Mon 11th Jun 2012 11:40
Cracking piece Chris - like so much of your work, it's incredibly tight and dense with meaning.
Comment is about Secret (blog)
Original item by Chris Co
Mon 11th Jun 2012 11:39
Excellent! Interesting idea and well executed!
Comment is about A Compilation Of Words (blog)
Original item by Richie Muster
Mon 11th Jun 2012 11:22
sorry all, I shall explain shortly. basically we have had to abandon the voting because of the software glitch and the time constraints and some other realisations. The poems need to go for printing today. that said, the voting has been open all along and some folks have done so. But it could all have been made clearer.
Comment is about Poems back in the shops - apologies for the buggeration (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Dave D Poet Rhumour
Mon 11th Jun 2012 10:54
Thanks Lynn, you are right, we need more angels to help put the world to rights! :) Best wishes, Dave.
Comment is about Conversations With An Angel (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Mon 11th Jun 2012 10:15
When does voting finish for those who wish to? And where has the link gone? ('Spect it's me but I can't find it)
Mon 11th Jun 2012 10:05
I think this is great idea - I wasn't around/didn't have enough time to really participate with a new poem - got writers block anyway at the mo'. I think this whole thing must have been a lot of work for somebody (Julian?). I'm wondering if the idea might work as part of the St Ives (Cornwall) Festival. If I could be arsed! ;););)
Mon 11th Jun 2012 09:14
Hi Renee - welcome to WOL
Comment is about Renee Hinton (Poet profile)
Original item by Renee Hinton
Mon 11th Jun 2012 04:05
Wol elf to the rescue.
Mon 11th Jun 2012 00:05
works well for me too Martin..some of these made me smile..they rolled round the mouth..nice :)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 23:57
Ah you have caught those moments so well..I enjoyed this very much. :)
Comment is about Comfort (blog)
Original item by mike watts
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:32
Though I wouldn't necessarily have narrowed it down to these two references you made, I did guess that your poem was about atrocities committed abroad at various periods over the years.
I hear what you are saying. It is always a difficult trade off - factual correctness against poetic merit. If I'm very passionate about my meaning, and only one word will express it, I do the same as you.
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:26
I`ve just realised that my `narrowing down` should have been `widening out`. Terrible and tragic as the Katyn massacre was, the mass slaughters perpetrated against his own people by Stalin under `light bulbs` in single cells
were his still greater crimes.
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:21
Is it possible to create a jpeg of the words in paint say and post this as a picture. Not the accompanying pic though as I think this would be too small?
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:19
Haha, yes, a good tale indeed. I like the puddle sploshing walk, and the title is good, I shall think of this whenever I hear that song now! xxx
Comment is about Mingin' in the rain (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:08
Nice tale folks,
(where do they all come from?
Sun 10th Jun 2012 22:04
I like the `canter` of the rhyming (as though you were writing it as you
were riding down to help Arthur do battle with the Saxons)
Reminds me of the `rumbling`rhymed style one you did some time ago about the haulage firm.
You`ve got a gift for it.
Comment is about Arthur ap Uther - The Battle of Lugg Vale (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Sun 10th Jun 2012 21:46
Hi Dave, I enjoyed this, especially the sentiment it led to - we could certainly do with a few more kindly angels to put things right!
Sun 10th Jun 2012 21:27
Thank you Dave. :)
Comment is about Lullaby of the River (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sun 10th Jun 2012 21:22
Lol Harry - it it's any consolation, it's no better for me either - this was written last year, and I can't afford to go this year!
Thank you Larisa, glad you enjoyed, yes, it is a lovely place.
Winston, thank you for your kind comment, and also for the link for Ocean Gypsy - lovely song.
Thank you Isobel, yes, must admit I was proud to have it included.
And thank you, John, yes, I have finished giggling now at Dedicated Follower of Thrashing!
Stefan and Patricia, thank you for trying and better luck next time!
Comment is about Ode to Arillas (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 20:37
Ah, you are a genuine soft romantic couple and no mistake! :) Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about Pouring (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 20:33
Sounds great Lynn, there's nowt to beat messing about on a river. :) Best wishes, Dave
Sun 10th Jun 2012 19:31
Thank you, Dave and Ann. I look forward to it. :0)
Comment is about Abigail Wyatt (Poet profile)
Original item by Abigail Wyatt
Sun 10th Jun 2012 19:17
Greetings to you Abigail from the Lincolnshire Fens - I hope you will enjoy being a part of this vibrant community and look forward to reading more of your work soon. Best wishes, Dave
Sun 10th Jun 2012 18:14
Hi David - welcome to wol! hope you enjoy being a part of the site :)
Comment is about David Nixon (Poet profile)
Original item by David Nixon
Sun 10th Jun 2012 17:08
Even without your comments This is recognisable
The narrowing of the `dark forests` down to the `single cells`and `light bulbs` alerts the reader to a wider reference.
For me your last four lines echo the amount of human tragedy perpetrated by an `ideology`
which promised so much but didn`t even get to a material `promised land`
Sun 10th Jun 2012 17:00
I really enjoyed this poem. I liked the imagery and also the fast pace. :-)
Comment is about This happened. (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 16:30
The way your enjambed style drives any prettiness out of the rhyme is very apt in this one...and your word-choice pierces through it all like shards of ice. (I like the interiority of the `dendritic rings`)
I wonder, if your last three `hopeful` stanzas
might have worked better if you`d have end-lined the rhyming of them...maybe gradually to the end?
Made me turn the heating up.
Comment is about All In Good Time (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 16:11
This is isn`t fair!...I wasjust on the point of sneaking back to Sivota for a week when I checked the temperature (86 and rising)
So that was that!.
