David Moore

Sun 15th Nov 2015 21:48

Well said PLG, I think that is a fine code to write by.

David

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David Moore

Sun 15th Nov 2015 21:36

Hi PLG

Thanks so much for commenting on my last submission.
Please don't imagine that last comment was in any way aimed at you, it most certainly was not. And it is easily misunderstood.

Thanks for commenting it is much appreciated.

David M

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Katypoetess

Sun 15th Nov 2015 21:34

Thank you so much Cynthia! Really appreciate your ongoing support. : ) x

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:19

Bingo Colin - with balls and straight down the middle you have revealed what I would call a refreshing mind at work, not bitter but tired of..... All the constant nagging for doing good , being good, goody goody , rickshaw challenges , pernicious demands on our tender consciences already reeling from over exertion and over exposure. A fine piece of work and more than ok with me.
Good on you , mate . It may not appeal to everyone, so I salute your bravery.
By the way, Christmas is early isn't it!

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

thanks zach, how interesting that we posted similar poems at the same time. well, similar in some ways. i enjoyed your piece very much.

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:18

looking at it now, i think its one of the best things i've written. tomorrow, who knows!
its dense, partly recalling psychedelic experiences, partly expressing (as best i could) a conversation i had with god once. perhaps in a dream. i like the imagery, im happy with the flow and overall story and i think it stands up as a poem of some intent and regard. however, it may just be bollocks. thats the beauty of poetry. one mans trash etc! i could never scorn anyone for not liking a poem. poetry is so subjective that it wouldnt be right. thanks for reading and taking the time to comment. i will update you tomorrow as to whether i still feel its any good or not!

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:09

I've read this Stu and tried to stay afloat on your sea - difficult with no known navigational aids. It's admirable, as you experiment in a tricky field and it does present a challenge. Are you happy with it? I can't be critical of its message although I think I know what you are getting at. with respect as always. Ray

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 20:08

I've read this Stu and tried to stay afloat on your sea - difficult with no known navigational aids. It's admirable, as you experiment in a tricky field and it does present a challenge. Are you happy with it? I can't be critical of its message although I think I know what you are getting at. with respect as always. Ray

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John Bastard

Sun 15th Nov 2015 19:58

Stu you are my fucking spirit animal.
The walls on which the prophets wrote is cracking at the seams

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raypool

Sun 15th Nov 2015 19:55

I love this Tom. The idea of the stairs like a descent into the unknown future, of being left alone with the mystery of a cat left intact and respected, with the human spirit in a fragile state, personified by the old fella going away to another world.

Ray

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Patricio LG

Sun 15th Nov 2015 19:07

Sadness of a wanton need that is unequal love. give oneself too easily then be punished for it.

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 15th Nov 2015 17:10

Thanks for reading and commenting. The world can be a very isolated place considering its so full of people. In the first verse it ended with 'today' which I removed as I think the world slightly shakes its head every day. I do hope so too. x

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DavidAddington

Sun 15th Nov 2015 17:03

Agreed. I have tweaked this a bit already since I first wrote it but t is meant to replicate the works themselves.

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DavidAddington

Sun 15th Nov 2015 17:02

Cheers Colin. yeah, I suppose it works still today. Cheers

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Patricio LG

Sun 15th Nov 2015 16:35

What you write here is completely me and how I feel, i am not anywhere near as damn clever as you though. A voice among fascists is not like a tree falling in the woods.

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Stu Buck

Sun 15th Nov 2015 16:24

this is brilliant. the last two lines are sensational and the third verse flows beautifully.

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Nigel Astell

Sun 15th Nov 2015 12:48

me too

lets hope Rachel can get another railway station set up

but it must have a good bar to go with it!

thanks for putting my poems on your blog.

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Daniel Dwyran

Sun 15th Nov 2015 10:59

Thanks Martin.. glad to be visiting WOL more frequently and hope to post and read more.
Your words on 'Deals on Wheels' and comments are always welcome and appreciated. I hope to catch up with you somewhere in the North West in the near future. (The Vespa is running like a dream.. for a few months it ran like a nightmare). D :)

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Daniel Dwyran

Sun 15th Nov 2015 10:53

Laura, thank you very much for your kind words on 'Deals on Wheels'. Very much appreciated!
I sense where you are coming from regarding recreational aspects... I once had to take Tramadol following surgery.. I was floating on the ceiling for at least two weeks. (I always wondered why it never caught on).
Thanks again Laura.

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David Moore

Sun 15th Nov 2015 10:11

There is a sense of isolation in here Lynn, also the desertion of allies when things get rough, on an individual level I think that is often very true. I hope it isn't so, in more collective circumstances. For all our sakes.

A clever vehicle to make that point.

David

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David Moore

Sun 15th Nov 2015 10:06

As ever Lea your writing so subtly finds the crux of things.

The attempts we make to escape ourselves are futile, as you say there is no real distance we can make at all.

David

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David Moore

Sun 15th Nov 2015 10:03

Hi Stu,

A sense of wishing to be engulfed, the term "sweet blue ocean" sits very well in there.

To me there is also a feeling that the subject isn't truly in control of self, almost a sense of hearing voices in the head.

Nice one Stu.

