Lynn Dye

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 10:10

Lovely sentiments, John. Enjoyed.

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Lynn Dye

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 10:04

I would agree it may be a little hard to follow but I found it enjoyable all the same. I like the same lines as Isobel and Laura, especially
Im not sorry.
I am sorrow.
and
i gave you all my surprises like a rabbit in headlights
and
insipid sick blue limp with drink.

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Laura Taylor

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 09:50

There's some really good lines in this Rach, although for me, I reckon you could split this up into 2 or even 3 separate poems.

The first 3 verses would work perfectly as one poem, I think.

Standout lines:

butter drunk with compliments and doe eyes
i gave you all my surpises like a rabbit in headlights.

i loved to give up my thoughts
and our ideas
were like gelatine
brittle boned
and moulded just for the sake of it

insipid sick blue limp with drink
and you did stink like the rest of them
and every word you said was incomplete and chitter

I also think you could split the last two pieces into 2 separate poems. Love this:

i give you my foot for its not real either
and make a stew of everything you looked at
make a brew of any love that comes my way
mix it in darkness, spell bound a creature i am



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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 09:46

I'd call that very succinct :)

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 09:45

I found it hard to follow all of this and found it a bit on the long side. There are some lovely parts to it though.

Im not sorry.
I am sorrow.
Sorry to the marrow

Lovely lines. x

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Isobel

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 09:38

Would winding up include treating them to a few volts of electricity, TC?

This is a lovely poem John. It's nice to see a poem celebrate the best things in life.

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Thaumaturgically Charged

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 00:23

A condensley atmopheric poem, founded on a dark period in time. I live in an old Mill town and have seen exhibits of what depravation's those young girls had to endure.
The sad thing is that this did not go away, they exported the equipment to poorer countries for worker exploitation at a later time.

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 00:13

This is a nice poem, and reminds me of when mine were little, I used to get in touble with the Missus for winding them all up lol...

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Thaumaturgically Charged

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Wed 22nd Aug 2012 00:02

A modern love story, made me read it to the end... good job you put they key in at the end though ;-)

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 23:51

Hi Anthony, thank you for the witty welcome ;-) and perceptive review of the first poem I have penned in quite some time.Live long and prosper friend ;-)TC

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 21:51

Having watched the programme
'Dear Mr Brady'last night
it was made certain that Mrs Johnson does swear,
as she did in that programme
with all of her undignified right.

"He wants his balls cut off
and shoved in his mouth"
was probably the tip of a colder than cold
iceberg.


B!!!y!!! now theres an expletive for sure!

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 21:44

wow! they don't come much better written
or as powerful as this Paul.

Fantastic piece of work!
and one to be bookmarked for sure.

Thank you

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Isobel

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 21:38

This is lovely and beautifully read. You can hear and imagine that small child. You make it seem so easy - but it really isn't to write poetry like this.

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 21:38

Margaret,please find two new verses
added onto 'the day my car died'

Would you happen to know
who the lady in the flowery dress
happens to be,mentioned in those added lines?

lol-and thanks again.xx

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Anthony Emmerson

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 18:52

Hi TC,

Some interesting and BIG ideas in this.I like poetry that asks questions rather than simply answering them. Love the last line as a very apt summation. Perhaps especially fitting that it is posted here on t'internet - the greatest repository of collective knowledge and experience our species has ever created. Where will it all end?!

Regards,
A.E.

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Anthony Emmerson

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 18:34

This is beautiful - and tragic - Charlotte. It rewards several, slow re-readings with its subtlety and sonority. Loved the audio too - perfectly paced and intoned. The best read I've had for ages.

Regards,
A.E.

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Nigel Astell

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 16:22

Character can describe the person you love and hate but the ink that flows is the very life force that unleashes your ultimate desires.

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Laura Taylor

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 16:03

You asked what the male equivalent was - I answered. I didn't say you had to be defined - not sure why you said that?

Can I ask why you use the term 'fair' in relation to women?

Gender's a social construct anyway, as opposed to the physical characteristics of sex.

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M.C. Newberry

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 15:11

I sit corrected. But pardon me if I prefer not to be defined as a "long-time feminist".
From experience the fair sex don't need my help to get what they want on behalf of their
gender.

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M.C. Newberry

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 14:11

Thoughtful and well-crafted, with a well chosen musical theme. Possessing some memorable lines, this a very worthwhile addition to the list of poems that make us pause and think! Excellent.

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Jonboy Walton

Tue 21st Aug 2012 09:56

Wow.So true Tommy.

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Laura Taylor

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 09:23

Umm...I just made it up Tommeh. Just wanted to show a drift and then back to the left again :)

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Laura Taylor

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 09:22

I do love this - I've said before I think. Such a tight piece, containing so much.

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Paul Sands

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 00:46

Thank you very much. I have quite a few that paint a vaguely dystopian, yet at the same time affectionate, view of life in modern England that I am thinking I will compile in a separate collection. Unfortunately my voice does get a little blue at times.

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Paul Sands

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Tue 21st Aug 2012 00:38

Thank you all for your kind comments. It is very encouraging

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 23:56

This is one of those poems
that are so much like watching repeats
of a favourite film.

