Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:56
hi KL, 7 billion thank yous for your comments on my last 3 poems, glad you like and enjoyed reading, will try to avoid chocolate! X
Comment is about Katy Lisa (Poet profile)
Original item by Katy Lisa
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:55
Thanks for the comment on follow the Herd.
I had somehow missed reading/listening to yours and just been catching up on them - totally knocked me out. That last one of yours when part through I realised who the boy was, that was a shock.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (Poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:50
Thank you (Touching the Void. I think, Anthony, that I may have repeated myself because it was the subject chosen for a writing excercise, and I didn't even know I was doing it. Well spotted and commented on. :)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:49
Thank you - I think, Anthony, that I may have repeated myself because it was the subject chosen for a writing excercise, and I didn't even know I was doing it. Well spotted and commented on.
Comment is about touching the void (Blog entry)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:37
Love reading and listening to your works. Always original and well crafted. Agree would make great radio slot.
Comment is about Serendipity and Happenstance (Blog entry)
Original item by John Coopey
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:35
You have a suspiciously cruel wit sir! Another killer last line. Much enjoyed.
Comment is about The (very) end (Blog entry)
Original item by Graham Clifford
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:31
Thanks for comment on dust to dust, I had just done the usual slash and burn job on summat I wrote years ago to try and make it readable
Comment is about (Poet profile)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 19:07
I love this John. We don't often get serious poetry off you so it was a surprise reading this. As Anthony says, you don't get bigger themes than life and death and one's own mortality.
I like that first verse. It reminds me of something Kealan wrote - the fact that the present can't really be called the present because everything is past or future. I've never studied philosophy so that had never ocurred to me before.
I don't get any sense of 'enjoy life while you can from this'. The message I take from it is 'accept your own mortality - you won't always be on this platform'
I think that's why I like it. It's quite a spooky poem.
I think in the third world death seems to be accepted more easily - probably because it is more common to lose people. In our society I think sometimes we struggle with the concept of nature - of natural causes - as though we should be able to stop the inevitable.
Sorry for rabbiting - I'm just splurging my thoughts out here. Your poem is great cos it's stimulated that. x
Comment is about Platform (Blog entry)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:43
Thanks for the comment A. much appreciated.
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:42
I'm not clever or smart enough to make any comments; is this written from your heart or your head, or both? If you're depressed don't do anything silly to try and circumnavigate it. It helps to have a goal in life to aim for, mine's saving up to buy a small condo in Thailand.
Incidentally, your words of praise have helped me to finish 5 poems I'd started but was feeling too apathetic to finish; I've now finished them all since yesterday. Your friend if you need one, Phil.
Comment is about The end of days. (Blog entry)
Original item by Joy Claypool
Heartfelt, and that makes it a good poem
Comment is about Of Earths salt (Blog entry)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:29
I hope all is well with you. Thanks for your comments on "genesis" - greatly appreciated.
I know the layout might upset some, but I'm a great believer in the content dictating the form - and not vice versa. I'm pleased that you think it worked OK.
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:26
And thanks for your comments - always gratefully received. Although "intelligent" was stretching things a little I feel! :)
Comment is about Dave Bradley (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:23
And thanks for stopping by "genesis." The "mewling puking" reference was pure plagiarism:
I felt it fitted the context - and I'm not above a little plagiarism when the need arises! (I think I might have gotten away with it this time as no one commented (except you!))
I love the BIG questions in poetry!
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:08
Your comments and insight on my last were much appreciated.
I think you picked an even tougher one here. The "piles" repetition is very effective. A hard write - and a hard read.
Comment is about Prologue to a final solution (Scenes from a film unfinished) (Blog entry)
Original item by Andy N
Mon 6th Feb 2012 18:03
And thanks for your comments on my last - very much appreciated.
You were saying, a while back, something to the effect that "all writing is autobiography." We didn't entirely concur, but I see where you're coming from. i haven't recognised a generic character in what I write, but the common thread running through a fair chunk of the doodles is that of the abandoned, voiceless and forgotten; the lost causes if you will.
I wonder what that says about me? :) (I dread to think!)
