Tue 14th Jul 2009 06:26
Nice tribute to a brilliant musician/singer/songwriter
who touched many...
Comment is about Tribute to John (Blog entry)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Tue 14th Jul 2009 06:06
Beautifully written... as always.
Je suis tellement contente que tu as décidé de partager ton talent - tes poèmes de nouveau : )
Comment is about lonely (Blog entry)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 23:58
Love it Mark - the humour and also the celebration of the positive.
Comment is about This be the Verse..if Larkin's parents had given him more bedtime cuddles (Blog entry)
Original item by Mark Niel
Dave Dunn aka Rhumour
Mon 13th Jul 2009 23:34
Hi Francine - thanks for commenting about 'Become a little sage' - your mention of Lennon prompted me to look out and post a tribute to John written last year - best wishes, Dave
Comment is about (Poet profile)
Julie Rose Clark
Mon 13th Jul 2009 21:00
lovely poem! I like it a lot, a lot , a lot! thank you
Mon 13th Jul 2009 18:48
Thanks Dermot. Think I may do a couple at the next Wigan!
Comment is about Summer (Blog entry)
Original item by Louise Coulson
Mon 13th Jul 2009 18:08
wouldn't scan - besides, it's more a kind of not being able to feel that sleepy thing than not being able to find sleep itself.
Comment is about Some days, I am comforted by quietly despairing (Blog entry)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Mon 13th Jul 2009 17:56
Beautiful words for a horrific subject. Excellent.
Comment is about And We Have Milk for Garden (Blog entry)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 13th Jul 2009 17:01
This is very well expressed, with an excellent choice of words. The formatting of your lines I find hard to follow, but that is my own opinion. I do wonder how you would read this aloud. Often, reciting a poem decides for me where I could, or should, break a line in my own work.
Comment is about Old Photographs (Blog entry)
Original item by Cate
Mon 13th Jul 2009 13:58
Yes I would agree with Dave. A very sad one Cate - we all have photos like that - though some have been completely shredded. I like the fact that you have departed from rhyme with this one - I think it adds to the poem and to its simplicity. I have nothing against rhyme - just think it's good to try different styles.
Mon 13th Jul 2009 13:03
Sian, if you see it in the eyes, it's gorra be love, and everyone who has it is lucky to have it, however imperfect and "of sorts" love might be. "Silver weeds planted at my feet" .. a lovely line. Good to see you back posting.
Comment is about Searching for Chains (Blog entry)
Original item by sian howell
Mon 13th Jul 2009 11:59
I liked this Cate. Deceptively simple but really takes the imagination along, which is half the battle
Mon 13th Jul 2009 10:38
several phrases of this poem will forever be associated in my mind with the moonwalking enterprise.I love the sentiment.Thanks for that.
Well done! Steve Smith
Comment is about Television Moon (after the Moon Landing, July, 1969) (Blog entry)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 13th Jul 2009 10:25
Hi Cynthia. I see in the evocation of social isolation in this, and a comcomitant poetic compassion. It needed saying, of course, though maybe I've misinterpreted the poem (wouldn't be the first time!).
Comment is about Oh, Daughters, My Daughters! (Blog entry)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 07:11
Merci Gus pour tous tes commentaires positifs sur mon poème 'Elusive'...
Je suis inspirée de mieux faire chaque fois...
Contente aussi qu'il t'a plu : )
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (Poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Mon 13th Jul 2009 06:58
Hi Chris - i put the poem on my profile sample
Mon 13th Jul 2009 06:16
I read it and understood most of it...
and without reading your explanation first...
I am getting there ; )
Comment is about back to the moon (Blog entry)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 05:07
Thank you so much for your input Steve...
Yeah, I chose 'In the darkness of night' for the dual meaning...
When I wrote this, my inspiration came from a past dream and a current situation...
Will look at it again... I appreciate your time.
Comment is about garside (Poet profile)
Original item by garside
Mon 13th Jul 2009 04:44
Funny you should mention dream, because my poem 'Elusive' was actually inspired from a dream and a current situation...
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment - it is very much appreciated!
Comment is about Cate (Poet profile)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 04:36
Thank you Cynthia for taking the time to read and comment on my poem 'Elusive'...
As far as the page placement - It didn't come out exactly as I had wanted...
I always seem to have problems with font, size, and placement on here...
Your comments/suggestions are always appreciated.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 04:22
You know that I am a fan of your work, and I am so happy to see you back and posting : )
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem 'Elusive'...
I really appreciate it - means so much!
Comment is about sian howell (Poet profile)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 04:11
Dave, just read your poem 'Become A Little Sage'
Good rhyme and flow... Can tell you were inspired by Lennon...