It gets better and better
and opens up moreso
with every next read.

Fascinating work.
Thanks Paul.

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 23:42

Very Dahl-ish Paul.
a treat for small and big ears-
actual big ears we mean,not Noddys sidekick!

Thank you.

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Harry O'Neill

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 23:36


Tommy,
It was the effin` keyboard - it should have been Benny. I never watched the bloody thing but at one time Benny was suspected of something (I think murder) To understand the thing about `heart` you have to imagine Benny in his wollen cap.

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 23:28

Just the ticket Lynn.
you mention'my man has driven
many buses and trains'

You should have added
a 'steamy line'(no pun intended)
about how he drove you mad with....ahem!
haha.xx

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Lynn Dye

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 22:55

I like this a lot, Paul. I'm not too fond of heavy booted, hairy spiders either, but good poem.

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Paul Sands

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 22:50

Thank you

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 21:57

Very popular type of poem Paul.
We loved this one very much
great title to a nice piece-

more please!

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 21:51

Hi Katy-appreciate your appreciation of-

'If only this story would end'

Our thanks-muchly.xx

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John Coopey

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 21:39

Steve
Really enjoyed your spot at harrogate last week. This poem was familiar to me having just read your post on here a day or two before.
Thanks for your kind words below about us.

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Tommy Carroll

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 20:52

John: I saw Cohen do the business 2 years ago in Liverpool- this one included.
I stopped watching and laughing when 'Sandie's' girl-friend (who was dying) declared in a stressful moment- 'I'm going to lay down and listen to Dvorak' New World symphony...hahaha

Harry 'Lenny' please explain...

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Keith Armstrong

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 19:31

cheers!

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Gina Jarvi

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 19:04

This glitch called living… love it - love you! Love the pic, too. Very sweet crew!

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Charlie Preston

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 18:54

Your poems are fantastic! I'm jealous and in awe.

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 18:51

I always think that Winston has more energy than is normal for a mere mortal! Good on him! xx

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 18:49

Hi David - a very warm welcome to WOL. Good to see you've posted a poem on the blogs section already. Giovanni - a really nice light touch to your work.

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Charlie Preston

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 18:36

Your poetry is incredible. Just brilliant.

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M.C. Newberry

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 14:59

Hugh - enough already! LOL.
Oh - I meant to enquire: does your profile pic.
represent a scene of a Lancaster avoiding flak from "The Dam Busters"?

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Laura Taylor

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 14:47

It says long-time, not long-term, and there shouldn't be a gender division in feminism, so the male equivalent is a long-time feminist.

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M.C. Newberry

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 14:29

Laura - re. your post on "From Winnie":
I'm curious...what's the male equivalent of "a
long term feminist"? And is it legal? :-)
MC

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Hugh

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 12:39

Thankyou,it was a miffed print.

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Laura Taylor

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Mon 20th Aug 2012 09:43

Speaking as a long-time feminist, I don't see misogyny in the use of the word 'cunt'. 'Cunt' is an ancient word associated with power, which is obviously associated with the world, with birth, with all of us. It's a flexible term - equally used for offence and affection, and you'll generally know which way it is to be taken.

Also agree re what Winnie Johnson may have thought - she might have sworn or she might not, but we won't know now. We cannot impose a lexicon on her, nor can we infantilise her by stating that she would not have sworn, when we do not know if that is true or not.



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Thaumaturgically Charged

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Sun 19th Aug 2012 23:08

Thank you, I am glad I can still ignite a spark or two in you ha ha... with or without my shock devices lol...Thank you for the comment too, the memories of those we touch and the lives we live, remain forever within us, together with those we touch in each successive life along the way, so do Buddhist believe and in a similar way Viking's, mine too, eventually we get to recall it all, sorry for the long winded reply but it is tough subject to compress and you did ask ;-)) XXX

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Harry O'Neill

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Sun 19th Aug 2012 22:08



John,
I remember the huge lump that came to my throat many years ago when - coming into Euston for a union meeting - there of a wall to the side of the track in huge letters was written for the world to see `LENNY IS INNOCENT`. Somehow it completely restored my confidence that the heart of the British people was in the right place...Ah!, how things are changed now.

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Isobel

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Sun 19th Aug 2012 22:07

Hello you - welcome back. This is classic you :) I can remember being thaumaturgically challenged and electrically charged on many occasions - it was a hair raising experience!

Those are interesting ideas. What happens when the memories of others are also gone? That's one of the things I like about words. Once written they are there forever. The challenge for all of us is to make them good enough to be enduring...

Isobel xx

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Harry O'Neill

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Sun 19th Aug 2012 21:56


It is a sobering thought that, if there isn`t a God then the perpetrators of crimes like the Moores Murders, and equally horrible and obscene murders and tortures against children and other defenceless innocents, can - if they are undetected or untouchable - lead perfectly pleasant and ordinary lives until their moment of obliviating death comes...and then...blank!

I wonder, does the idea of God depend on the idea of final justice...or the idea of final (posthumous) justice require the existence of God.

Or do the `lucky` or impregnable ones just simply get away with it?

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