Sat 13th Oct 2012 20:49
"Her face was chipped,broken and her smile missing."---fabulous description leading us down a path of sympathy.A lovely tale with a happy ending.Well done!
Comment is about The Old Broken Doll (blog)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
Sat 13th Oct 2012 20:10
Nice one. As a gardener I see beautiful things every season. Turn the picture of the tree upside down. Looks like a lung. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Through an apple tree in December (blog)
Sat 13th Oct 2012 19:53
Nice one Lynn! If you buy a pack of peanuts..... you get WARNING CONTAINS PEANUTS! I would love to have a swim with a few Dolphins. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about fishy tale (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sat 13th Oct 2012 19:29
Beautiful. Take care, Tony.
Sat 13th Oct 2012 18:08
Hi Shirley, hope all okay over there in texas and thank you so much for your commment on 'Tomorrows Chip Wrappers' thats the effect I hoped it would have so was great to read your comment.
Love your rag doll, poem and the sentiment behind it, like the layout too, enjoyed reading your other poems, best wishes Jeff X
Sat 13th Oct 2012 17:37
.. hello Shirley Smothers.. just enjoyed listening to your audio pieces .. slightly surreal on a wet Manchester afternoon .. but very interesting.
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Sat 13th Oct 2012 17:16
.. thank-you M.C .... 'Arlette' is about a ghost .. you're right ... cheers.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
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Sat 13th Oct 2012 17:14
... hello Philipos .. very pleased you enjoyed 'Arlette' .. thanks ..
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Sat 13th Oct 2012 17:12
.. hello Roy .. thank you for the 'Arlette' comment ..
Comment is about Roy Chetham (Poet profile)
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Sat 13th Oct 2012 15:33
A timely comment from much nearer home about the actions of this girl group. It has always been the prerogative of the young to shock and these singers certainly did that. It is fascinating that this was considered so offensive in a country that had abandoned religion for so long. They chose their "performance platform" and certainly got more than they expected in return! Offensive? Certainly. Successful in making themselves heard? Certainly.
The lesson seems to be.....
"Don't go to church if you seek peace and quiet,
You're at risk from a performance by Pussy Riot!" :-)
Comment is about Heroines? (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Sat 13th Oct 2012 15:27
Hitler: An Argument in Favour of Abortion
Wonderful, wonderful poem, Linda! - it shines with sincerity and truth.
You have captured my feelings exactly, my friend.
Comment is about Linda Cosgriff (Poet profile)
Original item by Linda Cosgriff
Sat 13th Oct 2012 14:56
Another little gem of quiet laughter from The
Are you trying to worm your way into our affections, Hugh?!
Comment is about Life in the slow lane (blog)
Original item by hugh
Sat 13th Oct 2012 14:38
Just viewed your `Genesis` again and having third thoughts,
I think the second ones were just age (and a bug) Looking at it again it seems that the build of pressure to use the `media` style of `production` will probably become too great to resist....I just worry that it may become something of a welter and that the more thoughtful kinds of poem might suffer by being
under produced....I`ve had some experience of playwriting and I know how much the `show not tell` is to the fore, and that this pictorial `showing` (even with the reproduced words) is still - with the music and colour - the strongest element of the `produced` poem. I fear sometimes in the direction of emotion rather than thought.
I know all this makes me an old fogey and that I`m swimming against the tide here.
Incidently, regarding your `Genesis` poem:
Did you see the Horizon thing `What happened before the big bang`...It was hilarious! what with the `inflation` theory, or the big bangy sort of `evolutionary` theory those guys are getting themselves into a right pickle (the only thing that seems to be certain is that the actual Big Bang Theory has died the death. A good job you didn`t plant any flags
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (Poet profile)
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Patricia &Stefan wilde
Sat 13th Oct 2012 00:21
"The moment you passed
your eyes over mine"..very romantic!
Touch of the Onedin line wethinks-
Pat and Stef.xx
Comment is about Sometimes We Wonder How We Met... (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Sat 13th Oct 2012 00:13
one very clever
and never more appropriate stanza.
Thanks Dorinda(lovely name by the way)
Pat and Stef.xx
Comment is about Another Nail in Culture's Coffin (blog)
Original item by Dorinda MacDowell
Sat 13th Oct 2012 00:04
To be in the presence of such a welcome ghost is both sad and beautiful.
A similar situation developed after the death of my mum-in-law.
The new people(total strangers)who moved into her vacated house told us both at some point they had seen a ghost in one of the bedrooms.
The description was exactly that of my mum-in-law-down to the usual fag in her mouth.
Lord please make the smokers stand outside the pearly gates when they light up!
Lovely poem very much enjoyed-thank you.xx
Comment is about Negative Equity (blog)
Original item by Nicky Burrows
jean lucy thompson
Fri 12th Oct 2012 23:38
Winston :) Thanx for comment
Comment is about Winston Plowes (Poet profile)
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Fri 12th Oct 2012 23:15
now thats where you and Patricia differ Lynn-
she would be more interested in finding out if the price has been knocked down-haha.
and more power to your consideration
for the species.
Cheers ex-bun baker.
Fri 12th Oct 2012 23:09
Coming from you Pete,that means a lot to us.You have made our day-or should that be nught? we are most grateful for your comment.Pat and Stef.
