Sun 25th Mar 2012 11:01
MC did you write this, or is it part of the rather brief American history? Tis worthy to be entombed within the archives of any nation. kept as a yardstick of what can be done in verse if thou triest - oh yeah a goodly one, ta muchly, NIck.
Comment is about WATERBOARDING (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Sun 25th Mar 2012 10:58
Could be Fred
perhaps looking for some cheese
to put on his crackers-lol!
Comment is about The iceman cometh-and goeth (blog)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Sun 25th Mar 2012 10:56
You've been outside again, captured the return of migration beautifully, Tis glorious to bear witness to such sweet prose as befit a king. I got to read them and forced to enjoy. with gratitude oh vassal of such lovely verse. I bid you merry thanks my lieges, your obedient reader, Nick.
Comment is about Having arrived (blog)
Sun 25th Mar 2012 10:44
First line struck me before I read the rest. Give us a minute - Quite brillig old lad - it runs from feeling line to the next and on until I'm breathless. Great job, Thanks very much, Nick.
Comment is about Arise Sir Pain (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Sun 25th Mar 2012 10:38
I see that Yvonne (Super-grammar) recons I got some vocab at last - YIppee! Enjoy, Nick.
Comment is about Solar Mum (blog)
Original item by Nick Clifton
Sun 25th Mar 2012 09:24
Could it be the "man" in the moon, taking a stroll?!
Sun 25th Mar 2012 00:06
Philip hi!. bad breath can be remedied by eating parsley after each and every meal- brush your tongue till it makes you wretch- gargle continually while shopping-brush and floss your chops till they bleed-avoid pongy foods- gargle in the cinema- but never, never ever try it while masturbating. Good luck.
Comment is about Whiffy Breath (blog)
Original item by Philip Fletcher
Sat 24th Mar 2012 23:37
I like your Goit. The cullinary permutations are endless.
Me I'm looking for a Tuit - preferably a round one. XX
Comment is about What Is A Goit? WOL Comp / Nonsense Verse (blog)
Original item by John Duffus
Sat 24th Mar 2012 23:26
Hi, Cynthia. I'm glad you liked 'Agropuss'. Thank you for your comments. I like writing rhyming, rhythmical poetry but this style of nonsense poetry has an added bonus as when you can't get a word to fit the metre you can make one up. All good fun. XX
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 24th Mar 2012 22:47
Hi, David, I'm impressed with the number of monologues you know.Have you got the Ottley poets work? I used to learn monologues as a kid but have since been depressingly lazy. I too write them though. What sort of material do you want for your Cleckheaton bash? I've not been there since I ran the Hillard's half marathon in nineteen nought plonk! But I'm not that far away in Doncaster. XX
Comment is about David Lindsay (Poet profile)
Original item by David Lindsay
Sat 24th Mar 2012 22:40
Yes it's long, but it works, as the content of each stanza is quite witty, not boring.
However you need to work on the metre in something this long because it occasionally stutters which makes the whole thing lose it's pace and it's good flow which will save it from boredom.
I say this as an afficionada of the old music hall monologues (Marriot Edgar/ Stanley Holloway et al)so it's only my personal opinion. Cheers. XX
Comment is about Two Suns (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 22:30
By gum lad tha vocabulary's perked up a bit.
What a corker!
Sat 24th Mar 2012 22:27
I really like the poem and its sentiments. The stlye suits it too.
But I really hate the swearing. Here,to me, it denigrates the standing of the speaker and prevents me from really empathising with him/her.
I'm not against swearing per se - see the Wilde's poem 'What a fucking time to run out of chalk)
Comment is about The Customer is Always Wrong (blog)
Original item by Joe Hakim
Sat 24th Mar 2012 22:19
Oh Joy. more garden paths! You wrong-footed me there. I thought you were talking about ironing!
Comment is about DEJECTED (blog)
Original item by John A Silkstone
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 24th Mar 2012 21:03
I think this poem has an under-body of pointed satire. It seems to embody: ANYTHING is what you THINK it is, and you covered a very wide range here. IMO, it's pretty deep stuff with a thin veneer of nonsense.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:58
Thanks for your comments on HOT STUFF...much
appreciated. As for the number of comments -
perhaps it's a case of "quality not quantity" in this particular instance :-)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:56
Well done, Laura. Your poem whips along with great panache, just daring the reader to challenge its new words. (Like it knows a secret dictionary available only to the select few.)
Comment is about Tickling Fish (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:44
Well done, Lynne. Very imaginative vocabulary. I really liked the plot line, very topical in this 'Strictly-crazed' period.
Comment is about The Glopsnork (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:35
Terrific, M.C., right in the real spirit of Jabberwocky and that ilk. I think it's readable, decipherable and quotable - all adding up to very enjoyable, for all ages.
I can't believe there are not more comments.
Comment is about HOT STUFF (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:30
Really good, Yvonne. It rolls along with sharp rhythm and rhyme, full of fast action and snappy dialogue. The diction is terrific, real and imaginary.
Comment is about The Agropuss (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:21
I look forward to reading her work. And Glyn is spot on.
