The Haunting.

 

i filed the letters that i meant

for you as unsent post which

are the souls of all our

varied jubilees - outings to

theatres and the sussex coast

 

you were the sheba who

could dance ‘til dawn or

fiddled in the garden while I a

lesser solomon connived to

craft a tale in votive verse

 

a curse we couldn’t make it

work but better for the health

of both we have moved on

forgetting what we shared

though is a very different

thing your ghost survives

◄ The Hard Seat.

Pax Romana. ►

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alan barlow

Thu 6th Jan 2011 22:50

sorry i should have been a little clearer in what i was alluding too i read it correctly, however i was suggesting that no one ever forgets special shared moments together. sorry for any confusion ;-)

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Philipos

Thu 6th Jan 2011 21:31


Hi Alan - thanx for comments on The Haunting - last stanza should have been read as 'forgetting what we shared though is a very different thing' hence the following piece about the ghost - good to hear your comments

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alan barlow

Thu 6th Jan 2011 20:43

second stanza as a whole is great "votive verse" really captures me and i think you are perhaps telling porky pies when you say "forgetting what you shared"?

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Petrova Fairhurst

Thu 6th Jan 2011 13:52

Thanks for you comment on "Edinburgh" I do like the idea of "a lesser solomon" lovely. x

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Ann Foxglove

Wed 5th Jan 2011 07:24

I enjoyed reading this very much Philipos. It has a lovely rythmn to it, (tho I think it would read even better if you said "the theatre and the sussex coast" giving that line an extra syllable.) Really liked it though!

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