Dave Carr

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:52

Hi Laura,
Thanks for comment on Compy Dompy (ages ago I know)
Just found time to view your Diggers video.
Excellent
Dave

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:51

Another new one! On a roooolllll!

Clever, succinct, very different from previous form. Good poem - enjoyed.

Took me years of self-tuition to learn small talk, as it goes. Couldn't understand how people opened their mouths and said...nothing.

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:49

Sorry it's taken me so long to comment on this - I saw it, meant to, then got busy with other stuff.

Anyhoooo - what a wonderful poem. Nice to see a new piece from you Is. Totally agree re performance making all the difference, but I can't fault the rhythm in here.

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:47

Haha - oooo so cutting :D Love it. That intro's funny as owt too :D

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:44

Actually I think you should take all the previous ones down right now, and then post them back up, one per week.

Anthony's right - barely anyone will look at them now cos they're backed up into hyperlinks.

Your writing is interesting, and politically right up my street. Do us, and yourself, a huge favour, and put them up slowly and that way you'll get more exposure and the people reading them can ingest one at a time :)

Good performance piece this - enjoyed it, some killer lines

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:32

Unusual structure to this...can't help but think it may be improved visually by playing with the structure on the page, but as for the actual poem itself, nope - leave that. A beautiful poem sonically - I can hear it being read out. Very musical, lilting. Lots in there to tickle my curiosity, however the neat/shambolic jars a teeny bit.

Surplus apostrophe after 'breezes'?

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Dave Carr

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:32

Hi Katherine.
Thanks for comment on Compy Dompy.
Sorry for not getting back sooner.
I enjoyed Dedicated Follower of fashion.
Dave

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Dave Carr

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:26

Hi Isobel.
Thanks for comment on Compy Dompy. Ages ago I know. Am recovering from surgery so can't make Tudor tonight. Gives me time to look at WOL though. Dave

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:24

Another wonderful piece of writing Marianne - crafted and yet seemingly so easy

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Laura Taylor

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:22

Jampacked full of hugely evocative imagery - your writing is changing and flowing so fast these days, and this one seems to have more...what's the word...form?structure? It is less fluid/stream of cons whilst still holding onto the process that kicks it off. I know what I mean!!

Love it, fantastic piece. I read those first 3 verses in awe.

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Dave Carr

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:22

Hi Sid,
Had to look twice there - like the name -incognito in your Holt. Thanks for comment in another life. Dompy is to Compy as Dumpty is to Humpty. Whimsical I suppose.
Dave

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Dave Carr

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 12:13

Thanks to all for comments on this. Seems ages ago. Been busy with family stuff.

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Greg Freeman

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 10:35

Enjoyed the journey this took, Sid, and a very credible one it was, too. Your poetic style is confident and assured. Which reminds me, apropos of almost nothing ... whatever happened to Augusta Darling?

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 09:44

Thank you :)

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fiona sinclair

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 09:28

thank you!

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Jonboy Walton

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Thu 8th Nov 2012 00:53

Hey Laura,This is a great piece;esp love the third stanza with the references to 'coalition buzzword bingo,sign on and shout house'.Haha!Clever and funny!By the way,loved your performance at the John The Baptist gig.

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Solar Winds

Wed 7th Nov 2012 23:33

Girl power to the rescue again!x

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

Wed 7th Nov 2012 22:52

a flamin' handy analogy!

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Sid Villan

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 22:05

for the clouds now moving in - I'd have preferred summat clearer, simpler
now the clouds are moving in

I liked the poem, nice title.

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tony sheridan

Wed 7th Nov 2012 20:31

Good one! In my youth, we called her "Nitty Nora...the bug explorer!" Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Wed 7th Nov 2012 20:23

Pure poetry. Take care, Tony.

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Tommy Carroll

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 19:28

It's about...well...mmm...it....!....aaah...if you...oh shi...I think separation from something...yes that's it.

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Ledger de la Bald

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 15:01

John....You just crack me up!

Good one mate.

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andy n

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 13:16

thanks for the comments guys.

glad you like it.

i have now slightly re-edited the poem as can
be seen, but glad you liked it

Andy

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Anthony Emmerson

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 13:02

I always find it tricky to comment on work that's obviously very personal and offers the audience only rudimentary clues as to the subject.

The "shambolic" streets and Minster suggest York, but I wouldn't dare to venture further.

Interesting . . .

Regards,
A.E.

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Anthony Emmerson

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 12:50

I’m sure rhyme will “Not Fade Away” John. Don’t say “It’s All Over Now”, because “Time Is On My Side”, so don’t “Paint It Black.” Some free verse is surely acceptable, although often “(I Can’t Get No) Satisfaction” from it – still, you’ve got to have some “Sympathy For The Devil” and “”You Can’t Always Get What You Want.” It’s like being between “A Rock And A Hard Place.” “What A Shame”, maybe we’re just “Out Of Time.” But I know you’re a “Street Fighting Man” John, and, in the end “It’s Only Rock And Roll” and WOL is just a “Beggars Banquet.” So let the free versers sit in their “Voodoo Longue” poking their keyboards with “Sticky Fingers” and constructing “Bridges To Babylon.” I’m quite happy to remain as an occasional rhymer, in “Exile On Main Street” – and just “Let It Bleed.”

