Gods bless us all

When Gods rise people fall,

so bless us all

Gods bless us all.

 

We carved Jerusalem from golden stone

to cover its glory with a blinkered dome,

once from The Mount we could see the stars,

once all the stars were all of ours.

 

We cut the forest to build a church,

we carved a tree to make a cross.

What have we gained but something lost,

its men not Gods that pay the cost.

 

When gods rise up

then Men will fall,

so bless us all,

gods bless us all.

 

◄ Sad holiday

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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 21st Mar 2019 08:40

Thanks Stu,

I'll probably have a fiddle with the audio today if I get a moment. I'm not sure where the problem originates, whether it's with my devices or the site...not sure.

Anyway thanks Stu.

David.

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Stu Buck

Mon 18th Mar 2019 17:05

your carving apart of ignorant traditions is as cutting as ever david. i also struggled with the audio 😞

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Wolfgar Miere

Sun 17th Mar 2019 08:08

Good morning Cynthia,

thanks for your reading and comments very much appreciated.

I sent a quick private message to you last night so this is my public acknowledgement, I'll try not to repeat everything I said.

I have adjusted some punctuation although it still may be imperfect (not my strong point unfortunatley) I am grateful for your direction though Cynthia.

I'm not going to detail the meaning of that specific line, all I will say is that humans tend to construct belief systems which might obscure a broader veiw, in the way a golden Dome might blinker the night sky and its enlightening canopy.

Thanks again,

David

PS. Very pleased that you noticed the utilisation and interchange of capitals.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 16th Mar 2019 16:10

This is very scholastically clever; love the use and non-use of the capital letters to make such strong points almost subliminally. It's a strong poem, obviously touching many minds. What exactly do you mean: 'once all the stars were all of ours'? I haven't quite grasped it; or perhaps might take it wrongly.

But, David, check your punctuation. This is not like you. A short work should be impeccable.

I have not heard the tape, and therefore, have no 'preamble'. Why would I need a 'preamble'?

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Wolfgar Miere

Sat 16th Mar 2019 07:57

Good morning folks,

Thank you for your reading comments and likes, all very much appreciated. I feel this weekend should be one of quiet reflection now (on a personal level I mean, for me)

I doubt much will ever change and men will continue to use religion and invented Gods to facilitate their hatreds and prejudices, what the solution is I really don't know. Maybe some rational thinking instead of the delusional type.

I thought this had more lyrical slant on it than some of my stuff, and that this might be more of a song than a dedicated poem. Anyway I can't formulate music so I don't suppose it will become anything other than this.

Dorothy, my audio seems to be working fine on this piece. I note several people have had some audio playback problems recently. Maybe the issue is with the site or the compatibility of my recording device and what you are listening to the recording on. I'm sorry I can't really suggest how you might rectify the issue, I hope you get it sorted soon...please let me know as I could email you an audio track separately if you still wanted one. PS, I don't think you've missed the point.

All the best, have a peaceful weekend everyone...

David.

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Dorothy Webb

Sat 16th Mar 2019 07:43

I am unable to get the audio - have I missed the point?
Dorothy

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Kate G

Fri 15th Mar 2019 22:00

Once from The Mount we could see the stars,

once all the stars were all of ours....

So very, very true. One of those pieces I wish I had written.

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raypool

Fri 15th Mar 2019 20:51

Wise words and a measured preamble that makes total sense. Along the route of such conclusions are many obstacles but the way is familiar. There.s a lyrical and persuasive flow to the poem. Nice one David I say!

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keith jeffries

Fri 15th Mar 2019 20:29

David,

I listened carefully to your preamble for this poem. I agree with every word you say. I hope that does not come as too greater shock. I also enjoyed the poem which fell neatly into place.

Thank you for this

Keith

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Dorothy Webb

Fri 15th Mar 2019 17:36

David
"once all the stars were all of ours"

We destroy the beauty that belongs to all of us to build what?-

-- a Church for the few? --
-- an over-the-top office block as a status symbol to show off wealth and power by plundering distant countries for their timber and marble.(Trump Tower)
Should we, perhaps, step back and concentrate on buildings that are needed and are sympathetic to the planet as a whole?

We really do have our proirities wrong
.Dorothy

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