Waiting to Leave Home

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As they waited

his eyes surveyed the room

at all the things she'd amassed,

so recently risk assessed.

 

She'd become a virtual prisoner

in the house she'd strived to own.

The house she'd made a home

was now a source of danger for her.

 

As he wheeled her out the door

she asked how soon she'd be back.

Couple of weeks he lied.

He felt his stomach churn.

He knew she would never return.

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Brian Maryon

Mon 12th Nov 2018 15:24

Thanks everyone! This piece was based on personal experience, which I always think adds authenticity.

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Martin Elder

Mon 12th Nov 2018 08:59

A very powerful piece Brian nicely written. Thanks for posting

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Hugh

Sat 10th Nov 2018 23:43

A brilliantly moving poem Brian,well done.I look forward to more movement down this brilliant path.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 10th Nov 2018 15:29

The reality for many of us older offspring is well caught in
these lines. A sobering selection for the (self) chosen
theme of "Leaving Home.

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raypool

Sat 10th Nov 2018 15:12

A feeling of helplessness and hopelessness make this a very fine piece of work, easily identified with for many of us, me included, as responsibilities dog us with few options. I like the fact that you stripped it down to basics.

Ray

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Taylor Crowshaw

Sat 10th Nov 2018 14:34

Really moving poem Brian..it stirred a few emotions in me. Sadness, the inevitability we all face..and the need for independence the denial, and almost child-like quality of the question was heart wrenching. Excellent ❤

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keith jeffries

Sat 10th Nov 2018 08:56

A poem to remind us of growing old and its consequences. Also our obligation to care for the elderly at this crucial and sad time as their lives draw to a close.

Well done Brian and thank you

Keith

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Jon Stainsby

Sat 10th Nov 2018 08:11

Brings many thoughts and feelings to the surface for me.

Thanks, Brian

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