Sun 15th Aug 2010 09:37
Good morning beautiful early bird-I put a comment on this lovely poem yesterday-mmm? it was to say,I really love the flow of this poem-you must have worked hard on it-and thank you!-Stef-xx(G-xx)
Comment is about THE CHAT OF TWO WOMEN (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Sun 15th Aug 2010 06:18
Very interesting thoughts, nice poem, I like it.
Comment is about ah,well! (blog)
Dave Dunn aka Rhumour
Sat 14th Aug 2010 23:52
Hi Larisa, I saw your query, but as you didn't seem to be logged in here I've emailed a reply to you :)
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (Poet profile)
Sat 14th Aug 2010 21:48
Powerful Ann - some very strong images, very evocative.
Comment is about iron lung (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sat 14th Aug 2010 21:26
Hi, Dave! Please, help! I am not sure what is correct: "And her life was a real tough" or " And her life was really a tough" or "Her life was real tough". Which one is correct or better?
With warmest wishes, Larisa
Comment is about Dave Dunn (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Sat 14th Aug 2010 18:38
Oooh! But thank you for the kind wowsers comment! xx
Sat 14th Aug 2010 18:24
I was thinking about the germs being fresh and running around, all squiggling about! My first term at infants school was delayed by about 6 months cos the school was closed due to a local outbreak of polio. So, polio = fresh as in live, active and 'orrible!
Sat 14th Aug 2010 16:24
Seem to be laying a few ghosts lately - and facing a few fears. Inspired to post this as a response to Dave Bradley's latest poem. Not sure mine is finished - it's a bit complicated maybe!
Sat 14th Aug 2010 15:28
Thank you Cynthia for your very kind comment on "No Matter" - I was afraid it might be too maudlin! Maybe I need a maudlinometer! Or maybe I don't!! xx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 14th Aug 2010 15:27
Thank you Cynthia - I was afraid it might be maudlin! Maybe I need a maudlinometer! Or maybe I don't!!
Comment is about no matter (blog)
Paul F Blackburn
Sat 14th Aug 2010 12:58
Thank you Cynthia for your very flattering comments on my wonderful poem.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 14th Aug 2010 11:56
This is lovely, Ann, a gem of lyrical lines and musical cadence, a universal lament without being maudlin.
Sat 14th Aug 2010 11:38
You don't prick a social point, you sledge hammer it. Very vital commentary in an amusing way, although the last two words are not so funny as deadly.
Comment is about Cakes & Kalashnikovs (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Sat 14th Aug 2010 07:25
If this is true (or even if it isn't) you picked the wrong person.
It might have been a different poem if, for example, the man had sung happy birthday to you or offered to share his KitKat.
Anyway - Happy Birthday!
Comment is about Why I don't write greeting cards (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Sat 14th Aug 2010 07:21
I agree with Ray about the last verse.
(I do like things like this)
If anything I would say the last line in verse 1 is too short.
Perhaps 'But not give in meekly to anxiety.'
Thanks for comments on my poems by the way.
Comment is about If you can ... (blog)
Sat 14th Aug 2010 06:51
Thanks Stef - that's very kind of you to say! xx
Fri 13th Aug 2010 21:04
The ivory tower (and the word outside, and indeed the title) all refer to not really feeling like I'm fully part of the society I live in. Over the years, I have felt a bit isolated and socially excluded on occasions but its also (as indicated by the word acerbic) that I'm a bit defensive and wary and not wanting to get too involved with people.
Over the top of that, there's criticism of the modern hangover from the class system in the psyche of the populace(especially amongst the fairly well off) in that people seem to feel that they either have to know their place and act accordingly to get on, or to feel they never will get on and rebel totally against that in the expectation that they never will get on in life and they may as well just lash out.
There is also the idea in there that people sort of limit themselves by looking back on things always being done a certain way by peoples who preceded them down the ages and revering "traditions" as rules that should be continued and obeyed rather than as stuff that primitive people did just because primitive people were a bunch of eegits (which primitive people mostly were).
