Rose Petals

Somewhere there's a box,

Dusty now

How white the dress was 

Always,

A bench,

On the hills 

A tree in the forest,

Catch them,

If only we could, 

Be as kind,

In life,

As in death 

She's in the water 

Take heed, 

Photos of her 

So precious now. 

If only.

We could,

Turn back time,

Petals on the breeze. 

The scripts written

It's only part of the game.

Cold water 

Ignore the sparrows 

Let them chatter 

If only you listened 

To the love.... 

Not the numbers. 

 

 

 

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Nicola Beckett

Thu 15th Dec 2016 19:44

Thanks guys and gals 😁

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scottydotti

Sun 18th Sep 2016 19:28

i loved this poem 😄

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Laura Taylor

Wed 20th Apr 2016 14:12

Hi Nicola

Sorry for the delay. Understood re punctuation - it was merely a suggestion, and I hope you don't mind me making it. It's a brilliant poem and thoroughly deserving of poem of the week :)

It makes it even more special knowing the backstory, so thank you for that.

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Nicola Beckett

Tue 19th Apr 2016 08:30

Thanks for voting this poem of the week.

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Nicola Beckett

Sat 16th Apr 2016 16:15

Thanks Laura. Will have a look at further punctuating this poem. I try not to be defined or fit into a box with the poetry. I don't struggle with punctuating poems and sometimes write the way I want it to sound. Or sometimes I write to break the rules. Feel free to punctuate it for me and post it. Iwrote this poem in response to the Junior doctor who was found not long ago.Her name was Rose hence the name Rose Petals. Regards xx

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Laura Taylor

Fri 15th Apr 2016 11:59

This poem would benefit enormously from tidying up the punctuation. Currently, it doesn't seem quite right. If you struggle with punctuating poems, and a lot of us do, then I think you could actually take it all out and let the lines speak for themselves. There's some astonishing glimpses in this piece, I think it has real potential to sing, if you sort out the confusing punctuation.

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Martin Elder

Wed 13th Apr 2016 15:40

This is indeed a beautiful poem which has its own gentle kind of flow.

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Lynn Dye

Tue 12th Apr 2016 16:08

Beautiful - I love this.

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Jemima Jones

Tue 12th Apr 2016 13:18

adored! Thank you Nicola.Jemima.

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