Zero six thirty 4 Jan 18

 

Here come the new year resolutions

trudging through the mocking rain

multi-layered chill solutions

yet still the damp invades the brain

 

Platform 2 for the seven-o-three

Daily Mails and Metro News

iPhones and Samsungs to set them free

toothpaste and perfume with a hint of booze

 

A million Christmas trees left home alone

one bulb unscrewed the circuit blown

McCauley Culkin’s dead again

the ghost of something yet unknown

 

TV ads of summer vacations

a facade of beaches in third world nations 

easy-jet will get them there

one bag in the hold with cash to spare

 

Resolved like hamsters to the wheel

like millstones to the grind

numb doesn’t mean that they don’t feel

just means they’ll never find 

 

◄ Everything a note

Posthumously Paris ►

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Wolfgar Miere

Tue 9th Jan 2018 07:19

Thanks Martin and Beno,

The rain in the picture is simply the final insult to us poor sheep. I don't say this in a way devoid of humour incidentally, I feel there is often humour in human frailties especially when we feel sorry for our meagre hardships when compared to some who endure true adversity. That is not to diminish the impact of the misery caused by repetitive drudgery as it is very real to many.

It is good to offer counterpoint Beno and thanks for doing so, we can combat our tribulations sometimes by simply rationalizing why we endure them. The other way is to change I suppose, alter our circumstances if possible. Of course that is easier said than done, and takes courage. If you haven't experienced the drudgery then I think you're pretty fortunate and I'm pleased for you, long may it last.

Anyway, thanks both for reading and commenting.

David.



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Mon 8th Jan 2018 07:39

Your poem seems to me, to describe unhappy people, over sated by by the holidays, rueful of their excess, going back to work they don't like, dreaming of escape. Its very well done. I could feel it even though I have never experienced it.
Can I offer a counterpoint?
I wouldn't imagine I'd feel like that. I'd love to have two weeks off over Christmas and spend it with my family. I know I'd enjoy it and have loads of fond memories of it. Even so I know Id be rushing to get onto that train to work, to see all my mates. Maybe they are looking forward to a new year and fresh start. Maybe they have lots of exciting ideas for it. Maybe they are on their iphones coz they are checking out all the pics from Christmas. Maybe that perfume's a present and she really likes it. As for the rain maybe they are enjoying it after the cold snap. And who cares if its mocking, it wouldn't dampen my spirits after a lovely Christmas holiday.
On the phone thing. I remember my dad reading the paper for hours. Surely the same thing?
Sorry for the late comment but I have been so busy at work I haven't had chance to think about WOL.
Loved the poem.
Beno.

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Martin Elder

Sat 6th Jan 2018 23:12

I love the line of 'mocking rain' it sets the scene beautifully and I agree with Suki that the last verse finishes it off wonderfully.

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Wolfgar Miere

Sat 6th Jan 2018 09:05

Thanks Frances, much appreciated.

I’ll try my best. Looking forward to reading you also.

David.

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 5th Jan 2018 08:44

Thanks Ray,

much appreciated.

David.

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suki spangles

Fri 5th Jan 2018 04:00

Hi David,

Some fabulous lines here. My personal favourites:

TV ads of summer vacations
a facade of beaches in third world nations..

And the last verse - brilliant.

SS

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Fri 5th Jan 2018 03:24

Yes, I agree Ray, multi-layered and full of abject meaning. Well done, David - may your muse amuse, in 2018.

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raypool

Thu 4th Jan 2018 22:13

Some home truths here David. Freedom in a phone , how true. Is their a means of escape? I did, but not to great success. Must be worth something though.

Punches above its weight as always!

Ray

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