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Isobel

Tue 28th Aug 2012 00:17

LOL - I see that you've posted this poem twice - I thought there was something odd going on. At least Cynthia can now rest assured that lots of people commented on it :)

There ought to be a way of reposting something without losing all the comments. I've seen other people do it - just don't know how they manage it.

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Isobel

Tue 28th Aug 2012 00:15

I'm totally sure that I've commented on this before - have you accidentally wiped some comments out?

I can remember saying how much I loved the use of dialect and how it would be a hard one to beat...

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Charlie Preston

Tue 28th Aug 2012 00:12

Impossibility and Teardrops in My Coffee = very emotive. Beautifully written.

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Charlie Preston

Tue 28th Aug 2012 00:08

Ha ha! I know this feeling! Grrrrr. Good stuff. x

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Charlie Preston

Tue 28th Aug 2012 00:00

Excellent. Reminds me of cystitis. :(

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Charlie Preston

Mon 27th Aug 2012 23:54

Very entertaining! Love it. :)

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Lynn Dye

Mon 27th Aug 2012 23:27

Lovely poem, I found this very enjoyable. xx

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John Coopey

Mon 27th Aug 2012 23:25

Hey Graham, a triolet!
Good for you. Nice one. It invokes a nice, cyclical rhythm which is well suited to the theme of time.
I only ever managed one.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 27th Aug 2012 23:23

Agree with Yvonne about the effective imagery. Some really good lines. xx

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Poets Corner

Mon 27th Aug 2012 22:29

Hi Folks! Friends and Poets...
It's that 'time' again for Poetry To Be Spoken.
At 'The Poetry Spoke' with Chris, Nat and Glenys.
Get you and your Poems recorded and be given the option of having them put on 'youtube' to create a greater awareness of your work.

It's FREE...with FREE car parking and a lovely warm vibe FREE feeling at La Gondola...so if you are FREE...it would be great to see you tomorrow just around 8...will be great!

Thanks - Graham Robinson

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John Coopey

Mon 27th Aug 2012 22:10

Bloody 'Ell, Bonny!
Get off the computer - you're draining the sun's energy!

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 22:01

Fee Fo Fi Fum
Haddesley sounds lots of fun
A snow white charger Godiva will carry
Will she be wearing as much as Prince Harry?

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 21:44

Hugh said it all. love is not always sweetness and light. It can be corrosive too and you have really captured that here Katy.this makes me shiver. Great!

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 21:28

Ha Ha - witty.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 21:26

ooooh at first read it's a lover's poem but then the doubts creep in about how long the affair will last as 'the sun sink' and 'ripening. spoiling' hint at a sadder ending. Great!

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 21:21

MC have you been struck by the love-bug or something? I'm lovin' all the love songs but wondrin' what's inspired them.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 21:15

effective imagery - 'the prison of your love/the deeper dungeons of myself'

This leaves a disturbing feeling of hopoelessness. Well done.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 18:02

Hi John
thanks for you comments on 'The Wrong Sort Of Train. It was a bit weird how the papers had an article about the wrong sort of passengers 4 days after I_ wrote this.

Love Crossraods Motel - shades of 'El Dorado' spring to mind and now I've discovered 'Benidorm' on the TV - tryin' not to get addicted. Wish I could get a job in that cast - just sittin' by the pool all day!

Summer has been a DIY frenzy doing all the things that the last 2 1/2 years have accumulated. At last cupboards up on walls, worktops cut and in place,source of damp located, TV wired up and working, most plants assigned permanant places in the jungle. Maybe time for the odd poem or two now. XX

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 17:46

Hi Hugh
Thanks for your kind comments on 'Us Nolimpics'
I entered it in the WOL olympic competition too.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 14:22

Hi Cynthia
Thanks for your comments on 100 Metres and Us Nolimpics
I had fun with the dialect - I had a strong image in my mind of a scruffy, young, chubby-faced lad trying to talk his way out of trouble with injured innocence.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 27th Aug 2012 14:09

i love the way you have correlated the ephemerous nature of childhood/life with the porosity of the brick which appear solid at first.
it is a sobering time when long known and much loved icons pass on.

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Hugh

Mon 27th Aug 2012 12:13

Brilliant!Must have missed it when you put it on.Thanks to Cynthia for bringing it to the surface again.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 27th Aug 2012 12:05

Yvonne, you are one clever lady. You get an original idea and then strike so surely with your imagery to give that concept substance. After a little effort, the dialect fell into place easily, and was consistent and very readable throughout. I can't believe no one else has commented.

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andy n

Mon 27th Aug 2012 12:00

that's really clever with a stinging last line. would have took me ages to respond by text though - lol.

