across the hall

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the class went quiet

 - as young as they were -

they could see

bad news

coming from afar

and Miss had a tear

rolling down her cheek.

 

she had something to tell them

about Robert

across the hall

from class 4C

 

they’d only been looking

for shells on the beach

and it transpired

that Robert had found one.

◄ a poetry joke (not many about)

yesterday's confetti ►

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thu 9th Dec 2010 20:43

aw Mr B!-now you tell me-shit!

<Deleted User> (7212)

Thu 9th Dec 2010 17:38

E.Dowd - great story.
as a kid I once found a complete stick of dynamite in my grandma's coal bunker in amongst the coal (I'm not kidding). The coal board eventually came & took it away, but they didn't seem to be in any hurry. Hmph - wish I'd kept it now !

<Deleted User> (7212)

Thu 9th Dec 2010 17:32

Thanks to all. xxx
Stefan - that was no snickers ;)

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shoeless

Thu 9th Dec 2010 13:31

yes i like it too

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Isobel

Thu 9th Dec 2010 13:25

What a powerful piece - all the more so for its simplicity. Looking for shells.... really sad.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thu 9th Dec 2010 10:35

I went looking for shells one day beneath seaside cliffs-did,nt find one,but I did come across an old banger-mine-that I had pushed over the top for the insurance money-it was at that point I remembered I had left a snicker in the glove compartment-oh lucky me! this very good poem indeed could have two faces Mr B-either one very acceptable-ta Squire.

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Laura Taylor

Thu 9th Dec 2010 10:07

Brief and poignant - all brought together with that last line. Liked this a lot

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 9th Dec 2010 07:34

Hmmm, knowing you (which of course I don't) I thought this might be one of your jokes. Making the poem a bit uncomfortable for me.

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Chris Co

Thu 9th Dec 2010 01:51

Mmmm very sad, quality minimalist piece of writing.

It contains a truism; children even at a young age can ascertain certain things without anything being directly spoken.

The language is deliberately simple, the way a child would understand and see such an event.

Yet all about the implied final line.


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