Then you posted this...(TALK ABOUT RUBBING SALT IN!)
Just the right tone, MC. A doughty competitor but true gentleman. I just about recollect memories of him from those days when cricket seemed to produce a gentler breed (Cowdrey, Dexter, Worrell). Benaud is a reminder to every sportsman today that being competitive and being a sport aren't mutually exclusive.
Comment is about RICHIE BENAUD - on his retirement to Australia (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sun 10th Jun 2012 15:26
That second stanza takes some believing!
(Have you looked in the corners for some dead poet`s bones?)
Comment is about Giving (Stockport WoL Collage Poem) (blog)
Original item by J F Keane
Sun 10th Jun 2012 15:18
I agree with Anne and Steve that this has prayer and faith in it, but has `humanistic` - rather than `religious` - feel to it.
It would sound more abnegationally religious if the `hopeful` lines seventeen,eighteen and nineteen were taken out and it ended as it began.
Streets ahead of the usual bitter `love` stuff we get on here though. It deserves the praise.
Comment is about Unconditional (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Sun 10th Jun 2012 15:02
A direct reminder that death is the final
arbiter of our human foibles and the idiocy of
"compartmentalising" love for our fellows.
"Did God give us love to be gaoled by gender?
When we leave this life, it's "return to sender".
Comment is about Tumbledown (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 14:52
Ah, Happy memories of `Maggie, Maggie, Maggie, out! out! out!`
(I like the reasoning in it, particularly the accentuation and parenthesis in lines seven and eight)
Comment is about Who Can Own Mountains? (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Sun 10th Jun 2012 14:12
Glad you liked Thrashing, Lynn. Hope the giggles have stopped.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 14:10
Hello MC Glad you liked Thrashing. I remember my old english teacher telling us we should write what we know about!
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 14:07
Glad you liked Thrashing. The photo of you I found by googling "Madame Doncaster"
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (Poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
Sun 10th Jun 2012 14:02
Hello Graham. Yes, the lead and choker were a bit tight but the thrashing was worth it.
Comment is about Graham Sherwood (Poet profile)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Sun 10th Jun 2012 13:59
Thx for reading and the feedback.
One after another relates to the consecutive nature of the executions and piny to the forest that they were carried out in, so I think I'm probably bound by the background and content into keeping those references in tact...though they might be weaker than other parts of the poem.
The poem itself relates to the Katyn massacre;
Along with Stalin, the man at the heart of the massacre;
Sun 10th Jun 2012 13:49
You have every right to feel proud of this, Lynn.
Sun 10th Jun 2012 11:28
It looks like a lovely place Lynn. What a tribute to have your poem included on the video like that. My only quibble is that the poem scrolled through too fast, which made it a difficult read. I think you expressed your love of the place beautifully. x
Sun 10th Jun 2012 11:18
Very amusing Harry - power to the powerless LOL!
Comment is about THE FLOATING VOTER SONG (blog)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 11:16
That title certainly drew me in to wanting to read more :)
'penetrating the nest of a thousand butterflies' was probably my favourite line - it's hightly evocative, I think.
I see this is a translated poem - it would be nice to have the original version just in case it's a language any of us can understand.
Comment is about Chained orgasms are biting my lips (blog)
Original item by Noris Roberts
Sun 10th Jun 2012 11:08
The right to ramble is an important one, so I applaud your message Laura. I can remember feeling the same way when I rampaged through farmers' cornfiels as a child...
I don't have time to ramble anywhere at the moment, but I like the thought that I could, if I wanted to :)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 10:55
Your poetry is never easy to comment on Mike - born from tough experience, I think. This one has a dream like quality and probably filled with imagery that has a particular relevance to you. It is an intriguing piece.
Comment is about Ode to The Fisher King (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Sun 10th Jun 2012 10:47
Great idea for a poem Chris and I really like the atmosphere you create.
Don't know if you are after suggestions, but if it were mine I'd get rid of the 'one after the other' from the first verse to give it more impact.
I'd also be tempted to dispense with 'piny smells' which might mean you have to tweek the rest.
Love the ending. Nice to see you posting poetry again. x
Sun 10th Jun 2012 10:37
Thanks for your comment on my poem Chris - I'm glad you found something to like in it :) x
Comment is about Chris Co (Poet profile)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 09:02
Martin, it's a clever idea and as Winston's reply suggests, it might be that some people's browsers will be OK with it, some not.
There are so many browsers out there with so many versions, it is difficult to accommodate them all when writing the software.
The site does not have the features that Word has. The only way I can see to paste a concrete poem like yours into here would be to use 'tables' in Word. That will probably keep your poem's shape, but you will have gridlines around each word. We do our best and love the idea that you are pushing back the frontiers. The site is more advanced than many in some of its features, but we have yet to tackle this one. Sorry.
That said, perhaps someone else can work out a clever way to do it using existing software?
And, as Winston says, we can still see what you have done and applaud you for it.
Sun 10th Jun 2012 06:54
Hi Lilian - a very warm welcome to WOL> I hope you enjoy being a part of the site. Good to see you have put a poem on the blog section already! :)
Comment is about Lilian Hart (Poet profile)
Original item by Lilian Hart
Sun 10th Jun 2012 06:52
Hi Abigail - a warm welcome to WOL. Great to have you on here. I hope to see more of your poems - if you put a poem on the blog section then you'll find more people will read it and it's a good way to interact with the site, getting feedback etc if that is your wish. I hope you enjoy being a part of WOL :)
Sun 10th Jun 2012 02:03
to a hostile soil
I like that a lot- well thought.
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