Tue 19th Jan 2016 22:38
Definitely a good metaphor with addiction. nice one Wolf
Comment is about Bedtime stories (blog)
Original item by Wolfgar
Tue 19th Jan 2016 22:36
There is some wonderfully rich description here Vicki. i love the line 'in a kaleidoscopic tide of emotion Spewing it's entrails' marvellous stuff
Comment is about Unravelling ...... (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Tue 19th Jan 2016 22:28
This is very good jeremy it has real feel of a folk song and very cleverly composed. nice one
Comment is about into the woods (blog)
Original item by jeremy young
Tue 19th Jan 2016 21:17
(just coming up for a bit of air)
When I think of the number of complete no marks that insisted on having this sang at their funerals ( I could puke!)
I like the way you have split this into three parts
That `We think we are masters of our destiny when we are leaves blowing along a wet, asphalted road in the autumnal half-light` is a master class of understandable and apt metaphor for some of the `figure it yourself` practitioners around lately.
When you `go` yourself, get them to sing `Lord of the dance`.
Comment is about My Way (blog)
Original item by jan oskar hansen
Tue 19th Jan 2016 20:21
lovely as ever. real bittersweet bukowski-esque lines. you have the same effortless style and intriguing 'voice'.
Tue 19th Jan 2016 20:20
agreed. the last line ties the whole piece together nicely. circling like a cur. nice first line!
Comment is about Thief (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Tue 19th Jan 2016 20:19
this is great, especially...
flesh white as purest smack.
And when you breach their bloodstream,
they’ll never draw you back.
clever. dark and intriguing. as usual, effortless rhymes (seems effortless, sure its not!)
Tue 19th Jan 2016 19:05
I love the line
My soul is stilled in deep motion - nice x
Comment is about Light within the Dark (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Tue 19th Jan 2016 19:00
Some wonderful lines - & memories - I'm glad you were applauded!
Tue 19th Jan 2016 18:52
I like he way the 1st verse stands in its own - outside the rhythm - it's a dark bedtime story but I like it! x
Tue 19th Jan 2016 18:48
That I shall Mr C - sound advice! x
Comment is about Open Heart Surgery (blog)
Tue 19th Jan 2016 18:47
Poor Tom! I like the listing - simple & effective x
Comment is about not Bill (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Tue 19th Jan 2016 18:04
The SNP, a political party which proudly boasts its nationalist credentials for all to see, obtained a small
army of MPs whilst Ukip with its 4 million voters obtained one.
Notwithstanding the electoral arrangement that allows
this to happen, it is not lost on me that the WW2 forerunners of today's SNP were active in seeking a
relationship with the Nazis on more than one occasion
when things looked to be going badly for the Allies - a
matter of public record that should concern all for its
relevance to the aims and values of today's political party.
Examples of the reported failings you dwell on as
existing in Ukip probably also exist in the SNP ranks,
if the media were to take the trouble to dig as eagerly
as they ignore what history can tell us about the
Scottish Nationalists' support of the UK when under threat. Give me Farage's Ukip any day.
Bigotry is such an adaptable thing. One man's bigot
is so easily another man's pious preacher according
to circumstances and desired intent.
Comment is about Lancashire County Palatine トレッカー詩人 (poet profile)
Original item by Lancashire County Palatine トレッカー詩人
Tue 19th Jan 2016 16:34
I liked this build up thru to the last line which hits hard.
The lines " long dark nights spill into morose mornings" are very effective.
Tue 19th Jan 2016 16:21
Liked the lyric and the build up thru to the last line .
Tue 19th Jan 2016 15:16
Reading poetry at Y Tuesday Poetry club.
Comment is about Steev Burgess reading at Y Tuesday in Clerkenwell. (photo)
Original item by Steev Burgess
Tue 19th Jan 2016 15:04
Temple of love bringing with it
two of yearning that want
everything to stay just as it is
but sadness beckons.
Comment is about Anthony and Katypatra (blog)
Original item by Katypoetess
Tue 19th Jan 2016 14:00
Vic, beware guests bearing their own cutlery. Tommy
Tue 19th Jan 2016 13:24
Bold and sweet use of 'mind' there Jan. Tommy
Tue 19th Jan 2016 13:19
Martin & Vicky. Thank you. x
Comment is about How Do You Do? (blog)
Original item by Lynn Hamilton
Tue 19th Jan 2016 10:51
hi ian, reading it in a whole new 'light' now. very clever. a sad week indeed.
Comment is about Ian Whiteley (poet profile)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Tue 19th Jan 2016 05:12
Thanks for your welcome back David.
Comment is about David Addington (poet profile)
Original item by David Addington
Tue 19th Jan 2016 02:44
Maybe too subtle a tribute for some to notice.
Comment is about Poetic justice (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 22:11
I like this, particularly the first sentence. The second sentence not so good, nor the 'but' in the third sentence.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Frances Spurrier
Mon 18th Jan 2016 19:42
Thank you Martin!
Comment is about Winter Wonderland (blog)
Original item by Eva Curless
Mon 18th Jan 2016 19:34
Thanks for the kind comments on 'The Dark & The Light' Stu - apologies for my slow response - not been on the site much recently. Yes - he was thought to be indestructible - which just goes to show that we are all frail things really. Not sure if it got across the fact that his light was chasing Lemmy's darkness down the road of death - but he was equally iconic and, in some cases, seemed even more invulnerable. A sad week for rock music indeed.
