Get Real

I want to write what pleases me,

And let the words flow wild and free.

In praise of love and times of glee,

Pen my thoughts romantically.

But times are hard, you will agree,

So I choose to reflect with commentary,

On all that happens in reality:

People in pain and poverty,

Child abuse, depravity.

Religious war, brutality.

Crimes against humanity.

Instant fame and celebrity,

Through idleness and vanity.

Budget cuts, the death of industry,

NHS an EMERGENCY!

Treatment is a postcode lottery,

Drugs in sport, no more equality.

M.P.’s on the take, bribed commercially,

To turn a blind eye to tax escapology.

No manners or respect and even less civility.

Cold, hungry pensioners forced to give up dignity.

We live in a country full of insolence and bigotry,

But before you criticise and have your go at me,

Remember poetry is life and my life’s in poetry.

◄ Gone but...

Haiku: Man Overboard ►

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Robert Mann

Fri 15th Jan 2016 18:26

Wolfie - something got right under my skin today, so I had to vent against the system and point the finger as it were.
I'm really glad you like the piece, and to be mentioned in such esteemed company makes it all worthwhile. Haha
Many thanks for the encouragement.
Rob

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Robert Mann

Fri 15th Jan 2016 18:21

Vicki - thanks for the comments. All the message asked was what you thought of this piece (which I saw as a rapping rant) and I now know! Having read some of your work, I could imagine it appealing to you.
I wouldn't have a go at potential critics or try to put words (civil or not) in their mouths. Free speech an' all. :-))

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Wolfgar Miere

Fri 15th Jan 2016 17:51

Robert,

I am a huge fan of the Anti-poet and what you have written is just that.

I have been guilty of flowery sentimentality, it has its place as an antidote to reality, but I prefer the challenging stuff.

As Roger McGough recently alluded to, "where is the anger, where is the protest" well here is some.

Even Shakespeare got in on the act with;

"My Mistress' eyes are nothing like the Sun"

He too, sickened by the turning away from cold stark reality.

The last line is all important, and I respect and applaud your willingness to share your anger.

Wolfie

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Vicki Ayers

Fri 15th Jan 2016 17:33

It says a lot! As far as rhythm goes what Ray said in his post fits better within the rhythm of the piece - but as you've said 'forced' is a much stronger word. Overall I like it - and fair play to you for acknowledging we all have our critics but making us think about how we offer advice & feedback! There's never any need for rudeness! Btw I lost your message before I read it properly! Send it again :-)

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Robert Mann

Fri 15th Jan 2016 17:09

Thanks M.C. and Ray for your comments and tips:
M.C. - my mistake on the your (I should have known better and spotted it upon editing). Now changed. Not much joy in the subject matter and I can't see things improving before long either. Sorry about the downer!
Ray - I did think of 'deprived' and 'robbed of their' dignity,
but in my head forced seemed more powerful somehow. As if it has been prized away from them.
Thanks again guys.
Rob

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 15th Jan 2016 16:41

It can be said that today's media has a global reach that
enables everyone to be critical of just about everything
and inundates us 24/7 with global conflict, misery and
inadequacy.
These lines make their point rather well but shouldn't
poetry raise us up, rather than dash us down in such an
existence? As for "criticise" - how about "your (go).."
in place of "you're" (which is a contraction of "you are") in
the penultimate line?
See - everyone's at it :-))

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