The ending just illustrates the idea that while some primitive people may have towed the line out of a genuine (and idiotic) love, respect and reverence to their leader and others towed the line for the protection, status and wealth that they were given in return, aristocrats and monarchs and anyone else who wants to set/control the rules that other people are made to feel they have to play along with were (and are) only ever really out for themselves.This applies not just in Government, but also in everyday social politics.So yeah, just thought I'd write a poem about that but I tend to be oblique because, at the end of the day, it's a poem, not an academic discourse.
Comment is about Spectating (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Fri 13th Aug 2010 16:54
Comment is about Arse Gratia Artist (blog)
Fri 13th Aug 2010 16:16
Ah yes this is one of the anomic pieces from the relativistic, absurdist Glennon period and is a poem that will be on the 2030 A-level syllabus. Discuss.
Fri 13th Aug 2010 16:01
Thank you so much Anne for those wonder words and observation I had hoped that the wisful lonely feeling had been strong enough to register.
I note that you are still writing as enthusiastically as ever ,
Long may it continue.
Once more, many thanks.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Fri 13th Aug 2010 15:56
Thank you Rosalind for your very kind thoughts and wonderful comments I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
I am delighted that my poetry gives you goose bumps but I'm sure there are many other pleasures that produce that state of 'Tingle' dare I say even long stiffer goose bumps!!
Once again many thanks
Yours in pleasure.
Comment is about Rosalind (Poet profile)
Original item by Rosalind
Fri 13th Aug 2010 15:49
Thank you so much Ladies for your very, very gracious comments they are so appreciated.
Thank you once again.
Comment is about Lost (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Fri 13th Aug 2010 15:25
Thanks for your comments on my wonderful poem 'Window box'.
Though I can assure you it is not a cut-up (wash yer mouth out) though I suppose it is a bit 'miserablist' school of poetry.
Comment is about John Darwin (Poet profile)
Original item by John Darwin
Peter R White
Fri 13th Aug 2010 15:13
A lip-smacking little poem. Very tasty.
Comment is about The Oyster and The Whelk (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Fri 13th Aug 2010 13:13
Hi - Ol Blue Eyes - I must admit that before I wrote it, I had to look up the spelling. Apparently, Sindy was the UK's answer to the US Barbie doll, so even though Cindy is a "real" US name, over here the new doll was called Sindy. all the best B.
Fri 13th Aug 2010 10:14
Thank you very much Ann, I haven't posted anything in quite a while. I've been writing reviews and articles of a different nature, and just haven't had time for poetry. It feels nice to get something off my chest in a poem though. Hope you are well x
Comment is about Finally seeing (blog)
Original item by Joseph Kennedy
Fri 13th Aug 2010 09:51
Thanks for your comment on 'window box' and yes, thank goodness no gnomes or I'd have to blow them to pieces which is a very dangerous thing to do, or so I'm told.
Fri 13th Aug 2010 09:47
IMO, it's a bit wordy, but still it is dealing with fine things in a sensitive manner. The intent and tone carry it forward, but, IMO, it needs skillful culling to make it more impactive. You have a lot to say, to share. Use one word to replace a phrase or even a sentence. Know when you've made a strong point and leave it, no embellishment. If you are really torn, write another poem, stress a different aspect.
Listen to me. All of this In My Opinion, of course!
Comment is about Cloudless Days (blog)
Original item by Ridge A. Dillard
Fri 13th Aug 2010 09:37
This is superb. I'm catching up on several missed days, and I'm glad I stopped for this poem. In mid-poem, I would strike out 'some of' and 'even'. IMO, they weaken both the thought and the rhythm. I think the ideas far precede Plato; but it is fantastic to have a clear classical allusion and a fanfare for philosophy. I look forward to more of your works. And I can't understand why others have not responded.
