Mirrors.

 

it comes to me this late in life

when men i knew are

gone that as we shed our

mortal form someone

becomes the author of our

tale and strives to pen

a sympathetic valediction

 

what use reflections which

hide the ills as is the rule at

sombre times for even saints

and martyrs sin yet those we

love seem duty bound to deify

and eulogise their next of kin

◄ Alarm.

Trilogy. ►

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Philipos

Mon 24th Jan 2011 15:25

Hi Petrova - glad you liked the poem and thanks for taking the time to say so - I must check out your recent work x

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Petrova Fairhurst

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 17:47

Interesting poem all the same and I rather liked the way it read without punctuation or metre, free flowing and unsentimental, thought provoking too.
Perhaps we should put in our wills that our kin should tell the truth and shock the vicar - lol!

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Philipos

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 15:10

Hi Antonionioni - thanks for your views and much more could be said about punctuation but it is good that we can get our views across being one of the great benefits of membership with WOL

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Antonionioni

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 13:46

Grammar is difficult isn't it in poetry? Some people say drop it altogether, to make it less like prose. I suppose they have a point but sometimes grammar is useful to make the meaning clear. And then some say, don't make the meaning clear, or don't have a meaning at all.

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Philipos

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 13:16

Hi Ray - thanks indeed for your kind comments and I agree with dropping the word 'other' in verse 1 - in other respects I am probably the purist's worse nightmare on punctuation believing in the oft cited argument that most people put commas in the wrong place anyway - in fact some even like my maverick approach but I do it that way because I like to and not to make any specific point - best regards

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Ray Miller

Sun 23rd Jan 2011 10:57

Enjoyed the poem and the sentiment.

when "other" men i knew are
gone

That other seems a bit unnecessary. The 2nd verse could do with a question mark. Or are they not allowed?!

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