Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:16
I might not have twigged that it was a satire of all Man's ignorance and arrogance. But I sure enjoyed it, even just applying it to the actual theme given, inclusive of anyone in any position requiring public performance.
Comment is about How to tell a joke -Advice given to a Lady- (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:09
Hello Dean ... thanks very much for the comment, from the immediate response it seems plenty of other people understand these situations ... I logged in and wrote it so it has the feel which others seem to have recognised .. thank-you .. chris.
Comment is about Dean Carroll (Poet profile)
Original item by Dean Carroll
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:08
Michael, this is a very powerful poem, that carries the reader right on the crest of your high wave of clear observation and helpless anger. It is keenly written, and makes a strong judgement upon current affairs.
Comment is about They're Blaming Themselves (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:07
Hi Cynthia I'm glad you liked the sniper poem. It's been a real struggle to write. Maybe becaue I don't usually respond to something as immediate as a news item. Still. it really is hard to get inside the heads of such people. How on earth do they reach such a pitch of callousness and contempt?
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:05
Hello Mike ... thanks very much for the comment which obviously contains some of your personal understanding ...I logged in and wrote it so it has the immediate feel of a situation which others seem to have recognised .. thank-you .. chris.
Comment is about Noetic-fret! (Poet profile)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 13:02
Hello Jane .. thanks very much for the comment, I logged in and wrote it so it has the immediate feel of a situation which others seem to have recognised .. thanks .. chris.
Comment is about jane wilcock (Poet profile)
Original item by jane wilcock
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:56
Love it Love it Love it! I've often thought about such a 'poem' but never executed it. No wonder the ancients and near-ancients found the concept of a globe that is conceptually 'flat' so mind-boggling; because it still is. It really is.
Comment is about A World Turned Upside-Down (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:54
Howdy Steve :)
Good - I am delighted that WOL has inspired you! Oh, and I only joined this site 3 years ago, had written ONE piece before that, and never ever really paid any mind to poetry. Never read it, wasn't into it.
When I first joined, my profile simply said 'Performed nowhere, published nowhere'.
I wouldn't say I was an expert, no, but what I HAVE done is just simply wanted to keep writing, to see what I could do, to keep trying different things. Some of my earlier poems were quite good, but most were pants :D
It is only ever YOU that makes the difference between continuing and improving, both writing AND performing, and not being arsed about it enough to do that.
Keep writing, and keep trying! I've enjoyed a few of your pieces, as you know. You've more to come, I'm certain of it.
Performing is terrifying. There's no two ways about it. I still SHIT myself beforehand, and convince myself no one will want to hear my 'pathetic crap'. Practice x 10000000 - it may be terrifying, but if you can touch people, and you hear that applause, the buzz is HUGE :D
Very best of wishes to you Steve and I look forward to reading more by you :)
Comment is about Steve (Poet profile)
Original item by Steve
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:49
Good descriptive stuff, reading in heartbeat rhythm, just as it should to keep the fear factor strong. And a open ending to titillate.
Comment is about All Hallows Eve (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:41
I love Callum's developing vocabulary, his rhyming ability and sense of rhythm. I started when I was really young, and my grandson also has an innate imagination that works in metaphor. I do wonder if genes count a lot, or is it example? How delighted you must be. That last line is so typical of a very young writer - the POW factor like ten exclamation marks, a very good poetical strategy. And so what if an adult had a finger in the pie.
Comment is about The Autumn Season (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:29
Dave, don't be offput by lack of comments; this is really topical and typical, charming and well-written. Maybe the current readers are all in childless environments - their loss. How does anyone forget childlikeness? All my life I have been influenced by the Biblical story of 'Jesus and the little children' because the story expresses pure wisdom from whatever level, or angle, you approach it.
Comment is about The manikin and the mannequin (blog)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:17
I look forward to more of your work. It doesn't seem so 'dulce et decorum'. If the CO means Company', I quite like your style.
Comment is about Eunice CO (Poet profile)
Original item by Eunice CO
Mon 28th Oct 2013 12:14
This poem has a strong mood that carries well from start to end. It is quite compelling.The change of person/speaker makes a major jump for the reader, possibly introduced by 'Kate'. If it is meant to be a second poem, or the second idea of a deliberate two-part poem, perhaps you could make this clearer. I did like the breathless repetition of disbelief in both parts.
Comment is about Muerto (blog)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 11:26
Thanks for reading 'if you don't like the record' I have to admit that this site has inspired me to have a go (some day) at actually performing my stuff. Clearly, reading your profile you're a bit of an expert. Pity I can't take my own advice but one day . .
Comment is about Laura Taylor (Poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Mon 28th Oct 2013 10:49
A rare moment of cosmological navel-gazing, Graham.
