Grieving My Father

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I miss your laughter.

I miss your face.

I miss your sweetness, the light of your ways.

I miss the beauty of your honesty, and the loveliness of your grace.

The grandness of your dignity, and the glory in your truth.

The strength that you gave me,

The honor in committment and nobility in life. 

I thank you for showing me God.

The loosing you, cuts like a knife.

I try and move forward,

But yet and still...

Loving you haunts me,

Like a never ending deep well.

The transition illudes me, of this I know-

From father to Heavenly Father,

I must somehow go.

 

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Sat 26th May 2012 22:02

No grammar lesson from us two Gina-why?
because if we were to enter
the Eurovision grammar contest
it would defo be-nil points!

Lovely/sad poem
about the tragic loss of
very kindly looking gentleman.

Our thanks for sharing.
Our condolences.xx

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Gina Bullard

Thu 24th May 2012 23:12

Thank you Ray... advice is alway accepted. I am extremely new (a baby really) - so bare with me. It was written "off the cuff"... I struggle with grammar and have no idea of syntax. I was merely written from the heart.

Thanks again.

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Ray Miller

Thu 24th May 2012 21:31

Hello Gina. Dunno if you're wanting advice but just ignore if not.The poem is moving, painful, that's how it should be.Its weakness is the 4 or 5 lines from "I miss the beauty... to....nobility in life."Mostly because they tell rather than show, whereas

The loosing you, cuts like a knife.

says a lot and very simply.

"Like a never ending well" would suffice and I think you want eludes not illudes.

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