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Too shy to play

I’d rather live aloud

Too shy to guess

I’d rather make mistakes

I’d rather live in  darkness

Than in cloud

As calm, as one is

 Past his own wake

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Alison Smiles

Sat 5th Jun 2010 11:21

The first two lines keep me coming back to re-read. I like the way it makes me think hard about the meaning of aloud, and the way my brain keeps trying to substitute allowed even though it's not right!

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Andy N

Fri 4th Jun 2010 08:10

this says a lot in a few words, olga.. excellent skill to show.. when i first started writing poetry properly years back - i stripped my poetry right back to as small as i could.

i think i can guess your influences in writing this (style wise) but did really enjoy it..

would like to see more in this style like this xx

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thu 3rd Jun 2010 19:59

Beautiful!

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