Thu 8th Mar 2012 10:45
Very good to see you here, Thomas. Welcome! I must say I'm captivated by your poetry. Greg
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Marianne Louise Daniels
Thu 8th Mar 2012 10:33
...that is all...
Comment is about Winston Plowes (Poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Thu 8th Mar 2012 10:27
Mouse, Bird, Dogs, The Elements. These are the enduring things that advertise the splendour and magnificence of sacred life. Your poem seems to imply that man made, votive symbols will inevitably crumble to dust and become tarnished with the passage of time and that the only things which link us to the divine are the continuing processes of nature. It doesn't stop us from doing it though. Mosques, Cathedrals, Altars, all God's accessories - tawdry artifacts of no real value or meaning?
Here is a response - by way of appreciation of your theme and structure.
Temple of Fiddes – An Invocation
In a trance, amid the heady fumes
Of burning laurel and barley
Sage leaves scattered on flame
Crackle bend and twist upward
Down from the mountain top
And out of Circenn, come to me here
In your sacred precinct, to your grove
Of elder trees, and your altars
Smoking with incense, dripping with honey
Where cold water flows babbling
Through the branches,
The scene shadowed with fern,
Sleep drifts down from silvery leaves
Horses grazing in a meadow
Verdant spring flowers
And where the breeze blows fragrant
Here in the Temple of Fiddes
Delicately in golden cups
Nectar poured, mixed for our festival.
Comment is about Altars to the Gods (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Thu 8th Mar 2012 10:03
Hello lovely - thanks for your comments, am glad you enjoyed them. That's proper shocking though about the water!!! Jesus wept!
Ha, yeh, trust - just can't find it these days eh? ;)
Keep writing chuck xx
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Thu 8th Mar 2012 10:01
Thanks re I-Museum. That was the first thing I wrote upon joining the site in September 2010 - first thing I ever really properly wrote, in fact, so glad you liked it :)
Had a look at your page and yes, you were right, I DO like that poem! Never heard of Tadeusz Ròzewicz before but I just had a quick look at some of his stuff and wow - I must read some more of his writing, it's incredible!!
I will keep an eye out for more of your writing - I suspect I may enjoy it. ;)
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Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:58
Agree - great write this, really atmospheric. Should that be 'wreaked' or 'wrecked' though?
Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:37
Glad you liked "Stairlift to Heaven", Nick.
Comment is about Nick Clifton (Poet profile)
Original item by Nick Clifton
Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:36
A bit obvious this was mine, eh? I shall have to get Ken Barlow's advice on how to avoid type-casting.
Yes, the Facebook critique was my darling daughter's, I'm afraid. Can't sing, can't play, can't do anything except "can you give me a tenner, dad?".
Glad you liked it.
Comment is about Graham Robinson (Poet profile)
Original item by Graham Robinson
Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:31
Muster! What ho!
I got the boys (JP and RP) round to do a retake of their original but they spent so long going to the toilet that I had to do the bloody thing myself.
Comment is about Richie Muster (Poet profile)
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Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:28
Glad you liked my "Stairlift to Heaven" (patent pending).
Of course, you don't actually need the stairlift!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
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Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:26
Glad you liked "Stairlift to Heaven", Lynn. Jimmy Page and Robert Plant dropped by to do the guitar and vocals.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:24
Glad you liked "Stairlift to Heaven".
I stumbled a bit recording this; the audio words don't quite match the written words all time.
"In the event of a confic of meaning between the written and spoken words, the written words shall prevail".
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (Poet profile)
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Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:13
Very thought-provoking. I've just started voluntary work at Selby Abbey in Yorkshire, England, where I live. It was built in the 11th century and I am enormously proud to be associated with it in this small way.
It saddens me to see old churches fall into disrepair although I read that your concern is for the symbollic decline of spiritual values.
I am, myself, not a worshipper although I try to live the life of a Good Man (often failing!).
