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Can You Hear The Moon Sing At Night?

Can you hear the moon sing at night?
A distant melody from the most dulcet vocal pipes?
Have you ever nestled in her crescent bed
Like the kid in the DreamWorks emblem?
My winsome lady
Dotes on me.
Her visage,
Part amused, part exasperated.
For she knows why I've come to see her again--
To steal the roux from stars, milky and fulgent.
To hoard fragments of the night sky in my wooden chest.
To replevy memories that in her craters I'd once left.
Her safe-keeping is the only thing I trust,
Since elsewhere the magma of buried souvenirs might erupt
To form calderas, bottomless, limitless, cavernous.
The Vantablack abyss ravenous.
A part of me wants to let go of them; set them free-
The roux, the fragments, the memories.
But the other craves to witness
The eruption, the calderas, the abyss.
So I retrieve and bottle them,
Subject to pressures harsher than gems,
In hopes that they'd yield me diamonds,
Or blaze it all in an astronomical explosion.

Shifa

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Shifa Maqba

Thu 30th Jul 2020 20:00

I am absolutely honored that you found a trace of Shelley in this poem. Thank you so much, John, for your generous comments! They inspire me to get better with each poem.

Thank you ChloƩ for leaving a like!

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John Marks

Wed 29th Jul 2020 21:42

Like the kid in the DreamWorks emblem, you pull off a clean switch in tone/diction. The lexis is almost archaic but not quite. You have to set the moments free. This reminds me a touch of Shelley. Lotta Continua Shifa.

Nicola Beckett

Mon 20th Jul 2020 04:37

Xxx

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Shehariah

Sat 18th Jul 2020 12:23

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Shifa Maqba

Sat 18th Jul 2020 03:06

Thank you so much, Abdul and Shehariah for not only stopping by but leaving such wonderful comments to this poem also. Your remarks are always appreciated!

Thank you, D.W. Hamilton for leaving a like. Much appreciated!

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Shehariah

Sat 18th Jul 2020 02:59

There is a child-like wonder to this poem that I really like. I can feel it in the words.

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Abdul Ahmad

Fri 17th Jul 2020 21:07

Shifa _ just awesome. One to savour like a rich red wine. Gets better with every read.

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Shifa Maqba

Fri 17th Jul 2020 20:20

Leon, I'm beyond honored to have received a comment as beautiful as this. Whether or not I win an award is a different story altogether, but even if I do, it wouldn't matter as much as this.
Really made my day! Couldn't thank you enough.

<Deleted User> (17847)

Fri 17th Jul 2020 19:24

Shifa! omg! I'm absolutely speechless at the quality and depth of sentiment in this fabulous piece of real poetry!

Methinks it won't be long before you receive poem of the week award

( surely! )

Hope you don't mind but I've ' saved ' this gem in one of my folders in order to read again and again and again and again! ?

but I will have to wash the green-ess out of my eyes each time ?!


L.S.

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Shifa Maqba

Fri 17th Jul 2020 11:07

Thanks a ton Bluesky.girl for your wonderful input!

Thanks Liam for hitting a like!

Much appreciated.

<Deleted User> (24283)

Fri 17th Jul 2020 09:11

Beautiful optimistic sentiments..never let go what you so desire.

What comes easy, is good
What is difficult is greater than expected

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