Mon 6th Sep 2010 17:26
Hi Kim. Welcome to WOL. Some nice ideas in your first sample. Keep Writting. Winston.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 17:20
Hi Sharyn, Welcome to WOL. I hope its a good place for you to explore, make friends and showcase your work. Winston
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 17:04
Hi Antonionioni, Welcome back , good to see your new work on WOL again. Nice to catch up at the Crescent the other night. Winston
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 17:00
I will keep an eye on your work and blogs as it seems there will be some interesting stuff to come if we judge things by your sample so far. Winston
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 16:58
Hi Dali, Welcome to WOL. Hope you enjoy the site. Winston
Mon 6th Sep 2010 16:48
Hi Bobby, Welcome to Write out Loud. Hope you enjoy exploring the site and find something of interest here. Winston
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 16:36
Hi Harvey-Jo, Welcome to WOL . I hope that you are enjoying the site. Really liked some of your ditties in your samples. Winston
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 15:24
Hi Cynthia - I'm sending you a link to Dave's description of this month's theme and competition. He decided to take it on board this time. I must admit - I'm loving it - really look forward to logging in and seeing how different people have tackled it. I do hope we are going to get one from you. x
If the link doesn't work - just go to Dave's latest blog.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 15:17
Great Ray - absolutely!
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 15:14
Wow! I love this Jo! Even without knowing who all these people are (they do have great names!) I was really excited by the whole thing. Great! Look forward to reading more of your poems.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 15:10
Hi Thomas - very good way of rhyming in this poem - wish I could do that! I don't think you need the last two verses, just IMO. I like the rest a lot.
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Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 6th Sep 2010 13:30
There are so many marvellous lines in here like 'a tunnel vision of limelight receding'; 'ironical smiles merely taste bitter' etc. and etc. I got a bit sidetracked by the 'hunger' with 'the skin stretched taut', thinking it was 'food hunger', perhaps because I associate aging with slack skin. But maybe it is both types of hunger, like starving for 'the feast of youth'. IMO, you might eliminate a couple of expressions as not really advancing your dynamic idea, but rather sidetracking it with unnecessary imagery. Always with respect. It would be so great to actually talk together, with voices, eyes and hands as well as words.
Mon 6th Sep 2010 13:02
Will you kindly update me on 'bite the bullet' theme suggested by Dave? I'm out of touch. I did enjoy Pandora's Box so much, both to write, and to read so many diverse ideas.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 12:52
Girl, you are good! - knowledgeable, imaginative, organised AND sophisticated. The poem is 'running'. If you ever have both time and interest, you might enjoy scoping the Discussions where Mythology has been often a 'stirring' topic, if not downright passionate. There should be many poets/readers on WOL who will respond to your work. Always bear in mind that no commentary does not mean no readership; but interaction is always preferred, of course.
Mon 6th Sep 2010 12:49
thanks for comments on biting the bullet poem.
I love the way you are able to really understand poetry so close to its source. i can only speak for the comments you give me but they always show a really slose understanding with my intended meaning.
Mon 6th Sep 2010 11:48
Cynthia. Thank you for your lovely comment on Cartooniverse. And in answer to your question, yes I shall be at Freed Up, although I was not aware of the theme until now, so thanks for that. Kind of odd that I've recently written a poem with 'stock still superman' in it, without knowing. Guess it must be Kismet, or something.
Mon 6th Sep 2010 10:25
thanks for the invite to bards...will do best to make it for tomorrow x
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 09:31
Thought I'd let you know about our Liverpool poetry night - since you are planning to do something in the city soon.
The LIVER Bards, as the sessions are now called, take place on first Tuesday of each month in the performance space at the beautiful Shipping Forecast bar, Slater St, city centre, L1 4BW, starting 8pm.
It's a straightforward open-mic with poems of humorous, philosphical, political and spiritual content especially welcome.
The first of these new-style nights is tomorrow Tue 7 Sept, starting 8pm. The postal code for the Shipping Forecast is L1 4BW.
PS Am I right in thinking there is a read thru of the Wigan material this coming Thursday in Wigan. What time and where do I turn up? x
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 09:24
Hi Cayn, Thought I'd let you know we have changed most things about our Liverpool poetry night - name, dates, venue, and we've dropped the monthly themes.
The LIVER Bards, as the sessions are now called,take place on first Tuesday of each month in the performance space at the beautiful Shipping Forecast bar, Slater St, city centre, L1 4BW, starting 8pm.
It's a straightforward open-mic with poems of humorous, philosphical, political and spiritual content especially welcome. The first of the new-style nights is tomorrow Tue 7 Sept, starting 8pm. The postal code for the Shipping Forecast is L1 4BW.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 09:15
Thanks Isobel, i think its a bit messy and needs tidying but your more or less right, its about feeling uncomfortable in your own skin xx
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Original item by Donna Beck
Mon 6th Sep 2010 09:12
Hi Isobel, I've lost your moby nnumber (if I ever had it) but I particularly want to make you aware that we have changed most things about our LIverpool poetry night - name, dates, venue, and we've dropped the monthly themes.
The LIVER Bards, as the sessions are now called,take place on first Tuesday of each month in the performance space at the very beautiful Shipping Forecast bar, Slater St, city centre, L1 4BW, starting 8pm.
It's a straightforward open-mic with poems of humorous, philosphical, political and spiritual content particularly encouraged.
