Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:57
Don`t know how I missed this one John.
TOUR DE FORCE!!!
Comment is about If They Come (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:34
Liked the extra `O`in the `Ohh`and snow as a quilt.
Comment is about White Winter (blog)
Original item by Ankita
Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:21
Comment is about Lux (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:16
a fitting tribute for what looks like a great man who made a difference. i can relate to this well.
Comment is about For Nelson Mandela (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:01
Awe, Aye! Aye! Ian...couldn`t I have the last two...and all the others!
Be a sport!
Comment is about Dear Santa (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Tue 17th Dec 2013 12:44
Like that final stanza. That `bloated` fits rain-clouds exactly.
I think I would make those last two read
Colours washed until the remains
Are indeterminate shapes, and the distance
Swallowed, swallowed in cloud.
Ah, those clouds! So bloated and low.
Could I reach, push then back,
Reveal hidden horizons?
Sorry for messin` with it (it was so good)
Comment is about Hidden horizons (blog)
Original item by Andy Ainsworth
Tue 17th Dec 2013 10:26
Thanks Cynthia. I will definitely consider your valuable input. You have touched on the exact areas wherein I was having some concerns.Re: "Moving On." Many thanks.
Most appreciatively yours, Frederick.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Tue 17th Dec 2013 09:19
Cheers Is :)
Must admit, felt real nice to perform those two poems - so different to what I've been doing so much of lately!
Comment is about Writing In Fire - live version (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Tue 17th Dec 2013 09:16
Solar - your educational years sound just like mine. I was barely in for the last 2 years (in the good old days when you could get away with it!), and not in much attendance for the first 3 years. Spent my time in libraries, educating meself - buried in books!
Comment is about Secrets,hopelessnesses,and helplessnesses of Cows (blog)
Tue 17th Dec 2013 00:05
I just read this and signed back on just to comment... (You should feel honoured). I find this fascinating - you've put into words what I have often wondered! I see lots of bovine on one of my long drives... I can empathise with wanting to save them, and in a small way, I try to do my part. I love the depth of sentiment in this too - you can attribute it to other things - bovine as a metaphor... Awesome :-)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:41
Thanks, Cynthia. I can see what you mean. I had toyed with:
Rain's small rivers on the train window
refract grey light, distort landscapes
But I like rhythm of the first line you suggested and the alliteration in the second line. Let's give it a try...
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:38
Hell hath no fury... ;-)
Comment is about ALLAKAZAM! just like that! (blog)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:35
Comment is about Write Out Loud's Julian Jordon nominated for 'unsung hero' award (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:26
jaipers Laura! if you knew what little time moi spent under yon 'dreaming spires'and their kind
you would be giving me a gold star for effort,despite the 'chockfullness of typos'.
Getting my name registered in first lesson,then getting my arse outta there till repeating the same procedure in the afternoon,then finding lads,booze and fags were the things I sought to teach meself-yep! big bollock dropped,but there yer go.Still,you managed to get the gist of the poem eh-ta Lauz.x
Isobel,I'm dropping one word and going with whats left-Thanks(both).x
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:22
I like the:
`Butterflies hovered serenely in meditation`
And the way your stuff is spreading.
Comment is about When Stars Danced. (blog)
Original item by Ged Thompson/ Liverpool Poet
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:09
I like the way this tangled rail-track web ofmetaphore mirrors those web-like pictures of the brain threads that they show, and the `Beeching` reference. Together with the wheels losing their grip and `sliding back` it is alla solid and poetically apt representation ofAlzheimers.
As an example of using the ordinary words of a past even to express the sadness and sense of loss of a present illness it is excellent.
Comment is about Re-Winding Memories (blog)
Original item by Nick Coleman
Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:01
Emily, you are right to say that Poetry is a great way of keeping the mind right. It's what we all do on here.
With poetry, there is no right or wrong. Everything is allowed and no one stands out. It is all up for discussion.
The general problem with people (society) is that often originals stand out.
Put your faith in your poetry. That will keep you on track. Be Brave too.
Comment is about The gun to your head will NOT save you sir (blog)
Original item by Emily
Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:59
Ah the blue eyes of Peter O'Toole,
Haunting me since the day I left school.
I believe he had no interest in female anatomy.
Some old friend once told that to me.
Outstanding as Lawrence of Arabia,
And a fine actor, although maybe a
bit overshadowed by Omar Sharif,
whose dark eyes expressed ineffable grief.
Comment is about SIXTIES' COOL (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:08
Thank you :3
Comment is about What Ive Seen. (blog)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:03
CLITS AND LABIA!!!??? How very dare you?
Either you've got something stuck on your mind, MC, or you need a rhyming dictionary.
This is the first (and, I hope, only time) I ever write "LOL" but it really did make me LOL.
Paul H Tubb
Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:28
Greetings Fellow Dead Head...
Comment is about Emily (poet profile)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:25
Tim Sherwood or George Graham?
They'd be better off playing you, me and a couple of toby jugs at the back at the minute. What happened to the most miserly defence in the country?
(I carry the map above around with me just in case)
Comment is about Hey There, Vagina (blog)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:02
Sorry I was a little confused at first john. I thought the picture was the THFC line-up but then corrected myself. The above is actually useful!!
