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Gray Nicholls

Sun 8th Dec 2013 10:45

cheers, andy. started as a gag this one really, but as they say i believe you always end up putting part of yourself in any poem you write. in this case, i'm still not saying which bit of course - lol

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Dave Bradley

Sun 8th Dec 2013 00:30

Hi Ann - yes the comment was a response to the whole thing - poem film and soundtrack. It works well - looking forward to more.

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John Coopey

Sat 7th Dec 2013 18:54

But not so oblique that even a cloglump like me can find meaning in it.

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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:41

Thanks M.C.

Expected hate mail

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:39

And a very happy Christmas to you and yours Graham! xx

Inspired by or about? I think we're splitting hairs. But you are right to make it more general. It makes me reflect on the fact that these traits are not always restricted to just one person - we all have it in us to pull that light out and reach for more.

I'm not inspired to write much recently either. Perhaps a good title for a poem might be 'Being Arsed...'

I need to turn my hand to something new I think, but what?

Anyways - all the best for the New Year also, in case neither of us manage to write another poem in this one!

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:18

Thanks for the kind comment on my owl poem. But I hope you were able to access the film and soundtrack too? Just click on the link - cos the poem itself is an oldie :)

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:17

Thanks for the kind comment on my owl poem. But I hope you were able to access the film and soundtrack too? Just click on the link - cos the poem itself is an oldie :)

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:17

Thanks for the kind comment on my owl poem. But I hope you were able to access the film and soundtrack too? Just click on the link - cos the poem itself is an oldie :)

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Ann Foxglove

Sat 7th Dec 2013 17:14

I hope you were able to access the film and soundtrack? Just click on the link - cos the poem itself is an oldie :)

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 7th Dec 2013 16:33

I don't recall any evidence that the insurgent
shot by Marine A had actually surrendered. And,
if not, he was still a threat, notwithstanding
the IEDs, the beheadings and all the rest of the
stuff lying in wait for a soldier doing his duty
in that primitive hell-hole.
The Pontious Pilate proceedings that followed
washed its hands of the remote reality a world
apart in so many ways from the safety of a British courtroom - and begs the question "As this was
committed in a theatre of war in a foreign
land, why was a Military Tribunal not left to
decide if the man's name be made public and
his family exposed to possible danger in a U.K.
that is increasingly fractured in social, religious and patriotic terms? Courts seem all
too ready to prohibit "identification" in many
cases yet the highest appears totally inept in
its responsibility to those who defend the
country that allows its existence.

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Lady Ha Ha

Sat 7th Dec 2013 14:45

My. Nice to see a man worrying about the big issues :)

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 12:35

I don't think I'm qualified to tell anyone whether they are any good at poetry, Paul - nor is anyone else on here - we all just have opinions about what we do and don't like.

These lines jumped out at me from your poetry.

'i enjoy writing in a morning,
cos it makes me feel so swell,'

If that's the case, you shouldn't give up writing ever. What you will find is that the more you read on here, the more you refine your own writing - or take a different view on it. I don't write anything like I wrote at the beginning.

I see you have a good ear and liking for rhyme. I've found that that ties up very well with comedy and my last few pieces have been along those lines. It's just a question of finding something funny to write about :)

Good luck on WOL - I hope you enjoy it. :)


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Graham Sherwood

Sat 7th Dec 2013 10:45

Hello Isobel and a Merry Christmas to you and your family.
Thank you for your lovely words on Lux.
Whilst I can't deny that the death of Mandela was the inspiration for this, it isn't specifically about himself.
I began to think about anyone who had inspired either myself or the world in general and using the metaphor of light etc etc.
I don't like to explain my work too much and often notice that readers/critiquers sometimes take the wrong meaning.
Anyway, thanks for your encouraging comments. I am finding it more and more difficult to be inspired these days. I'm still waiting for the lightening strike!

very best regards,

Graham

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Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:47

hi isobel,my friends have been telling me that i am good at poem's and should do more,so i have joined this group to get opinions from others,maybe you could have a little read at some of my work and let me know if you think its worth me continuing,thanks regards paul..

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:39

I enjoyed this - what an original topic for a poem!

I think it was the title that drew me in. I imagine Crosby beach could tell many tales, if it could but talk - but I like the way you make us wonder.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:35

Lovely tribute Mike.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:32

What a lovely read. You can just picture it.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:31

Lovely poem Mariane.

Trees through the eyes of a child - yes, I think they would symbolise freedom and hope for me too.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:27

Goose cheese? I daren't ask where you get that!

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:25

Yes - I'd agree - words can help you escape from whatever drudgery you find yourself in - Mandela's being the most extreme of situations.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:17

This is only the second one I've read, so you're lucky ;)

I did enjoy it though. Thanks for posting it.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:13

Beautiful Graham - absolutely beautiful.

I love the fact that you don't even have to put a name to this to know what the poem is about.

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Isobel

Sat 7th Dec 2013 09:08

It's hard to know how to comment on such a great iconic figure. It's all been said before and often much better.

