Sun 12th Jun 2011 19:47
... and I watch the weeds grow... not much loving it but enjoying the inactivity. Your poem catches that - together with a love of life and all its colours. x
Comment is about watching paint (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sun 12th Jun 2011 19:42
Truly evocative of the Rainy City. Probably changed somewhat since then but this brought back many memories of long ago student days there. Thank you.
Comment is about Manchester Morning (blog)
Original item by Alan McKean
Sun 12th Jun 2011 19:32
I should have commented on this earlier, Phil. Very observant, gentle, warm, and understated. Sorry I overlooked it.
Comment is about COLOURS. (blog)
Original item by Philipos
Sun 12th Jun 2011 19:17
A great subject to tackle - I'm struggling with some of the imagery though - probably me being dense...
I don't get the bit about the couch and local youth centre. I can understand that one might dig a tunnel to escape - like a prisoner of war...
I'm presuming the last verse is to do with heart beat and the fear of losing the audience.
Your poems are never obvious!
Comment is about Stage Fright (blog)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 19:02
I really liked the uncomplicated lay out of this and the subject matter enough to terrify the feint hearted
Sun 12th Jun 2011 18:52
Thanks all. The poem derived from a lovely writing group I go to - subject for the last meeting - being boring - so thought of watching paint dry and how that might not really be boring after all!
Sun 12th Jun 2011 18:09
Hi Mike - drowning/fighting the tide is a well used metaphor for the kind of suffering you describe, yet you seem to handle the theme in a fresh way.
I liked the 'bright shore of optimism' image - a bit like a mirage and out of reach, I guess.
'These waves, peaks, troughs, clouds' seem to be apparent within most of us poets - the downside to brains wired like ours, I suppose.
I think if you were to stop fighting the tide for a moment and look around you would find it teeming with others - equally significant.
Comment is about Pawn of Insignificance (blog)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:55
Lovely in its simplicity and understatement. Although written in first person there is a detachment in the poem, which makes it all the more powerful for the reader.
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Christopher Dawson
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:46
This is very special, well done.
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:30
Sad and beautiful. And real.
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:29
Poor Augusta I'm sure she would blush crimson if she thought for one moment i would ever wish to undertake such an intimate commission.
Thanks for you kind words re my poem and yes looking forward to seeing when ever you have a moment.
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:24
Dis chick keeps it well hidden within the silken folds of her knickers ... or so I've bin told.
Many thanks for reading and commenting John, good to hear from you again.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:20
Thank you Anne for kind comment.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 17:19
How well you know me Izo ... Im sure you could locate me upon the planet 'Dark' in the middle of deepest starless night hidden underground within a blanket chest.
Great subject, and wonderful to hear from you again and a chance tooggle yer pins agin.
Many thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Sun 12th Jun 2011 16:29
I'm great thanks Ann! Hope you are well too.
(Finally finished my first year at university so I've got my creative brain back!)
Take care x
Sun 12th Jun 2011 16:14
Glad to see you back on here - hope you are well!x
Comment is about Joseph Kennedy (poet profile)
Original item by Joseph Kennedy
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 12th Jun 2011 15:29
Very atmospheric, haunting quality.
Comment is about The Lost Bodies Of Last Year's Summer (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Sun 12th Jun 2011 15:20
This sounds like a man with a real problem. You have hit a sharp nail here, those 'forty's types' who still eye the 'teens and twenties in their skimpy clothes and see only bodies 'taunting in their unavailability'. It's a very honest poem; but probably fools no one. 'Wanting to be noticed' is a modern society sickness. You've made a great social comment.
Comment is about Invisible (blog)
Original item by Martin Togher
Sun 12th Jun 2011 14:49
I Like this very much; you capture 'essence' so well in all you do. IMO, the second stanza might be omitted. I think the intimacy of your intense joy in physically 'painting' is not much enhanced with those references. But I do realize you may be thinking of 'artistic camaraderie'. Title is superb, a real eye-catcher.
Sun 12th Jun 2011 14:30
false modesty - you're bristling with pride !
Sun 12th Jun 2011 14:23
Like the juxtaposition of the local youth centre and the doors of heaven, Ray. How did the gig with Cooper-Clarke go?
Sun 12th Jun 2011 13:49
Loved every line of this one.
Sun 12th Jun 2011 12:53
I like this one too. That last line is great!
Sun 12th Jun 2011 12:52
Lovely poem - I must have missed it before. To me it reads like letting a son or daughter go.
Comment is about Walking away (blog)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 12:48
How mystifying you are!
Comment is about erring (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Sun 12th Jun 2011 12:46
I thought it just needed brushing up a bit actually! ;)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 11:54
.....it's easely one of yer best :)
Sun 12th Jun 2011 09:48
excellent, manda.. I love the use of the last few lines too..
