As Mr. D. approaches

( Not personal so no condolences required )

 

Stepping off the bus.

 

Pre-mourning comfort

my only luggage

 

for a friend in her final hours of life

 

yet her mind remains intact

those gifted faculties

flawless diamonds

cored with such sweetness and courage

 

poised for the journey

to  where nothing lives 

in a world of nowhere.

 

The indiscriminate Taker

cometh

preparing to incur

his totality of

subtraction.

◄ Onwards from my prime example.....

Slow motion suicide ►

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Rose Casserley

Thu 29th Oct 2020 14:05

Thanks bigtime commenting guys and likers. On one hand, though I haven't had to be put in this helplessly and awful kind of situation but,
on the other hand, I would do if required

after all, what are REAL friends for?

Paul, so!! you would tiptoe into my boudoir, steal my literary goodies and have it away ( on your toes, that is! 😁)

leaving me, bedtime story-less!!!


HMPHHH!!! 😭





Rose 💋

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Stephen Atkinson

Wed 28th Oct 2020 23:23

I agree with Paul. That final stanza's a killer, literally! A superb piece.

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Paul Sayer

Wed 28th Oct 2020 18:55

..."preparing to incur

his totality of

subtraction..."

OMG Rose!

When you slip off to sleep tonight, I am going sneak in, all stealth-like in my best Ninja attire and steal this phrase from your mind and use it henceforth as my own.

You will have no knowledge remaining of your authorship of
said immaculate phrasing whatsoever.

Po-wit.
Apprentice of Mr D esquire.

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keith jeffries

Wed 28th Oct 2020 17:59

Rose,

Another excellent poem. I am particularly drawn to the penultimate stanza which is so final in its content; alarmingly so.

Thank you for this

Keith

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Rose Casserley

Wed 28th Oct 2020 17:20

Mucho thanks take 2! very kind J.D.

take care!




Rose 💋

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J.D. Bardo

Wed 28th Oct 2020 17:15

if my interest in this poem, was the oceans water, it is high tide. I can`t stop reading it. cool, thanks

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Rose Casserley

Wed 28th Oct 2020 17:14

Mucho thanks J.D.






Rose 💋

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