Mon 18th Feb 2013 15:36
Nah, you've misunderstood me. But then so does everyone else. I'd have a liked a kite in the last verse. Any colour.
Comment is about One Night I Stole a Purple Balloon (blog)
Original item by Irina
Mon 18th Feb 2013 15:20
Anabolic?! You'll be wanting steroid sound next!!! My digital TV has an inbuilt tuner and doesn't need the diggy box - which, by the way, should still enable an old TV to receive programmes. I've kept both items just in case my current TV ever breaks down and I need a replacement. Our first TV, when living on a hill in rural Wiltshire, was a Murphy 17" that worked with a single VHF radio aerial...we were THAT high at 500ft above sea level!!! I still remember the joys of Popeye and Olive Oyl in glorious black and white! Happy innocent days. Thanks for taking me back.
Comment is about Progress and The Diggy Box (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Mon 18th Feb 2013 15:16
Nice work, danyul. This should get the birds. Mind you, with your face-for-radio you're gonna need a good poem! Good luck on wed - sorry i'm double booked and can't make it.
Comment is about A story to the plants, that made them blush. Teaser (blog)
Original item by Dan Whitaker
Mon 18th Feb 2013 15:08
Thanks so much for your comments! Ray - I see what you mean, the beginning gives a promise of it being more sexually explicit, and I can understand why it feels flat. However, taking it to that direction would feel a bit like sucking up to a cheap audience. If an audience has a subtle appreciation for poetry, they'll be happy with the concluding end rhyme of intenser/Marks and Spencer (I hope). Cynthia - I'm so glad this made you laugh :)
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 18th Feb 2013 13:37
Carla, this is interesting. To be honest, as I was reading, I found myself skipping words, rearranging them even, digging for the 'meat' of your ideas, because this subject and your take on it really is interesting. It's a thought - perhaps you could edit it down to a shorter, stronger piece. Only my opinion, and always with respect. English may be your 4th 0r 5th language! Keep writing. It's original ideas that count the most.
'purple' seems to be back in vogue again; it makes regular cycles, although no one ever clearly defines its attraction.
Comment is about The purple play (blog)
Original item by Carla Tombacco
Mon 18th Feb 2013 13:18
I don't think it falls flat - more like 'ominous'. I like how it ambles along, conversationally, but punching through really strong ideas. 'Thinking I should start decorating in yellow' made me laugh outright.
Mon 18th Feb 2013 13:09
Terrific mother-daughter work - really like 'unbalanced by middle aged love'.
Comment is about Siren (blog)
Original item by fiona sinclair
Mon 18th Feb 2013 12:01
Many had a portable aerial on top of the TV, shaped like Tony Harrison's poem's title. More fun than watching the valves glow was the art of moving the aerial around the room trying to get the picture to stop scrolling, or to remove the blizzard from the screen. The unfortunate aerial bearers usually found just the right spot to be in the air behind the TV, so could not watch the set themselves, but had to stand there to that others could see the end of What's My Line, or Grandstand, whatever. For the greater good...
We had ours on rental from the Coop. I have a feeling the brand was Defiant, or similar. It was forever being repossessed because my mam had got behind with the payments. I remember once she made me go and keep the repossession man talking at the door so she and my Nan could watch the end of Coronation St. before he took it. Happy days, eh?
Mon 18th Feb 2013 11:14
looks very similar to the one that graced our front room. It lasted forever, or so it seemed. All of my friends had telly's on very thin legs that were so modern. Eventually the tube went, and could no longer be replaced, oh, and you could get the radio on it as well!
Loved reading about it.
Mon 18th Feb 2013 11:04
Nice poen. Nice, er, metaphor. I'd have liked it to end on more of a bang. Falls a bit flat.
Mon 18th Feb 2013 10:51
Enjoyed very much, bit Beasley Street-ish. You could lose most of the commas, I think.
I liked these lines best
There’s a carved name
on the doorframe.
The video link ain't working for me.
Comment is about This Family Life (blog)
Original item by Ralph Dartford
Mon 18th Feb 2013 09:51
Good luck with your project. Great video of The ugly duckling! Take care, Tony.
