Wed 26th May 2010 07:12
Let my claify. My ex left and I knew he was having an affair. I was told it was not true. I then see the facebook page of guy I suspected which had all my so called friends and ex's family on there as friends. Nice photo of the couple too
Comment is about They told me I was paranoid (blog)
Original item by Richard Seddon
Wed 26th May 2010 07:03
I had confirmation of all I knew when al around told me I was imagining things. Who is mad? Me or they?
Wed 26th May 2010 05:37
I liked this poem and understood it in my own way. Thanks for sharing. With warmest wishes, Larisa
Comment is about family (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Wed 26th May 2010 02:48
I think you are correct Mary, I have the same feelings regarding a change in doctors.
Comment is about Warfarin Woes (blog)
Original item by Mary Gillard
Wed 26th May 2010 02:43
...see! this makes sense!
Comment is about The White Sargasso Sea (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Wed 26th May 2010 02:41
...but none of this makes sense.
Wed 26th May 2010 02:06
Peter, the 'Kensington' I speak of is in central Liverpool, however should you wish to visit this 'oasis' there is a room with friends attached...who are also 'militants' :o)
Comment is about Peter Mowat Poetry (Poet profile)
Original item by Peter Mowat Poetry
Wed 26th May 2010 02:02
You know Peter I must reread it...I took all lit' so much more and very serious...but I love the book, I think you could push it, expand it, see if stuff arises...
Comment is about THE RELIEVED MASOCHIST ENJOYS A WELL EARNED BREAK (blog)
Wed 26th May 2010 01:59
''The bit where covers the air freshener from a urinal in chocolate'' I'm sorry Peter I do not understand this passage... please elucidate.
Tue 25th May 2010 23:34
Very impressive Ann! Trochaic tetrameter indeed. Longfellow would be beaming at this African variation of his epic.
Tue 25th May 2010 22:56
Yes, I was about to write the same as Isobel. Interesting and cleaver idea for a poem. Win
Comment is about Jigsaw (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Tue 25th May 2010 20:51
Hi Dave - many thanks for the kind comments on "about you". B
Comment is about Dave Bradley (Poet profile)
Tue 25th May 2010 20:50
I love all of it. A great poem, Ann.
Tue 25th May 2010 20:49
Pretty tremendous really. I liked the phonetic Yorkshire dialogue and casual racism, particularly those bloody ‘jocks’. The punch line deserved the suitably OTT build up. Nice one.
Comment is about A Yukon Tale . . . (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Tue 25th May 2010 20:48
Hi Cynthia - thanks for the very kind comments on "grasping at straws". all the best. B
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Tue 25th May 2010 20:43
Hi Ann - not really my kind of poem - I thought, until the last verse, which needs the foregoing ones to put it in context - masterful !
Tue 25th May 2010 20:37
I am pretty ignorant when it comes to London geography as I am a half hearted militant Scot who rarely ventures south of the wall. It is a very hard hitting piece and created strong image of the area. If I ever find myself in Kensington I will take a print out of this poem instead of a map.
Comment is about Kensington (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Tue 25th May 2010 20:31
Hi - many thanks for the kind comments. B
Comment is about about you (blog)
Tue 25th May 2010 20:17
Ah come on! The bit where covers the air freshener from a urinal in chocolate and presents it to his girlfriend is hilarious. It says so much for both characters and the world they inhabit. I also laughed at a throw away remark he made towards the end of the book when he was struggling to cope on his 'holiday'. He spent all morning on the beach shovelling sand into his month and crying. Every time I go to the seaside now I think of this. I must confess I have had urges to give it a try myself!
Hi Dave, thank you so much for the kind comments on my work. Afraid I'm new to this and haven't worked out blogging yet!!