David

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 09:11

love this - been there done that - second verse is ace especially finding 'a tainted magic stump' - made me laugh

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Lea

Sun 15th Nov 2015 09:08

I agree with Martin, this is lovely and poignant - the more so in its simplicity.

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 09:07

I like this but I'd take away the punctuation and capitals to make it more free flowing - but that's just me

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 09:04

no idea what some of this means and please don't explain but I like the feel and rhythm

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:59

I'm with David - shake it up - not sure about 'so far forlorn' but some good lines

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:54

I like the idea behind this poem but I find it messy to read if you don't mind me saying. I go back and change my stuff all the time, add and subtract, move words around. Some people don't like to do this but, for me, poems grow with time and need some occasional TLC.

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Colin Hill

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:45

I know the feeling but mine would have been 1979 and there was no work to look forward to just the dole queue - always wanted love tho.

Enjoyed the poem - not sure you need to add an explanation - let the words and title speak for themselves.

Cheers. I'd skin up for old time's sake but I've given up lol.

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Lea

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:38

Hi Cynthia, thanks for commenting on So I Let it Take Me. You know, I have at least 4 hibiscus bushes in my yard, but actually had to check myself whether they open and close or whether I'd imagined it :) - turns out the flowers close at night time - but the image was from a dream. I know what you mean about balking at the pulsing psychedelic hibiscus, I'm not comfortable with it either. I forced myself to leave it in there because there's some sense of shame around it for me, and I won't let shame silence me, at least I think that's what it is, still thinking.
Thanks again, I love your comments both on mine and other's poems -always engaging, curious, and respectful.

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Lea

Sun 15th Nov 2015 08:27

Hi Martin, thanks for your lovely and very kind comment on So I let it Take me. I'm very glad you liked it,
Leander x

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Patricio LG

Sun 15th Nov 2015 01:26

Thank you jade, very kind of you

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Greg Freeman

Sun 15th Nov 2015 00:01

I recommend it. It's an excellent read.

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Stu Buck

Sat 14th Nov 2015 23:45

thanks all. quite right, horrible day. my parents live in france and we have friends in paris who were about half a mile up the road. still, watching the main news channels is a lot like only reading every other word in a story. you can never get the whole picture. every time something like this happens i feel like crawling under a rock in shame. whoever is responsible cant be a human being like me. can they?

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andy n

Sat 14th Nov 2015 23:01

my blog featuring a few of your poems is here mate.

great to see you today.

really enjoyed it.

http://onewriterandhispc.blogspot.co.uk/2015/11/poetry-at-stalybridge-train-station.html

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andy n

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:59

Here is the link from my blog from pictures took of the poetry and pictures exhibtion at Stalybridge train station me and the lovely Nigel went to 2day.

http://onewriterandhispc.blogspot.co.uk/2015/11/poetry-at-stalybridge-train-station.html

it's in the waiting room on platform 4 if you are ever passing. excellent fun (

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Jade Johannsen

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:45

I enjoyed this. There is something really genuine about it Patricio. Thank you for posting.

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Jade Johannsen

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:34

I dont know why i like this so much.

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Patricio LG

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:26

that's when I have to write, even if what I write is rubbish

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Jade Johannsen

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:24

I love this Pretti! Its unashamedly honest.

I feel like you have just held a mirror in front of me and I recoiled in horror.

Thank you.

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Patricio LG

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:21

Reading you poem made me feel very schizophrenic emotionally. it definitely shows how fucked up it all is

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Patricio LG

Sat 14th Nov 2015 22:16

Wonderful peace, wonderful piece, how wonderful it is. I only wish that I could write as poetic as this.

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:11

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Cheers Martin, warm and lost sums it up. :-)

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:09

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Hi Katy, you got 2 out of 3, hope not being one of them;-) cheers Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:08

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Cynthia hi, I'm afraid I was having a "moment" of cerebral disconnect - as I was trying to write "cerebral" six goes at it. Cheers for your comment, l came back just now to check. (cerebral disconnect had nothing to do with the drink by the way) Cheers Tommy


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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:05

Hi Katy, you got 2 out of 3, hope not being one of them;-) cheers Tommy

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:03

Cheers Martin, warm and lost sums it up. :-)

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 14th Nov 2015 18:02



Cynthia hi, I'm afraid I was having a "moment" of cerebral disconnect - (as I'm trying to write "cerebral" six times at it.) Cheers for your comment, l came back just now to check. (cerebral disconnect had nothing to do with the drink by the way) Cheers Tommy
Consider it rewritten :-)

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 14th Nov 2015 17:47

I was persuaded early on that tenacity in life is the prime
requisite when seeking recognition/success, even above
ability - since there are many with the latter who do
not possess the former and become also-rans and casualties along the way.
The subject of this WOL news item clearly qualifies for
the required degree of determination. Good luck to him.
What is the title of his autobiography? "The Ego Has Landed"?
:-))

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 14th Nov 2015 17:29

I "lived" the premise of these lines - thereby admitting to
a certain vintage age-wise! Some really resonate: the
hiss of the locomotive and the "platform alight with puddles"...top stuff for my own boyhood memories of a
country still suffering from the effects of world war,
when bombsites were playgrounds of dreams and we
were lured home by the promise of a fish and chip
supper and the early evening episode of a radio serial.

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