Comment is about Compunction (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 22:17
Lots of character in this Jean :-)
Comment is about TWO 'AULD 'UNS SAT ON A BENCH (blog)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
Fri 12th Oct 2012 21:42
Thanx for your kind comments Hugh Much appreciated Nice to have encouragement :)
Comment is about hugh (Poet profile)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 20:05
Thanks again Laura, I have responded to your wall on this.
Comment is about WISPS. (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 19:53
Hi Laura, 'Wisps' so glad you commented. Actually I sent that off at the same time as 'How Down at the Hyatt' to Poetry24, but they have yet to mention it.
I am mulling over the Face Book thing & will let you know. Sounds like a good plan.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Fri 12th Oct 2012 19:48
Thanks for your comments on First Class Ticket. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 19:43
Nice one! Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Breathe in the Dust (blog)
Original item by Pete Fisher
Fri 12th Oct 2012 19:36
Thanks for your comments on TOUCH THE RIVER. Take care, Tony.
Comment is about Pete Fisher (Poet profile)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 18:05
... excellent ... take it out on the bass guitar! ..
Comment is about Consequences of your actions, kid. (blog)
Original item by Joy Claypool
Fri 12th Oct 2012 17:39
So then... HOW WAS the magic by the holy river?
I am fabulous and busy : )
And you, poetic sir?
Comment is about To the end of the territory! (blog)
Original item by Steve Regan
Fri 12th Oct 2012 17:01
Hi Philipos. Thanks for commenting on Grey Ford Transits. Appreciated.
Fri 12th Oct 2012 16:53
Thank you for commenting on Grey Ford Transits, Anthony. Appreciated.
Fri 12th Oct 2012 16:30
Ah, but they do have a vote - and the right to withdraw their labour. One day they will realise that and remember the teaching of Marx and Engels.
"Workers of the world unite, you have nothing to lose but your chains!"
Politics is a cyclical phenomenon and the pendulum swings from one side to the other . . .
Comment is about classless society (blog)
Original item by jan oskar hansen
Fri 12th Oct 2012 16:20
Thanks Tony. Glad you liked it.
Comment is about Yorkshire Steel (blog)
Original item by Adam Warwicker
Fri 12th Oct 2012 16:19
Thanks for your comments. It was based on observations in Bournemouth earlier in the year.
Thanks for the typo alert!
Comment is about Behind The Facade (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 16:08
Cheers fella!! I'm looking forward to the 'excellent homemade cakes' ;D
Comment is about Mike Hilton (Poet profile)
Original item by Mike Hilton
Fri 12th Oct 2012 15:49
Good Luck at Nantwich mate!
Fri 12th Oct 2012 15:22
Cheers ears re y'note on Lexicon :)
I shall be at home tomorrow though, purtying myself up and practising my arse off in readiness for the Nantwich thang.
Comment is about Julian Jordon (Poet profile)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Fri 12th Oct 2012 15:21
You know what I'm going to say, don't you Phil?!
Poetry...what was that number again? ;)
Get it in there!
I LOVE this - I think it's really well written, and the rhythm is spot on. Nicely done!
Fri 12th Oct 2012 15:15
Ha - yes indeed.
Fri 12th Oct 2012 15:12
sock it to them, as Dave says. and I agree that it cries out for some sort of repetition, rhyme to reinforce its messages.
That way, you might go viral, start a lexicon wave, or something?
I have no problem with it being on here, and I cannot imagine that our news editor will. Now, if we knew that someone was going to read a poem at the Tax bus we could put that on our news.
Comment is about Brand New Lexicon (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 14:52
This struck a chord.
I particularly like 'repetitive visitations of old ghosts and future servants of doubt'.
Where would our creative spirit be without these demons to fight?
Thank you Pat and Stef
Fri 12th Oct 2012 13:42
'Light dancing under my eyelids like a galaxy,' I like that.
Comment is about galaxy (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 12:22
"His eyes moved slowly as he watched them pass"
"She rose up with a creak and a sigh"
Great phrases .A fabulous poem reflecting on the past of how it used to be."Thoughts re-wound"Well done!!
Fri 12th Oct 2012 11:37
very good.. sad thoughts .. but very nice poem .
Comment is about Thoughts for a funeral (blog)
Original item by Joshua Van-Cook
Fri 12th Oct 2012 10:26
Yayy! Fantastic well done! Really pleased for you :D
I don't know if you use Facebook at all Phil, but I've been working on revamping the Write Out Loud Community page on there.
Once a month, a friend of mine, Cathy Bryant, posts huge lists of links for all publishers and comps coming up, and if you 'Like' the Community page, you will receive them all automatically :)
Poetry24 is one that was recommended to me by Cathy :)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 10:16
Thank you guys for your encouragement and your suggestions; they are greatly appreciated.
I will record this one without the 'Ands' in the last stanza to see how it affects the impact from a performance standpoint. Thanks for that, it is a good point.
Comment is about Dusty Tears (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 10:10
Hi Tony, only just come across this, and have to say, I really like your song. The audio is very good, and I shall no doubt come back for another hearing. Well done.
Comment is about First Class Ticket. (blog)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 09:47
Hi again Anthony, thank you for the explanation on "devon". Queen's English in Hertfordshire? (squirm!) Probably but no posh airs and graces here! ;-)
Fri 12th Oct 2012 08:33
Hi Laura, just to let you know that website you mentioned has accepted 'How down at the Hyatt' for publication today. Much obliged for the pointer.
John F Keane
Fri 12th Oct 2012 06:39
Here is the online petition:
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