Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:12
Lovely little poem, and not at all like a greeting card. Lol, what is he like!! xx
Comment is about Peace by peace (blog)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:07
Yeah, but apart from all that, it's a really nice place, right?
Hee hee, good observations, Stef. I'm somewhat behind with comments, been busy gardening and all sorts, hope you are both well, as we are. xx
Comment is about By horizons divided (blog)
Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:01
yes Roy, they are deep feelings .... the last line makes a lot of sence, 'The power's beyond bears no bond on my tears 'little pond' .... meaning my tears are powerful, bigger than the 'little pond' it fills :-)
Comment is about .... 'FEELING POWERLESS' ..... (blog)
Original item by Lesley Whittaker
Wed 11th Apr 2012 21:50
Hi Alison. Nice poem. "the precise deft unfolding of every pale green leaf." was a stand out line for me but enjoyed the positivity of the whole, You have not converted me as I believe anyway. lol.
Hey, Chris Hoy did an incredible swoop in the Keirin don't you think and as for the rising star that is Ms Trott, she gave everything and was rewarded.
Comment is about Flirtation (blog)
Original item by Alison Smiles
Wed 11th Apr 2012 20:35
Deep feelings are once more pouring out producing a moving little piece.
Not sure I understand the last line though, is there a typing error?
Wed 11th Apr 2012 18:14
Thanks for the warm welcomes!
Comment is about Nick Jarvis (Poet profile)
Original item by Nick Jarvis
Wed 11th Apr 2012 15:58
Hello Tom - your kind comments about "Brothers" are very welcome. The poem follows the old wisdom "write about what you know" so I will not claim any visitation from some other-worldly spark of imagination.
Comment is about Tom Harding (Poet profile)
Original item by Tom Harding
Wed 11th Apr 2012 13:55
The theme for this meeting is - - - Space
When I get there I can never find one for my car !!!
Comment is about Write Out Loud Stockport: it's tonight (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 11th Apr 2012 13:36
I loved this, the pure simplicity, the feeling of stumbling upon something abhorrent that just somehow doesn't fit the stereotypical spring picture but is a lot more real than the singing birds, flitting clouds etc.
Comment is about CARRION SPRING (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:45
Thanks for your note on Propaganda Panda Nick, glad you enjoyed
Comment is about Nick Clifton (Poet profile)
Original item by Nick Clifton
Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:44
Ta for y'note on Propaganda Panda mate - see you soon I hope x
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Ta for y'note on Writing in Fire chuck, glad you enjoyed it. Will be working on performing it soon I hope but it needs a LOT of breath!
Comment is about Richie Muster (Poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:42
Love this - am in the room with you and him. This is massively evocative. I spent my youth with people like him. But I moved on and they didn't. Full of pathos, tolerance, understanding, and the sadness you feel when YOU know what the score is, and they don't.
Comment is about 13th Floor (blog)
Original item by steve pottinger
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:57
I enjoyed the winning poem and didn't see it as inaccessible - just very subtle.
They were all great poems - as you'd expect. Like Cynthia says, there's no judging 1st 2nd 3rd really - it's all subjective and often down to luck.
Prose poetry seems very much flavour of the day though. I doubt you'd stand any chance of winning if you submitted a rhyming one. The Death of Rhyme - good title for a discussion thread?
Comment is about Allison McVety wins National Poetry Competition (article)
Thank you, Nick. Not normally keen on rhymes that look too enforced, meself. My gratitude for Hannah too X
Yvonne, you are so right about the flipping government!! Thank you for your lovely comment.XX
Haha Stef, no thesaurus this time, thank you for your continuing support XX
Comment is about Double Dealings (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:43
Ah! I thought of TS Elliott too. I really like this Tom. Shades of regret, and so subtle - your forte!
Comment is about We Were Not Serious People (blog)
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:39
Hi Imprisonedbeauty - welcome to WOL. Hope you do have a go at performing some of your work in public - once you try it, it can become a great joy! Hope to see some more of your work on here soon too :)
Comment is about Irina (Poet profile)
Original item by Irina
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:35
Hi Christine - welcome to WOL. Hope you will enjoy being a part of our poetry community. It would be great to see some of your work on your profile page. Thanks :)
Comment is about Christine Michael (Poet profile)
Original item by Christine Michael
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:13
hello Nick .. thank-you. I was dwelling on all the nasty garbage in the news and papers, wishing I was back at sea and miles from here.
Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:12
hello Andy .. thank-you. I was dwelling on all the nasty garbage in the news and papers, wishing I was back at sea and miles from here.
Wed 11th Apr 2012 07:13
Thank you Tom, that's a lovely comment, though believe me, the effort is well hidden - I hope.
Comment is about Solitude Gets Lonely (blog)
Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:39
An enjoyable warning. It brings to mind:-
The early bird gets the worm.
The early worm who got up first,
unfortunately,comes off worst!
Comment is about Worms and Cheese (blog)
Original item by Christopher Dawson
Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:30
I Like this, Tom. It reminds me of Paris and a desultory lip service paid to life as it passed by - as you say 'the seriousness of our lives hadn't begun'.
Shades of TS Elliott??
Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:04
women like stars...i am not outshone by any son of man and usually the company of women makes me dull, but right enough the ones i like make a fiery constellation...15th december me too, coincidention! xxx
Comment is about Amy Houston (Poet profile)
Original item by Amy Houston
Tue 10th Apr 2012 23:59
im glad you loved it :) loving the devil...its a big theological ask, my head hurts with the thought of questions that big. I love that you know what you think about it...faith is like stone eh?
