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Thu 18th Oct 2018 08:49

If all else fails...pray!

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John Coopey

Thu 18th Oct 2018 08:28

Thanks Don. No question those kids have grown up a bit.
I was particularly pleased with the phrase”squelchy squatter”. Visual, onomatopoeic and alliterative, as well as conveying a certain baseness.

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Don Matthews

Thu 18th Oct 2018 08:19

Nice Peter ?

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Thu 18th Oct 2018 06:44

Thank You Jon!
I enjoy your reading your poetry as well.? Jane

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Wendy

Thu 18th Oct 2018 06:16

The majority would like all voters to get what they voted for and not thought to be not worthy to have their say . We voted out and all hope we get what we asked for a future for our families not a dictatorship. Love Wendy x

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Big Sal

Thu 18th Oct 2018 02:44

Great piece of wise words.

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Big Sal

Thu 18th Oct 2018 02:42

Well done on the placement of adjectives and descriptions. ?

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keith jeffries

Wed 17th Oct 2018 23:58

Thank you all.
Keith

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Don Matthews

Wed 17th Oct 2018 23:17

Gosh John, you're taking things to a different level here. Gritty true-life stuff. No more flying-around fantasy ?

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Don Matthews

Wed 17th Oct 2018 23:08

Well written dk.

I understand what Brian is saying. There are two types of 'beggars'. The genuine homeless and those not homeless but choose it as a lifestyle. ?

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raypool

Wed 17th Oct 2018 22:05

A very enjoyable piece of writing Taylor. Just draws you in and I like the nobility of it for a simple donkey.

Ray

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Wed 17th Oct 2018 21:37

A sad but all to true tale. Excellent writing!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 21:33

Much obliged for the comments - appreciated.
As a matter of minor interest - keeping with the alliteration, I am tempted to replace "Making much of the misery humanity's seen" with "Making much of the misery Mankind has seen".
MC

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 21:24

Keith - re. Sassoon - you may recall a mention elsewhere by me of his poem (and my personal WW1 favourite) "The General" in which he sardonically summed up the gulf
between commander and commanded.
As for the front line officers, these were mostly up to
and including the rank of major and no doubt there are a
notable number of them scattered across the memorials and cemetery headstones, here and on the other side of the Channel.

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<Deleted User> (9882)

Wed 17th Oct 2018 21:01

beautiful Larisa! keep writing girl!





Rose ?

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 20:58

Sounds more than interesting.

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 20:52

You could write a book with your wide ranging ability to write about an abundance of themes and topics.

Not a page would be boring to read. Great piece, the 'old shoe' line resonated with me the most upon reading.

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 20:39

Every day above ground is a good day, Jon.

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 20:36

Very relatable piece. We all know someone that says five minutes and really means twenty. ?

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 19:25

Sometimes I'll get out of bed and run to my computer just to type up a single line. If no computer is available, I often use my wife's phone to text myself the line just so I won't forget it.

This is relatable for any writer that always has their wheels turning.?

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Jon Stainsby

Wed 17th Oct 2018 18:41

Taylo, once again, many thanks for your comments and support.

Animals are dear companions to a lot of people so, why write a poem about them? They deserve it.

Jon

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John Coopey

Wed 17th Oct 2018 18:37

It has passed the WOL Board of Censors once before, Brian, so let's see if a new streak of politically correct Puritanism has crept into the arena.

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<Deleted User> (18980)

Wed 17th Oct 2018 18:12

Pure pornography John! And featuring minors!

Very good poem though.

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John Coopey

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:51

Don't weep. Laura. You've seen this before. Spring is round the corner.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:50

I agree..profound poem M.C.

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:43

Yes D.K. great poem you have captured perfectly the hopelessness.. Last stanza says it all..?

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Taylor Crowshaw

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:35

Thank you
Jon, Hannah, Big Sal, Brian,
Hugh, Anya, Avishek.
The fact you take the time to read and like or comment on my poetry continues to be a source of great encouragement to me. ??

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<Deleted User> (18980)

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:33

Yes it is sad to see people that seem to have slipped through the cracks in society and we can only feel sorrow for them.

On the other hand (and I expect to take some flak over this) there are are lot of others who beg on the streets or intimidate people, particularly females, at cashpoints and parking ticket machines. In my own town I know for certain that a number of them are not homeless and they beg as a lifestyle choice. They let their dogs crap all over the town centre and leave empty beer cans and cider bottles where they want to with no thought or respect for anybody else. And yet a whole army of left wingers demand that I love and respect them. Which I don't.

