Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 19th Jul 2010 12:28
Interesting ideas; but I think they are stretching the relationships a bit too far. Individually, I feel they work, as separate poetical observations. Perhaps it is the emphasis on 'invisibility' that bothers me; ice is not invisible, and the iceberg that sank the Titanic certainly wasn't.
Comment is about crystal clear (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Mon 19th Jul 2010 12:21
Hi There Paulyn, welcom to WOL. Have fun! winston
Comment is about Paulyn Lloyd (Poet profile)
Original item by Paulyn Lloyd
Mon 19th Jul 2010 12:20
Ann, I happened to read your comment to Pete, about 'secrets' in poems. I think that is a superb way to express it: every poem IS a secret waiting to be unravelled by the reader. I think it is often just as much a 'secret' to the writer. What a great observation!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 12:02
Flippin 'eck! can,t believe I did,nt put a comment on before now about Dyes dog! lol!-real foxyface he is-and beautiful with it-like his Muvver! latest news item re dogs-Ken Dodds father had two dog that have now passed away...the headline reads-Ken Dodds Dads dog,s dead-(only to make you laugh Lynn)see you later-Stef-xx(Benji-xx)
Comment is about Benji (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Mon 19th Jul 2010 11:55
Good morning Lynn-just popped in to say I,ve popped Pepes poem on-now I,m popping off-not in the true sense of course(drat! I hear you say-lol!)enjoy your day ducky-Stef-xx(Benji-xx)
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 11:21
Thank you for your encouragement Chris, ps you have same name as my youngest, we call her Chris, among many other things. x
Comment is about Simple (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline King
Mon 19th Jul 2010 11:13
A very good morning to you Larisa(and McCoy)hope you are both well.I am so grateful for your comments on 'Oneness' and am very pleased its given you some inspiration-look forward to your poem.thank you-Stefan-xx(McCoy-xx)
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (Poet profile)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Mon 19th Jul 2010 10:03
Thanks 4 commenting me! Who would think that workshops turns to be so useful!? waiting for you to post your Ireland stuff here.X
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:37
thank you for your very kind comments , i also have a column were you can read a bit more of my work, just go to www.pennyblackmusic.co.uk and look for evidently spencertown for poetry , also there are some interviews and reviews I have done.
Regarding Johnny - he is a really nice bloke and the best poet I have ever read
Comment is about Emma Garland (Poet profile)
Original item by Emma Garland
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:35
I agree with Cynthia, it's a fantastic poem and I don't think the lack of punctuation causes anything to be lacking in either meaning or imagery.
I, too, like the references to weight and there's a hardness to the imagery that is really clever - for that reason I don't like 'eider' ... everything else seems to be hard or rough, whether a thing of beauty - like the pearl, or coarse - like the rope. Eider stood out to me, or maybe that's the point?
Love the last 2 lines especially, but less keen on the use of the last line as a title - I think I'd have just called it Stone.
Very good poem though Pete.
Hope you are well - not spoken in ages!
Comment is about The Stone I Own (blog)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:23
Poignant, yet sweet - like it.
Comment is about She (blog)
Original item by Hayden
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:22
Lovely description, intriguing conclusion teasing the reader. Nice one
Comment is about Llanbwychllyn Lake (blog)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:17
Like this very much.
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:15
Agree with Andy that this could be further developed - interesting read.
Comment is about Persephone's last laugh (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Mon 19th Jul 2010 09:10
I spilt a glass of red wine on my ma-in-law's brand new (expensive) cream carpet once - I was fully clothed at the time though, perhaps that's why she didn't find it funny ;)
I did wonder if this wouldn't suit being developed in to a short story?
I like the clever use of clichés throughout; poetically - I think 'a truth that could not be diminished' is something you could really develop. Interesting read.
Comment is about Cliches (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:21
I agree with Cynthia here, Olga - this is a piece that needs two or three reads in a good way..
I particularly like ' am like an elephant artist /
I paint not knowing that I paint' but there is a lot of good ideas flying around in this and also your latest poem.
Get sending em out to magazines!
Really really enjoyed this! x
Comment is about Hum (blog)
Original item by Olga Gerke
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:19
lot going on here, gus.. top banana man.. i think there is defo a lot that could be said here.. would love to see you perform this.
top stuff, man
Comment is about Stolen By The Light (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:17
excellent stuff, jeff.. has a really good visual feel to it.. enjoyed this - hope to see you perform this at Bolton!
Comment is about Opening Night (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:16
probably my favourite piece of yours, so far olga.. lot of good lines here in particular 'Buds of fight, nuggets of worry' AND 'Sparkles in nothingness' being just two and I think you tie this up nicely..
Good one! Really enjoyed this! Keep em coming! x
Comment is about Here are just a few contradictions (blog)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:13
clever stuff, tommy.. very clever.. i think you could probably do more with this piece for some reason as i think it has legs for at least another few stanzas... enjoyed it still!
Yes, but it's all about death. And yes, I love the sea too!
Comment is about surfing (blog)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:11
wasn't that gloomy or doomy for me, ann. i love the sea and i enjoyed this piece, in particular the first stanza..
nice one! x
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:10
wasn't sure what way this was going to go, Cythnia - always a good skill..
enjoyed this a lot.. nice one x
Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:09
lot of power here, Georgina for a short poem.. would like to see more in this style as i think it suits you well..
excellent stuff! x
Comment is about These Days. (blog)
Mon 19th Jul 2010 03:24
I really like some of the words and phrases in this reflective poem, Graham...