Comment is about Agape ( A-gap-ay) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Tue 10th Apr 2012 22:02
Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:59
this is lovely and sad. I think the last line captures it wonderfully.
Comment is about BROTHERS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:57
Lovely images, evocative stuff.
Comment is about The Whisper of Miss El (blog)
Original item by Alanna Rice
Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:56
very beautiful, some lovely images here.
Comment is about Spring in the High Peak (blog)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:47
Thank you for the kind comment as always Ann.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:02
Hey! S'posed to be a good night this!
Review is about 'Eclectic Utterances' on 11 Apr 2012 (Event)
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Tue 10th Apr 2012 19:47
So much enjoyed
that we added......DITTO!
Is it possible to ditto
well WE did!
Tue 10th Apr 2012 19:43
One must always remember
to peep through the spy hole
before opening the door-
that is the key(no pun intended)
to the avoidance of blah-blahs.
Comment is about Bogeyman baiters (blog)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:44
oh dear. there you go all fixed
Comment is about 3 tin rings (blog)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:02
although, theologically, i dont agree with the love the devil thing.
Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:00
As a christian I have to say I love this. (No pun intended)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:56
As always Harry, thanks for your comments. I've not got time to address them now but trust me, I'll get back to you. I think you've raised some interesting points. You're certainly keeping me on my toes, and for that I'm grateful. Thanks again.
Hello Harry, I'm back. Can you explain your 'four line poem' idea for Admission please? I can't figure it out.
The 'it' does indeed refer to the room but I didn't intend to 'have anyone on'. It may seem or sound a little flippant but the occasion the poem is based on is real enough and, unlike The Spell, Toast is quite heartfelt.
Now, The Spell is, as you point out, somewhat detached and though I like the poem well enough I'm not wedded to it as I am to some of my other poems. In fact, as you've raised the question of the level of passion the poem contains I'm forced to admit the conceit, whilst real enough, is just that - I served myself rather than the poem which is really a failing. So, despite, or because of, your always constructive, and kind, comments I feel compelled to remove The Spell; you compel me to raise my game and pay even closer attention to my craft. Thank you for your attention too.
Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:26
'I hope your not dead'
Unless you have a not dead that's yours?
Cynthia Buell Thomas
I have not yet had the time to read the other poems listed. I certainly expect them to be excellent. But, I really can't see how they could be 'better' - just different - the victims of subjectivity. This is a superb poem. I am re-encouraged for a return to prosy paragraphs neatly 'versed', and the use of punctuation (and maybe, lots of it.)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:03
I performed her poem 'Roof Walker' in a Programme of Poetry and Song, with a cast composed entirely of women doing women's works. I also did 'Poetry' by Marianne Moore, and a French love song en francais. The evening was a great success and a personal highlight.
Comment is about US poet Adrienne Rich dies aged 82 (article)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 16:44
There`s plenty can make us laugh - but to do it in rhyme?
(I`m goin` to ask the grand-kids for the tune)
Comment is about Gorgonzola (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Tue 10th Apr 2012 16:29
I enjoyed these,
In ADMISSION I particularly liked the contrasting vowel sounds of `insufficient` and `isolated` separated by the alliterated and enjambed `harvest Hinder`...
(which made me wonder how it would look as a four line poem without the enjambments...it works well)
This minds me of the Yankee `wake up and smell the coffee`. (I assume that the `it` in line six refers to the room itself). The `ghostly` strange `particulate` and `breath` of line four leading to the `unbidden` and `soluble``memories` cleanses it of any romanticism. The homely `aroma` of the toast overpowers the word `perfume`. I feel that this one - like some of Larkins - is `having us on` a little (but with a bit more honesty)
This -to me - is too detached for either the `hope` or the `envy` to sound passionate (or real) enough.
the rhythmical arrangement and the rhyming of all three poems is excellent and (unusually in a poem) all three question themselves honestly.
Really enjoyed reading them.
Tue 10th Apr 2012 14:46
Thank you very much M.C.Newberry for the comment and for the correction. I was a fool to write 'in the knees', at least could write 'on the knees' lol
Comment is about The Day Of Liberation (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Tue 10th Apr 2012 14:00
Anyone who has had the experience of these
determined door-stepping religionists will enjoy this. I did!
Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:54
The pride in these words is clear! Freedom is
so precious. You must have really enjoyed
writing this for your lovely city.
One small point - the line about "The odessite
will never stand in the knees" - in England we
would say "never bend the knee (e.g. show
Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:43
Your little paper boat has just docked.
Expect its return a.s.a.p...
merci d'etre mon ami.xx
Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:15
It is in the echo of these places..brought back those feelings MC
Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:12
I relate to this so easily Ann, nothing wrong with hiding away for a time..just for a while mind you..xx
Comment is about tent (blog)
Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:06
That missed hug is really powerful and as Neil says it is a compelling read Steve..
Tue 10th Apr 2012 12:17
Hello, John! Thank you so much for commenting on "Palm Sunday" and for G K Chesterton's "The Donkey" . To tell you the truth I haven't read anything by this author before. So, when I read his poems I loved them very much and understood that he was really the great.
With warmest wishes,
Comment is about John Coopey (Poet profile)
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