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Harry O'Neill

Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:57


Don`t know how I missed this one John.

TOUR DE FORCE!!!

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:34


Liked the extra `O`in the `Ohh`and snow as a quilt.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:21


Simple...and faultless.

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Gray Nicholls

Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:16

a fitting tribute for what looks like a great man who made a difference. i can relate to this well.

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 17th Dec 2013 13:01


Awe, Aye! Aye! Ian...couldn`t I have the last two...and all the others!
Be a sport!

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Harry O'Neill

Tue 17th Dec 2013 12:44

Like this,
Like that final stanza. That `bloated` fits rain-clouds exactly.

I think I would make those last two read

Colours washed until the remains
Are indeterminate shapes, and the distance
Swallowed, swallowed in cloud.

Ah, those clouds! So bloated and low.
Could I reach, push then back,
Reveal hidden horizons?

Sorry for messin` with it (it was so good)

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Fkx

Tue 17th Dec 2013 10:26

Thanks Cynthia. I will definitely consider your valuable input. You have touched on the exact areas wherein I was having some concerns.Re: "Moving On." Many thanks.
Most appreciatively yours, Frederick.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 17th Dec 2013 09:19

Cheers Is :)

Must admit, felt real nice to perform those two poems - so different to what I've been doing so much of lately!

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Laura Taylor

Tue 17th Dec 2013 09:16

Solar - your educational years sound just like mine. I was barely in for the last 2 years (in the good old days when you could get away with it!), and not in much attendance for the first 3 years. Spent my time in libraries, educating meself - buried in books!

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Francine

Tue 17th Dec 2013 00:05

I just read this and signed back on just to comment... (You should feel honoured). I find this fascinating - you've put into words what I have often wondered! I see lots of bovine on one of my long drives... I can empathise with wanting to save them, and in a small way, I try to do my part. I love the depth of sentiment in this too - you can attribute it to other things - bovine as a metaphor... Awesome :-)

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Andy Ainsworth

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:41

Thanks, Cynthia. I can see what you mean. I had toyed with:

Rain's small rivers on the train window
refract grey light, distort landscapes

But I like rhythm of the first line you suggested and the alliteration in the second line. Let's give it a try...

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Francine

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:38

Hell hath no fury... ;-)

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Francine

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:35

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Rose Casserley

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:26

jaipers Laura! if you knew what little time moi spent under yon 'dreaming spires'and their kind
you would be giving me a gold star for effort,despite the 'chockfullness of typos'.

Getting my name registered in first lesson,then getting my arse outta there till repeating the same procedure in the afternoon,then finding lads,booze and fags were the things I sought to teach meself-yep! big bollock dropped,but there yer go.Still,you managed to get the gist of the poem eh-ta Lauz.x

Isobel,I'm dropping one word and going with whats left-Thanks(both).x

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:22


I like the:

`Butterflies hovered serenely in meditation`

And the way your stuff is spreading.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:09

I like the way this tangled rail-track web ofmetaphore mirrors those web-like pictures of the brain threads that they show, and the `Beeching` reference. Together with the wheels losing their grip and `sliding back` it is alla solid and poetically apt representation ofAlzheimers.

As an example of using the ordinary words of a past even to express the sadness and sense of loss of a present illness it is excellent.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 16th Dec 2013 23:01

Emily, you are right to say that Poetry is a great way of keeping the mind right. It's what we all do on here.
With poetry, there is no right or wrong. Everything is allowed and no one stands out. It is all up for discussion.
The general problem with people (society) is that often originals stand out.
Put your faith in your poetry. That will keep you on track. Be Brave too.

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Freda Davis

Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:59

Ah the blue eyes of Peter O'Toole,
Haunting me since the day I left school.
I believe he had no interest in female anatomy.
Some old friend once told that to me.
Outstanding as Lawrence of Arabia,
And a fine actor, although maybe a
bit overshadowed by Omar Sharif,
whose dark eyes expressed ineffable grief.

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Emily

Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:08

Thank you :3

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Dec 2013 22:03

CLITS AND LABIA!!!??? How very dare you?
Either you've got something stuck on your mind, MC, or you need a rhyming dictionary.
This is the first (and, I hope, only time) I ever write "LOL" but it really did make me LOL.

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Paul H Tubb

Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:28

Greetings Fellow Dead Head...

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:25

Tim Sherwood or George Graham?
They'd be better off playing you, me and a couple of toby jugs at the back at the minute. What happened to the most miserly defence in the country?
(I carry the map above around with me just in case)

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 16th Dec 2013 19:02

Sorry I was a little confused at first john. I thought the picture was the THFC line-up but then corrected myself. The above is actually useful!!

Well I suppose my namesake left i/c at Spurs can't really do much worse.

Have a brilliant Christmas JC, whichever manger you're in!!