Comment is about Julian Jordon (Poet profile)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:58
ahh Rach..me and my disillusioned stage..cheers m'love for finding it ok xx
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:57
Thanks for your comments on my recent scribbles, they are always much appreciated.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (Poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:56
Thanks Dave..nice comment on my latest :)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:54
Liked this Kealan, it's clever. Reminds me of Anthony Burgess - "A Clockwork Orange" and David Mitchell - "Cloud Atlas" with its inventive use of language. Good to read something different.
Comment is about 1 Dis easy (Blog entry)
Original item by Kealan Coady
nice of you to comment Laura..I can stamp my foot as good as any other.. lol :))
Comment is about Laura (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:50
Hiya Graham..thanks a lot for that lovely reply to 'the other side' good of you..hey you should put your poems on the 'make a new blog entry' press the button when you log on..tis the far right one I think..hoping to see/hear you soon. Stel x
Comment is about Graham Robinson (Poet profile)
Original item by Graham Robinson
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:47
This is d-e-e-p man! Big stuff going on here. I love poetry that goes for the BIG questions (without being preachy) and asks questions of the reader - rather than offering answers. In other word stuff wot makes me fink.
It's all alluded to here - history, religion, mortality - the BIG stuff! It reads like a "lesson" from a superior intelligence - great audio reading too.
The word "squeamishness" has, for me, a weird kind of synaesthesic onomatopoeia (phew! that woz tuff speling!) if you get my drift. And I couldn't read the word "flensed" without recalling Herman Melville's beautiful language. (one of my favourites.)
You packed a lot in here John. Just goes to show - you're not all t**s and b**s!
A richly rewarding read/listen.
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:25
Hope all is well with you "down the road."
Touching The Void is a very emotive phrase - and image. Really good and appropriate title. It was a film too:
I like what you've done with the "story" the second and the last stanzas stand out for me. If I were to offer one teensy-weensy-niggly-nothing, it would be to lessen the repetition of the title phrase - thinking of the "less is more" principle. It's such a powerful image/phrase that the repetition diminishes it for me. To be used sparingly.
That's all, niggling over!
Thanks for dropping in om my scribbles, and for your succinct, yet perceptive comments.
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:18
Ah clever Philipos. I enjoy your ideas very much..
Comment is about BOTTOMS UP. (Blog entry)
Original item by Philipos
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:16
Really enjoyed this one Phillipos, thought the language thoughtful and rich...nice one sir :)
Comment is about NOT GUILTY AS CHARGED. (Blog entry)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:13
I was drawn to this for the strength of the phrase:
"I listen, as they scream
Like burning witches."
A cracking line, and so apposite. I think you could afford to drop quite a few conjunctions/prepositions - if you wanted to concentrate the effect, and/or drop the last two lines for extra impact.
I liked the imagery and subtle sonority, e.g.
"hissing and spraying
Amongst the shadows."
A good read!
Comment is about Night Terror (Blog entry)
Original item by mike watts
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:11
Ta for the positive feed-back Trae..I have been a bit up and down lately and I guess it is gonna show in my writes..best here as Ann says to post one at a time coz we only really see the last post unless peeps click on your links..its a good site Trae..once you have sorted how to navigate the bugger lol x oh and welcome!!
Comment is about Tracey bucknell (Poet profile)
Original item by Tracey bucknell
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:08
I have a changed me poem..and yup does read better and also had to change the below line coz that had cross in it too..so changed it to know and the message works better too!!...sooo big thanks for showing interest and being bovered to add suggestions..much obliged :)))
Comment is about Richie Muster (Poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:00
Good for you MC! This week Writeoutloud, next week The Grand Ole Opry! I'm always pleased to see anyone getting their "stuff" out there.