Just enjoyed reading your samples and love them all, especially "Only Fond"
Tue 25th May 2010 17:03
Hi Vicky, Thanks for your comments on 'Postwar Postcard' and congrats with getting something into inthered 8. Its a great publication. I should know I was in the last one! lol Win
Comment is about Vicky Pinner (Poet profile)
Original item by Vicky Pinner
Tue 25th May 2010 16:41
thankyou Anthony and Alison for your lovely comments. Glad you liked it :)
Comment is about #2 (blog)
Original item by Liam Jones
Tue 25th May 2010 15:44
Yes Peter an amazing and disturbing book. I can't remember laughing much though, I've read the book three times and struggle to remember any chuckles! ;o)
Tue 25th May 2010 14:51
I loved this one too
Tue 25th May 2010 14:49
When I read it a few years ago I was a bit worried about myself. I shouldn't really be laughing at this stuff or finding it entertaining. I’m sure a few people experienced this. It is a difficult and ugly book in both content and style. I think the endless banal descriptions of every detail of his friends outfits or apartment fitting sit strangely well with Bateman's po-faced recounting of his horrifying actions.
I reckon this poem is more of a jigsaw than a creative piece. The first and last lines of the poem are exactly the same as in the book and I just played around with a few of the events in the book to make them rhyme. I wrote the original draft about six months ago and only revisited it recently. But don’t worry; the nonsense poems will be making a return in the near future!
Tue 25th May 2010 14:21
Yes - there is harmony and it is a calm poem. Some interesting thoughts in there - can identify with the bit about children - how hard it is to focus on your own future once you become a parent... the thirst for love also seems to drive many of us, possibly because it brings meaning to life, albeit temporarily...
The poems seems to explore the fact that so much of life is taken up by expectations and striving - you could possibly develop that further....
If we are lucky we'll find our peace, whether that is before God or privately.
Sorry for rambling - it's how I make sense of things.
Tue 25th May 2010 13:49
An interesting idea Dave and quite true. How many people do you know who are missing a crucial piece?
Tue 25th May 2010 13:29
What a great story, but no. It was inspired by my wife saying she couldn't be bothered to do the sky in her jigsaw, and the thought that the sky is a metaphor for questions metaphysical
Tue 25th May 2010 12:49
I'm wondering whether this was prompted by the recent news story:
I guess we all have a few pieces missing - I know I do.
Tue 25th May 2010 12:37
Not your run-of-the-mill subject matter for this one! In Bateman, Easton Ellis created perhaps the most dysfunctional and chilling character in contemporary literature, whilst holding a mirror up to the hidden atrocities of western capitalism. A profoundly disturbing novel, given its prophetic insights. Particularly liked the ambiguity of your conclusion.
Tue 25th May 2010 12:12
This is a powerful and personal vignette. I love the word "halcyon" - although I'm never quite sure how it translates into the common phrase literally - "kingfisher days" doesn't quite mean the same thing! I guess it's used like a condiment - to impart a particular flavour. I always seem to enjoy sad reminiscence in poetry, this is no exception. That a friend, who was once inseparable, is now himself drifting, lost in a morphia sea is a true loss. I guess we are all adrift in our own way. A precise and very poignant write.
Tue 25th May 2010 11:29
thank you all for your comments and for taking the time with my poem. Although it reads like a 'lover's' poem, it was in fact written with my soldier son in mind who left me 22years ago at age 16 to 'join up' and the army turned him from my loving thoughtful son and friend into a man who hides his emotions well (suppose a trained special soldier has to) However, I think of him all the time and long to hear from him and once in every while the phone does bring him to me inbetween him living his own life. Please dont misunderstand I am not a bitter clinging mother ~ just a mum who misses the son who was also her best friend xxx
Comment is about Golden Silence? (blog)
Mr. D Thomas
Tue 25th May 2010 11:23
Hi Dave - nice to see you're experimenting with different styles.
I had a police friend who we called 'Jigsaw' - for no other reason than he always went to pieces when he was in the (witness) box. Daft - but true.
Tue 25th May 2010 10:44
Thank you, dear Lynn. I am happy when people enjoy reading my poems.
Comment is about Woman's mood (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Marianne Louise Daniels
Tue 25th May 2010 10:24
hmm, yes all this pandora talk put this is my head...
