Christopher Dawson

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 20:09

Messrs Clifton and Newberry are to blame.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 20:00

What a good idea. No phone or e-mail hacking either! Excellent jape.

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Christopher Dawson

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:54

Oh dear, you're both very kind..but I'm afraid a little encouragable.

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:42

A beautiful Wordsworthian-like poem.

So much enjoyed.

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:36

What does resectful mean Mr Bigness?
and will we find it in us feeasoruss?

tee-hee re the typo O pint lover.xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:31

indeed Nick
and so badly needed for...making of the mead!

Yours SINcerely-us.xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:25

You have had that blonde head
int' thesaurus aintcha Lynn.

Neat little observation.P&S.xx

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:23

Nice to see you back on board Lynn
we hope all is well with you and yours.

Our thanks love.xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:22

Nick-
and did you enjoy it?-tee hee

Cheers cheerful chappie.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:19

Really appreciate the lengthy comment Nick-
all is very much agreed upon.
re-"I,ve been away-white coats-small van?"

Either you work
selling ice creams-
or went for an iffy ride in a ner!-ner!
to hozzy?
hope not!xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:07

We should be praising you clever Clifton
the comment is better than the poem-
damn your brilliant
if not beautiful mind!

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 19:04

Our gratitude is yours Jean.xx
As for you Big Nick-
muchas grassyarse.xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 18:54

Nice comment Jean.My thanks-Patricia.

Nick-re thy suggestion that one hath yea and verily rippeth-ed off corny sentiments frometh O cards of jollification then pray answereth this sweet question I poseth-

wot size boots do yer bollox take!haha.
(one jests with thee O man of La Mancha.)xx

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 18:39

Thanks ever so much Mrs.T.xx

Thankful with no 'ish ont th'end
for thee Big Cliffo
deserving of two xx
both from my dinner lady
ones hastens to add.

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oldlancsman

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 18:05

Nicely written M.C. its obvious you too are a "Survivor" going by your recollections; nearly all of which i can personally relate to. We had little or no money, but we were the richest kids on the planet.thanks again for your comments. have a nice day

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Alan Pascoe

Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:40

An interesting poem Ann.

How would it look using lower case for each line instead of capitals?

Also, the last two lines of the third stanza, could you use something similar as a leitmotif at the end of each stanza?

In the fourth stanza, take the second line, place it at the end then add another line, again as a leitmotif.

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M.C. Newberry

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:27

Hands up - those who drank from puddles to save going home and leaving the fun? Or (for seaside kids) tied a bit of curtain netting to a bicycle wheel to see what came up from the harbour? Or used the bomb sites for countless games of hide and seek and other games? Or crossed a river weir with no handrails when unable to swim - not thinking about the consequences? Or fell out of a tree and got up rubbing an aching limb - to carry on playing, not wanting to miss anything? And nicked
apples from overhanging branches of a neighbour's tree?
And groaned to be called home as the light faded?
We were SO lucky to be kids then...weren't we?

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M.C. Newberry

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:08

Thanks, chums. I guess that for those like me,
brought up in the 50s, the railways brought...
and took away...so much that was important,
unlike today when so many own private transport
and may not make the emotional connection that comes from an age when the train was our
lifeline to the world beyond our front door.

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:05

Thanks all - this was written in a mood of "I'm drawing the curtains and you can all go away!" Not really a children's piece - but maybe shows we all stay how we were at age - five? Not sure why but I am in a withdrawing phase. Nice to hear from you all though.

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:02

Oh, so sad! For all of us who dine alone - thank you.

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 16:00

This sounds full of joy to me - and on this miserable wet easter monday - thank you Tom!

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Cate Greenlees

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 15:53

Te he... very clever! Nice to see you manfully squaring up to the job! My hats off to any poet who tackles a slam..... man or woman it must take balls of steel!! lol
Cate xx

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Lynn Dye

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 15:33

How lovely, enjoyed this very much, Patricia. xx

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Freda Davis

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 15:06

I don't get alienation, Ann, so much as the desire for privacy. It does have a somewhat anxious feel to it though. Maybe its that little verse that introduces somebody else- 'you speak'- 'its a good job you have nothing to say'. The rest of it may feel safe and hidden, but this shows that actually the 'other' is within reach and holding back. Nice punchy form to it.