Dave D Poet Rhumour
Thu 8th Mar 2012 09:10
Hmm - are you trying to tell me the 2nd childhood isn't going to be as much fun as I was hoping? ;)
Never mind, as long as you have each other what more could you wish for!
Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Deletions (blog)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Thu 8th Mar 2012 08:39
What a good idea! (The Poet Map!) Optional of course, as some people like to be incognito. I wish you all the best with your open mic. I too felt I was living in a bit of a vacuum re open mic nights and last October I started one in the village where I live. The first one was totally packed, and the second one pretty busy too. After six months we have dwindled down in numbers but those who come really enjoy it and I hope it continues. Your one sounds a bit more ambitious with guest poets etc. Should be great!!
Comment is about Help us fill a big gap in mid Wales (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thu 8th Mar 2012 07:16
I like this and was going to pick out the phrases Laura has chosen for special mention. The snow on wood - I'll always think of that now when it snows! I thought as I read that the poem improved as it went along and on reading the comments I would agree with Yvonne about the baby words spoiling it slightly in the first half.
Comment is about Growing Flowers By Candlelight (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Thu 8th Mar 2012 07:01
This poem definately has something about it Shirley, I think the rather odd and particular images make it really interesting - the overcast day threatening rain, the mouse, the dogs. Good one!
Thu 8th Mar 2012 04:27
I really wanted to write something, but I've been sick and well this is all that came out. I think i'll play with it more later. Thanks for all the helpful critics. I appreciate it. Best Wishes
Comment is about It Rhymes (blog)
Thu 8th Mar 2012 04:20
Hello, I found your wall, it was all the way over here. You have so many new postings, can't wait to read them all. cheers
Comment is about Laura Taylor (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thu 8th Mar 2012 04:16
I think it has something to do with the enhancing the plasma vapors through the use of a microwave to increase speed of the growing process of the diamond, although I could be wrong.
Thu 8th Mar 2012 04:08
you know I think you right, it's to redundant. Thanks for the advice
Comment is about Green Grass (blog)
Thu 8th Mar 2012 04:06
Thanks I should a known better than to date a sailor, usually I stay away from military types, but this one was AWOL and well it fascinated me for a little while.
Comment is about Postcard Perfect (blog)
Thu 8th Mar 2012 00:12
Yes Jack the ammendment is good. I like 'silly sod' too, both for its alliteration and a great put down for someone taking him/herself seriously.
Comment is about Don't Take Yourself So Serious (blog)
Original item by Jack Pascoe
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:45
A much loved dad celebrated here in all the little things we remember about our parents.
He is waiting for you in his holiday van in the sky!
A lovely tribute! XX
Comment is about Poem for my Dad (blog)
Original item by Steve
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:40
Hello again Yvonne,
Glad you liked 'Johnny was a Rudeboy'.
Hope you're doing good.
P.S I really liked BINS. Funny and light hearted with an almost sinister twist at the end, nice element of surprise there.
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:38
love the images - spring-feast trees, late crisps of dusk, has splashed her blinding
Yes roll on Spring! oh and keep writing!XX
Comment is about Faint Winter (blog)
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:30
Thanks for your kind comments Ann, i'm glad the rhythm's ok I always worry about that. As for singing, forget it. I've got a voice like Michael Caine with a bad cold and i'm not joking.
I love this too, Dave. Good stuff.
Comment is about Planetarium (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:11
i think this great.
i like the descriptions of the ragged dog altar, although i think the final question could have been asked through a conclusion to the tale.
its sill great tho.
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:07
kealan tells me diamonds are in some way related to plasma because of the way they support the life of each other...how does this work. fascinating.
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:05
i love this photo. theres a million stories wrapped around it.
i like yours, bitter sweet x
Wed 7th Mar 2012 23:04
amazing poetry. you a very gifted writer.
personally i would leave out the last verse, its complete without.x
Wed 7th Mar 2012 22:53
I read your "USA Tour 2011" poems. Nice flow and rhythm.
