Honey Bees

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A honey comb, they have found,

Rich, and sweet, and golden brown,

And amongst the syrup screen.

Bumble bee has wooed his queen.

Sugar from his kiss she taste,

Slender arms around his waist,

This little bit on which she dined,

Leaves her wanting more she find.

So off he fly to find a bloom.

Nectar from its core he hewn.

To fly right back, set lips upon,

His honey girl, the golden one.

🌷 (5)

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Hannah Collins

Fri 8th Dec 2017 20:56

Great poetry Beno, natural and sweet.

Hannah

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Stu Buck

Thu 30th Nov 2017 13:11

i love your work beno, its as if you had been writing for years. innocence, romance and strong rhymes.

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Tina Glover

Thu 30th Nov 2017 07:15

I enjoyed this lovely piece you have written and it made me smile ☺️☺️☺️

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Beno

Wed 29th Nov 2017 06:23

Thanks Ray.
My spelling is really bad for various reasons! Lol. I try not to get hung up on it.
Glad you enjoyed it. It makes me feel good everytime I read it. Different people want different things from poets don't they?
Next poem I will post will be the first one I ever wrote (I've done 8 now). I still love it and don't feel I want to play around with it. Please read it and let me know what you think.
Thanks again dude. Beno

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raypool

Tue 28th Nov 2017 19:23

A lovely romantic offering Beno - like a bubble of sweetness which i'm sure would go down well with the ladies. Keep up the variety my friend. There's an interesting kind of suspension of tense that adds to the flavour of it. With respect i'll just mention a couple of typos , 3rd line (amongst) and 3rd line from the end (nectar).

Ray

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Beno

Tue 28th Nov 2017 14:13

Thanks Keith. After last weeks very sombre post, I wanted to do something very different. I've only started writing recently, so I am trying out lots of different styles. I find I have different audiences to please as well.
This poem, as you said, is just what it is. The girls at work loved it. They're all soppy sods like me! LOL.

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keith jeffries

Tue 28th Nov 2017 10:34

Beno,
a simple yet beautiful ryhming poem. I really enjoyed it. Thank you. Keith

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