Cynthia,
A poem which evokes similar memories of adolescence when Pamela Brown took me behind her father´s garden shed and said those all too familiar words, ¨if you show me yours, I¨ll show you mine ¨. Being a fledgling homosexual I came away unaffected and equally unimpressed. She made a second attempt some time later but fore warned is forearmed.
Your poem also speaks of an innocence which makes me wonder if such events occur now with television and pornography so easily available.
Well done Cynthia. I now avoid garden sheds.
Thank you
Keith
Comment is about How Do Girls Pee? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:35
The addiction to the phone can leave people feeling excluded.
Well described.
Hannah
Comment is about i dont like me (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:28
Big Sal
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:27
<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:26
The smallest child or the adult lover, both called baby.
The poem tells of great intimacy but perhaps anonymity too.
Really enjoyed.
Hannah
Comment is about Never trust a lover who ..... (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Becky, solidarite! I know how you feel! English is not my mother language either but I love it so much! I can't help it! It's the tongue of my heart! I write and think and read in it as much as I can! Kudos for putting your work out there! ?
Comment is about Becky Who (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:19
An incident from childhood that suddenly brings awareness and knowledge.
Beautifully described, the innocence and joy of children.
Hannah
Comment is about How Do Girls Pee? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:14
Just another statistic in some ways but a real person whom we have met via your sensitive poem.
Hannah
Comment is about VANISHING POINT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I'm feeling quite peckish after reading this! Remember -a little of what you fancy does you good.
Throw thoughts of forbidden food in the shredder
Be brave, ye Yorkshire Gorge of Cheddar!
Comment is about CHEESE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (18118)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 18:02
A different view of grief.
Very moving.
Hannah
Comment is about I WASN'T UPSET (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 17:56
In the past, which we love to mock these days, the crime
of rape was beyond the pale and often reciprocated by a
death sentence. Yet, in the absence of proof, it can be
used as a weapon of revenge and therein lies the danger
that sees the innocent disbelieved or the guiltless found guilty. The added tragedy is that an examination that
seeks the truth can also be mentally damaging to a young
and vulnerable mindset, especially when driven by others
with their own personal parental or guardian reasons to act.
Comment is about Can You Imagine (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Brian must have caught you on a bad day. The material
is so far from your usual style that it clearly provoked a
tongue in cheek response from BM.
I have a career's experience dealing with druggies and the
sort I had deep sympathy with were those affected by the
acquisitive effects of medical prescriptions. Theirs were the
real tragedies.
Comment is about Drugged up and homeless in Manchester yesterday (blog)
Original item by hugh
Well done.
I found an old 'paper' last week, stuck between the pages of a poetry book, and I LAUGHED. It was five columns of rhyming words, no order, just sound. And I remembered, years ago, I had some fun tossing 'rhyme' words together and then trying to 'make' something intelligible. I do recall that I had a great time, challenging myself, to no end whatsoever. Just fun.
Comment is about "Writing in Rhyme" by Becky Who is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Weird as this may sound, this poem has been a labour of love. I have so enjoyed bringing it to 'life' at last.
Comment is about How Do Girls Pee? (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
I would say you are a character D.K. in a good way. Nice poem..T.C. X
Comment is about Character (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thanks David. I was lost for words a long time so it felt good writing again last night. As always, it is great to hear your thoughts. I have been popping in and out of here to read from time to time. Your writing.. I find most powerful. Keep it up.
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Emer Ní Chorra
Big Sal
Fri 28th Sep 2018 14:46
Like celebrating Christmas on Halloween, or eating a TV dinner made from unicorn meat.
What is it about your writing that you can take any topic off the cuff and turn it into relatable poetry?
I struggle to find topics worth my time, as when I begin on them, I usually just find something else to write about.
Instant gratification + Mass production = Animal Farm + 1984. (Unsure of how my math helps, but yeah)
Comment is about Harvest Moons (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Fri 28th Sep 2018 14:34
Like a case of poetic vertigo grounded in peace of mind.
Great piece.?
Comment is about Meditation Gardens and butterflies (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
Big Sal
Fri 28th Sep 2018 14:32
Some great samples you have collected.?
Comment is about J F Keane (poet profile)
Original item by J F Keane
Nice, Elle ?
Comment is about Meditation Gardens and butterflies (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
elPintor
Fri 28th Sep 2018 14:02
Hey Emer,
It's good to see you post again after so long. Take good care, young lady.
Rachel
Comment is about Emer Ní Chorra (poet profile)
Original item by Emer Ní Chorra
Loved it. Poetry shouldn't just be pretty words put together in a row. There's truth in that piece. Loved it.
Comment is about DEALS ON WHEELS (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
elPintor
Fri 28th Sep 2018 14:01
Thank you, kindly, Emer and Jane.
This is one of those things you hope you don't have to say--words can do so much, including overly complicating things.
Rachel
Comment is about a letter to my son--for now... (blog)
Original item by nunya
Powerful words! Made the hairs stand up on the back of my neck. Just amazing!