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<Deleted User> (18118)

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:21

Powerful words.

Hannah

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<Deleted User> (18118)

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:13

Brilliant.
Love this poem. We've all seen people like this.
Most pass by without a thought but this gives the person life and a character.

Hannah

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Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:10

I love the way you read this poem.
I have to say I've seen the Queen in real life (whatever that is ). When I was a young child we lived in West London for a while and the Queen would sometimes go by in a large black limo as we were coming home from school. She had a small army of macho motor cyclists riding in front and behind the limo. She didn't smile or have a crown on but she was the Queen. She was returning from those garden parties.
I hope you get to meet her one day Ray and I hope she smiles. I think she would like your poem.

Hannah

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Janey Colbourne

Wed 17th Oct 2018 17:06

Thanks Jane!?

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 16:34

This would make a humbling inscription in a museum next to a plaque.

But I'm sure you already knew that. . .

Excellent piece.?

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 16:32

Metaphysical rebirth can be a beautiful thing.
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keith jeffries

Wed 17th Oct 2018 16:09

MC.,

Even Sassoon criticised a military elite who enjoyed luxury whilst the average tommy took the brunt. We speak of an age which bears little resemblance to the world of today. The Great War was a war fought between monarchs who were related to each other and happy to send their troops into a futile war in their names. Your King and Country needs you¨. The Kaiser was an expanionist as was the Austrian Emperor. The bloke in the street was the lamb to the slaughter. Many subalterns led charges but where were their commanding officers? How many of their names do we find on War Memorials? Few!


Thank you for your comment
Keith

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Randy Horton

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:54

Well, it didn't hurt anything. Cheers.

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keith jeffries

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:52

MC.,

Thank you for this. I shall bear it in mind.

Keith

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Jezer Urena

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:42

Real.

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Jezer Urena

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:40

Brilliant!

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Jezer Urena

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:38

Succinct, but profound.

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 15:17

Lot of verbs and adjectives thrown in the mix to keep things interesting - and keep things moving.

Last line had it sold.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 14:42

On a purely technical side (and noting it continues to this
day) is the use of "(did) flutter" and "(did) stutter" - NOT
"fluttered" and "stuttered" - arguably more effective in their
context. Using words like "did" (and similar) seems archaic
even then, and certainly now when used, mainly, it seems,
to provide a "filler" for a line.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 14:20

The place of generals out of the line of fire appears to be
a fairly recent phenomenon, bearing in mind the likes of
the Earl of Cardigan leading the Charge of the Light
Brigade, and US Civil War generals doing likewise - Pickett's
Charge at Gettysburg etc. As for "class" being a factor,
it can be forgotten that many of those young officers
leading their troops "over the top" and dying in the process
were from what is termed a privileged background nowadays, including the offspring of the generals themselves. Duty was a sacrosanct word for that generation...lest we forget.
RIP - 2nd Lieut. E.V. Venner
The Rifle Brigade - killed in action
18 August 1916 Delville Wood - age
24.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:44

Either you want your country governed by those you elect
to your own Parliament and who can be canvassed and
dismissed on a national level - or you want your country
run by others beyond these shores, ready to take the
money you contribute, which is handed back in "gift
form", along with the dangers of uncontrolled borders -
and little say about any of it.
Call me old-fashioned but this Englishman prefers the first
option.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:33

It defies common sense, let alone a basic understanding
of the human condition to see these items as taxable
(e.g. luxury) items. They should be categorised as
"essential health items" and issued accordingly.

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Jon Stainsby

Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:33

M.C, I cannot argue with that.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:26

Fat cat or fat rat
Career politicians have the monopoly on that!

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:20

I'm reminded of Hammerstein's lyric for the Soliloquy from
Carousel - about "my boy Bill/not being president unless he wanted to be".
Trump certainly breaks the mould of the "professional politician"...and it shows, good and not so good!

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Wed 17th Oct 2018 13:13

I love this poem. Full of charm and beauty.

Hannah

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Big Sal

Wed 17th Oct 2018 12:39

You continue to improve with each piece you put out, well done on this Taylor. It's very well put together, the lines hold their rhythm like a bucket with crystalline water, and the fact that it's in your 3rd anthology makes it that much more interesting.

I still have to get your 2nd book though.

Like I said, gotta keep up with ya.?

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