Mon 4th Jun 2012 17:40
I really love this one, makes me want to know what happens next....
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Mon 4th Jun 2012 17:36
really enjoyed this one, along with your other work...
Comment is about extract of thought (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Mon 4th Jun 2012 17:29
hi, thank you for the comment on my poem, "he did" has now disappeared!
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (Poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Mon 4th Jun 2012 17:26
I love the way the Queen manages to unite so many in this old country of ours...not forgetting vast numbers abroad. I even found myself watching a late night CBS (USA) news report of HM's visit to Epsom for The Derby and they did her proud. We can forget how much she means to the rest of the world and no matter whether you are a monarchist or a republican, her value to the UK and its people cannot be over-estimated.
Harry's latest post is a fitting tribute.
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Original item by M.C. Newberry
Mon 4th Jun 2012 16:28
Short and sweet - as the saying goes.
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Mon 4th Jun 2012 15:13
I like this.
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Original item by Kealan Coady
Mon 4th Jun 2012 15:08
Interesting take on trypanophobia.
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Original item by mike watts
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 23:56
Yes a common occurence when the prize has been won and effort to impress is no longer needed.
I think this would be even more effective without the last line - 'He did'
We know the writer has a lover and the delicious suspense would be more effective.
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Original item by Katypoetess
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 23:24
Poignant. You capture the sentiments well in just a few lines.
PS a quick word about errant apostrophes - photos does not need one and - wasn't - has the apostrophe between the n and t ( a contraction of not ). XX
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 23:10
A fine moving example of restraint in grief coping with death. Brevity is its strength.
Comment is about No Coin For The Ferryman (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 23:08
Mmmm...Is there room for a stowaway???
Comment is about Lullaby of the River (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 23:04
A bleak reminder of our helplessness - against the elements, against death. A really moving piece that shows a great depth of emotion in an understated manner.
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 21:46
Ah yes - maybe sometimes we have to look a little harder? Good one, Stef. xx
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 21:42
I love the philosophy of this with the dawn's first birdsong and the smiling birth of a flower.xx
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Sun 3rd Jun 2012 19:34
Some hopes, John! Mind you, I'm a bit of a fair weather boater - rather wet today, what?
Thank you Stef and Tricia, very kind. xx
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 19:31
Very moving and well written, Ian.
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 15:54
Are you on liz's barge?
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 15:45
Reminded me of 2 of betjeman's - pershore station and remorse. Top quality again, ian.
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 14:21
Nice, spare, use of unfamiliar place-names and fauna and the windier side of Barbados to pay tribute to a person,
It`s a good contrast with your -equally spare -
and earlier `Stunned` which is impressively intimate (and which I somehow missed)
Keep `em comin`
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Original item by Alanna Rice
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 13:31
title and first few lines sucked me right in.
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Sun 3rd Jun 2012 11:21
Buy a map. You may have to travel!
Good luck finding a new one, though with only one filling perhaps you won't need to. You obviously have strong teeth. Or you are very young!!
Thank you for the welcome.
Comment is about Karen Robinson (Poet profile)
Original item by Karen Robinson
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 10:01
Thanks Isobel.No, "you" is correct. She is extraordinary, I'm just a stupid twat who got lucky.
Thanks Steve. Yeah, but is there a better word than forgery that rhymes with extraordinary?
I saw the 2nd half of the JCC programme. I think I'll try and watch the whole thing on iplayer. I enjoy his stuff better when he slows down a bit - the way he performs Beasley Street these days is a travesty.
Thanks Harry. Bairns as peacemakers - yes, it does sound unlikely. I mean in the sense that couples are less likely to part if there are children to consider."Forgery" is ambivalent, I suppose, but there's a nod at "reproduced" in the first line.
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Sun 3rd Jun 2012 09:33
Within some italian families it was still the tradition to place a coin in the mouth of a deceased relative to pay the ferryman who took their soul from this world to that other dark place.Today here in Yorkshire it rains heavily and it took me back to that other June day when much loved my Mother died.ICG
Sun 3rd Jun 2012 08:13
I missed this first time round, Alanna. It is wonderfully evocative and atmospheric. I agree, change it not. As interesting as Alan's ideas are, that would be a different poem.
Long time no see.
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 19:48
Hello Win - it seems that sporting poetry is something of a Cinderella interest but some of those written over the years are worth finding. I have a book devoted to the genre - once owned by an elder sister who made a gift of it to me some years ago. Some of the older fox hunting poems would make today's PC advocates writhe in exquisite agony now that the fox is a Disney demi-god in modern sensibilities. The realities of the ravages of a hen-house are easily ignored by the city dweller.
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Original item by Winston Plowes
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 17:50
Thank you all for your comments, gave me lots to think and reflect on..I'm feeling that I may leave it in its current state - the poem is pretty much true to the flow of thoughts I had on the bus, and there is something interesting about that.
