chris yates

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:43

clever clever daughter inspirational to read and sense her love of the written word WELL DONE

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Isobel

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:08

Thanks for that Michelle - I'll get her to do that! I did see one advertised on here a while back but it was asking for stuff on the theme of home. She is going to have a go at that also. I guess the hard thing with all the children's comps is knowing how much parental involvement is going on. Even in the class room with teachers - I've seen certain ones almost guiding a child's hands as it paints a flower. The displays they produced were great but nothing to do with the kids... alas such is human nature - we will definitely give it a shot. Thanks again for your support and interest. xx

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Michelle Marie Clarke-Campbell

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 14:01

Brilliant poem,

Maybe your daughter would like to enter this poem in the Young Gifted Writers Awards for ages seven to seventeen.

All selected pieces will be published an authors will receive awards. Submissons can be emailed to: submissions@freelittlebirds.co.uk
(please include full name and age on poems)

Michelle

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Isobel

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 13:04

Thanks for your comments on my daughter's poem Winston. I don't think the site lends itself that well to kids - there is a lot of adult content and some very serious poetry also. She is growing up fast though... I'm quite sure she'll be on here one day. x

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Isobel

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:58

This made me smile too! ;)

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Antonionioni

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:56

I love it when traffic lights don't work at junctions, and then you can just edge out and then go on your way with no delay. I wonder if anyone's considered abolishing traffic lights (normal ones I mean. Those temporary ones will just have to remain, otherwise there'd be lots of reversing to be done by whoever backs down..!)

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Isobel

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:56

I like your thought processes in this Dave. They are musings indeed. I think it is great when poets can let their imagination take them to places like this - it makes for fresh and interesting poetry. x

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:54

I like this Steven, altho am not particularly fond of the daffodil / cloud reference, but I see why you thought of it in this context.

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Antonionioni

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:52

Furthermore, everything ends in a bloody mess!

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Antonionioni

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:28

Well put together - I like the structure, Andy!

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Antonionioni

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 12:25

I like the style and sound of this, Graham - neat blend of the evryday and an old ballady style.

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James Lancaster

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 10:52

Thanks for all your words of encouragement, much appreciated. When I've shaken this stinking cold I'll have a proper nosey around this site and take time to read your work. x

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Isobel

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:42

Thank you Ann and Andy. I loved the teeth bit too! It really shows you that a child wrote it. Funnily enough I don't have to nag her Andy - she just loves books and writing - her only problem is that she has too many all on the go at once. I only ever read one at a time - I can't multi read.
Thanks again all. xx

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andy n

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:25

you know me and ranting, tony.. i prefer the darkness (it's the goth in me) rather than a good rant.. lol

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andy n

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:24

lovely piece, isobel.. has a lovely flow to it.. defo a natural writer / poet there... (keep nagging her!!!!) xx

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Banksy

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:17

he's not my future liege lord and king - he's a very naughty boy

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Ann Foxglove

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Thu 23rd Sep 2010 08:00

"I want to be remembered

For fighting a dragon

Not for forgetting

To brush my teeth…"

My fave bit from a wonderful poem! She sure is a poet!! xxxx's to both of you!

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Bill Kelly

Thu 23rd Sep 2010 00:27

Absolutely Fabulous!

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winston plowes

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 23:29

Tes, daughters are cleaver things when they choose. Mine is also 10. Should there be a section for younger members? now there's a thing! I thought we decided that this is not an adult site but that it was ok for young adults if supervised. Win x

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:30

Thanks to both of you. Yes I am proud. The only help I gave was to type it up and lay it out the way a poem would be - I added the ellipsis. The words and ideas are 100% hers. It will be marvellous to see how her poetry develops in the future. So far she seems to be the only one who has inherited my love of language and capacity to day dream... essential things for a poet I think - though I'm not sure it gets us far in life!

xx

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Lynn Dye

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:25

This is so good, Isobel, incredible to realise it is by a 10 year old. No wonder you are so proud of her! xx

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:10

You are an excellent poet James - you express yourself so well. I hope that WOL works for you. x

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Francine

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 22:08

Bravo Maria !
You should be so proud... And you too Isobel ; )

xxx

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 21:57

Hello Elaine - I enjoyed your poetry. Welcome to WOL - hopefully I will get to hear you one day - you seem local enough - I would describe myself as equi distant to those 2 cities. If you are looking for venues, do try out the Tudor in Wigan, 2nd Thursday of every month. x

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Jeff Dawson

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 21:49

Hi Elaine, welcome to WOL! really enjoyed these two different styles of poems, the first a day most people can identify with and very well described; the second a beautifully written poem of love, look forward to reading more Jeff X

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Elaine Booth

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 21:49

The last four words hit with meaning, almost like a blow inside the reader's head. The banal and the tragic live side by side: the small triumph of finding enough change juxtaposed with the fragile figure, conjured up by the words "prone in a paper-thin gown". The control we like to think we have in life is revealed as ultimately futile. I very much appreciate this poem.