Comment is about TRAPPED (blog)
Original item by Manda Lee
Sun 12th Jun 2011 07:56
Thanks for your kind comment on Watching Paint. I've added some new colours because Francine spotted that I'd included Scarlet Lake three times! I don't know how it's possible to write something and not spot these things yourself! :)
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Sat 11th Jun 2011 23:20
Hi Isobel, I have entered a poem which was entered into the last comp '1971' I have added to it with reference to feet. I know that this is not what I am supposed to be doing, sorry but I was never one for convention. If I am disqualified just say so and I will remove the tag, no problem. Win x
Comment is about Shoes, Feet and all things Podiatric (blog)
Sat 11th Jun 2011 23:01
Hi Steve. Welcome to WOL. Your profile made me chuckle tonight, I share some of your listed interests but not telling you which! Winston
Comment is about STEVE RUDD (poet profile)
Original item by STEVE RUDD
Sat 11th Jun 2011 22:55
Hi Shirley, thanks for putting up your profile and samples. Welcome to WOL. Winston
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Sat 11th Jun 2011 22:51
Hi Jess, Don't stop the poetry! welcome to WOL, great sample work, like your almost rebellious and very refreshing use of English here, look forward to seeing you soon, best wishes Jeff ps will drop you a line about performances and various gigs and stuff you might be interested in!
Comment is about Jess Green (poet profile)
Original item by Jess Green
Sat 11th Jun 2011 22:35
Thanks Francine - I never noticed! Might have a bit of a change about tomorrow!
Sat 11th Jun 2011 21:24
This is so expressive and beautiful... flows like a work of art!
I love all of the unique colour names.
p.s. You must love Scarlet Lake - you mentioned it three times!
Sat 11th Jun 2011 21:00
Thanks, Steve. I think it's a general problem here, that all poems, good and not so good, disappear rather too quickly.Attention Deficit is rife!
Comment is about Attention Deficit (blog)
Sat 11th Jun 2011 08:48
A paean to the transforming powers of paint, and also to the restorative power of not doing very much ... just watching paint dry. Enjoyed this very much, Ann.
Sat 11th Jun 2011 06:41
I liked the poem very much - didn't know who had written it till I got to the end! Very engrossing! And moving too. No idea how good a translation it is cos I can't read french. But it read well to me. (And the whole thing is a great idea.) How about an audio of both versions? I think that would be a very interesting way to compare them.
Comment is about Poetry in Translation Group (poet profile)
Original item by Poetry in Translation Group
Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Fri 10th Jun 2011 23:19
Love the poem. Yours is a dark land, was on holiday in Serbia, so much tragedy between your peoples...
Comment is about Adnan Mahmutovic (poet profile)
Original item by Adnan Mahmutovic
Fri 10th Jun 2011 23:17
Its a great idea... look forward to throwing my stuff out there to see if anyone would care to give it a voice in another tongue...
Fri 10th Jun 2011 22:41
Thank you to everyone for your comments. As always, they are very much appreciated.
Comment is about Blameless (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Fri 10th Jun 2011 20:21
January, as cold as sociopathy;
he’s married to misogyny
and swears in ancient Greek.
Those are great lines in a good poem. I wonder if you can be ricket-legged, though.
Comment is about New School Blues (blog)
Original item by John Darwin
Fri 10th Jun 2011 20:08
Not many sonnets on WOL and this is pretty good too. You've kept the 10 syllable count and rhyme meticulously, though that sometimes leads us to unnatural constructions like
your shoulder-chip it will not hack away.
when it will not hack away your shoulder-chip is what we want - and probably what we started with?
The stress seems a bit wrong at the beginning of this line too
until you can embrace the present-day.
yeasifies!? Is that a proper word?
Comment is about Baggage Class [sonnet] (blog)
Original item by Alan Morrison
Fri 10th Jun 2011 20:07
Cheers Ray. I agree and will edit my out. Had several ideas in mind as to who was doing the trapping, so left it to the readers to decide. Thanks for your feedback.
Fri 10th Jun 2011 19:28
Powerful message through deceptively simple language. XX
Fri 10th Jun 2011 19:26
Really touching, Laura. Some folk seem too good and loving to have to go through such pain. And sometimes it's almost as if it's worse having to stand by helpless and watch them go through it. XXX
I want to echo here Andy's comments - superb performance at G&V - what a professional.
Comment is about Wine, Tears and Consolation (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Fri 10th Jun 2011 19:20
So many loaded and powerful lines here, Jacky. I had the pleasure of hearing you read this last Sunday and I think you know how much I loved this poem! C u soon. X
Comment is about The armchair (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline Pemberton
Fri 10th Jun 2011 16:55
Ahhh... Reminicent of sweet and delicious moments.
Comment is about Keeping The Scent Of Insignificance From The Door (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Fri 10th Jun 2011 16:04
Thank you for liking Old Glitter and Flip Flops Alan! :o)Take Care, em
Comment is about Alan Morrison (poet profile)
Fri 10th Jun 2011 15:58
Nice poem. I'd prefer the title to reflect who you're trapped by - parents, pets, whatever. Good use of "stalled".I should think "Captivated by self-awareness" would do. You don't really need "my." Nice last three lines.
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