Thu 11th Nov 2010 16:38
I like this very much. I have always been in love with words, with language, and the way this points various 'big ones' out is great.
The structure of it appeals to me too.
Comment is about Permutations (OR Death and Syntaxes, I can't decide) (blog)
Original item by Jo Mayers
Thu 11th Nov 2010 16:04
Hehehe - I did consider that one funnily enough :D
Here y'are...Beanz Meanz Fanniez, or Fannies - Its The Real Thing, or Fannies - You've Got to be In it to Win it
STOP ME NOW! :D
Comment is about Banksy (Poet profile)
Original item by Banksy
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:57
"Fanny... because you're worth it"
Comment is about Laura Taylor (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:54
Yep - I'm just being dim - like I thought .. durrr
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:51
I meant - did you put it at the bottom of Road RATHER THAN Bike, cos it's about periods and you didn't wanna draw attention to it? Duh
Hahaa!!! Aye, that's a better title for it :D OR...'Fannies...Just Do It'
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:47
Ann - well you're a 24 carrot poet - aintchya ?
Comment is about The Arse Whisperer (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:46
well you're a 24 carrot poet - aintchya ?
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:45
Isobel, I meant the style of writing, the choice of expressions. Your thoughts and words are lovely in Beloved. I find them 'romantic' but always enduring. I couldn't begin to write anything like those last three lines because I don't think that way. I would feel like an idiot, using 'uncertain skies', 'immortalise' or 'eternal in my words of love'. At worst, I might make a jest of them, which in respect for other people, I just won't do.
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Thu 11th Nov 2010 15:00
Well what happens next is that I log off the computer to go and pick the kids up from school - not quite what you expected eh? Real life never is. Fantasy is far better;)
Comment is about Alvin Guinessberg (Poet profile)
Original item by Alvin Guinessberg
Thu 11th Nov 2010 14:46
Ahhh Iso... not that wrong... I would love to throw you my balls ....as long as you brought them back......sit!
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:56
Hi - I'd already posted one a while ago called "when vampires menstruate". Sorry if I'm being dim, but I dont understand the bit about "Road" - can you maybe enlighten me ?
The Origin of the World - great picture - but I think a more honest title might have been
"don't you just love fannies?" (or similar)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:41
Haha - I wasn't sure whether that was Comanche, Hopi or Hawaiian at the end there, had to look it up. Never heard of Bob Brozman either! I do like this though - very interesting
You ever heard that song covered by Leon Redbone - My Little Grass Shack? Bizarrely, it has Ringo Starr on it too
Comment is about WATCHING BOB BROZMAN AT THE WESTY IN OCTOBER 2010 (blog)
Original item by Rodney Wood
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:29
:D excellent!! this made me laugh a lot - great variety of communication methods there. I found myself doing a Just a Minute and looking for repetition - sorry! It wasn't there anyway :D
Comment is about I AM HOLDING AN OBJECT OF SIGNIFICANCE (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:24
Wooo! I NEVER make comment on anything to do with war as I find my views are almost always unpalatable and offensive to others. Experience bears this out.
Comment is about Steven Waling (Poet profile)
Original item by Steven Waling
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:19
Short poems in vogue these days. Enjoyed this. I wondered about deadened rather than dulled.
Comment is about Fields of War (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 13:15
The Rose - did you post it on the bottom of Road to throw off the scent? ;p
I love it :) Tender and beautiful - not nasty, derogatory, or repulsed...which is how some people can be about the 'cycle of life'! What do you mean by 'out there'?
I almost posted a pic of that painting by Gustave Courbet, the Origin of the World one. I love that painting. Have to write a poem about fannies I suppose, for an excuse to do it ;D
Someone said to me that there were no poems about periods on here, so I thought I'd do one, instead of doing work, like. Oops. :D
Thu 11th Nov 2010 12:48
I don't see it as romanticism Cynthia - though perhaps you didn't really mean that word. I see it as sharing humanity. I think I am a deeply empathetic person - I can sense and feel pain - that makes it easier to write about. As I said to Banksy, we are all wired differently. What moves one person will make another squirm... So long as you can feel, I guess expressing that feeling isn't as important. x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 11th Nov 2010 12:02
Can't ave been me then, my hair resembles pure spun white gold at the front then just gold. It's very nice actually! ;-) No grey tho. xx
Thu 11th Nov 2010 11:51
Sybil who ? what ? all sounds a bit arty-farty for this poem :)
Steve - yes, there's plenty who'll rubbish you for free, but this was a (published) head of CW. I reckon once you understand the rules & why they're there, it's best just to ignore them. "carcinogens and dead pelicans" - you're not Isobel's happy brother, are ya ?
Ann - no, I think it was some old grey-haired bint :)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 11:44
Was he a lard-arsed whisperer Banksy! Hehe ;-)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 11:30
Love me tendril, love me sweet
Elvis, wasn't it?
I felt vulnerable reading it, oddly, or not. The line, face-to-face, brilliant ending.
Comment is about whale music (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 11:22
brilliant Rodney. loved it.
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:54
I don't know if I could ever follow your poetical lead as shown in Beloved. I am so pragmatic I find that type of expression eludes me. Romanticism was never my strong point; I enjoy reading about other poets' experiences, but I've never been there. If I copied emotions they would sound false as hell. BTW, some time back I changed The Last Kiss to Beloved, but it is still 'in your face' poetry.
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:30
Just read all your recent stuff Rodney. I always get to its end. Often out of intrigue but usually to enjoy your choice of words and use of language.
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:27
The title of this alone has me sniggering :D
Liking the sibilancy used too :D
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:22
I often feel that with some writing you can spot the genuine sentiment and experience, not with the choice of words but by the way internal rhymes (often subconsciously written) find their way into a piece.