Thank you,
Mae
Comment is about THE PLACE WHERE ONLY DEAD MEN SLEEP (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Daniel,
You handle this poem with sensitivty and a touch of gentle humour but underlying it you do not avoid the tragedy of what it is all about. It is well crafted and in touch with reality. A good work.
Thank you for this,
Keith
Comment is about THE SHIP THEY CALL "ALZHEIMER'S" (blog)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
Daniel,
Thanks for getting back to me. I appreciate this. At present I am writing a series of articles on the Poetry of the Great War which you can find posted on the WOL Main Page. It has a Union Jack above them. Your work interests me. I would like to see more of it.
Thanks again
Keith
Comment is about Daniel Dwyran (poet profile)
Original item by Daniel Dwyran
<Deleted User> (19836)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 13:24
Thank you so much Lynn for the lovely comment on "Second Chances" I am glad you enjoyed it! ??
Comment is about lynn hahn (poet profile)
Original item by lynn hahn
<Deleted User> (19836)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 12:33
Heartwarming and profoundly beautiful! Thank you for sharing. Jane?
Comment is about a letter to my son--for now... (blog)
Original item by nunya
Keith
Thank you so much for your wonderful words on 'The Place where only dead men sleep. I apologise for my my very delayed response. I have flitted into WOL now and again but fell 'out of love' with all poetry. Your comment means a lot to me.
(Your P.O.T.W. a few months back was very well worthy).
You have some wonderful work.
Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)
Original item by keith jeffries
What a valuable review, reminding developing writers (aren't we all?) that we move through stages of our development as we hone our craft and our confidence.
I find particularly relevant to Write Out Loud's mission - bringing more people to poetry, poetry to more people - Patrick's observation: the rigorous process of crafting under these conditions risks ironing out the quirks or quiddities that make a voice distinctive and original. Poems that are too competent are missing something vital.
Absolutely so, which is why open-mic poetry events are so fascinating with their diverse, authentic voices; and on the same page we see that writ large in Mike's piece about the American chap who turned up to the open-mic and found his (distinctive and original)voice: https://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=82073
Poetry, eh?
Comment is about New Writing: The Quirks and Quiddities (article)
Original item by Mike Took
Thanks for your very kind words on 'The Ship they call Alzheimer's'.
I do have an alternate Verse 9 (which I have used for a local Dementia support group).
Alternate verse (9)...
When you see me do impulsive things
Risks I normally wouldn't take
It's how I am my friend these days
All I'm asking is a break
As a performance piece the line with 'piss take' has the shock factor. Much appreciated M.C.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
I am deeply into Philip Levine
"Philip Levine and Other Mediocrities: What it Takes to Ascend to the Poet Laureateship"
Will let you know of my progress ?
Comment is about Birdsofafeather : Aussie Poet (in ascendance) to UK Poet (stage of ascendance unknown) (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Beautiful el Pintor. Well done. ?
Comment is about a letter to my son--for now... (blog)
Original item by nunya
Thank you for stopping by and commenting such kind words, Anya. My first piece of writing in 9 months. ?
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Emer Ní Chorra
elPintor
Fri 28th Sep 2018 10:02
Oddly enough, Sal, my son may never see this. There are many things that I compartmentalize--a place for everything and everything in its place.
Thanks for commenting. It is quite the reward to be able to open a door, however briefly, for communication.
Comment is about a letter to my son--for now... (blog)
Original item by nunya
<Deleted User> (19836)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 10:01
Anything that brings you towards the light is a blessing! A really beautiful poem! A lovely way to begin my day.
Thank you Lyn. ??
Comment is about HOPE (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
<Deleted User> (18980)
Fri 28th Sep 2018 09:44
Q : in ascendance to what, or where?
Comment is about Birdsofafeather : Aussie Poet (in ascendance) to UK Poet (stage of ascendance unknown) (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Short, sharp and spot on Trevor. Nice one ?
Comment is about Pi (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts on my latest piece. It is much appreciated. ?
Comment is about Poetikaly Anointed (poet profile)
Original item by Poetikaly Anointed
Thank you Big Sal. I enjoy taking photograhs, especially of nature. Glad you liked the recital. It has been a while since I recited my writing.
Poetikaly Anointed, thank you for sharing your thoughts. Grief is incredibly painful. Stay strong. Hugs.
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Emer Ní Chorra
Thanks for your likes and comment, Damon.
Comment is about Mikey V Kinsey (poet profile)
Original item by Mikey V Kinsey
That's great. Dove soap it is not lol. You made me chuckle thanks!
Comment is about Drama (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Whoops I spelt it wrong sorry guys I don’t think any one thinks about it being said wrong when it happens .Rose you are delightful Thankyou for being my friend love Wendy x
Comment is about Can You Imagine (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Taylor Crowshaw
Fri 28th Sep 2018 19:31
Wonderful imagery....lovely poem thank you..?
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by C Banning