Lynn Dye

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:12

Lovely little poem, and not at all like a greeting card. Lol, what is he like!! xx

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Lynn Dye

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:07

Yeah, but apart from all that, it's a really nice place, right?
Hee hee, good observations, Stef. I'm somewhat behind with comments, been busy gardening and all sorts, hope you are both well, as we are. xx

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Lesley Whittaker

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 22:01

yes Roy, they are deep feelings .... the last line makes a lot of sence, 'The power's beyond bears no bond on my tears 'little pond' .... meaning my tears are powerful, bigger than the 'little pond' it fills :-)

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winston plowes

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 21:50

Hi Alison. Nice poem. "the precise deft unfolding of every pale green leaf." was a stand out line for me but enjoyed the positivity of the whole, You have not converted me as I believe anyway. lol.

Hey, Chris Hoy did an incredible swoop in the Keirin don't you think and as for the rising star that is Ms Trott, she gave everything and was rewarded.

Win x

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Roy Chetham

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 20:35

Deep feelings are once more pouring out producing a moving little piece.
Not sure I understand the last line though, is there a typing error?

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Nick Jarvis

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 18:14

Thanks for the warm welcomes!

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M.C. Newberry

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 15:58

Hello Tom - your kind comments about "Brothers" are very welcome. The poem follows the old wisdom "write about what you know" so I will not claim any visitation from some other-worldly spark of imagination.

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Nigel Astell

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 13:55

The theme for this meeting is - - - Space

When I get there I can never find one for my car !!!

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Alison Smiles

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 13:36

I loved this, the pure simplicity, the feeling of stumbling upon something abhorrent that just somehow doesn't fit the stereotypical spring picture but is a lot more real than the singing birds, flitting clouds etc.

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:45

Thanks for your note on Propaganda Panda Nick, glad you enjoyed

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:44

Ta for y'note on Propaganda Panda mate - see you soon I hope x

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:44

Ta for y'note on Writing in Fire chuck, glad you enjoyed it. Will be working on performing it soon I hope but it needs a LOT of breath!

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 10:42

Love this - am in the room with you and him. This is massively evocative. I spent my youth with people like him. But I moved on and they didn't. Full of pathos, tolerance, understanding, and the sadness you feel when YOU know what the score is, and they don't.

Great poem

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Isobel

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:57

I enjoyed the winning poem and didn't see it as inaccessible - just very subtle.

They were all great poems - as you'd expect. Like Cynthia says, there's no judging 1st 2nd 3rd really - it's all subjective and often down to luck.

Prose poetry seems very much flavour of the day though. I doubt you'd stand any chance of winning if you submitted a rhyming one. The Death of Rhyme - good title for a discussion thread?

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Lynn Dye

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:57

Thank you, Nick. Not normally keen on rhymes that look too enforced, meself. My gratitude for Hannah too X

Yvonne, you are so right about the flipping government!! Thank you for your lovely comment.XX

Haha Stef, no thesaurus this time, thank you for your continuing support XX

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:43

Ah! I thought of TS Elliott too. I really like this Tom. Shades of regret, and so subtle - your forte!

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:39

Hi Imprisonedbeauty - welcome to WOL. Hope you do have a go at performing some of your work in public - once you try it, it can become a great joy! Hope to see some more of your work on here soon too :)

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:35

Hi Christine - welcome to WOL. Hope you will enjoy being a part of our poetry community. It would be great to see some of your work on your profile page. Thanks :)

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chris stevenson

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:13

hello Nick .. thank-you. I was dwelling on all the nasty garbage in the news and papers, wishing I was back at sea and miles from here.

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chris stevenson

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 09:12

hello Andy .. thank-you. I was dwelling on all the nasty garbage in the news and papers, wishing I was back at sea and miles from here.

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Andy

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 07:13

Thank you Tom, that's a lovely comment, though believe me, the effort is well hidden - I hope.

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Yvonne Brunton

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:39

An enjoyable warning. It brings to mind:-

The early bird gets the worm.
The early worm who got up first,
unfortunately,comes off worst!

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Yvonne Brunton

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:30

I Like this, Tom. It reminds me of Paris and a desultory lip service paid to life as it passed by - as you say 'the seriousness of our lives hadn't begun'.
Shades of TS Elliott??

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Rachel Bond

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Wed 11th Apr 2012 00:04

women like stars...i am not outshone by any son of man and usually the company of women makes me dull, but right enough the ones i like make a fiery constellation...15th december me too, coincidention! xxx

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Rachel Bond

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 23:59

im glad you loved it :) loving the devil...its a big theological ask, my head hurts with the thought of questions that big. I love that you know what you think about it...faith is like stone eh?

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Tom Harding

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 22:02

wonderfully effortless.

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Tom Harding

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:59

this is lovely and sad. I think the last line captures it wonderfully.

