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what you read
and what you hear
is not always true
or not always clear

 

what you think
and what you learn
is seldom bought
or seldom earned

what you want
and what you see
is not all of you
or not all of me

 

what we shared 
and at what cost
is not our fault
has not been lost

 

words ©Colin Hill 2018

 

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Colin Hill

Sun 7th Jan 2018 20:54

Hi Pat, I've been missing yours too. Good to see you back and thanks for leaving such a lovely comment. Happy New Year to you - if it's not too late to say so. Col.

Pat Hughes

Sun 7th Jan 2018 15:25

I have missed reading your poetry.
This is a beautiful poem.

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Colin Hill

Fri 5th Jan 2018 08:41

Hi Suki - oh gosh! yes it does read a bit like that! I'm sure we absorb so much over the years that some of it must surely seep its way unconsciously back out somehow! Cheers, Col.

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suki spangles

Fri 5th Jan 2018 04:05

Hi Col,

Reminiscent of the last meditative verses of Dark Side of the Moon! What a way to start 2018!

Suki

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Colin Hill

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 19:29

Thanks Graham and Hannah for your comments and to Helen and David for Likes.

You are a hard taskmaster Mr Sherwood, keeping us on our toes with your fine suggestions. The original version didn't have the ors but simply repeated the is's. And there were none of the second line ands. I had juggled the lines and rhymes around so many times that my head had begun to ache and I just had to let it go. But I take your point and as always will ponder upon it. Interestingly I had also wondered about an extra verse. Oh damn! Now I'm looking at a complete re-write! Happy New Year to you too 😉

Hannah, thank you. I gained quite a lot from writing it too. All the best with your writing in this new year.

Col.

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Hannah Collins

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 16:47

A lot of truth here.
Feel I've gained something by reading it.

Hannah

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 16:13

Brevity, cleverly shrouded.

Personally I'd lose the or's in the last line of each of the first three verses, it would read better (and even more scant).

Perhaps another verse too!

Happy New Year to you Colin, and good wording for 2018

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Colin Hill

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 09:30

Hi Sidra and Kevin. Thanks for your kind comments and likes. I had a few titles floating about but couldn't decide so in the end I let it go naked and free! Happy New Year to you both. Cheers, Col.

Sidra Shahid

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 09:16

It is beautiful. Loved the melodious rhymes.
Best regards
Sidra

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kJ Walker

Tue 2nd Jan 2018 08:39

Liked it Colin. I was going to be clever and suggest a title (then realised I'm not that clever). Maybe the first 2 lines would do.
Happy new year
Cheers Kevin

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