Comment is about "I am weary" (blog)
I like this Joseph. Esp the last two lines. You're always very good at being straight to the point.xx
Fri 13th Aug 2010 09:33
Hi Winston, thanks for commenting on 'Sweet Nothings' :)
Comment is about Winston Plowes (Poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:59
That's a good list of the 'cons'. Do you have a supportive list of the 'pros'? Or do we presume direct opposites? Actually, that doesn't always work. But, only teasing. It's good to write and read positive stuff.
Comment is about LIFE IS (blog)
Original item by Robbie Hurst
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:49
You may want 'Cindy', American-style, a diminutive for "Cynthia'. Please never call me that, even to be funny.
Comment is about Ol' Blue Eyes (blog)
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:46
Hey, very true!
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:44
I can feel immense ideas floating through this, but, IMO, I'm not sure they ever quite crystallize. What is your definition of 'Ivory tower' other than deliberate, protective separation from so-called reality? And 'acerbic' in such a dominant placement meaning 'bitter, harsh'? I don't make the connection. All comments made with great respect always.
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:30
You have to hand it to the Irish for originality in outrageously funny metaphors. They are an astute lot, always with one foot on a leprechaun's pot and the other on a bomb - wonderfully unpredictable. I speak with great respect.
Comment is about Alvin Guinessberg (Poet profile)
Original item by Alvin Guinessberg
Fri 13th Aug 2010 08:20
Graham, re: 'To Hell...', I worked with either the abstract noun 'survival' or the gerund 'surviving' both of which mean exactly the same thing, and I opted for the gerund for fluency of sound. I also considered 'one's' to be implicit. Thanks for the comments, always.
Comment is about Graham Sherwood (Poet profile)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Fri 13th Aug 2010 06:32
My Irish great uncle Seamus Guinessberg ran a shop in Cork which like many Irish shops combined two businesses; plumbing and a bookshop. It was called Only Connect
Fri 13th Aug 2010 06:27
Thanks for your comment. You are right about my intention.
I enjoyed your Picasso poem. I have a copy of his The Burial of the Count of Orgaz & Other Poems which is interesting but a bit too surrealist for my taste. Good luck with your book launch
Thu 12th Aug 2010 23:09
great impact with this at Hebden WOL. Could you even do 3 repeats of "Top of the tree in your human zoo" line. Nice one, Win
Comment is about I don't think I could handle being like you (blog)
Original item by Cayn White
Thu 12th Aug 2010 23:05
No... I think Alvins association here is Listening = Poetry Watching = Prose.
Love the words, and maybe in my interpretation the listening if done in the dark would be poetic, Better stoop there. Win x
Comment is about How a poem happens (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:59
Good evening again Lynn-theres a possible poem in your comment-'greengage jamming with Lynn Dye'lol!-thanks-Stef-(B-xx)
Comment is about Discovery (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:56
I really like this Cynthia (and I wouldn't just say that). It poses as many questions as it answers. Is it really just a game, for example.
Comment is about To Hell in a Hand Basket (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:51
I had a vision of a younger David Essex type character sporting that gold tooth - a very evocative poem Ann :)
Oh and Gallopers smell of toffee apples and candy floss from the smears left by their passengers....
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about he moves through the fair (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:50
At the moment, I would hav to be a limpit (I have a broken foot) Win x
Comment is about fishes (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:46
I also have seen a proper wall of death :-)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:43
Liked this one Dave, Well done :-)
Comment is about Sweet Nothings... (blog)
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:27
Good luck with your project Phil. reallyliked some of the phrases but struggled a bit with the change in tense sometimes. I think Andy is right in some ways, Thereader will fill in the gaps themselves in their own way. (Rabbet - Rabbit?). Don't want to seem to negative phil as this poem has guts and captures a personal story, 2 great plus points. Win x
Comment is about Feeling Small (blog)
Original item by Phil Golding
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:11
Thu 12th Aug 2010 22:04
Rest assured, Stef, it was housework, going to work, and making jam from my greengage trees, what an exciting life I lead... or not, lol! Love Lynn xxxx
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