The first of the new-style nights is tomorrow Tue 7 Sept, starting 8pm. The postal code for the Shipping Forecast is L1 4BW.
Mon 6th Sep 2010 08:39
There were the bangers you ate with the cream of tomato soup - why was it always cream of tomato? - and the bangers that exploded around your feet ...
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 08:37
Hi Rachel they sometimes make me cry to. especially when the buggers won't come out right oe I don't know where to go next! Teanka again for the recommendation. Really appreciate it.
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 08:20
Thanks Isobel - to me, finding the rocket sticks was exciting not sad, as I could imagine where they'd been, right up in the sky and helping to create all the magic and excitement. Also, they had that lovely burny sulphorous smell. I seem to have described the "before" and the "after" of bonfire night. But, as is so often the case, the before and after are even more exciting than the event! As to Jumping Jacks - speaking as a parent I say "hear hear" but if I was speaking as my childhood self I'd say "what a spoilsport!!" ;-) xx
Mon 6th Sep 2010 08:15
Thanks Isobel & Stef. My next one might be about the other side of the coin!
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Paul F Blackburn
Mon 6th Sep 2010 06:53
Guitar & Verse, September 2010
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 06:52
Oh you are naughty, but I like you...
(quoting Dick Emery there - for our younger readers - and you have to imagine a chiffon scarfed man in drag with a strong chin)
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Mon 6th Sep 2010 05:08
You express well the imminent doom that brings about apprehensive feelings.
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Original item by Cate
Mon 6th Sep 2010 05:01
You capture the boldness - love these lines...
'a dark pull from somewhere
a fizzing warning shrivelling on a synapse line
Sun 5th Sep 2010 23:01
wow I love your work Mike.
the description of the bathroom through the noise of the streets and the fleeting glimpse of pink, a full sensual experience...I like your bloody chinned foamy madman :) these missed moments are the most enduring even though gone in a second.
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:56
Goood late evening Bernadette-hope alls well with you,and your weekend has been good too-hope to see you soon-best regards to you and yours-Stef-xx
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:51
Bloody men eh Lynn!I just hope that if I get a bottle of anything poured over me,it has to be nothing less than vintage-and I,m given the time to lie on me' back with me'gob open! night night love-Stef-xx(B-xx)
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:43
Hi big Dave-longish time-no see-hope you are alright-and hope you are back soon-best regards-Stef
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:16
Hi Isobel - hope you dont mind me lowering the tone (for a change) :)
A girl goes to the doctor.
Big breaths, he says.
Yeth, and I'm only thixteen she lisps.
Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:07
...mmm let me guess - that was the au pair, right ?
Sun 5th Sep 2010 22:06
Ho ho, I really was an irriot then to not realise what yanty is!! Yes, I remember that character Benny Hill played too, "stupid irriot!" he used to say, oh dear, showing my age again, lol. Luvnstuff, Lynn xxx
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:48
Thank you dear Lynn, thank you Stefan. I am so happy to know that some people understand humor.
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:34
Ha ha, no, not biographical at all, just a good imagination, Isobel! Thanks very much for comment. xx
Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:20
Oo-er - you are a passionate woman Lynn! I have never understood anyone who could hang around any length of time waiting for the crumbs from someone else's table, so I find this interesting. It must be a lot of fun hating someone so much you could pour a bottle or glass of wine over them also - very Scarlet O'Hara!
I'm not presuming any of this to be biographical but it makes for a very interesting story! x
Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:13
This is an interesting one. Difficult to fully understand but that often prompts more feedback. I would guess that this is someone who can't love or trust - although they would like to. I like the idea of the spine being used as a filter for the brain and the emotions - it is an unususual metaphor. x
Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:03
ps Jumping Jacks were down right dangerous, weren't they? Don't think they sell them anymore. Who the hell would want uncontrollable lit gunpowder jumping towards their kids?
Sun 5th Sep 2010 21:01
This is lovely. There is nothing like the childhood expectation before bonfire night and the thrill of the danger. You tie that in neatly with the looking towards the future.
I guess the ending could be seen as a little sad - the future is here and all the explosions over - just burnt out debris left - but that could be me being overly miserable and reading too much into things. That's easily done. x
Sun 5th Sep 2010 20:46
Love it, Laura, very amusing. xxx
Sun 5th Sep 2010 20:29
Thanks Cate - you are right about that line - in a poem about kids, it's out of place.
Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:57
Good evening Lynn-enjoyed this very much-ta m'dear! lorra love-Steffers-xx(B-xx)
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:53
Good evening Larisa-a very clever and funny poem-really made me laugh! brilliant-thank you-Stef-xx(M-xx)
Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:46
Thank you Dave. Definitely not zillions, in fact, only two. ;-) xx
Thanks Isobel and Cate, yours were both so good I nearly didn't bother, but to me it's all a bit of fun really. xxx
Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:42
Love the poem, Stef, very good. By the way, never heard of the word "yanty" before (apart from when you called a group of us yantys, of course!) and google wouldn't even give me a meaning for it either. Is it an oop norf expression then? Love from the other irriot, Lynn xxxxx
Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:39
Just found this - great!
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Sun 5th Sep 2010 19:37
I like this Mike - a very unusual idea for a poem! Is there love and tenderness in it? I can't tell! I think it's very well written too. I love
Leaving only a bowl
Of un-flushed colour
A foaming madman
Who’ll creep upstairs later
And write it all down.
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