It's nice to hear good things about America. Some people wouldn't agree with you and some of those are here in the U.S. but not me.
Comment is about Trev's USA Tour 2011 (blog)
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Wed 7th Mar 2012 22:35
thanks everyone for comments.
its a common mistake i think to assume everyone grows up in safety. i try to remember when im upset with someone that maybe theyre struggling with something beyond me. this poem is a bit beyond me. i just let the words out it wrote itself from some strange spot in the brain that i just might have been dropped on :)
the visual cliff experiment is a very interesting one to study.
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Thanks you for commenting on my poem "There's More to Me".
Sorry it took so long to thank you.
I do believe we show different sides of ourselves to different people.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wed 7th Mar 2012 21:11
Hi Nick, thanks for your comment on Bungee Jump.
Wed 7th Mar 2012 20:30
Thanks for all your varied comments...I did write another poem entitled 'It's Such a Quiet Life'...but to be honest I prefer 'Nobody'...if you sort of know what I mean? lol
Many Thanks/Peace and Happiness - Graham x
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Wed 7th Mar 2012 20:07
Thank you, for real, we are is some serious trouble, our environment is as ill as society. The tap water in NY can be set on fire due to natural gas leaking in to the water pipes. We need to bring back hopscotch and kick the can. I love these things but there is no going back. Now we just have to figure out how to clean the river and take the fire out of the water. Best wishes
Comment is about Prose Upon The River (blog)
The shape of this poem makes me think of Tadeusz Ròzewicz - good stuff
Comment is about Truth or Dare (blog)
Wed 7th Mar 2012 20:04
thanks for your comment, Laura
I like the shape of the I-museum, and I would say it's poetry.
you might like the poem I've got up at www.grahamclifford.co.uk
Wed 7th Mar 2012 20:00
Thanks for the comments.
I can see that the garden has got you thinking as well! Nice work. You might like the poem I've got up at www.grahamclifford.co.uk
Wed 7th Mar 2012 19:44
I love this so, this is so perfect, I have many lists like this one, I always forget to pick up just the right kind a trust, when ever I'm shopping. Thank you for writing this
Comment is about Shopping List Edit - Part 2 (blog)
Wed 7th Mar 2012 19:41
This really shook me, and well well done at that, such a dark topic, I'm glad that poets such as yourself tackle them, because these are tales that need to be told. Cheers
Wed 7th Mar 2012 19:24
Dave,Nice attention drawer to very obvious - but often ignored - facts...I think it`s the word spacethat makes them think it`s empty.
Don`t think you need the middle stanza. Keep wishing you could have got the actual millions (billions?) of actual stars into it for the fact -fixated Gradgrind.
It`s a good `un though (it would even `stand` poetically with just the first stanza and the last line).
Wed 7th Mar 2012 19:20
THanks for comment on Kite poem, Greg. Pity I clicked on the wrong picture. I've tried to replace the buzzard with a kite but WOL won't seem top let me!
Comment is about Greg Freeman (Poet profile)
Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:58
Hi Makhumza, sorry that I seem to have just missed your chat request while I was logging in here. Best wishes, Dave
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Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:56
Hello Nick - welcome to our (mostly) happy band!
My thanks to you for commenting on 'Disparate Friends', much appreciated. Best wishes, Dave
Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:53
Hi Lynn, thanks for your comments on 'Disparate Friends' - I've responded on the page with a little explanation that may help clarify the plot. :) Best wishes, Dave
Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:50
Hehe - ok the book is now resting alongside my keyboard Nick. :)
Thank you for your very kind comments, they are much appreciated, even though I do feel many might disagree... Best wishes - and good luck with the bottle, Dave
Comment is about Disparate Friends (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Wed 7th Mar 2012 18:27
Thank you so much Nick for reading and commenting on ;Drums;
I used to know a boy from the RAF and he used to do one particular thing by the lorryload... ... ahh me... they were the days!
Must be something to do with all that looping the loop.
Once again many thanks
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