Fri 30th Mar 2012 00:05
Dear Wilde ones, when dealing with woollen garments one uses kneedles not clubs. sorry, no cigar this time but a jolly good effort. Ta muchly, Nick.ps. there is a very, very adult version but I'll save it for a rainy day.
Comment is about Space Knits (blog)
Original item by Nick Clifton
Fri 30th Mar 2012 00:03
Hi Nicky, I didn't anticipate you could dig this deep within a short notice. I'm impressed. I love it.
Comment is about ANTICIPATION (blog)
Original item by Nicky Burrows
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:48
A delightful idea, well expressed. There is a lightness of touch echoed in the 'delicate and sweet' of April which enhances the storyline.
Excellent choice of picture to accompany your poem,Larissa. Well done!
Comment is about Happy Marriage (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:45
Excellent and well worthy of a competition.
(a very, very, tentative suggestion: I think the penultimate line of the last one needs another beat)
But still excellent.
Comment is about An Avian Theme (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:44
news report on my friend Mel's friend Lynette who was sadly lost in car accident. not good. Lynette wherever you are, i pray you're in a better place. RIP.
Comment is about poems i read at Rochdale town hall march29 (blog)
Original item by nick armbrister
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:26
Shame on you John,
After your many tracts in favour of the full on Tactile, to turn untactile at your age! (mind you`ve done it very tastefully)
Lovely to see you and `Gert` on tuesday (and hear you)
Comment is about A Trip to the Chemist (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:11
Hello, John! It's an interesting fact that your brother-in-law was from Ukraine. But how did it happen that he came to England in 1943, it was the time of The Second World War? Sorry, that he passed away.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 23:02
Now then, MP.
I hope life's picked up a bit for you.
Glad you liked "Dear Marge".
Comment is about Richie Muster (Poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:59
What ho, Stella.
Glad you liked "Dear Marge".
Nice to see you again on Tues along with other WOL acquaintances that I'd not met before. Hope you enjoyed the set (despite the singing!)
Comment is about (Poet profile)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:40
Glad you liked "Dear Marge", Lynn.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:38
I entered this competition pretending to be 13 years old. I was told my submission was too puerile.
Comment is about If you can't beat them, give birth to someone more talented who can :) (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:31
Isobel, I'm glad my new found strength gave you a giggle. ("Dear Marge")
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:27
Many thanks for your thoughts on "Dear Marge", MC. The performance at Wallasey went well. I wasn't booed off, although I was booed on.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:24
Thanks for your thoughts on my letter, "Dear Marge". Glad you liked it.
Comment is about Nick Clifton (Poet profile)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:22
What ho, Yvonne.
Thankyou for commenting on my letter, "Dear Marge"
Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (Poet profile)
Original item by Yvonne Brunton
John A Silkstone
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:18
Lovely poem Larise, I see you are from the Ukraine; my brother-in-law was from the Ukraine. Came to England in 1943 and married my sister in 1950. Sad to say, he passed away in 2009.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 22:11
great one Nick I'll have to get the wife in and let her read it. Don't often let her near any machines, they go kaput
Thu 29th Mar 2012 20:47
Hello, M.C. !
Thank you so much for the help and the comments on "Happy Marriage". I was just touched to see that you've found time to read my poem. Your advice is great.
I didn't know the word 'suitors'. I had to look at the dictionary as at first glance I thought it was a synonym to the word 'suitable' though I understood that it was someone who suits I was not sure. Now I see. 'Suitors' is a perfect word here. More than that, it rhymes better: confused - suitors.
Please, when you have time, have a look at my site:
With warmest wishes,
Thu 29th Mar 2012 20:38
Now we've come to the point here. I didn't know the word 'suitors'. I had to look at the dictionary as at first glance I thought it was a synonym to the word 'suitable' though I understood that it was someone who suits I was not sure. Now I see. 'Suitors' is a perfect word here. More than that, it rhymes better: confused - suitors.
Thank you very much.
With warmest wishes,
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Thu 29th Mar 2012 20:23
One fan of this poem for sure
is the missus
We are going to
(with thy permission)
print it off-
no not add it to the loo roll!
take it to show the Ladies
at her kernitting club.
Nice one Nick.xx
Thu 29th Mar 2012 20:09
Thanks very much Nick.