Mon 28th Oct 2013 10:42
As someone who has made several life-changing decisions, including one which nearly cost me my life, I applaud the content! And I hope you sing it when you perform it :D
Comment is about If You Don't Like The Record -Change it! (blog)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 09:01
Write us a poem about Dunnocks, Darren - they have far more interesting habits!
Comment is about Selling spoken word: reasons to be cheerful at Burning Eye (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Mon 28th Oct 2013 08:55
My next poem is about Chaffinches.
Mon 28th Oct 2013 08:52
I enjoyed this article too and it's great to think there's someone out there looking to give the spoken word more respect.
As for page vs performance poetry, I still maintain there is a difference, but it becomes less of one depending on the skill of the poet. There are plenty of stonking performance poets out there, whose work I just wouldn't want to buy - because it doesn't work on page for me without the delivery; I suppose it depends on personal taste in reading matter.
'Poetry written by urban poets, writing about real life using accessible everyday language.'
That's pretty much what I love about the performance scene. I don't want to hear about chaffinches - nor for that matter do I want to read about them ;)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 06:58
Thanks for looking in on 'if you don't like the record' I chose that title because it was the first line I wrote and everything else came later. Slow down is good though and perhaps more appropriate, certainly for me as the advice given in the poem is advice I could never take (as much as I might want to . .)
Mon 28th Oct 2013 06:47
Thanks for all your comments guys and gals but I must confess that while this may be great advice . . .I have yet to follow it myself!
Sun 27th Oct 2013 23:45
Thanks for your comment on my "Two Line Horror Story",not my best work but fun to do.
Comment is about Nigel Astell (Poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Sun 27th Oct 2013 23:42
LOL! Thanks for your comment on my "Two Line Horror Story". What a riot!
Comment is about Ken Eaton-Dykes (Poet profile)
Original item by Ken Eaton-Dykes
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:48
PS. Still learning to WOL. I see this won the hertz thingie. So it should!
Comment is about The Last Song (blog)
Original item by Cate
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:43
Have you done the Caen Flight Harry? Ecstacy!
Not far from me. Smug.
Comment is about Pidgin poem about wondrous canal lock (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:33
Memory returns! This 'poem' was written out of pure spleen! (How surprising!) The opening is the clue. I had just read some pretentious offering - hence the pretention of my opening.
Oh dear, I had better do some shame.
Comment is about BLANKETY BLANK SLATE (directed infant rage 2012) (blog)
Original item by Barrie Singleton
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:30
Have you stopped taking the pills again JC?
Trust you to wait six months before hitting me with stand alone conjunctions!
The football`s on in a minute. What are you tryin` to do - spoil Saurez`s goals for me?
If I can figure them out I might reply :)
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (Poet profile)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:29
Cracking comment Gromit! Even your critique is pure poetry Harry. Re sympathy: I am an odd cove in that my psychology does not engender chemistry; I see everythng in shades of black, but depression eludes me. The cure cost me a lot of money but it was money well spent - assuming one wants to be out of step with almost everyone almost all of the time. Cheers.
Mr Dean Carroll
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:23
Many thanks M.C. on your comments on the poem Top 10-Non movers. I began to get into music in the early eighties with the new wave scene. Bands like the Specials, Police and Madness where I then progressed into rock and metal music. But I also appreciate music from the sixties-The Big Four, stones etc. I even like some of todays music Adele etc. I just feel that today with MTV etc that chart music today has become formulaic and stale relying on looks and glamour rather than raw talent. And as for Rap and Hip Hop music,it has progressed from a brute force which was incisive as the punk era into a formulaic splurge of singing about cliched lifestyles, style but no substance.
I agree with you variety is important enjoying music ranging from Adele right up to Napalm Death.
Cheers for your comments
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sun 27th Oct 2013 22:20
I can`t tell if this is actually asking for sympathy.
But how can anyone sympathise with a guy who can write brilliant stuff like; I dragged my reluctant cognition forward through the slough of respond` and `conceived of my parents personal war (during a lull in the bombing)`...whatever it was, you`re obviously cured.
(Re `His image`...millions of us are waggling masses of ridiculous configuration...come down off that snooker table and join us)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 21:50
I`d like to say Yup!
Sun 27th Oct 2013 21:42
A neat despatch this.
Comment is about Ex (blog)
Original item by Solar
Sun 27th Oct 2013 20:26
Thank you for your comments on my last two poems, trying to evolve and experiment a bit! Hope you are well : )
Sun 27th Oct 2013 20:25
Thank you so much! I'm trying to evolve and do something different and be less personal and more accessible, really glad you liked : )))) xxxx
Comment is about Patricia and Stefan Wilde (Poet profile)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Sun 27th Oct 2013 20:19
Poets on the move. This should bring the system down
Comment is about Poet Tim Wells to stand as Class War candidate at general election (article)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 20:11
A mantra I myself aspire to, rather than expecting some other bugger to sort it out for you.
