Scatterlings

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Wind curled the spiny outgrowth back

and turned its mottled leaf to black,

to drop un-grown away from sun

and pick unstitched what had begun.

 

Then blew it dry across the lawn

and snagged it high on kingly thorn,

from spores as these so random blown

oft rise great trees as yet unknown.   

 

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 23rd Jun 2017 20:15

Hi folks, just stuck an audio on this.

Thanks all X

David.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6Ca2uVZuiY0

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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 22:16

Hi Laura,

thanks so much for your comments and encouragement, I like "strange and wonderful" its a great compliment.

Thanks for the steer on Cathy Bryant, I'll take a look.

Hope all is good with you.

David.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 13:01

I LOVE this. The syntax you've used is so unlike other stuff I've read by you. Ekphrastic poetry again - brings out the strange and wonderful in your writing.

I would consider sending this off to a mag or similar. If you fancy doing that, then check out some of these links on Cathy Bryant's Comps and Calls. Read submission guidelines carefully.

http://compsandcalls.com/wp/

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Wolfgar Miere

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 07:27

Thanks Keith, Colin, Stu and Frances.

I love the California tree story, so disappointing it isn't true though.

Very grateful for the generous comments.

David.

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Frances Macaulay Forde

Thu 22nd Jun 2017 01:49

Yes, I agree totally with Stu; this is quite brilliant.
The rhythm and rhyme totally unforced, flow naturally. Excellent writing, David.

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Stu Buck

Wed 21st Jun 2017 20:20

this is quite brilliant david. could easily have been lifted from one of the great classic poets, and the title is wonderful. hard to pick out the best bits but the last two lines of the first stanza are as good as any i have read in a long time.

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Colin Hill

Wed 21st Jun 2017 14:52

fine and thoughtful David with a wonderful title.

My FB feed this morning offered me a tale of revenge by an arborist on his local council in California who cut down his beloved 30 year old pepper tree. "Two years and seven months ago" he "secretly planted 45 California Redwoods and 82 Giant Sequoias in various parks, yards, and state properties around [their] city".

But after going viral it turns out it was all made up. “I’m not some old arborist from Redondo, as you’ve probably figured out,” Reddit user GoblinsStoleMyHouse admitted in a message late Monday night. “My story is complete and total BS, with just enough detail and knowledge of California to be believable.”

https://www.easyreadernews.com/153803/redondo-beach-tale-trees-revenge-proves-fake/

The word 'scatterlings' made me think of this story.

Col.

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keith jeffries

Wed 21st Jun 2017 14:33

David, thank you for this beautiful cameo of nature´s evolution. Keith

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