Do let us know
when you are close to the big goodye-
then we'll get the cucumber sarnies
and twiglets on the go
maybe throw in a few gold labels-
aka-liquid dynamite,as well.
Cheers again Mr.C.xx
Comment is about Good grief! (blog)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Thu 29th Mar 2012 19:38
for you makhumza,
“Sawubona mfowethu –
So where to?
A national, international
Day of celebration on this,
………but what can ‘We,’
Celebrate when crying I saw
Him bleeding, his sister close,
Screaming for his life………
……….So where to mfowethu?
The cemetery where many,
Were seized from days of living,
The bullets and the beatings
Stealing township citizens in
Darkest days of the Apartheid………
………The cemetery belittles
The sacrifice they made,
Schoolchildren with home made
Closthed and bags to carry books
Considered unlawful by the Boer.”
“Baba, come with me!
For this day sings sad songs to
Celebrate the passing of the child,
And tonight, we’ll stay by twilight,
And sing the songs of
Freedom for now, we are no longer
Homeless, this, at last our land………
………For they are not dead!
But there within the twilight
Gathered under roof of stars,
Hector Petersen with all
His friends having long
Been taught the barrel and the
Double tap cannot deny the peoples
………a love of land and country
That long ago endured plight of
Battle that never scattered peoples hope,
Hector Petersen is there, is here
Within my heart and everywhere I stare;
Looking at the people –
Glad his courage dared.”
“Did we do it mfowethu?
Do we now teach?
Do we keep our Land,
Is it placed in hands Biko
Would have shook?
Are we free from tyranny?
I ask as only now, the child I see
Sits upon the drum, bangs a simple
Beat reminiscent of a calling
By a warring nation under rule?”
“Baba, tis a warning to the
Soul from Petersen himself;
Not to linger too defiantly upon
His tragic death but dance,
Celebrate the day now passing by
And cry, let the mourning turn
To days of joy for here upon the night –
I state, he was more than just a boy;
A casualty of war that forged alliances
From Earth that came knocking at the
Open chasm that once hung
A sculpted door, our door,
And though the bloodletting did
Neither stop or clot, we sit today
In victory, in peace, our children reading
Books once burned a million moons away.”
So where to this pride
That cannot hide these tears?”
“Soweto my brother,
Michael J Waite 16th June 2009
Comment is about A Place Called Home (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 19:35
Sawubona Makhumza, there is so much pain and tragedy in this poem. I have so much respect for you for sharing this with us.
Democracy came to SA, now there is so much speak of corruption and decay. My heart goes out to you and all your country. Maybe times ahead will get better, but before it does, it may get worse. I hope you and all your family are well.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 19:26
As I said I shall soon be in a position to take up your offer of help so when my holiday from writing is over I would like to contact you directly by e-mail.
I would like to send you an in-depth synopsis to see if you could evaluate the situation.
Comment is about Years end (blog)
Original item by John A Silkstone
Thu 29th Mar 2012 19:05
The last stanza is absolutely awesome. fantastic prose, I am inspired. I just wish i had your talent.
Comment is about Catalepsy (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thu 29th Mar 2012 19:02
Comment is about The Hall (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:59
This speaks of unbearable pain and bitterness. Still your way with words is alarmingly intelligent lol. I say that because each time you read it, there is something more to see, to touch upon. Nice work, like I, a lot of your prose speaks of pain. I can really identify with that!
Comment is about A Suggestion of Defence (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:52
Nice one Marianne, you truly are gifted.
Comment is about Portrait of Love on a Dove’s Tail (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:47
Marrianne, I really think you should be published.
I really like your work and I feel that your talent is being overlooked.
Truly astonishing work.
Comment is about Enter Violet (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:43
Hi Phil, yes I'm the same one from LWH.
Comment is about philtheworm (Poet profile)
Original item by philtheworm
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:42
Hi Charlene, not seen much from you of late! Are you still writing? I hope so. Keep well
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:29
Wow John, you have managed to make me smile while thinking about penises. Top form lol. The rhyming structure is spot on, the poem flows from start to finish.
All in all I love it. Makes me smile, seems a bit naughty, but not over the top, and now every time I climax I am going to be whispering in my head "God Save the Queen."