Sun 27th Oct 2013 18:54
Oh Dave! You torturer - OF MY MIND. Glad I wandered back. Do we grow to realise the error of our murderous ways or just absorb a cultural nuance - set aside for wasps? Are you familiar with Zimbardo's 'Stanford Prison Experiment'? (Invoked again in recent squaddy behaviour.)
AJJ a neat condensation of a massive subject.
Comment is about August jam jars (blog)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 17:54
Oh Dave! A positive blood-orgy! Sooooo neat combining the blood of 'unclean' with the blood of redemption. I wish I had thought of that. So glad I popped in. And a BONUS BALL! Isobel had led me to submit to 'Touch and Go' but, almost blindly, I followed her directions. NOW I understand! What a multifaceted place is WOL!
Comment is about Touching the hem of the robe (blog)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 17:45
Spufford is new to me - hail Google! What joy to see that he undermines Bishop Dawkins! I feel deeply complimented by your comments Dave.
Many thanks. I am convinced that perceptions at birth - common across all mankind - predispose us to the CERTAINTY of absolute power 'out there'. Only a high degree of maturation brings release from bondage. Increasingly, we die immature; schooling (institutionalising) sees to that.
Sun 27th Oct 2013 17:17
Interesting. Nice use of words and flow to the poem. And yes, done it. Sometimes. But only sometimes.
Sun 27th Oct 2013 17:14
Fascinating. Unusual. Compelling. Had to read it again out loud, slowly. The perfect poetic companion to my recent reading, Francis Spufford's 'Unapologetic'.
Sun 27th Oct 2013 16:31
But - what kind of poems is this lady reading - to use the pronoun 'much' instead of 'some'. It does seem from that one word, that the review must be a severely slanted one. And I do think that 'God's Glory' is manifestly revealed in 'much' poetry that does not wave the specific 'Christian' flag. So said, by all means greatly enjoy a specifically targeted collection. I often do myself. Just don't make it sound uniquely 'God's-glory' possessive.
Comment is about Book Review by Ellen Tanner Marsh: Reaching Towards His Unbounded Glory (blog)
Original item by Joseph J. Breunig 3rd
Sun 27th Oct 2013 16:17
Great posting and a pleasure to read. It rolls along, keeping the reader in a smiling nostalgia. I best liked the first two stanzas and the last one. IMO, you could probably do without the morallising one, Stanza Three, which is a bit of a mood dampener. But true enough, and it's your poem.
Comment is about Remembered Hallowe’ens of Childhood (blog)
Original item by C Richard Miles
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:42
Thanks for the comment about "The Political Poet".
I had commented on the work of certain WOL
contributors insofar that I sought to show there
were differing points of view to a stance taken
by them - and found myself consigned to the
category of "troll" and told to remove myself
from their sight (or words to that effect).
My short poem was a response to an attitude
that brooked no argument or alternative point
of view...clearly only interested in approbation and applause for a pre-set POV.
I enlarged upon that later in another short poem that finishes...
See the open hand reach out,
A closed hand is a fist.
The open mind makes room for doubt,
A closed mind will resist.
Comment is about Joseph J. Breunig 3rd (Poet profile)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:40
It is certainly very interesting, and challenging in the precise diction selected to cover so much relativity in symbolism. It demands multiple readings. And that is only a good thing.
Comment is about Crest (blog)
Original item by Katypoetess
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:30
I've loved music - with a few exceptions which
shall remain nameless - for much of my life.
Indeed, I write songs, some of which feature
here and elsewhere. I came to adolescence in
the 50s - young enough to thrill to the daily
change in songs in the Top 20, with hits that
are "classics" of their kind now - but also old
enough to see what a singer like Frank Sinatra was about. He stayed with me through the years
- and his many recordings as his breathtaking (literally!) skills developed will never date.
He had - and will continue to have - something
for every generation as it grows to maturity.
The joy of music is, of course, its amazing
variety - and I thank my lucky stars for it.
Comment is about Top Ten Non-Movers (blog)
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:28
Sock it to world. Yes! Great theme and well presented. Great choice of title -maybe because it can also be ambiguous.
Would you consider 'Slow down'?
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:25
I enjoyed reading this. The enterprize sounds worthy. PagevsPerformance is such a lark. IMO, the only aspect of this debate worth discussing is Spelling and Punctuation which means nothing in recitation, and rather more to the reader. Otherwise, what is the difference?
Sun 27th Oct 2013 15:18
A useful code for getting by! But it takes nerve
to change direction and that isn't always easy.
No wonder so many poems moan about what IS - rather than what COULD BE.
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