'museum of a life'
'callous prod of apathy’s endless benign ache'
The last line ending 'If only………' reinforces regret, yet hints at hope.
Comment is about Melancholium (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Mon 19th Jul 2010 00:24
Thanks for the comments on 'Chaos'. The title is from an interest in Chaos Theory - and some 'poetic licence' taken in applying it (loosely!)to human relationships;and the picture is of a fractal - interpret as you will ;)
Comment is about Dave Bradley (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Mon 19th Jul 2010 00:23
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Mon 19th Jul 2010 00:12
Yep - agree with Ann - last verse not needed; I would also lose one of your shells in the 2nd - or replace rather.And who would miss or mourn? ... well small deeds or actions by every single, solitary soul can have a chaotic impact on many others - I can get quite caught up in chaos theories :)
Comment is about Near Death (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Sun 18th Jul 2010 23:54
It's weird really,isn't it?What we do for the pursuit of pleasure!Liked the bit about the car containing your life,and the panicked feeling of death being almost upon you.The bit about the spirits of sea-faring men dragging you out to join them,lost at sea is another good bit of imagery.Sod's law-seems to prevail whatever we do,wherever we go!Are you sure you'll do this again?
Sun 18th Jul 2010 22:58
Thanks Anne, looking at it now you're probably right and I might well do so - will sleep on it and look again tomorrow.
Sun 18th Jul 2010 22:07
Aw ta Lynn-no pets at the mo-(except one called woofy the wife)I keep her on a very short lead-lol! we lost Pepe four years ago-now I am a registered dog walker at the local refuge-and sometimes 'borrow' Skip the patterdale off wifeys friend-I will put a 'Pepe' poem on tomorrow-and we can sniffle together!until then-au revoir lovely Lady-Stef-xx
Sun 18th Jul 2010 22:01
Hi Stef, thank you for all kind comments. Yes, it was very hard losing Max, sorry to hear about Pepe, how long ago did you have him? Yes, you are right, Max was a border collie, that's my fave pic of him. Regarding Charlie, we only had him 4 days so not sure I deserve a pat on the back for that! Got him last Saturday and swapped him for Benji on Tuesday. Certainly hope someone can sort him out. Do you have any pets now Stef? Thanks again for everything, love, Lynn xxx
Comment is about Patricia and Stefan Wilde (Poet profile)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Sun 18th Jul 2010 21:35
Hi again Larisa-thank you very much for reading and kindly commenting on 'Truer than true' I really appreciate it.I am also enjoying all your lovely poems too-thanks-Stef-xx
Sun 18th Jul 2010 21:32
It's amazing how often some little accident does mess up a special moment and at last someone has written a (very good) poem about it. Well done Cynthia.
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:52
Good for you!!
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:47
Wow! How exciting Dermot! I was well and truly riveted! I'd lose the last verse though. It is such an exciting poem that I think the last verse is an anti-climax. And, yes, I have just done a seafaring poem too! ;-) (As you well know!!)
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:32
I've just done a seafaring one too
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:24
Hi, dear Ann! Thank you very much for your comment on my romance "Don't go away". Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance. With warmest wishes, Larisa
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:20
Dear Ann! I am just touched. Your words really encourage me. I'll try to tape another Russian romance and would like to hear your opinion. And the main point is: it's not the question of my voice but of the words in this or that romance.
Comment is about Please, stay with me! (Russian romance) (blog)
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:14
Hey Spencer, I just stumbled upon your page. Great stuff. You have a brilliant style of capturing the essence of all things British! Upon first read Good God, I Pod reminded me instantly of Chickentown. Then I took a closer look at your picture and, wow, that must have been quite the experience. Anyway, I look forward to reading more of your work. All the best.
Comment is about Spencer Robertshaw - 07703 558825 (Poet profile)
Original item by Spencer Robertshaw - 07703 558825
Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:01
I really like this, Ann. The rhythm of the short sentences really do capture the sadness of the story, but also add a simple conversational tone. Beautifully written.
Comment is about a childhood (blog)
Sun 18th Jul 2010 18:49
When you're in a hole stop digging Stef! The lady has a lovely Marlena quality! Right, now I've told HIM off I'll say I found this very moving Larisa. xx
Sun 18th Jul 2010 18:45
I really enjoyed reading this Graham. "whimsy dreams" is lovely, and sad of course. And the title is great - sounds like some doleful musical instrument.
Sun 18th Jul 2010 18:41
I liked this a lot Cynthia! It surprised me, made me laugh, made me think. Not bad for a semi-sunny summer Sunday! x
Sun 18th Jul 2010 18:38
More gloom and doom from down beach!
Sun 18th Jul 2010 16:13
That is one fabulous woman in the photo. You should run scared. Any man will be annihilated.
Sun 18th Jul 2010 16:06
A little something light and frothy on a semi-sunny summer Sunday afternoon.
Sun 18th Jul 2010 15:53
I like this Alison, and it flows nicely, not only with the rhyme, but also with the repetition of the words 'If you can' and 'And'.
Comment is about If you can ... (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Sun 18th Jul 2010 14:14
Yes, Stefan, you are right, as McCoy is really gorgeous. And when I go out with him everyone admires him not me.
Comment is about McCoy (blog)
Sun 18th Jul 2010 13:13
Hi again Lynn-I know what you went through losing Max-very tough isnt it? I felt same over our Pepe-the Yorkie!hope Max isnt chasing him round doggy heaven-lol! I did a poem for my Yorkhire 'terror' as I him-put it on later-Thanks Lynn-Stef-xx
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