Thanks for that.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:17
Hi there John A Silkstone, I'm sure you are the person who contacted me through LWH a while ago. Please can you e-mail me regarding the purpose of that contact.
or visit still-killing-children.co.uk
I shall soon be in a position to take up your offer of help.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 18:09
Innocentia, I'm glad you could relate to Looking Back. Welcome to WOL.
Comment is about Innocentia Sithole (Poet profile)
Original item by Innocentia Sithole
Thu 29th Mar 2012 17:17
I am drunk on the pleasures of life. I am surrounded by magical mists that light the air,
seraph perfume. I dwell on my violence that kiss her lips. I pronounce you immeasurably.
My head hangs out gypsy windows and while in this primitive state..
favourite bit...all good. x
Comment is about Evening. (blog)
Original item by Danny Metcalfe
Thu 29th Mar 2012 16:38
An afterthought - I would have preferred that there be no mention of "men" in the first verse, but instead, that there be a less specific use of description here - eg "Three suitors wanted her to be happy and bloom"...,in my view, more in keeping with the imagery employed.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 15:57
I think some of your imagery is astonishing:
witch blood, spears of plum meat, I would be Violet - fantastic.
Marianne Louise Daniels
Thu 29th Mar 2012 13:45
I wish this wasn't so clunky.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:58
wow #teary eyed long distance love and empty promises i know too much of... beautiful Terry thank you.
Comment is about Looking Back (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:46
Adrienne also played a big part in the development of the free verse ghazal with her book 'The Fact of a Doorframe'. And has been a strong influence in my work in this area in recent years. Sad news indeed. Win
Comment is about US poet Adrienne Rich dies aged 82 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:45
its unconditional because it just is. for me theres no arguing with that.i have took out the a mistake and added a comma to pathos. it doesnt matter who said it first. greeks, christians, although christianity made its mark by being noted for its peoples ability to love.
condemnation is of the soul, without unconditional love it withers and dies...it is not up to any manmade authority to claim that their religion will condemn. the idea is to love, to nourish the soul and live with spirit. man has always done this before christianity, the pagans and the greeks described spirit in different ways with different methods. Christ opposed Judaism. he did not condemn difference. he asked us to love each other on behalf of the Almighty. that name translates into all different languages. The tower of babel saw the destruction of unified language but is a singular image in archetype. man cannot build a tower to god,to his own importance. our job is to understand each other through one simple language of love and humility.
feel free to argue, i will still love you ;)
thank you for your clemency.
Comment is about Agape ( A-gap-ay) (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:40
Comment is about The Pressure (blog)
Ray theirs a reason for that their no rhythm or rhyme in my life... but il take your advise into consideration when writing thanx..
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:30
In terms of 'agape,' I always questioned the unconditional love aspect of Christainity , is there such a thing, even for the Almighty. Afterall if you don't believe you are condemned. And of course, the Christians borrowed the idea from the Greeks. I would agree with Tigerella about that line and the proof reading bit. I thought the Pathos line could be re-jigged in terms of punctuation but in the spirit of the poem, I shall forgive thee. I enjoyed your poem, particulary the second half.
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:19
I'm quite pleased with myself, I got it first time around. I particularly liked the way you didn't force the rhyme in the 3rd and penultimate stanzas. Skilfully done.
Comment is about Your Space or Mine (blog)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 11:12
'Innocent until collared,
Guilty as sin.'
As a squatting dog.'
Comment is about I, thief (blog)
Original item by mike watts
Thu 29th Mar 2012 10:03
Love the new bio Rach - that's really touching - can identify with that
Comment is about Rachel Bond (Poet profile)
Thu 29th Mar 2012 09:59
Andy - doesn't matter what luck you've had previously in comps, just enter it, because if you're not in it you don't stand a chance, eh? I've entered two for this comp and yours wipes the floor with mine, so get it in!
Thu 29th Mar 2012 09:46
Woobloodyhoo Ms Bond! Was wondering where you'd got to. This is fab - and you've been proof-reading to buggery, this is almost perfectly written, apart from a surplus 'a' in the line 'I loved a a man so proud he was his own very meat'
Wonderful - plenty of Biblical references on here today!
Thu 29th Mar 2012 09:44
Thanks for the comments Laura, I'm glad you liked that line, it's a true story.
Comment is about Laura Taylor (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
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