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 14:59
My fault (with this one) for being slow to `get` it - the clues are all there and they all appertain to the subject - it`s got a nice `whole` feel to it.
I`m fascinated by line three ( bairns as peacemakers?) Your `extraordinary` - for me -hints at thanks and admiration and the `forgery` (given the `we foster`) as a joke.
It`s all a case of aptly off-kilter words saying things in a thought provoking way, as Aristotle said (all right he was Greek)
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 13:27
Superb interview. Excellent set of questions. I am somewhat reeling from being told by my erstwhile daughter in law, who is a second year English undergraduate and wannabe teacher, that she 'hates' poetry and has, so far managed to avoid it in her undergraduate studies.
Like, blimey, how does that happen?
Anyway, thanks for a fab read.
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Original item by Greg Freeman
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 11:15
What a hard act to follow...
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Original item by John Coopey
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:42
I engaged fully with the first 2 stanzas after which I got a little lost but in my own defence, I'm not very bright. Regardless of one's philosophical or religious proclivities I found it life enhancing.
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:38
That's one way of putting it.
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I assume this is dedicated to Mrs Miller. Not immediately obvious but I enjoyed the language. I understand the use of 'forgery' but I thought there might be a better word out there somewhere. Did you see the John Cooper-Clarke doco on BBC4?
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:26
Happy blue cruising!.xx
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:23
I,m ok now the medication
has kicked in-haha.
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Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:22
At least the bell would save us
from having the awful discovery
of finding dead birds
in the garden eh Lynn.
Thank you for commenting-
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Sat 2nd Jun 2012 10:19
Thanks Lynn,yes,a couplet you could say.Very kind of you to comment.
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Sat 2nd Jun 2012 09:37
Self-revelatory villain 'ell? It will never stand up in court. It's not only hard rain that's gonna fall. I wrote about this subject for one of the Sunday papers: Exhibitionism, the pull-out supplement.
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 09:16
I'd be tempted to change the 'you' to 'us' in the penultimate line.
Children are a kind of cement. I imagine it must be hard when they've all flown to still find that momentum - most of us don't get that far :) I like the subtle undertones in this.
Sat 2nd Jun 2012 08:47
:O I'm hoping this isn't autobiographical - my thoughts are with you...
Fri 1st Jun 2012 23:22
Apologies for the delay Cynthia I've been having some bad headaches from some meds. Don't worry about the crit, you're right, it was a rush of blood and passion upon reading the one you did for Fatima. I would like to send you a copy of The Dreaded Boy anyway so please email me an address to send it to you at email@example.com
Enjoy the w/e
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 1st Jun 2012 23:03
Your parodies are obviously not a 'flash'in the pan. You've done it again!! great fun teehee.XX
Fri 1st Jun 2012 21:48
Oo er - I've come over all patriotic - I've a mind to go and buy myself a union Jack mini dress, a la Gerry Halliwell... or maybe I've had to much to drink :) A good antidote to all the knockers, MC. All the kids, in all the schools have a had a really lovely day today. There isn't much that unites us nowadays - it's nice to celebrate something that does!
Fri 1st Jun 2012 20:45
Hi MC, thx for the comments. I'm afraid I am too young to remember Frank "Typhoon" Tyson but the Hampshire burr of John Arlott is timeles and thankfully lives on in the TMS link I posted in the blog comments. Have a listen and you will hear the lines of the found poem spoken by the master. Oh and do see if you can post up your Compton/Richie Benaud piece. Win
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Fri 1st Jun 2012 15:27
And all who sail in her.
Fri 1st Jun 2012 15:07
Hi Larisa, I like this poem, and so glad that you are recovering, and hope you continue to do so. xx
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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Fri 1st Jun 2012 15:02
Good tribute, MC, well done.
Fri 1st Jun 2012 14:51
Good one, Stef, interesting, and made me smile. :o) xxx
Fri 1st Jun 2012 14:41
I love this, Stef, it is a great description of a slinky feline as Yvonne says. I don't think she would like me - I'd put a bell round her neck! (The cat's of course!) xxx
Fri 1st Jun 2012 14:29
Enjoyed this, Patricia - is it a couplet to Exchanges of Brilliance? I think they are both wonderful. xx
Fri 1st Jun 2012 11:58
Rhythm is such a valuable constituent of good poetry, even blank or free verse, in my view. I sometimes find myself listening to open-mic poets reading their own work who don't bring out the rhythm that I can hear in their work. It's as if they don't hear it. Rhythm helps the listener to hear and anticipate. Vital in oral poetry, as most folks' aural memory is not strong, so listeners are always a few syllables behind the reader/performer. I have no idea why, but I am convinced that rhythm helps. I do think that rap and similar stuff works with youngsters for that reason.
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