Under the pier at Brighton

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Under the pier at Brighton charcoal stumps infuse the Sea, 

a reminder, 

like tattoos that you burned into me.

 

And on four knuckles there is hate the other hand is love,

a warning,

though the punch came late un-cushioned by a glove.  

 

Then on your oft turned cheek the scar,

a betrayal,

a mirrored memory wherever you are.

 

Under the pier at Brighton the waves came crushing fire,

a rescue,

from the rage of love though not the blackened pyre.

◄ Krill

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Wolfgar Miere

Wed 10th Jul 2019 18:11

Thanks Ray and Trevor,

I do agree that the subject matter is probably universal Trevor, but was thinking I might have limited my reach by using geographic landmarks and references that are regionally specific.

I suppose we are prone to write about what we see immediately around us.

Thanks to both of you for reading and comments.

David.

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trevor homer

Wed 10th Jul 2019 10:58

I find this more universal than regional - much to commend. Regards T.

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raypool

Mon 8th Jul 2019 17:37

I feel this is sort of home ground - a setting for the interplay of emotions that have dual outcome and have to be rationalized in whatever way that works David. The pier at Brighton is like a world end to me. Pleasure on top, loneliness below. Imagine that place to the stone deaf - what would that be like? (sorry a diversion I'm afraid).

Ray

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Wolfgar Miere

Sun 7th Jul 2019 13:39

Thanks J,

again this ties in with poetry being regional..without knowing the old Brighton Pier burned down the metaphor risks being drowned out.

David.

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 7th Jul 2019 12:58

I love the the reference to the oft worn Tatt's of love and hate, and the uncushioned punch, the blackened charcoal stumps and the mirrored reminder, but the last three lines seal the deal for me. Genuinely love this poem more with each re-read.

J. x

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