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Neil Fawcett

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 14:56

Compelling read Steve.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 14:17

The more one examines politicians, the more one feels that this is true.
By the way have you noticed that no matter whom you vote for in an election, the flipping government always gets in?
Nice one! XX

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 14:13

Quite powerful, Steve. The pathos is palpable. The carrot of hope and the reality of the dogshit. Sets one thinking.Well done.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 14:04

Ah so sad, Nick. Is this a reflection of our modern times where it's difficult to establish relationships but we need to keep up apprearances?
I like this. XX

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:23

not the longest 'count-er-ry' in forced rhyme. Still, I like it a lot and sincerely hope this sparks those long-winded pompous types to come out of the woodwork and share hackneyed, clinches with us mere mortal public. thanks Lynn the most enjoyable five or six seconds I've had in fve or six seconds. Ta muchly, Nick.
congratulations to a 9 year old Hannah. (that's right, start 'em early)

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Danny Metcalfe.

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:23

Thank you, Yvonne for your comments. It's very rare people stick up for me when it comes to animal rights. And I did not take offence. It was much appreciated.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:17

strong prose indeed sir, well stacked with love, longing, and return from absence. change at Ealing Broadway and catch the bus, it's a bit quicker, Ta muchly, Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:13

i see you're deeply 'troubled' Steve, doppleganger or schizophrenic came to mind as i (alone) went through it but both of you didn't want to go there then! 'Superfacial' does that mean, under the face or extremely handsome? Answers on a postcard to: ...
ta muchly, Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:03

okay Ogden Dawson, you're let-off, this time. i love my mother-in-law, it's just her daughter i can't stand, ta muchly, Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 13:01

high sentiments, indeed the UN should be honoured to wear this upon their walls. good stuff, ta muchly, Nick.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:58

I can feel the intensity of the emotion in this. I like the conflict of 'we are running in the opposite directions' - a despair instantly resolved by the second half of the line. There is nothing maudlin about this piece.

PS
on a different tack the cynic in me looks at the same line and says to itself "You could call this 'Love On The Circle Line'."
Don't take offence, my mind has a mind of its own sometimes. XX

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:53

3 quatrain and 1 couplet, hum! does this qualify as a sonnet? if so, from which school?
great stuff, as usual, TT, what's this about adding a 14th letter to your name? ta muchly, NIck.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:42

Oh Yes, if we truly loved all the animals of the earth we would not farm any to eat. We would not husband them for our gain. Nor would we interfere in their lives and their suffering at the hands of nature, nor seek to heal their ailments and use science to create medicines for them.
I agree that vivisection on animals who have done us no harm is bad - my chosen 'animals would be human prisoners convicted unequivocably of serious crimes.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:26

manking this more in-depth, with more detail, could bring it home and hit harder. I like what you're doing but i feel that with a subject such as this, the message must be rammed in as hard as the 'blades of a knife' ta muchly, Nick.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:22

wonderful stuff - mind you, you've ruined Lola for me now as I'll always sing your words instead. Thanks for the entertainment, John, more please. XX

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oldlancsman

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:22


Hi Yvonne, What a nice little poem,very refreshing to read,thankyou for your comment.
From one surviver to another,,have a nice day.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:14

we all need a private place to retire to/hide in at some time or other. 8 or 80 years old this captures that feeling.Well done.

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Andy

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:14

Thanks for the tip Ann.

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Andy

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:13

Thank you for your observations and comments, i appreciate the feedback.

Alan, I read some Eliot some years ago but not the Four Quartets I'll take a look now though.

Ann, the image you mention of the footsteps leading in opposite directions is a lovely idea. I'll check it out if you've posted it.

Thank you John, i do strive to make my poems seem as unforced as possible which sometimes means months spent knocking them into shape. My problem is i can never leave anything alone and always go back to poems and tweek them; obsessive i know, but for some reason it's very important to me. Thanks again, comments like yours, and others, make me happy.

Andy, thanks for commenting and please do come to a Mouthin' Off gig. The next one's on Sunday May 6th. If you ever want an open-mic slot please let me know.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:12

delightful, wonderful, should easily take the nonsense prize. well done for such magical innocence. ta muchly Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 12:06

the power of the pen never ceases to amaze. don't know who said that but i do know who write this smashing rhymical sinusoidal enjoyabubble page above. for that i thank you, ta muchly, NIck.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:58

the dynamic form you used has kept this good work at a high level of constant enjoyment. Per ardua ad astra - possibly! ta muchly, NIck.

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steve pottinger

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:55

Thanks Ann & Mark! Glad you enjoyed the poem....

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:47

Just a nibble please, he spoke with ease, ta muchly, Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:44

if these are the drafts i can't wait for the more considered version. i like this a great deal. chow for now, Nick.

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Nick Clifton

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Mon 9th Apr 2012 11:40

third stanza, second line, does it stumble or is that me. otherwise a fine performance particularly verse one - goodly stuff, chow for now, Nick.

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