This is a good example of raw emotive writing but equally disturbing on a personal level if you're currently thinking this way. Keep writing what you're feeling Mike. I enjoyed this.
Comment is about In a World of Confrontation (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:20
banksy - no I don't think there is...he pretty much covered everything, apart from the haiku that I'm just about to post that is ;D
Comment is about on exotic shores (blog)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 10:16
Howdy Cynthia - cheers for your comment on The Road. It started as me musing on what other metaphor for life I could write about, apart from a museum. Then as I thought 'road', a ton of stuff fell through my head :D I like how you've phrased the process though - poetical in itself :)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 08:16
excellent, tomas. love this - my sense of humour! lol
Comment is about A Citizen Peasant Answers a Question of a Man of Graces (blog)
Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Thu 11th Nov 2010 08:15
i enjoyed this, Marianne.. very vivid indeed even though the last line threw a little bit for a reason I don't know.. xx
Comment is about And the trees fought back (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thu 11th Nov 2010 08:03
James May ?? and you're upset?
I could unnerstand if it was me or that Richard Gere feller :)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 07:59
Hi - agreed totally with all of it. the reason I post some that are daft or "really not that great" is that I've had a few published & almost without exception, it's the duff one I've included to "make up the numbers" that gets chosen over the ones that I think of as good & the exact same thing happens on WOL - no accounting for taste. xx
Thu 11th Nov 2010 06:57
I hear what you are saying Banksy. We are all wired differently - what moves one will not necessarily move another and some readers don't even want to be moved in the first place. It all depends on what you look for in poetry.
I have quite a wide taste. Many of yours aren't brilliant but I get something out of them nonetheless which is why I comment.
I'm really not looking for perfection - just something that makes me think, feel or laugh. If it can do that with style, so much the better but it isn't a pre-requisite for me.
Thu 11th Nov 2010 05:59
Whale Music - Yes Banksy - but would you like a tendril instead! And it did look very vulnerable waving about in all that freezing cold water too ;-)
I've just woken up and I dreamt that James May was going to look after me forever and solve all my problems! Feel a bit let down now! Boo Hoo! :( (Nothing to do with ten foot tendrils!)
Thu 11th Nov 2010 05:56
Yes Banksy - but would you like really a tendril instead! And it did look very vulnerable waving about in all that freezing cold water too ;-)
The face to face reference was as you say Isobel, but also from the biological point of view, the whales were mating faceing each other (OK I knowhtheir eyes would have been round the back!)- front to front anyway! whereas I think most animals mate with the male looking at the back of the female's head (they don't call it doggy style for nothing I guess!)
And thanks everbody - how lovely you all are! xxxx
Wed 10th Nov 2010 23:35
Mmmm... 'Poetry is a verdict not an occupation' is very seductive...
I am already making something beautiful, and imagining what happens next ; )
Wed 10th Nov 2010 22:31
I like this one too Ann. It is simple but not and well thought out. I love the parallels you draw between yourself and whales - I guess face to face woud indicate love and commitment that not all animals or humans can embrace.
Do a poem on sea horses next. The human race could do with learning from them. I like this one a lot.
Wed 10th Nov 2010 22:30
This is well expressed. I love 'the shifty air' and 'etching nervous patterns'. You watch the leaves and wonder how they can cling on. Very seasonal.
Comment is about the little leaf (blog)
Wed 10th Nov 2010 22:26
Hello Cynthia, thanks for the response to my little alphabet exercise.I am trying to get writing again and these exercises are fun.
Wed 10th Nov 2010 22:20
Utterly fab! Why , oh, why can't I write about sex without sounding like a callow fool?
You don't have to answer that.
Wed 10th Nov 2010 22:10
ten foot !!
makes me old chipolata seem a little spare :)
Wed 10th Nov 2010 21:05
Really like this poem, Larisa. xxx
Comment is about Your Eyes (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:49
So I was barking up the wrong tree - despite the picture staring me in the face. You should have called it Rover.
Comment is about Jake (This poem was written for a very dear friend on the loss of her true and faithful friend) (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:46
You are right about the picture - it does slant interpretation. I almost didn't post one cos I couldn't imagine what to put there - I didn't want a death mask. Perhaps I should have left it without. Thanks for commenting. Glad you liked it. x
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:41
I would like to have your work available by my bedside. Do you have a volume of your verse? Your work breathes beauty of thought, universal experience and the art/craft of impactive poetry.
Question: Does rain really swell a tide?
Comment is about Tide Turn (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:35
It is very good, Isobel. I would not have restricted it to a 'lover' fallen in war (despite the Poppy Picture which you must have known would slant your meaning almost exclusively.) I found 'hydrate' perfectly fine; it never fizzed on me as being unpoetical; in fact, I thought it was powerfully poetical in the sense of 'restore', a great word for your general theme.
Comment is about Beloved (blog)
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:24
Fantastic! Masterful. A joy to enjoy for all the reasons that I love poetry. Your opening two lines take off like a speed boat setting the course for the whole poem. Superb among so many phrases are 'querulous porcelain' 'the zone of zillions' etc.
Comment is about Antique Zealot (blog)
Wed 10th Nov 2010 19:19
Hi Cynthia As ever thanks for your kind comments on my poem. I loved that old bookshop and was devastated when it bunt down in my absence!
Wed 10th Nov 2010 18:53
It is a very good poem.
Comment is about Invisible (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 10th Nov 2010 18:49
I wonder if you have posted this before. The theme is surely a popular one, even the 'love your car' idea, so perhaps not. You do make a good social point. How can the posting date be Nov 16, 2010?
Comment is about Poppy Picking Day (blog)
Original item by stephen smith
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