I like it Ray, recalls being a kid in Manchester when we had REAL fog, you could knit it into blankets... One criticism - 'periphery' breaks up the rhythm IMHO -try 'edges' ?
Comment is about FOG BANK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Hi Jason
Thanks for your words.
I'm a little like you, in that I hear a lot of what I want to write in rhyme.
I started writing nearly 12 years ago, at the tender age of 60.
My first wife had died and I found it helped putting stuff down on paper, but I was put down a wee bit (by those more experienced) because my poems rhymed.
Whatever my writing is, I was saved (in a writing sense) by reading Langston Hughes's poems. I could actually understand them!
I persevered, and it was poetry that brought about marriage number 2. Much to be thankful for.
Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)
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Frances Macaulay Forde
Wed 6th Feb 2019 03:16
What fun, kJ. Thanks for posting.
You're on my list of favourites now.
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Comment is about The Totter From Toulouse (blog)
Original item by kJ Walker
Thanks for your comments on "pub". Sometimes life just swirls around us barely do we have control. I subscribe wholeheartedly to the absurdity of life as we live it. A kindred spirit is always welcome. Many thanks.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
Original item by ray pool
Yes, absolutely right. I always write in rhyme just because that's how I hear it in my head and I just love the rhythm of it, but I love reading prose as well and to be fair, even if I didn't, who am I to judge? ?
Comment is about Rhyme? (blog)
Original item by Stephen Mellor
Absolutely love this favourite line, the Mallard and Goose. Brilliant ?
Comment is about The Totter From Toulouse (blog)
Original item by kJ Walker
yes John. Hopefully I'll see you on the 14th.
Comment is about All His Geese Are Swans (blog)
Original item by kJ Walker
Po
Your omnipotent presence on WOL is spooky, it's almost as if you are not of this world. I've got a lot to learn. At present my biggest problem is navigating from page to page without having to start from scratch each time, but I'm getting there.
I can't figure out how to put the poem onto the Schools page, which is what I am striving for, without it crashing again? Then I can delete the copy from the main site.
Seems as though the school's page never really took off.
Let's hope your rallying cry mobilises the troops.
Comment is about Could you write a children's poem? (blog)
Original item by Poetry for schools
Thanks Ghazala, I'm really pleased you liked it. I was walking round at work today and half of it came to me then.
Thank you ?
Comment is about Drive (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
<Deleted User> (16837)
Tue 5th Feb 2019 19:25
I simply loved this one.....?
This could be the ride of your life.....beautifully written.
Comment is about Drive (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
"The Sun occulted." I love that line.
Comment is about A Nightmare Room Made Of Broken Glass And Spider's Legs (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Hi M.C.
Thanks for taking the time ...
I think I could write a book about some of the ways that the literati commented on the fact that my first poems only were written in rhyme.
As my latest tomb suggests I only started writing (anything) after my first wife died, 12 years ago. Poetry (if that's what I write) certainly helped.
Poetry also helped in me finding wife no.2, but that's another poem.
If it works, it works
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thanks Paris and Po, I really appreciate that
Comment is about A Nightmare Room Made Of Broken Glass And Spider's Legs (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Wow....I enjoyed this. Really good poem
Comment is about A Nightmare Room Made Of Broken Glass And Spider's Legs (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Thanks for your likes Philip, Jon, Anya and Paris !
Ray
Comment is about MR. SHOPLAND (INSURANCE MAN) (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I'm with this every step of the way Phil. An inner documentary sculpted with the guts and gore of experience - good bad and indifferent. I sense an isolation that the poetic mind can find itself in at times, and having read Camus myself know the fundamental flaws, and the restlessness angst of Kerouac. The last three lines are gold plated, making sense of the poem. The pub is a place to reveal and hide at the same time.
Ray
Comment is about pub (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
Like SM, I always like the chance to smile - and even better when it's unexpected.
If you'd dragged in an unmade bed to put them on, you'd be famous!
Comment is about Accidental Curator (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
If it works, it works,
One man's meat is another man's poisson - as the French may or may not have said ?.
Comment is about Rhyme? (blog)
Original item by Stephen Mellor
It's called self-assurance in certain quarters. ??
Comment is about Good Company (blog)
Original item by d.knape
I have written a few such poems and would be delighted to share them where they would be most appreciated.
The problem is I spent time keying one in on this page, only for the page to crash when I hit the upload key !
I have therefore just added it as a normal blog on the main site.
It is called 'The Cockroach' and is also tabbed 'Poetry for schools'
Comment is about Could you write a children's poem? (blog)
Original item by Poetry for schools
Another wonderful, inspirng blog, John. Your writing makes me want to pick up my pen once more. Thank you.
Comment is about Knowing your place: locating the poetry of landscape (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Perhaps it is a test? True love stands the test of time, yes? I like this line best... "As I walk down the street I feel your heart beat." Beautiful words for a hopeless romantic. ?
Comment is about Poof" it's gone away (blog)
Original item by Neil J Schwab
One for Well Spoken, Kev?
Comment is about All His Geese Are Swans (blog)
Original item by kJ Walker
Thank you all for your feedback.
There really isn't a part two.
The best analogy I can come up with is comparing it with steelworks.....once the furnaces cool down men get layed off !