I listened on the radio to Jack Straw talk about his meetings with Mandela. Something he focused on was Mandela's great ability to forgive. So many lessons to be learned - and from one man.

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Tim Ellis

Sat 7th Dec 2013 08:45

Thanks Greg, I'm pleased that you like it. It's one of a collection I'm working on about South Africa. Most of the other poems are about birds and animals.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 7th Dec 2013 08:09

I think Mandela was responsible for a sense of warmth, unity and goodwill that was unprecedented in my lifetime, and that has been renewed by his death. Do click on the links at the bottom of the story, put together in haste when the news broke on Thursday night, and read the poems already posted on Write Out Loud in response to his passing.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 7th Dec 2013 03:31

Oblique yet powerful, Graham. Captures well that sense of loss that so many of us are feeling right now.

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Greg Freeman

Sat 7th Dec 2013 03:26

I found this very moving, Tim. You capture well that sense when we were young that the oppression of apartheid would never change.

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Julian (Admin)

Fri 6th Dec 2013 23:42

We have lived through some extraordinary times, and this man was such an exceptional human being. Good call, Greg, to post Invictus. Thank you to you, and to him.

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Ged Thompson

Fri 6th Dec 2013 23:09

You picked out my favourite line there, I dont know where that line came from, it just happened. Thankyou for the kind comments XXX


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Isobel

Fri 6th Dec 2013 22:38

'You cannot hold echoes of love in your hand.'

This is a beautiful poem Ged. I hadn't quite appreciated how lovely it was till I heard it performed. You manage to put so many nuances in there without becoming sentimental - I love poetry that can do that. x

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Starfish

Fri 6th Dec 2013 20:36

I like this. Have you been reading my mind?

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Starfish

Fri 6th Dec 2013 20:31

Beautiful and effective use of words. Delightful to read.

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Starfish

Fri 6th Dec 2013 20:29

John has said it for me also. Horrific situation which is unfortunately a reality for some.

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Rodney Wood

Fri 6th Dec 2013 18:27

Considering the snail taken to another level. Godd stuff David.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 6th Dec 2013 17:32

Thanks Greg, particularly for the reminder about Invictus. The poem gave its name to the marvelous film about the 1995 Rugby World Cup, which gives a picture of Mandela which is rounded and human but still inspirational.

And thanks for the link, Laura. The years rolled back.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 6th Dec 2013 17:22

A gem.

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Dave Bradley

Fri 6th Dec 2013 17:19

John's said it for me. Strewth!

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John Coopey

Fri 6th Dec 2013 16:10

A vivid and terrifying image of what we in our beds have no conception.
And a fitting update on Kipling's take.

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Le3s Smith

Fri 6th Dec 2013 15:21

Andy n. I think that you meant to comment on the previous poem.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 6th Dec 2013 14:36

I go along with your "maxims" - three excellent
examples! I would add - "With stupidity
the gods themselves labour in vain" - - a near
enough quote from top class curmudgeon F.W. Nietzsche.
By the way, that well-read wit Bernard Levin wrote...
"Whom the mad would destroy, they first make Gods".
Here's another from reliable F.W. Nietzsche:
"Love is the state in which man sees things
most decidedly as they are not."
And finally, one from Bertrand Russell:
"The infliction of cruelty with a good conscience is a delight to moralists - that is why they invented hell."

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 6th Dec 2013 13:40

Absolutely right for the time of year. I am
a bit confused by the mix of plurality and tenses - this seems unnecessary.
Lonely cold wind whispers in night
As autumn slowly turned into winter...

Why not -
Lonely cold winds whisper at night
As autumn slowly turns into winter...

The overall effect is evocative and enjoyable. More please.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 6th Dec 2013 13:16

Agree with SM. The two-pronged approach adds to
the poignancy of the situation.
Our memories, certainly those of a certain generation, are inextricably linked with the
railways - and the concept of the tracks of our
memories (down memory lines, so to speak) and the
loss of both is most imaginative.

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andy n

Fri 6th Dec 2013 10:50

really like the third stanza here in particular. one of those kind mad pieces i think which makes you wonder whether you are telling the truth or not. top stuff, man.

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andy n

Fri 6th Dec 2013 10:48

can really see cyprus here, leslie. makes me remember of a holiday from years ago.

top stuff man

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Laura Taylor

Fri 6th Dec 2013 10:23

Thanks for this Greg. RIP Nelson Mandela.

And 'should there be no protest songs..?'

Special AKA

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lCZKZILvE70

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Laura Taylor

Fri 6th Dec 2013 10:16

Thanks Dave and Andy :)

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Le3s Smith

Fri 6th Dec 2013 00:42

How beautiful.

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Martin Bailey

Thu 5th Dec 2013 17:44

Thanks andy, once I worked out the form I wrote in no time and then redrafted to tighten it.

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Julian (Admin)

Thu 5th Dec 2013 17:23

Superbly done Laura. A fitting and very well written tribute. What a terrible tragedy. Talk about out of the blue. Terrible.

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Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thu 5th Dec 2013 16:40

thanks Prashant.xx

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