ways. I think the poem is beautiful and written with great 'technical poetical' skill.
Comment is about Savage Goddess (blog)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:43
Terrific! Glad I also read the comments though.
Comment is about red X (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:39
Hi Cynthia. Re: comment on 'Savage Goddess' I never remove comments. Please try posting it again. I don't know why it's not there ... (:
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:38
Hi Cynthia. I never remove comments. Please try posting it again. I don't know why it's not here ... (:
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:27
This put me in mind of my piece 'Typical Archetypal Archetypes'. Nice piece Bernadette. Love the profile pic :)
Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)
Original item by bernadette herbertson
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:22
Any particular reason why you removed my comment? Just so I'll be aware.
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:19
Cynthia, thank you for your comment on 'And Where is Your God?'. It is the first time the phrase 'consummate poetical skill' has been applied to my work and it is praise indeed which I truly appreciate. Thank you for that. I don't read as much as I should on WOL but I will make every effort and reciprocate. Wytchewoode
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:14
You have so much to say that deserves to be heard, but, here, IMO, you get a bit wishy-washy by over-emphasis. A person constantly 'bonged on the bean' soon adapts and ceases to notice. I think it is like that with words too: a few, well-chosen and well-placed, have more effect than a barrage which becomes 'white word noise'. And, to be honest, I would shape this more for easier, punchier reading; it almost slips into treatise.
Comment is about death is not the end (blog)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:09
Strong, relevant, and expressing with consummate poetical skill the thought of many. It is really wonderful to have you back again.
Comment is about ... and where is your God? (blog)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:02
I really like this - and the picture is perfect. People who say they have no time for love are often lying - they've just given up on it...but don't get me started LOL x
Comment is about no time for love (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Thu 19th Aug 2010 11:00
I think this is captivating also. The reader is right with you emotionally. But, IMO, I would leave out the last two lines. I realize you must feel it is the pinnacle of your idea; but perhaps it turns a 'moment' into a 'lifetime' and dilutes the impact rather than enhances it.
Comment is about Oh Yes (blog)
Original item by mike watts
Thu 19th Aug 2010 10:52
Fast and funny. I like the ambiguity of not quite knowing the significance of the photo used, whether you are 'ooh lala-ing' a child or an adult; or vice versa. It was the use of 'tonight'.
Thu 19th Aug 2010 10:47
An narrow arrow well-aimed, speaking volumes.
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Thu 19th Aug 2010 10:40
Good morning Jabulani-Very earthy poem-wonderful! thank you-my best regards to you-Stefan.
Comment is about african drum (blog)
Original item by jabulani mzinyathi
Thu 19th Aug 2010 10:38
An ode to a plastic petrol bottle or a soiled nappie or a netted seal washed on to our pristine shale, shell and sand! This is brilliant, so unorthodox of topic and lovely of execution that it creates the need to 'rethink' what rubbish actually is. Very clever.
I am aware that you may have used the term 'flotsam' as any article from a shipwreck, which association lends a peculiar potency to the beauty of your words since it could be, literally, a body.
Comment is about Flotsam (blog)
Thu 19th Aug 2010 09:18
Good morning Banksy-a very neat,petite and sweet poem,(honestly!)best regards to you-Stefan.
Thu 19th Aug 2010 09:04
Hi Berni, yes, I do like the picture and it does compliment the poem - where do you find them? I could really do with adding some pics for my poems too! Have to agree with Stef about your new profile picture - what a lovely little boy! xxx
Stef - if I could scrub up that well I really would be laughing!!! xxx
Thu 19th Aug 2010 07:29
Really Great poem Mike - it's always a thrill to see a new poem on here that gives you that buzz.