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Mon 18th Jan 2016 19:20
have just booked a place on 'poetry as controlled explosion'. how can you resist a name like that!
Comment is about Arvon course programme announced (article)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Mon 18th Jan 2016 17:58
Full moons in the sun set - I like that x
Comment is about Grey Clouds in the Sunrise (blog)
Original item by Leorah Rohnaz
Mon 18th Jan 2016 17:57
A true comment on a social affliction in the 90s - I like the way you tale off at the end X
Comment is about Anaesthetic Substitute (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 16:36
Hi! Thanks for your comment on my profile - I'm thrilled you like my words! I shall take some time to get to know yours! Yes have a trawl through FB obviously there's a lot of cross over - I've only got so much poetry in me ;-) thanks again - Vicki xx
Mon 18th Jan 2016 16:10
Good stuff Phil. Magic Liverpool.
Comment is about Phil Ireland (poet profile)
Original item by Phil Ireland
Mon 18th Jan 2016 16:09
It's defo about toy soldiers but when I was 25/26 with friends of same age and we were all unemployed and got into table top games for a time. I was always attracted to Napoleonic history and little plastic men so it grew from there. Painting their uniforms. The first draft of this poem was just about history, but corny, so I adapted it to represent the games we played drunk and wrecked on other things and visits to war games. The last lines are meant to be ambivalent and confuse. Gentlemen officers were us crew and the last line is something we often thought about - wars becoming games to save life.
It still needs a bit of ork.
Comment is about A box of mini soldiers, some dice and Sean Bean (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 15:56
love your poetry style pixie. I hear a bit of me in some places with the way you do the incident poems and events. Love it. Also found your facebook page. I will read more. Love the new year poem and the man in supermarket.
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 15:52
Thanks for the great comments guys and gals. Yes, a simple but effective image after visiting my mum (who's in temporary home in Keswick), and seeing the aftermath of the flood.
Comment is about After the flood in the Lakes (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 15:50
name change and a change to your style perhaps. Poetry potent as ever. Love the tilt and black lung poems. Great stuff.
Comment is about Wolfgar (poet profile)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 15:48
Thanks for the comment Wolfgar. Could alter the end line but the idea of changes break hearts from the loss seems more potent, although, makes and breaks could easily go together.
I will check your poetry out as I need to spend more time looking at people's work on here.
Comment is about David Bowie (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 15:42
So true. Well observed. I love the increasing accumulation of the sounds.
Comment is about First Walk with Hearing Aids (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Mon 18th Jan 2016 13:28
Beautiful cameo from the Irish legend.
Comment is about Jean Atkin (poet profile)
Original item by Jean Atkin
Mark Mr T Thompson
Mon 18th Jan 2016 12:59
Thanks to all you youngsters who appreciated.
I must stop opening with a flourish... it is becoming something of a habit... or at least I must see if I can find an equal flourish to finish!.
Comment is about Young and wrinkly (blog)
Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson
Mon 18th Jan 2016 12:18
thank you Vicki and Ray for your comments, appreciation and suggestions! Really appreciate. The poem was a sudden 5 minute outburst of emotions. Din't check so much...sorry if it lacks some content!! Will keep it in mind next time!!! Vicki...damn right!!! Haha..thanks that you could relate to the 'skin underneath the vessel' ;) :) :)...
Comment is about Lazy Evening (blog)
Original item by Rims
Mon 18th Jan 2016 12:07
so is life
Comment is about flirt (01/16/2016) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Mon 18th Jan 2016 11:27
thank you stu
though i think you give me a little too much credit on this one. it's terribly uncohesive.
thank you for reading :)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 10:15
Comment is about Open Mic (blog)
Original item by ray m
Mon 18th Jan 2016 09:36
Something beautifully hopeful and forgiving about this Jan.
Men are stupid animals sometimes, aren't we?
Comment is about a love story (blog)
Mon 18th Jan 2016 08:42
this is great. its a chemical nightmare and a denied orgasm all in one.
gave us pornography and zoloft
with a knowing tussle of our hair
this whole thing rings my bells. love it.
Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Mon 18th Jan 2016 07:28
I brought the sentence "Virginal beauty" to make things vivid for ray ,the person who asked for further explanation.
By the way don't you know that both men and women pass through a similar faith?
Psychologists tell us that the biological clock is not only meant for women.Most men could also suffer impotence after 40. Brose and read a book entitled Sex Power Before and After 40.Your masculine vigour is at its height when you are young.
Also psychologists tell us that except the red flag boys experience almost a similar feeling of depression as their girl friends. I call others who read about this issue to comment on it.
Compare your photos.Obviously you were at the peak when you were young.
By the way the word virgin could be used to mention a new experience.
Once on BBC I had heard a figurative person participating in marathon organized for philanthropic purpose saying "I am a Marathon virgin!"
In literature too I have learnt that writers who are not native speakers are more sensitive to words and expressions than the native ones and as such it is no surprise for the former to outsmart the latter at times. Here also experts on the domain could add something.
This blog is meant for learning from each other and brainstorming but not for mockery.I have learnt a lot from other blogs too,.
Comment is about Youth (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
Mon 18th Jan 2016 03:41
Martin, thank you so much for your comment on Warrior. It is much appreciated xx
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
Mon 18th Jan 2016 03:39
Vicki, thanks for your comment on Warrior. Much appreciated xx
Mon 18th Jan 2016 00:56
Comment is about Sentenced to death for writing poetry (article)
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