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andy n

Mon 27th Aug 2012 11:59

enjoyed this in particular the first two lines m8.

good stuff.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 27th Aug 2012 11:56

Excellent. Very imaginative, and hits hard emotionally.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 27th Aug 2012 11:51

I like this because it leaves the reader completely free to interpret 'Words fail' as a very positive or very negative attitude to this intensive lifestyle. A median position hardly seems possible.

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John Coopey

Mon 27th Aug 2012 10:08

Just seen this, Y. Musta mistit while I was on holiwags.
Wrong sort of passenger - excellent. As a nation we seem happy to be told we are the wrong sort of customer. Too late, too early, wrong shape, too poor. What I detest is the assumption in many shops that I have to defend why I'm not parting with my money.
Anyways, I haven't seen you post for a bit; been away? I posted one a week or so ago which might appeal to you ( I think we share the same demographic as they say - old gits!) called Crossroads Motel which is a literary fusion of Leonard Cohen and Amy Turtle.

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 26th Aug 2012 19:07

Love it! : )

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 26th Aug 2012 19:05

Glad you liked it Hugh!

Thank you

Katy

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Katy Megan Hughes

Sun 26th Aug 2012 19:04

Flirt!!

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Yvonne Brunton

Sun 26th Aug 2012 18:26

Clever, as John say the understaterment is very effective and the way it ends so abruptly plays on the reader's emotions. Like it. xx

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Charlie Preston

Sun 26th Aug 2012 14:12

Loving the hard core mums! So true.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:50

sorry it had to be
us two uneducated,uneducable old duffers Chazzer-
but no probs,we'll be dead soon-haha!

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Charlie Preston

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:30

Ha ha! Thank you again. You've made my day.

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Charlie Preston

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:29

Thank you! So pleased that someone likes it.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:23

We were going to agree on 'just brilliant'
but then thought'absolutely brilliant'
more apt.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sun 26th Aug 2012 13:12

Love every single line Charlie
from first capital
to the last full stop

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sun 26th Aug 2012 12:33

And only one way to thank you Lynn,and that is so sincerely.xx

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Hugh

Sun 26th Aug 2012 12:00

Poignant,poisonous and perfect--Well done Katy !

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John Coopey

Sat 25th Aug 2012 22:48

I like this, Dorinda. There's a lot going on the the poem which is stronger by being understated.

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Nigel Astell

Sat 25th Aug 2012 14:15

Glad you like it

Are you joining up as a member on our new Stockport WOL blog?

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Isobel

Sat 25th Aug 2012 10:50

An unforgettable series :) I love the lines about the wobbly walls and doors - as wooden and fake as the acting :) As for Benny - well...

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John Coopey

Sat 25th Aug 2012 09:55

Thankyou for commenting on my blatant advert for our village fayre, Be Ye There Or Be Ye Square. As everyone here roundabouts knows, I have a dirty habit so I shall be going as a monk.
Did you notice my previous, "Crossroads Motel"? I thought it might appeal to those "of a certain age"!

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Isobel

Sat 25th Aug 2012 08:43

I consciously decided not to go back to where I was a student, for the same reasons. I always knew it would make me feel old and sad. Better to keep straight on, unless there are people to go back to.

I like your description of Portugal in summer. I think you balance the poem well.

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Isobel

Sat 25th Aug 2012 08:34

That looks like a lot of fun John! Will you be dressed up as a knight or Lady Godiva?

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Stephen J Dobson

Sat 25th Aug 2012 07:48

The question my dear Notagnome
Is "Is it or is it not a true Notapoem?"
The Judges have looked at the rules
As they don't want to be thought fools

It is indeed a splendid ouvre
So they are quite keen to discover
Whether Notapoems are allowed to use rhyme
Or indeed structure of an emphatic kind

They feel that you've strayed from the zone
And they're worried you might not be alone

They can see you stepped up to the plate
So it might have been something you ate

They themselves would prefer to write prose
'Cos it's easier, as everyone knows.

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Rachel Bond

Sat 25th Aug 2012 00:50

another great write. i like the matter of factness blended in memory. the question about whether our perceptions are true or the change in times and seasons replacing, remaking memories.

interesting note about portugal.

this is the line:

trying to catch the old

magic, that perhaps wasn´t there in

the first place,

i know that feeling.

i have always wanted to go to scandinavia. maybe one day ill go. it seems fashionable at the moment and i cant abide that. ill wait till im old and can afford an umberella :)

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Rachel Bond

Fri 24th Aug 2012 20:35

jan, i near cried reading my daughter.

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Rachel Bond

Fri 24th Aug 2012 20:24

aww your writing is stained with wonderful sadness.

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