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You open your heart
and try to tell me
that you love me
now and eternally

But "oh no" I say
why all this now?
I feel like a sore thumb
in a crowd

Why can't you see
what you're doing to me?
I want to be free
yet you won't let me

For old times sake
just let me be
"Oh I do" I hear you say
but no you don't, this isn't the way!

In the end
I wonder why I bother
when all you try to do
is get your leg over

Well listen to me
I shout with all my might
"I've got a bloody headache!
so thank you and goodnight."


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Jeff Dawson

Thu 5th Feb 2009 21:13

Hi Vicky, good to see you on WOL. Nice little poem, look forward to more, see you soon Jeff X

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winston plowes

Mon 26th Jan 2009 17:10

Hi Victoria, good to see you last night. You could have read "headache" at Middleton, maybe next time. You will be a mongst friends.

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Andy N

Mon 29th Dec 2008 22:37

I knew you would get some good feedback on this poem, I do agree with Gus - I do prefer this to your chocolate poem as I think the beat is a lot tighter here! Keep it up!

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Gus Jonsson

Mon 29th Dec 2008 17:09

Well done Victoria.... Leg over? Like it so much better than Chocolate pudding....

Regards Gus

<Deleted User>

Mon 29th Dec 2008 09:38

Have you read the Daisy Goodwin collection? It's modern and relevant but tastefully written and has many voices being transmitted - this poem reminds me of that.

nice work!

<Deleted User> (5692)

Mon 29th Dec 2008 04:54

a bit off the point and not that funny sorry.

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