Comment is about Gillian Clarke wins war poetry award (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
John A Silkstone
Sat 24th Mar 2012 20:04
It's true as well. I could never get the hang of knitting.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:45
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:29
Sting in the tail - Arghhh! got me, ta muchly, nick
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:27
jaunty, ta muchly, nick
Comment is about This Is What You Want. (blog)
Original item by Brandon Whittier
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:25
Gentle enjoyment, Ta muchly, Nick.
Comment is about Poem for childern (blog)
Original item by Peter Asher
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:19
nice one Peter.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:18
Be careful, watching this space can make you deafeningly funny - he said hopefully, Cheers my dears, Nick.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:09
And the poem as well!xx
Sat 24th Mar 2012 19:01
And won't they like we do-
Sat 24th Mar 2012 15:40
Cheeky sew and sew! Love the "caught you" humour of the last line.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 15:06
Hello again - good advice whould always be
properly considered and I have given my poem
"TERRORIST" a new name: "THE DEVIL'S DISCIPLE",
which I think suits the theme without involving
"religion" as such.
Comment is about Richie Muster (Poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Sat 24th Mar 2012 14:25
Loved this, its so vivide
Comment is about TOWARD SLEEP (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 09:48
I'm relatively new to posting things online but i'm delighted and gratified by all your responses. Thank you.
Comment is about Two Poems on Dreaming (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 09:18
Do like the last two lumps the most, The whole story is enjoyable to say the least. Thankyou for sharing and brightening my overcast morning. Ta muchly, Nick.
Comment is about The Disappearance of John J. Dyer (blog)
Original item by Nick Coleman
Sat 24th Mar 2012 09:11
Wow! Mucho like-oh Had to read it twice and loved every morsal. If you keep this up you'll get barred (bard) for being too good! Many thanks, a truly great piece. Ta muchly, Nick.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 09:06
Music and moments snatched are to be memories of good times. Ta muchly, Nick.
Comment is about Sunshine Madness (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 08:56
Oh Dear me, the loonies have escaped again. This is a good little exercise for them grey cells. Me only got one and don't want to spoil it, so I'll leave this to the experts. Ta muchly, Nick.
Comment is about I'd call it Tetractys but I can't Spell it (blog)
Sat 24th Mar 2012 08:51
Hi DL, Nutty Nick to the rescue. TA-DA me write a bit too. If this is your early days on the pen, then this is a valiant effort. I'm wondering why the lines are roughly 15 beats and not necessarily in an organisded way. Soft/Strong beasts is the 'iambic' way (dit-dah dit-dah etc) is more common. The various combinations of this theme each have names. (some poets on this site know all of them, so beware!) Starting lines with dah-dit or dah-dit-dit is seen often. The possibilities are near endless - whatever you do, have fun with it. If you do, they waill (Oops Freudian slip)Hope I've been helpful. Ta muchly, Nick.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 08:25
Sorry, it is on the long side. Would welcome any feedback though. Anyone written on the same theme or with the same title? - would love to have a read!
Sat 24th Mar 2012 06:55
Liked this snapshot of something snatched, Joe.
Sat 24th Mar 2012 06:54
A remarkable, heart-warming story, Nick, skilfully told.
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 22:23
Top of the'wowser'list for sure.
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 22:20
Ditto (Nick's comments)xx
Comment is about The Pressure (blog)
Original item by Innocentia Sithole
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 22:14
Good point about the title "TERRORIST". I also
understand the "freedom fighter" pitch but I
believe that can only gain any justification in
places where the democratic election process does not exist and tyranny rules...and then we
know the fanaticism that permeates the mindset
of those who believe they are justified
committing slaughter in the context of THEIR aims. Sadly, every great cause attracts
that sort - as we have seen across the Irish Sea, for example.
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 22:02
The 'minty mile long breaker' is rather a propos, too :)
Comment is about Winston Plowes is our Bard in the Bog (article)
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 21:55
Sucking the life out of them
till you are left with a block of ice
A bit like the effect
that two people we both know experienced-lol!
But are best left nameless
Loved it....the poem we mean(ha)
By the way,speaking of orange
do you remember a 'Mr. Quorange'dilute drink?
How I far from envied the unfortunate person,who in 'them' days had the most embarrassing job of walking around,advertising it in our shopping centre dressed(for the want of a much more terrible word)in a large plastic orange.Not exactly the ideal thing to have to do in summertime-lol!
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 21:48
What delightful imagery...a hymn to contented
slumber that pleases immensely by its use of
In my mind though I read "The very shadows..."
preferring the one inclusion of the word "even"
where it follows as written - "...even they".
But that, I have to admit, is a personal POV.
I love the idea of the "...Guardian of the dark
(drawing) back the clouds..." and the rest. A
fantastic fantasy finale!!
Fri 23rd Mar 2012 21:28
Imaginative and stimulating - like the impulses
that travel through our conscious and sub-conscious minds. I like the composition and the word-craft of the first poem especially...
the alarm clock ending is spot-on.
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