Comment is about SpitTeens Spoken Word project (blog)
Original item by Matthew Derbyshire
Sun 17th Feb 2013 23:06
A strong piece which highlights the loneliness of the addict and the waste of a life. I love the line :-
'And her iconic war paint scrawled ironic defeat in tracks
Down her pale skin.'
and the sadness of the phrase:-
'at the very end in her lonely home'
Comment is about Amy (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Sun 17th Feb 2013 22:58
Clever. makes you think. technology still has limitations and what things are of real value anyway?
Comment is about The 3D Printer (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sun 17th Feb 2013 22:56
Ah that tune brings back memories.Neatidea to link both sons of the city.
Comment is about Jesse Boot (blog)
Original item by Thomas Thurman
Sun 17th Feb 2013 22:44
Hi John. I'll let our technical people know the difficulties you are having posting on Yvonne's wall. I'm able to post on it but it would be interesting to see if MC manages to.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Sun 17th Feb 2013 22:43
They're trying to come between us!
I don't seem able to access your Profile page to post my thanks for your nice comments.
Also, there are a couple of posts in the blogs which seem to have your style written all over them but it doesnt credit a poet to them. Likewise I can't comment on them.
Will I forever be rejected? Will it forever be the winceyette nightshirt and "All is safely gathered in"?
Comment is about The Plays of William Shakespeare - (or Where I Get All My Talentfulness From) (blog)
Sun 17th Feb 2013 22:35
Many thanks for your thoughts on "Our Gert" and "The plays of William Shakespeare...". The former is as close as I've got to writing a love song! The latter was inspired by an old joke about a bloke who wrote some of the world's best melodies but they never got published, like, "Life is just a bowl of f****g cherries".
On another front I don't seem able to write my thanks on Yvonne Brunton's Profile page. It tells me I don't have the necessary permissions.
As a favour do you think that you might post on her page to say that I am unable to do so? I feel terribly impolite not being able to respond to the kind comments she makes.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sun 17th Feb 2013 19:40
Yes, Thx Dave for running this. Win
Comment is about Cat Competition Result (blog)
Sun 17th Feb 2013 18:40
Well it's such frolics that makes life more interesting....
Comment is about Philip Fletcher (poet profile)
Original item by Philip Fletcher
Sun 17th Feb 2013 17:11
Comment is about An effin poem (blog)
Sun 17th Feb 2013 17:06
An observation directly spoken at a recent Poetry Gig, including the use of 'Gay Dinosaur'.
Comment is about The Gay Dinosaur (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 17th Feb 2013 16:18
Comment is about I Remember (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Sun 17th Feb 2013 13:49
You can find more of my poetry including some videos by Searching on SUBACCHI+POET
Comment is about VALENTINES (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Sun 17th Feb 2013 11:38
Thank you so much for your kind words, Ann.
It's not my usual style but writing in the third person as a series of snapshots over the week of my son’s birth enabled me to get some distance from the trauma. By concentrating on the visual, not the emotions – my usual starting point for writing – I’ve also been much more able to accept how dark it all was and find a real compassion for myself back then. X
Comment is about The End but not the Means (blog)
Original item by Kaye Heyes
Sun 17th Feb 2013 11:34
Writing prompts are great, yes! At Todmorden's last writing group we were given the title 'Christabelle and the Crystallised Celery' and I ended up writing a children's story - a completely new departure for me! And I had the best fun letting my imagination run away with me. May even look to finish it one day...
thanks for the support X
Comment is about Kaye Heyes (poet profile)
Sun 17th Feb 2013 09:38
Looking forward to it Joy, sounds interesting to say the least! - As long as we don't get barred from the pub its fine! a Jeffarama! X
Comment is about Joy France at Write Out Loud Bolton on Sunday (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Sun 17th Feb 2013 01:30
thanks barbi x i have had the word dubh spelt wrong which is an error as its important the word dubh is interpreted as the colour black (irish gaelic) it also refers to the blackness of the eye...i had it spelt to mean something else. its tricky getting gaelic right, but there you go x
Comment is about cacti plant (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Sun 17th Feb 2013 01:18
that beast with a stretch
the length of a universe.
i like the way the imagery invokes ideas of time/space/distance and travel. i was thinking of colossal whales the colour of the night sky swimming through time, invisible through the camoflage of their sheer size. i like the vast spaces set next to tiny ideas like the 'giggle' and all the heart attacks there ever was. messiah sized.
good write although i think the latter half loses the dense imagery and is more explanatory.