GS

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Dec 2013 18:58

NO WAY!
Look what I've found.
http://www.oddee.com/item_97857.aspx

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Isobel

Mon 16th Dec 2013 18:12

Just as well the votings till midnight - Cinders here has a nativity play to sit through now, followed by an orchestral concert on the other side of Wigan. Will get my vote in before the clock strikes 12 :)

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Dec 2013 15:39

Each - many thanks for your kind thoughts on my Christmas No 1.
I would agree with you Izzy about the simplicity of the male organ. When you get to my age it's remembering what it's for that,s more complicated.
Anthony - I have one waiting in the oven for Selby Abbey, "Like a Verger".

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Anthony Emmerson

Mon 16th Dec 2013 14:12

Clitoris - it's one of those words that's difficult to remember for me - always on the tip of my tongue. I look forward to the Selby Abbey performance of this work - now that really would be a cunning stunt. All the best for Crimbo John - and looking forward to more earthy guffaws in 2014!

Regards,

A.E.

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Isobel

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:54

Great performance Laura - I much enjoyed this on the night and now!

Still having major problems accessing stuff on WOL - hence the patchy commenting pattern. Will have to get my nephew to have a look at my machine :(

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Isobel

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:45

I like it too. Though I think you could aid flow by re-ordering some of the words, I love its originality. It's a very thoughtful piece.

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Isobel

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:34

'I’d really like to think I am a liberated, modern man
(I often pick my socks up off the floor)'

If that's the definition, then I think I must be a modern liberated man as well ;)

Very amusing John - dare I say that it would go down well in the right venues :)

You gents are so lucky - there's no confusion with the ladies over your erogenous bits!

Merry Christmas to you... xx


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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:20

It is good. I just don't quite like the 'as' in an opening line. Would you even consider:

Small rivers on the train window
rain refracts grey light, distorts landscapes

IMO, the alliteration and musical quality takes on a new breadth. Just a thought.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:14

Good theme - very universal. Always good to see you posting.

IMO, I suggest two changes - for rhythm and verb tense respectively:

With each sunset
sunrise waits'

and

here in downy refuge lies

(unless you are using 'lay' as 'song' which doesn't quite work either.)

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John Coopey

Mon 16th Dec 2013 13:04

Many thanks, MC. You're right about this having its linkage with a previous poem, but not the last one - I think; more like "The Naming of the Parts". Certainly - I re-used the pic.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:58

Excellent review, Dave. I hope to get the book in the New Year.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:54

I take the view that the nominee is a pathfinder
in poetry - someone who has gone before to open
up new avenues for those who seek direction and
their own means of literary adventure and exploration.
Well deserved.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:50

You lucky lot. And Gaia too. If only 'wishes were horses.'

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 16th Dec 2013 12:38

Really enjoyed the musical setting and the
inventive lyrics and wonder if there is any
connection between this post and its predecessor?!
Poor young mankind - it's such a strain
When the dick controls the brain
A cool eye - like a medico
Would help that ready,steady, go.
Heading heedless for that funnel
Like an express train in Box Tunnel.
All that coming and all that going
All that tiring to-and-fro-ing.

Nature's got one way of knowing
If the grass was worth the mowing...
In nine months will a kid be showing?!!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 16th Dec 2013 11:13

Hahaa :D I've heard it, it's bloody great :D

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Laura Taylor

Mon 16th Dec 2013 11:08

What an unusual piece! I really like it. It's chockful of bloody typos, mind ;p

But still, it's a wonderful idea, and I enjoyed your wordplay in there. :)

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Rose Casserley

Mon 16th Dec 2013 10:52

I'm pre-empting the possiblity,of comments akin to,'this is a very MOOV-ING poem.
So,sensible ones only,if thou wouldst!x

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Laura Taylor

Mon 16th Dec 2013 10:35

Howdy - re McGarrigle's Glasgow. Thought about it, grew to really like it, have changed it. Thanks Cynth!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 16th Dec 2013 10:35

Thought about it, grew to really like it, have changed it. Thanks Cynth and Darren!

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Linda Cosgriff

Mon 16th Dec 2013 09:49

I have voted!

You deserve to win, Julian. You are inspirational.

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dorinda macdowell

Mon 16th Dec 2013 08:08

Hello Stockport WOL! - I've just seen info about an award - "Unsung Hero" - and Julian is one of the people nominated. I'll be voting for him of course! - just thought I'd mention this! Dorinda x

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Starfish

Mon 16th Dec 2013 07:54

And then maybe a video with relevant dance moves?

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John Coopey

Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:47

A welcome update, Starfish. It would be nice if common-sense prevailed.
I myself have a soft spot for beavers.

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John Coopey

Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:42

Agreed with Steve and Starfish, Dave. Audio! Audio! Audio!.

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John Coopey

Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:35

Very poignant, MC. I particularly like the phrase "manifest its worth".

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Noetic-fret!

Sun 15th Dec 2013 22:01

Brilliant piece of writing Tom. I was truly enveloped by it.

Nice work.

Mike

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