Comment is about The Rib (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Tue 25th May 2010 09:25
i did mean 'fault line'...
why can't a poem really peck your head with its demands? hee hee...
it SHOULD be free game... thanks for the comments.
Comment is about Walk alone (blog)
Tue 25th May 2010 08:23
Thanks for commenting on mine. I've enjoyed reading yours - good fun, poignant in places, some sharp insights. Hope to see you blogging!
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Tue 25th May 2010 07:54
Other commenters have said it all, so you may not get too many more comments, but I'm sure this will resonate with many. Well written.
Tue 25th May 2010 00:07
Thank-you for reading & commenting on 'Pandora's Box', your comments are always much appreciated.
Yes, I think you're maybe right about the choice to indulge curiosity being the exercise of free will, can I claim poetic licence?
I think also the discussion of what is free will etc is quite a complicated one; the (what I believe to be)myth of Pandora ties up very well with the (what I believe to be) myth of the creation story; certainly in Pandora's case - she did as Zeus had manipulated her into doing, is the same true of Eve? - not sure.
I believe both stories, both women, both gods to be entirely fictitious.
I do believe, however, that we are programmed according to a mutable mix of biological imperatives, chemicals, social conditioning, personal history etc ... so if we're programmed, do we still have completely free will?Interesting point you made!
Mon 24th May 2010 23:55
Thanks for reading and commenting on 'Pandora's Box', much appreciated & nice to hear from you.
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Mon 24th May 2010 22:57
RE pandoras box, glad you liked it and though i can't say i know the biblical references i like the fact that you were able to relate the two 'stories'.
RE Riding slipstreams, I have actually blogged it before but during one of my manic depressive downturns ( shall we say ) i removed myself from WOL and inevitably regretted it as i lost record of all the stuff i'd blogged.Hoping to blog 'em again without too much uproar for repetition lol.
RE Onyx eyes, i like that you find it scary and yes i suppose i do enjoy these kind of thoughts, they come easier than hearts and flowers.
Mon 24th May 2010 22:46
Hi Isobel, My RE is tres poor too, though i agree that King probably did get inspiration from the bible.
I had hoped to get away with Pandoras sex change - looks like i managed it ok lol x
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Mon 24th May 2010 22:42
Thank you Stefan for compliments on "I thought of you". I really enjoyed
"Immortal Intensity" too. Hope you enjoy your tour of the east coast! Best wishes, Lynn
Comment is about Patricia and Stefan Wilde (Poet profile)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Mon 24th May 2010 22:36
think language has a lot to answer for; it can become so esoteric it is a hindrance to real communication rather than a help. In my opinion, it is especially useless when writers/speakers don't really think about what the words really mean, and just 'spout', using all kinds of rhetorical skill to influence other people, all the time being on very unsure ground themselves. 'God/gods' can be the epitome of good or evil. Funny that. I took the slant of 'god/good'
i asked what writers work is this referring to?
language...is especially useless when the writers dont really think about what the words really mean...
i assume you are talking about poetry as we're on a poetry site.
straight forward question really cynthia.
Mon 24th May 2010 22:14
Hi, Lynn! You are so dear. Thank you for your comment. Thanks for understanding. I say these words as woman to woman. lol
With warmest wishes, Lara
Mon 24th May 2010 22:05
I think this is really good, Larisa.
Love it! Warm regards, Lynn
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 24th May 2010 22:01
I think this is really, really good. It captures an age-old situation forever 'new'. Your contrasts are well-chosen and expressed with concise words to involve the mind and the 'mind's eye'.
Comment is about grasping at straws (blog)
Mon 24th May 2010 21:59
I like this poem too, Dave. It is so easy to relate to.
Mon 24th May 2010 21:53
Brilliant, and scary. The first two lines of stanza 2 are compelling. Do you enjoy these thoughts?
Comment is about Onyx eyes from watchtowers spy. (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Mon 24th May 2010 21:50
I think this is fantastic. Didn't you have another one rather similar? Something rings a bell, because I was much impressed by similar ideas before. You are developing a real 'voice'. The title is excellent.
Comment is about Riding slipstreams (blog)
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