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Tom Harding

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:57

Lovely images, evocative stuff.

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Tom Harding

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:56

very beautiful, some lovely images here.

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Tom Harding

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:47

Thank you for the kind comment as always Ann.

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Jonboy Walton

Tue 10th Apr 2012 21:02

Hey! S'posed to be a good night this!

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 19:47

So much enjoyed
that we added......DITTO!

Is it possible to ditto
ones/our comments?
well WE did!

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 19:43

Thanks M.C.

One must always remember
to peep through the spy hole
before opening the door-
that is the key(no pun intended)
to the avoidance of blah-blahs.

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Rachel Bond

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:44

oh dear. there you go all fixed

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Matt

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:02

although, theologically, i dont agree with the love the devil thing.

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Matt

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 18:00

As a christian I have to say I love this. (No pun intended)

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Andy

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:56

As always Harry, thanks for your comments. I've not got time to address them now but trust me, I'll get back to you. I think you've raised some interesting points. You're certainly keeping me on my toes, and for that I'm grateful. Thanks again.

Hello Harry, I'm back. Can you explain your 'four line poem' idea for Admission please? I can't figure it out.

The 'it' does indeed refer to the room but I didn't intend to 'have anyone on'. It may seem or sound a little flippant but the occasion the poem is based on is real enough and, unlike The Spell, Toast is quite heartfelt.

Now, The Spell is, as you point out, somewhat detached and though I like the poem well enough I'm not wedded to it as I am to some of my other poems. In fact, as you've raised the question of the level of passion the poem contains I'm forced to admit the conceit, whilst real enough, is just that - I served myself rather than the poem which is really a failing. So, despite, or because of, your always constructive, and kind, comments I feel compelled to remove The Spell; you compel me to raise my game and pay even closer attention to my craft. Thank you for your attention too.

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Danny Metcalfe.

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:26

'I hope your not dead'

You're*

Unless you have a not dead that's yours?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:26

I have not yet had the time to read the other poems listed. I certainly expect them to be excellent. But, I really can't see how they could be 'better' - just different - the victims of subjectivity. This is a superb poem. I am re-encouraged for a return to prosy paragraphs neatly 'versed', and the use of punctuation (and maybe, lots of it.)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 17:03

I performed her poem 'Roof Walker' in a Programme of Poetry and Song, with a cast composed entirely of women doing women's works. I also did 'Poetry' by Marianne Moore, and a French love song en francais. The evening was a great success and a personal highlight.

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Harry O'Neill

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 16:44


John,
There`s plenty can make us laugh - but to do it in rhyme?

(I`m goin` to ask the grand-kids for the tune)

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Harry O'Neill

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 16:29

I enjoyed these,
In ADMISSION I particularly liked the contrasting vowel sounds of `insufficient` and `isolated` separated by the alliterated and enjambed `harvest Hinder`...
(which made me wonder how it would look as a four line poem without the enjambments...it works well)

`TOAST`
This minds me of the Yankee `wake up and smell the coffee`. (I assume that the `it` in line six refers to the room itself). The `ghostly` strange `particulate` and `breath` of line four leading to the `unbidden` and `soluble``memories` cleanses it of any romanticism. The homely `aroma` of the toast overpowers the word `perfume`. I feel that this one - like some of Larkins - is `having us on` a little (but with a bit more honesty)

THE SPELL,
This -to me - is too detached for either the `hope` or the `envy` to sound passionate (or real) enough.

BUT!
the rhythmical arrangement and the rhyming of all three poems is excellent and (unusually in a poem) all three question themselves honestly.

Really enjoyed reading them.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 14:46

Thank you very much M.C.Newberry for the comment and for the correction. I was a fool to write 'in the knees', at least could write 'on the knees' lol

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M.C. Newberry

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 14:00

Anyone who has had the experience of these
determined door-stepping religionists will enjoy this. I did!

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M.C. Newberry

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:54

The pride in these words is clear! Freedom is
so precious. You must have really enjoyed
writing this for your lovely city.
One small point - the line about "The odessite
will never stand in the knees" - in England we
would say "never bend the knee (e.g. show
servitude).

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:43

Your little paper boat has just docked.
Expect its return a.s.a.p...

merci d'etre mon ami.xx

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stella jones

Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:15


It is in the echo of these places..brought back those feelings MC

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stella jones

Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:12



I relate to this so easily Ann, nothing wrong with hiding away for a time..just for a while mind you..xx

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stella jones

Tue 10th Apr 2012 13:06



That missed hug is really powerful and as Neil says it is a compelling read Steve..

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

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Tue 10th Apr 2012 12:17

Hello, John! Thank you so much for commenting on "Palm Sunday" and for G K Chesterton's "The Donkey" . To tell you the truth I haven't read anything by this author before. So, when I read his poems I loved them very much and understood that he was really the great.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

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