Non interventionist god

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I froze lonely as a blue sky,

laboured by the purview of the canopy I support.

Unable to focus or even try,

beneath, 

too broad to grasp one thought.

 

When all at once

they gazed on me, as if to see me here

to ask for astral guidance

and offer up some steer.

 

Alas though, I have hung too long

above these plains and oceans,

and wandered where I don't belong

too far from godly notions.

 

The truth be known 

I’ve cast my care for all these earthly things,

so from this day they’ll stand and stare

and suffer what their future brings.

 

◄ Attrition

In the forest of future words ►

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Joyti

Wed 27th Jan 2016 04:26

I think he has disappeared for ever.

J

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Wolfgar Miere

Tue 26th Jan 2016 13:15

Lea,

that really makes me chuckle. I am endlessly subliminally influenced by Nick Cave. So much so that after writing this I found myself singing "Into my arms"

I am a ridiculous fool for everything Nick Cave has ever done.

Also I am in love with Polly Harvey, unfortunately she is unaware of the fact.

Thanks, that made my day.

Wolfie.

Lan

Tue 26th Jan 2016 12:32

Hey Wolfie, I like this one, had to jump on quickly when I saw the title - it reminded me of a line in my favourite Nick Cave song - Into My Arms - do you know it?

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Wolfgar Miere

Tue 26th Jan 2016 12:21

Thanks all for reading and commenting.

Yes I wanted to invert and hopefully not pervert Wordsworth.

It almost feels like plagiarism, but I prefer to see it as being inspired by a great master.

I had no idea where I was going after the first line, I guess I was "Wandering lonely as....." Ok thats enough, I've pushed my luck.

Thanks again.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 26th Jan 2016 11:27

I'll never look at a daff in the same way again! Clever stuff.

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Adam Whitworth

Tue 26th Jan 2016 11:01

Wolfgar, Wordsworth and God! It's a winner.

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raypool

Tue 26th Jan 2016 10:47

A triumph of bleakness, David.

Ray

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Stu Buck

Tue 26th Jan 2016 10:31

clever and quite amusing (in a dark way), especially the last verse.

best lines here (for me) are definitely 'to ask for astral guidance, and offer up some steer'.

completely (almost) off topic, but i read this wonderful news this morning, which made me chuckle.

http://www.theguardian.com/science/2016/jan/20/flat-earth-believers-youtube-videos-conspiracy-theorists

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John Coopey

Tue 26th Jan 2016 09:14

Enjoyed this Wolfgar. I liked the concept and the vehicle you used.

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