Comment is about For A Short Time. (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Sat 16th Feb 2013 17:40
Warning - I'm planning a rather strange set. Weird shennanagins (whatever they are!), audience participation (not compulsory!), a penguin and.... well you'll have to turn up to find out. As many as possible please so that I'll feel less silly if lots of others are feeling silly too!!!!
Sat 16th Feb 2013 16:04
I do like this- a modern take on age old pleas.
''It's marvellous this printing,
The future is here.
But can it print justice
or a good pint of beer?''
Sat 16th Feb 2013 11:00
Congratulations to Nick. An entertaining word-play. XX
Sat 16th Feb 2013 10:56
Thy talent'f plain for all to fee.
Thif ditty it induc-ed me
To engage in hilarity
And, yea, even to flap my knee!
Glad you re-posted this. XX
Sat 16th Feb 2013 10:44
Clearly more important than the one holding the handles!
Comment is about Depends (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Sat 16th Feb 2013 01:08
Sorry...Bob or Thomas?
Comment is about THE PERFECT EXIT LINE (blog)
Sat 16th Feb 2013 00:30
I agree with Ann. Couldn't have put it better
Comment is about Walkabout (blog)
Original item by Deborah Jordan
Fri 15th Feb 2013 23:38
suckled and viperish...under used lovely words.. i like this poem a lot and Neil Gaiman comes to mind somehow. peeling off the wall and never in a box your writing. i like that.
Comment is about Loudly into the cold (blog)
Original item by Steven Dark
Fri 15th Feb 2013 23:34
nice, a dreamquake of a poem shaking the sleeper from her reverie... i like your style time traveller.
Comment is about yellow about the land (blog)
Fri 15th Feb 2013 23:32
i like this one i imagine a dancer naked in the musty mud and then waiting for it to dry while they (he or she) watch the sky doing whatever it does..before setting off on the path again..
Comment is about All grotesque about the earth (blog)
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:56
thank you Ann :) i hope you and my ancestral homeland are well this winter :)
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:55
they aren't dissimilar John i have quite nice little feet it has been said..
It's my railway line though.
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:34
Are they your feet?
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:30
The beauty of the poem is not in what it says but what it leaves unsaid.
How little is the little nut? - an amoeba is a little thing, but Luxembourg is a little country.
Is the nut a Whitworth, AF, metric? The poet rightly leaves us to make up our own minds.
Likewise, is the nut in or ex situ? - the essence of the nature of the wheelbarrow; for if it is ex situ the wheel will not function and the barrow (and its load) will have to be carried. Clearly it will no longer be a WHEELbarrow - a metaphor for life itself.
Next it begs the question 'What colour is the nut?'
And finally, WHERE'S THE FUCKING CHICKENS!!
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:07
I wonder if she's still got my cherry?
Comment is about My Cousin Rosebud (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Fri 15th Feb 2013 22:05
A little more bathos in yours, MC, than in Dylan's 'Joey'.
Fri 15th Feb 2013 21:00
Thanks all for your kind words.
Comment is about Sorrow and joy: a pilgrimage to the grave of Sylvia Plath (article)
Fri 15th Feb 2013 20:11
Intelligent and original.
Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)
Fri 15th Feb 2013 18:08
According to the Bloodaxe website, Mary Whitehouse described it as a work of "singular nastiness", which, despite her reputation being revised a tad in recent years, says much more about her than Tony Harrison, I'm afraid. Times have changed. I doubt there'll be the same fuss about the four-letter words this time around, given the reporting of the industrial language and worse used by the nation's top footballers. I suspect the fuss then was partly and party political. It was written around the time of the miners' strike. Hopefully it can now be considered purely for its artistic merit. http://www.bloodaxebooks.com/titlepage.asp?isbn=0906427975
Comment is about Tony Harrison’s 'torrent of filth' poem on Radio 4 (article)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Fri 15th Feb 2013 17:19
A poignant piece that sums up the pathos and the waste of the predicament. The final three lines are perfect
Fri 15th Feb 2013 16:43
No - I hadn't known of it before. So - ignorance is bliss! (without the need to complete the quote!).
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