Well I suppose my namesake left i/c at Spurs can't really do much worse.
Have a brilliant Christmas JC, whichever manger you're in!!
Mon 16th Dec 2013 18:58
Look what I've found.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 18:12
Just as well the votings till midnight - Cinders here has a nativity play to sit through now, followed by an orchestral concert on the other side of Wigan. Will get my vote in before the clock strikes 12 :)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 15:39
Each - many thanks for your kind thoughts on my Christmas No 1.
I would agree with you Izzy about the simplicity of the male organ. When you get to my age it's remembering what it's for that,s more complicated.
Anthony - I have one waiting in the oven for Selby Abbey, "Like a Verger".
Mon 16th Dec 2013 14:12
Clitoris - it's one of those words that's difficult to remember for me - always on the tip of my tongue. I look forward to the Selby Abbey performance of this work - now that really would be a cunning stunt. All the best for Crimbo John - and looking forward to more earthy guffaws in 2014!
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:54
Great performance Laura - I much enjoyed this on the night and now!
Still having major problems accessing stuff on WOL - hence the patchy commenting pattern. Will have to get my nephew to have a look at my machine :(
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:45
I like it too. Though I think you could aid flow by re-ordering some of the words, I love its originality. It's a very thoughtful piece.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:34
'I’d really like to think I am a liberated, modern man
(I often pick my socks up off the floor)'
If that's the definition, then I think I must be a modern liberated man as well ;)
Very amusing John - dare I say that it would go down well in the right venues :)
You gents are so lucky - there's no confusion with the ladies over your erogenous bits!
Merry Christmas to you... xx
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:20
It is good. I just don't quite like the 'as' in an opening line. Would you even consider:
Small rivers on the train window
rain refracts grey light, distorts landscapes
IMO, the alliteration and musical quality takes on a new breadth. Just a thought.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:14
Good theme - very universal. Always good to see you posting.
IMO, I suggest two changes - for rhythm and verb tense respectively:
With each sunset
here in downy refuge lies
(unless you are using 'lay' as 'song' which doesn't quite work either.)
Comment is about Moving On (blog)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:04
Many thanks, MC. You're right about this having its linkage with a previous poem, but not the last one - I think; more like "The Naming of the Parts". Certainly - I re-used the pic.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:58
Excellent review, Dave. I hope to get the book in the New Year.
Comment is about On Euclid Avenue: J Fergus Evans, Flapjack Press (article)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:54
I take the view that the nominee is a pathfinder
in poetry - someone who has gone before to open
up new avenues for those who seek direction and
their own means of literary adventure and exploration.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:50
You lucky lot. And Gaia too. If only 'wishes were horses.'
Comment is about Rhyme and metre and the rhythm of rail at Sowerby Bridge (article)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:38
Really enjoyed the musical setting and the
inventive lyrics and wonder if there is any
connection between this post and its predecessor?!
Poor young mankind - it's such a strain
When the dick controls the brain
A cool eye - like a medico
Would help that ready,steady, go.
Heading heedless for that funnel
Like an express train in Box Tunnel.
All that coming and all that going
All that tiring to-and-fro-ing.
Nature's got one way of knowing
If the grass was worth the mowing...
In nine months will a kid be showing?!!
Mon 16th Dec 2013 11:13
Hahaa :D I've heard it, it's bloody great :D
Comment is about Click It (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Mon 16th Dec 2013 11:08
What an unusual piece! I really like it. It's chockful of bloody typos, mind ;p
But still, it's a wonderful idea, and I enjoyed your wordplay in there. :)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 11:05
Mon 16th Dec 2013 10:52
I'm pre-empting the possiblity,of comments akin to,'this is a very MOOV-ING poem.
So,sensible ones only,if thou wouldst!x
Mon 16th Dec 2013 10:35
Howdy - re McGarrigle's Glasgow. Thought about it, grew to really like it, have changed it. Thanks Cynth!
Thought about it, grew to really like it, have changed it. Thanks Cynth and Darren!
Comment is about McGarrigle’s Glasgow (blog)
Mon 16th Dec 2013 09:49
I have voted!
You deserve to win, Julian. You are inspirational.
Mon 16th Dec 2013 08:08
Hello Stockport WOL! - I've just seen info about an award - "Unsung Hero" - and Julian is one of the people nominated. I'll be voting for him of course! - just thought I'd mention this! Dorinda x
Comment is about Stockport WoL (poet profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Mon 16th Dec 2013 07:54
And then maybe a video with relevant dance moves?
Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:47
A welcome update, Starfish. It would be nice if common-sense prevailed.
I myself have a soft spot for beavers.
Comment is about Reprieve (blog)
Original item by Starfish
Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:42
Agreed with Steve and Starfish, Dave. Audio! Audio! Audio!.
Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:35
Very poignant, MC. I particularly like the phrase "manifest its worth".
Comment is about THOUGHTS AT CHRISTMAS (2) (blog)
Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:01
Brilliant piece of writing Tom. I was truly enveloped by it.
Comment is about Fulfillment (blog)
Original item by Tom
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