(In respect of your poem/song - brilliant mate – and not a red wheelbarrow or UFO in sight!) :)

Regards,
A.E.

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Graham Sherwood

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 12:40

I don't think it will be somehow. Yet another cracking rip-off John.

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Cathy

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Wed 7th Nov 2012 11:19

You put your finger on it there. Like waiting for a bus that will never turn up.

You have hit the nail on the head- and that is a good thing to do with an awful feeling- because your heart just had a word with my heart. X

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Chik J Duncan

Wed 7th Nov 2012 00:02

Just joined up. Couldn't resist the lure of bogies. Here's a wee offering which I think I subtitled "Green is the colour of my true love's hair":

SNOTABOGIE

"Bogie!"
"Snot!"
"It is so a bogie."
"No it's snot."

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

Tue 6th Nov 2012 21:57

Hi Steve-Thanks.Twas a non-collaborative effort.

Patricia.x

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

Tue 6th Nov 2012 21:55

I really am sorry for you and your Dad Solar.
Please accept my profoundest sympathy.
And thank you.

Patricia.x

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John Aikman

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 21:21

Well, as you singled out Isobel and I as your favourites (so far) I guess I'm obliged to pass comment...

I find this poem a puzzle. I'm notoriously averse (hah!) to puzzling poetry...I prefer poems to be immediately accessible, at least in some way, and then reveal more with each reading. This certainly achieves that...and yet remains a puzzle to me.

I wonder where the neat, narrow, yet oxymoronically shambolic streets are? There's a Minster...?

Hope floats...

Some lovely language...and I'm going to have to keep returning to it like a crossword puzzle...darn....I hope I figure it out someday...

: )

Jx

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Marcia Calame

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 17:48



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Isobel

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 17:32

There is some very delicate bubble wafting going on here. I like the image of that first line immensely. I think the concluding line also holds that mesmeric gentle quality.

My advise to you would be - don't blow it :) x

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Anthony Emmerson

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 16:06

Maybe romance isn't quite dead yet; just in the end stage of a terminal illness - D.N.R.

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garside

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 15:14

i like this edit better and feel the poem emerge from the inspirational earlier draft and agree with Darren Thomas' views


that's the 2nd line in Mikhail - that mean you didn't read the rest? when i see this kind of comment i sigh and want to understand what it means in relation to the poem - if it is that you didn't read because of the word god then why bother commenting at all?

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Nigel Astell

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 15:04

His wife
Is free
But the
Jealous triangle
Must keep
Hot blooded
To make
It work.

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Isobel

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 13:45

It took me right to the end to fathom out what this was about! At first I thought it was experimental poetry and decided that I was nay going to comment on it ;) Then I thought they must be annagrams....

Ha - a lot more fun than putting an Ikea wardrobe together - have done a lot of that recently :( I much enjoyed this :)

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Isobel

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 13:36

Thanks Graham - I think I'll follow your suggestion. I'll probably know what feels right when I'm performing it - or reading it out loud - not sure it's a performance poem, as such :)

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Katy Hughes

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 13:28

Thank you Anthony! : ) Katy

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Isobel

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 13:04

Methinks you are not such a novice at this poetry business.

You manage to make this sad but chilling at the same time - that's some achievement...

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 11:22

Isobel, you know what I would say. Don't change it.
As for paring it there is some fat but in the hesitant atmosphere of the situation here, one can often overuse words in a nervous sort of way, ergo leave the fat in.
I like this style for you.

best wishes, Graham.

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Mikhail Smith

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 10:41

I was with you till you mentioned god. mikhail x.

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 09:25

Thanks for your recent positive comments Greg. Always appreciated. I need to get some serious commenting done of my own, ther's some strong stuff about on WOL. Regards, G

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Greg Freeman

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 07:38

Like John, I've just come across this. Classy, condensed poem, Graham.

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Steve Higgins

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 01:17

Had so many nights out like this one . .

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Steve Higgins

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Tue 6th Nov 2012 01:14

Like this one guys.
By the way, which one of you wrote this, or is it a joint effort, like lennon and mcartney used to do?

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Graham Sherwood

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Mon 5th Nov 2012 23:32

If people didn't go, zoos wouldn't be there etc etc!

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John Coopey

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Mon 5th Nov 2012 23:14

How did I miss this? Very evocative.

Reminds me a bit of DT's "slow, black, sloe-black, fishing-boat bobbing sea". (or thereabouts).

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Harry O'Neill

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Mon 5th Nov 2012 22:57


Strange, bewildered, caught in a mind-maze piece of reflectivity. Full of unconclusivity.

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