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James Lancaster

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 21:28

Thanks for the welcome both! Ann, I've had a browse and really like your stuff! The bat poem's very neat indeed - great imagery. Anyway...cheers.

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 20:22

Perhaps it's less to do with common sense and more to do with the kind of nurturing one has.

I love this poem Graham. It speaks to me and ties in quite neatly with one I've just written.
x

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 20:17

An incredibly powerful poem James. I too like the way you have said so much with so little and mixed the momentous with the insignificant. It is amazing how in real life, one can focus on the stray thread of a garment or the slightest bump on the wallpaper whilst going through the most excruciating hell. Your poem sums that up neatly.

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Alvin Guinessberg

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 19:45

I like your elliptical style which captures the way ordinary and extraordinary moments in our lives mingle and you have packed a lot in to a small poem which is something I value in a poet.

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 19:35

Welcome to WOL James. I really like your poems.

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Francine

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 19:10

I like the allusions this brings about - your choice of words is very interesting - Groping, 'frisson of fear', fluff, detect, final, prone, 'thinking about buying time....'

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Francine

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 18:52

Yes, you leave enough for the reader to imagine feeling the depth of anguish and despair...

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James Lancaster

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 18:30

This is good. I like unfussy language in poetry, it can be very effective. Also, this tells a story but keeps just enough 'below the waterline', so to speak. Good job.

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Rachel Bond

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 14:45

old school application of last minute pen and paper rush to create the masterpiece of an era known collectively as the 'letters to a gimp'.
Witnessed here by Michael Wilson who has been known to make his own honest little master works in a similar 'write it at the gig' last minute fashion.
'spontanaeity sponsors do it fasterer'.
;)

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Carol Fenwick

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 14:45

Hi Winston, thank you for your comments. Just getting the hang of the site now!

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 14:39

Hi there Linda, welcome to the site. Hopr you like what you find here. Winston :-)

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tom george

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 14:34

hi michael.
good to hear of your new event at fuel bar...dunno if you remember me from the NW heat of the BBC slam...anyhow just wondering if there is an open floor section on Oct 4th?

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 14:05

Hi James. Welcome aboard. To a large extent I also agree with you philosophy in your biog section. Hope you enjoy the site. Winston

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:55

Hi Fraser Welcome to WOl. Hope you enjoy contributing to the site. Winston

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:48

Hi There Elaine. Great stuff. Living where you do means you are ideally placed to attend so many open mic events. Have a look at the gig guide. Hope you enjoy WOL. Winston

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:36

Hi Carol, Liked your Hepburn sample. Welcome to WOL Hope you enjoy exploring the site. Winston (Admin)

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andy n

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:32

thanks for the comments isobel and ann... wasn't a easy piece to write this one (let alone finish).. needs a little more tweaking but it's getting there x

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Winston (Admin)

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:26

Hi Matthew, welcome to WOL. Have fun. Winston

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andy n

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:24

thanks for the comment, ann.. wasn't the most straightforward piece to write that one (has took a few weeks and a few drafts and at one point nearly became two separate pieces (let you guess for yourself which bits) but glad you liked it... Andy N xx

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andy n

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 13:22

Hi Isobel; - glad you like my 'bite the bullet' - has took a few drafts and weeks to get to the bottom of this piece.. at one point - it nearly became two poems (i am sure you can work out which bits for yourself) but pleased you like it! (do have a few lil edits I want to make to it still but wanted to get it on here then emailed to Dave tonight) x

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 12:45

The long awaited bullet hits us!

Love the twist at the end Andy - twas most unexpected. Perhaps she was so exhilerated after finishing off her hubbie, she burst a blood vessel with the joy. I like the uncertainty of it all. It reads a bit like a Scarpetta novel... it is such a different take on the theme! x

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 12:38

'We've all had enough of man and his shovel' - a line I can identify with..
I love your poetry Chris - you have such a gift for comedy. Just such a shame the wider WOL can't hear you perform - I can hear it in my head. You'll have to have a bash at recording. Izz x

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 12:30

Hehe

If it was guinness you were on, that's even better. Half beer, half food - a proper balanced diet

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Cate Greenlees

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Wed 22nd Sep 2010 11:46

Hi Christine, I remember hearing you perform this at the Tudor, I really enjoyed it then and have had another laugh seeing it written down!John told us you had broken your leg... hope you`re feeling on the better side. At least there`s no going out for fish and chips for you for a while!!Cate xx

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