SHREDDED MEAT

You have made me a dumb animal: when I see you I am speechless. You bring me pain and mental anguish: I fear you more than death itself and wonder what kind of magic is at work to make a mans skin part from his nerves. I've had to ignore you in the past for sanity's sake to self preserve but there's no hiding place from you be it in mind or in the city; suddenly you appear out the blue. My love for you is but a dream: it makes a mockery out of my soul because on my mind you've always been. I've rummaged in pubs and clubs and wined and dined with women who tried to rescue me in vain to save me from unecessary pain: yet I remained impervious to it all knowing you would stand above them in your ivory princess tower tall. I am drunk with my love for you unable to pretend for very long that I am a free man with free will. I behave like a september wasp doing nothing in particular well. My physical superiority means little as on seeing you I feel so brittle; shaken from my head to my feet leaving me like shreaded meat.

◄ SICKNESS MACHINE

GODZILLA ►

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Anthony Emmerson

Sun 21st Dec 2008 11:10

Hi Alan.
Thanks for your comment on "testament." I have yet to perform this particular piece as it's hot off the pen, so to speak. I'm working on posting the audio file.
Your "Shredded Meat" struck a particular chord with me, as I have been employed in that particular industry (with no small degree of shame) for all of my working life. It's a potent metaphor.
Regards, A.E.

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Chris Dawson

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:57

Sadly - not that young!
Cx

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:57

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:55

Hi cjd,
Don't despair, your only young, although I've
waited for what seems a lifetime for another
love like in this poem to come by but its never
happened, I supose thats despair!! x

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:51

Thanks Pete,
Yes, I like that line too as at the time I thought
I was parting with someting! apart from my mind!!

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:48

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:48

Thanks Janet,
Yes, if, if only!!

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Alan Holdsworth

Wed 17th Dec 2008 18:47

Janet

Wed 17th Dec 2008 17:40

This poem is very potent.
A love so strong should survive a lifetime.
If only..
I agree with Cjd and Pete. It evokes a lot of emotions.
Janet.x

Pete Crompton

Wed 17th Dec 2008 15:13

I think this is a really exciting piece of writing. It unfolds rapid and vivid, it feels like an animal on a emotional rampage with his motive justified

"wonder what kind of magic is at work to make a mans skin part from his nerves."

great line.

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Chris Dawson

Tue 16th Dec 2008 23:28

There's both a kind of comfort and a kind of despair in knowing that one's own (horrendous, barely survived) experiences are shared by so many others.
Cx

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