Wed 18th Aug 2010 23:26
Many many thanks Wytchewoode,for comments on 'Verdant assemblage' they really do give encouragement-which is one of the main purposes after all methinks-best regards-Stef
Comment is about Steven Dark (poet profile)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 23:17
This,being the third poem of yours which I have read tonight,doubtless suggests your love of spiritual writing-I personally,find it quite moving and love the indefinite aspect of it-the almost mergence of sprituality and hints of mythology-please keep them coming-love them! thank you-Stefan-xx
Wed 18th Aug 2010 23:09
Good evening again Jean-enjoyed this poem-very spiritual indeed!-many thanks-Mr Wilde-xx
Comment is about Starman (blog)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 23:05
Good evening Jean-long time no read-so to speak(or type)love the overall image this poem presents-perhaps a pictorial image would have complimented it methinks-but beautiful regardless-very nice to have you back.Look forward to forthcoming work-thank you-Stefan Wilde-xx
Comment is about Fairyscape (blog)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:57
Good evening Bern'o'Herby!both poem and picture are beautiful(even if there is a hint of...you know what!)may I be a lazy git,Berny and say thanks for-ALL-my poems(because I didnt want you to miss my replies on older poems etc) that you have commented on-it really is very kind of you-keep your poems coming now girly!! and love that handsome little chap that has taken over your picture-thank heaven for the kids eh-yes indeed the image alongside the poem is ......pwoah!!! its not Lynn when she,s scrubbed up is it?lol! goodnight lovely Lady-and!-hope to hear from you and vice-versa-lorra love chuck-Stef-xxxx
Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:45
Good evening Lynn-SNAP! we have been prom walking with Skip,our friends Patterdale pooch-AND DOUBLE SNAP! we also had fish'n'chips! but oh the frustration of getting to the chandelers after it just closed-grrr! glad Benji had lovely day out as well-I bet that lad is such a spoiled bow-wow! as to the new poems....come on! get them on-ASAP! thanks for all kindnesses and comments Lynn-continue to all enjoy your well earned sanding week! best wishes to you and yours-Stef-xx(G-xx)
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:17
Thank you so much Lynn for your positive comment . I did this one tonight and wasnt sure whether to put it on but thought it was worth a go..glad you like it .. xxx i love the picture and think it is so stunning and that it compliments the poem ..what do you think ?
Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:14
This is really good, Mike, enjoyed it, thanks.
jean lucy thompson
Wed 18th Aug 2010 22:09
Yes comments noted tyvm :)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 21:58
Very much enjoyed this, Bernadette. It's clever and quirky, love it. xxx
Wed 18th Aug 2010 21:56
Hi Bernadette, thank you for kind comments on the 17 1/2 sequels. Nice to hear from you again, hope you are well. Love Lynn xx
Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 21:30
thank you for your comment, it was good meeting you at the Farrago poetry slam :)
Comment is about Monsur Ahmed Choudhury (poet profile)
Original item by Monsur Ahmed Choudhury
Wed 18th Aug 2010 21:07
this is nice stef..very thoughtful...xxx bernie
Comment is about ah,well! (blog)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 16:41
Thanks Issi, appreciated.
Cheers too Cynf, stick it in as you please. love is, afterall, complicatedly simple.
Comment is about Court out (blog)
Original item by Christopher Dawson
Wed 18th Aug 2010 12:52
Love these, Ms Millar. It's great to read a tight fast zingy new voice! It would be easier to comment if these three were blogged separately. I will get back to your previous post later; I'm pressed for time.
Comment is about New Poetry (blog)
Original item by Liz Millar
Wed 18th Aug 2010 12:43
Some deep thoughts here, with some very imaginative expressions. It has an essence of beauty captured in words. Perhaps you could condense a bit and keep this vitality still intact. 'to grieve' - 'to mourn' I can understand the spelling compulsion to link it to 'grave'.
Wed 18th Aug 2010 12:27
This has much imaginative charm, particular and elusive by turn. The listing technique of natural visuals sets a clear scenario for the thoughts to follow. It's hard to place the meaning of 'Heaven'(which is not a bad thing) as to whether it's an emotional state or 'a religious idea'. In short, whether or not, you're dead. Such concrete images as 'Stained colour at my feet', 'Crosses unbalanced' are two of many lovely phrases. Check spelling of 'rain-washed' and 'spiral' Probably just typos. One more point: I'd be inclined to leave out punctuation altogether; leave the reader to sort you out. I did not find that which is there all that helpful to understanding, and actually bumpy interruptives. ALL, in my opinion, of course.
Wed 18th Aug 2010 09:44
Gooooooooooooood morning Herbygirl! ta chuck for comments and posting on my profile-hope you are not overdoing things generally-as to my fine figure poet image...that was taken when I was twenty one...hee hee! hope very much to see you on blogs soon-indeed,they are quite busy-and the poetry is absolutely amazing for sure! thanks love-my best regards to you and yours-Stefan-xx
Wed 18th Aug 2010 09:36
Good morning Mr and Mrs boat painters(stick a brush in Benji,s paw as well,don,t forget! and get the office girls sequels on the go-in between undercoat and gloss-lol!-thanks to you Lynn as always-Stef-xx(Benji-xx)
Wed 18th Aug 2010 09:13
Hi, Dave! Thank you so much for your comment on my poem "Life is short". I enjoyed reading your poems. And "The Freckleton Air Disaster" is a great poem. If you have time please read my poems "The Victory Day" and "Ballad about the soldier". I would like to know your opinion about them.
With warmest wishes,
Comment is about Dave Carr (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Carr
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