Will read more.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work...
I appreciate the fact that you also see the page set up of my poem 'Elusive' as an aide in how it would be read...
I couldn't get it exactly how I wanted it though... Always seem to have trouble with fonts, size, and placement - it just won't show up properly on here for some reason.
Comment is about Dave Dunn (Poet profile)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 03:52
I know what you mean about lacking inspiration at times...
Funny too that you should mention that your Poem 'Manchester Rain' is based on a dream of looking for or fleeing from something/someone, because I used to have recurring dreams like that too...
My poem 'Elusive' was also inspired from a combination of a past dream and a current situation...
Merci de l'avoir lu et je suis contente que tu l'aimes : )
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:33
Lovely poem Freda. I live in quite a rural area and hear the dawn chorus every morning - have to say I appreciate more in poetic form than I do at 4a.m.
Comment is about Dawn Chorus (Blog entry)
Original item by Freda Davis
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:28
Back - and on form! Good stuff.
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:24
Excellent stuff - as ever. Not sure about 'feel somnolence' - unable to find sleep would seem to suit better - old 'rule' -prefer the anglo-saxon ... far less pompous!
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:18
Thanks for reading and commenting on my work - very much appreciated.
Comment is about Tomás Ó Cárthaigh (Poet profile)
Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:15
Thanks for reading and commenting on 'Manchester Rain' - very much appreciated.
Good to see you back again too!
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:13
Thanks for reading and commenting on 'Manchester Rain'. I've taken your suggestions on board and re-worked it a little.
No - I haven't posted much - have been a bit lacking in inspiration!
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:07
As ever - many thanks for reading, and thanks for adding your own special touch - always a revelation!
Comment is about Dermot Glennon (Poet profile)
Mon 13th Jul 2009 02:04
Hi Cynthia, Thank-you so much for reading and commenting on 'Manchester Rain'. And thank-you too for your suggestions - I have re-worked it a little, tried to make it tighter - though I do have a problem with using 20 words where 2 would do!
Sun 12th Jul 2009 23:38
LOL - I promise not to be beholding to you then, hehe. I suspect you might find 'Exposure' slightly more up thar street ;)
Comment is about Brand New View (Blog entry)
Sun 12th Jul 2009 23:33
well, alright, but I'd still advocate giving up beholding. Last time I beheld I got some beauty in my eye; it effing wrecked!
Sun 12th Jul 2009 23:30
Maybe, maybe not. I think I prefer not on the whole, but doubtless you like freedom of expression too - whilst we are still allowed any....... ;)
Sun 12th Jul 2009 23:27
Nice. When are we going to see you perform it on stage at Wigan or somewhere?
Sun 12th Jul 2009 23:25
You might want to replace "thee" with "you" and live in the century we've got. It's ace. We've got these supermarket doors that open as if by magic when you go near them. And, we've stopped beholding things too.
Sun 12th Jul 2009 21:06
You've hit a rich vein. I love this. I can imagine older teenagers being very struck by it and having their eyes opened a little to what is going on around them.
Sun 12th Jul 2009 21:05
Thanks Francine. I was trying to convey in the last two lines the freedom from these feelings. Beat of the wings, beat of the heart, beat of the rhythm possibly....
Sun 12th Jul 2009 20:27
Thank you for your very kind comments. You ask how 'Only Fond' came about. It's recent. Usually the words just well up, perhaps triggered by a stray thought or feeling, which has some intensity behind it. I grab some paper and pen - very frustrating if that's not around - and start scribbling. Then stand back, look at what's there. Then start honing. More may come as the honing process continues. A friend may occasionally make a suggestion. Then there is a moment it feels finished. The whole has a balance and the well is dry
It would be interesting to know what your approach is, and that of others. Suitable for a discussion perhaps - I've had little involvement in them so far.
I have no idea how 'objectively' good my stuff is - if that is even a meaningful concept here. It simply feels necessary or I'd go off pop and it's nice to have people to share it with. There are some really very good poems on this site and it's fine just being part of it all. Different people connect with different poems and that's fine too.
Thanks again Cynthia - the appreciation is mutual.
Sun 12th Jul 2009 19:49
Dave, you may be new to the site but your stamp is made. The quality is unerringly maintained. Is this a new piece, or one well thought over for some time?
Comment is about only fond (Blog entry)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sun 12th Jul 2009 19:35
Hi Dave, I wondered if you would see my reference to Stoke - the city formerly known as the Potteries! Ha, thanks anyway, see you friday, will put you down for an open mic, cheers
Comment is about Dave Morgan (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Morgan