Comment is about SO BROKEN HEARTED - demo version (Blog entry)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Mon 6th Feb 2012 16:57
This is a super poem, haven't read the other comments yet but thought 'soothing coffee' might sound preferable in stanza 6 of verse 4. It works better with the perception of your mother's persona as otherwise described. x
Comment is about Ten Minutes (Blog entry)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 6th Feb 2012 16:48
Hi Cynthia, 'Not Guilty as Charged'. Much appreciate the comments. A lot of ground covered in a relatively short space here and, the 'i' in my first stanza supposedly represents the detached observer over aeons of time. CHEERS.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 16:46
THIS BRINGS BACK A MEMORY,
Back in the early seventies I used to go (during trade union visits to London) to the Poetry Society place in Earls Cout square. One night A tall apparition dressed in one green woollen-legged tight and one red woollen-legged tight, and wearing a tall, floopy, guy Fawks style hat, `kidnapped me and took me to the Troubador. Does any one know who she was? (I remember there was a sort of stone `niche` from which I was told the poets used to read.
Comment is about Beg, steal or borrow a Troubadour ticket (Blog entry)
J. Otis Powell!
Mon 6th Feb 2012 16:34
Your insightful comments are spot on. The thread is the perpetual shedding of skin that occurs until alas the entire body is left behind. Growing may be healing or it may simply be moving on.
Mon 6th Feb 2012 16:15
Mon 6th Feb 2012 15:54
Now that's what I call great news! Can't think of a better duo - it's gonna be a hoot and I wouldn't miss it for the world!
Comment is about The family way: Darby and Yates at Write Out Loud Wigan (Blog entry)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 15:35
"...on the sideboard"?
That's preferable to being "on the side" and
"bored" any day! :-)
Comment is about John Coopey (Poet profile)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 15:09
Alan, interesting points about universities' attitudes to open-mic poetry. We have found both sets of attitudes, pro- and anti-, although even the pro- tend to be wary of open/live poetry. The problem seems to me to be one of control; or fear of lack of it. If teachers are in charge of telling you what a poem is about (the 'right' answer), that tends to be within their comfort zone (not all teachers, of course). And of course, they have their notes that can tell them exactly what a published poem is 'about'.
Put the means of production - sorry, creation - in the hands of the students and the teachers are on more difficult ground, where they perhaps feel they might need to give their own meagre opinion, and might expose their lack of understanding, or paucity of hinterland.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud interview: Fiona Sampson (Blog entry)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 14:40
As good a `Chopped up prosey` as the best.And that `squeamishness` knocks my `trudging` into the undergrowth.
Lines four and five have an impressive nobleness about them (but the word `allows` makes me wonder...is it about the past instilling a kind of fear -or a kind of fastidiousness - about death)
Either is interesting, but the `allows` (for me) confuses rather than intrigues.
A good poetic (rather than novel-ish) use of free verse.
Thanks for your useful information Dave, I'll put my ignorance down to poetic licence. And thanks to my two other number one fans.
Comment is about When you're not needed. (Blog entry)
Original item by Philip Fletcher
Mon 6th Feb 2012 14:09
You have had or are having a great life Ian (long may it continue)...
What a delightful poem with delightful words combined in delightful rhyming couplets...delightfully written.
But I don't think I will ever eat another Mc Donalds again!-( Flystrike and what? Scrapie?) lol
All the best - Graham
Comment is about KIND HEARTS (Blog entry)
Original item by Ian Gant
Mon 6th Feb 2012 14:02
Thanks Geoffery, for proving to the doubtful among us that those scholars that work at Oxford are indeed snobbish gits.
What's wrong with poetry being compared to texting anyway? Adapt to survive and all that.
Comment is about Oxford professor Hill takes Carol Ann Duffy to task (Blog entry)
Mon 6th Feb 2012 13:56
I Love this Poem so much Cynthia...Yes perfection does not and will never exist in anything we ever say or do but the feelings you felt in that 'Early Morning Light' will always just belong to you!
Hey good name for a title eh?
We have not met Cynthia but I hope u did not mind me commenting on such a lovely piece of heartfelt poetry!
Mon 6th Feb 2012 13:43
I agree with our Bessie (above or below) John...great use of words..great meaning and great rhythm...all we fellow Poets have come to expect from you John as you are a Bard! (but I still like 'Ken Dodd's Dad's Dogs Dead') as well...never forget the power of humour Luke!
All the best mate! - Obi one Robbo ...haha!
Hope to see you and hear again soon (if the wife lets you out)lol...
Mon 6th Feb 2012 13:22
Andy: marvellous! - truly one of your best........Dorinda.