Comment is about Meltdown (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Hi Jennifer. Just a quick thank you for taking the time to comment on my last three poems. I'm glad that they amused you.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about Jennifer Malden (poet profile)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Thanks Lisa, Jennifer, and Frances. I didn't have anyone in particular in mind when I wrote this one. But I think we all know someone like that.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about All His Geese Are Swans (blog)
Original item by kJ Walker
I love to smile, and this did the job. Perfect
Comment is about Accidental Curator (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Congratulations, Paris
Comment is about 'Ice Skating in New Orleans' by Paris Tate is Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Such a journey through life yes full of emotions and love the line ," like flies around shit" very Alan Bennet he also likes to shock with his language and the last line "the creased reflection of her image like spun gold " so poignant well done Jon
Comment is about Disturbing The Dead (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Thank you Raven Anne! I haven't had the chance to explore your work quite yet but I intend to! Good luck with your endeavor of putting your work out there!
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Comment is about Prophecy (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Very true Steven. We tend to immortalize the heroes. Thank you! ?
Comment is about Cha-Chi Legacy (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
steven arthur
Mon 4th Feb 2019 16:38
heroes meant for heaven, but heaven screams for angels. my condolences.
Comment is about Cha-Chi Legacy (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
You are very welcome Lisa. I am glad that you found some meaning towards the reading. It is very refreshing to reach out to like minded people who eyes are also open to the realms beneath the flesh.
Although, I am sorry to hear about your father passing, often death is a beginning of a whole other chapter and I hope your chapter is a master piece. Like you said, it was a powerful awakening and becoming an enlightened one is a very rewarding experience that truly has wonders to offer you along your journey.
With that, I wish you all the best and thank you very much for the compliment. That too was very much needed ?
Comment is about RaNdoM Tarot Reading by RaVeN (blog)
Original item by RaVeN Mathews )0(
Almost epic in its considerations Peter. The hand of a master of thought and fine tuning. So enjoyable, like a helter skelter starting at the bottom and ascending!
Ray
Comment is about UNDERFOOT (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
As long as you love your work , and it sparks happiness inside of your very own soul every time you read, then that's all that matters. I enjoyed it from start to finish. You are extremely talented ?
Comment is about UNDERFOOT (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Thank you John, for your condolences, encouragement and support. Cha-Chi was my nephew who I always saw as a kid, but who had grown into a great man right before my distracted eyes. His legacy will be my lesson.
I don't know how to write from anything but life. I will need to study the greats, like YOU, to write about things I don't experience personally. Call your kids, tell them you love them, and write on for the world of poetry students who are learning from you! ?
P.S. No pressure. ?
Comment is about Cha-Chi Legacy (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Jennifer - the original reference to the Iron Press anthology was on
January 23rd and can be found still by returning to the news entries
for that month - look for the byline "Afresh, afresh, afresh".
Cheers
MC
Comment is about Much mourned death of an umbrella pine (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
DH Lawrence meets a certain great Irish comedian!
Passion and practicalities...never a match made in heaven.
Comment is about Meltdown (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Apologies to all, as I mentioned before I'm a bit dyslexic, which means I've had to edit this again because a few words that I thought were there were not (a few "the's and you's). Sorry.
Had to change it because it messes with the rhythm.
J.
Comment is about Silver Shot Pocket Watch (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Consistent and convincing.
The relentless message in these lines brings to mind various
thoughts - that history is written by the victors; that truth is the
first victim of ambition; and that it takes real conviction to resist the use of convenient lies to obtain a goal. Politics provides a forum
for that in action...when today's "yes" can become an expedient "no"
tomorrow.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by mentalelf. Philk.
Thanks, Ray - just found your wise men poem.. which I like, too.
Comment is about Dyn Hysbys (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
Hi Lisa,
I am indebted to you for your appreciation - thank you. But it looks like we are on our own! Ah well .....
Peter T
Comment is about UNDERFOOT (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
Thanks Jon and Desmond! This really came about; when my grandaughter was going to school she heard the 'plotters,' ran home and they saved it,but after two or three years it did die. They suspected some kind of chemical poisoning. When you think how long it takes them to grow from a tiny shoot, it's criminal. These trees have pine nuts too, as you probably know, which are used for that lovely 'pesto' a green, mainly basil, pasta sauce. Tx again.
Jennifer
Comment is about Much mourned death of an umbrella pine (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Thank you for taking the time to read dave. Much appreciated ?
Comment is about Grounded (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
A cornucopia of detail with its agonizing emotion impact drawing us through wonderful settings - a lovely read and full of surprises. Great work Jon. Barmcakes fixes the north in my mind.
Ray
Comment is about Disturbing The Dead (blog)
Original item by Jon Darby
Lysa you are a true child of the earth !
Much enjoyed.
Comment is about Grounded (blog)
Original item by Lysa d
Such a shame, because we need part two David. Mind you for those of us who remember, there used to be dirty phone lines - you'd pay dearly for the privilege.
Ray
Comment is about Meltdown (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Tommy Carroll
Wed 6th Feb 2019 13:55
Two performance artists, Yuan Chai and Jian Jun Xi, jumped on the bed with bare torsos to improve the work, which they thought had not gone far enough. They called their performance Two Naked Men Jump into Tracey's Bed. Sold for £2.5 million
. Wikipedia
Comment is about Accidental Curator (blog)
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