Ian Whiteley

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 17:22

thanks for the kind and supportive comments on 'Alien Feelings' Isobel - much appreciated - and I couldn't resist adding a tongue in cheek response to your edited response :-)
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 17:20

Isobel
some people think that backing vocal sounds like a woman, you know ;-)

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 17:19

Thanks for your kind and supportive comments regarding 'alien feelings' Francine - I do try to include provocative images to tie up with the words and this one fell into my lap - Harry thinks that Alien is cuddly - me, I think its rather disturbing :-)

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Ian Whiteley

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 17:17

Hey Harry - no problem with the comments regarding 'Alien feelings' - I did throw the picture in to try and muddy the waters to what is, basically, a love song with sci-fi imagery. So in a way I was asking for it :-) I do like to combine image with the poetry though - I suppose its my art background coming through - I do try to chose evocative pictures - and if you think that alien looks cuddly (or anything other than disturbing)I think you need to see someone about it :-)

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kath hewitt

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 16:58

'I wait in the rain at the top of the hill' - love it :-)

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Harry O'Neill

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 16:48

Ian,

(Pay me no notice)It`s just this `thing` I`ve got about pictures(and sometimes music) sometimes restricting or overpowering (or over, or mis - directing) the words of the poem.

I felt that the delicate,inter-stellar quality of the alienation in the poem is not helped by the `cute` E.T.-like little guy.

(mind, with the hair, the tattoos and the studs it`s a toss up which one is the alien :)

Nevertheless, I`d miss most of the pictures if they weren`t there.

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Harry O'Neill

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 16:17


Dave,
This is the kind of a haiku that we all hope one day to write.

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Harry O'Neill

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 16:12


M.C.
Just noticed...it was actually Victoria station (It`s age)

By the way, I like the way this jigs.

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steve pottinger

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 12:02

Thanks, Jane. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Nigel Astell

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Mon 29th Jul 2013 11:09

shaking a glittered halo of guilt
right through your heart inside his
those ten miles apart killing both.

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Dave Bradley

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:58

Hi Katy

I hadn't seen Collier's Lilith. Impressive. And the original is just up the road in Southport - may take a look.

Coincidentally I've been re-reading George Macdonald's enigmatic 'Lilith'. The Victorians seem to have been fascinated by her. Have you run across it?

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Francine

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:20

What a catchy little tune we have here - love it!
The words, the music, the photo - they all blend so well together!

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Francine

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:15

I am really liking these poems from you!
It's nice to see you writing (and sharing) again - trying different formats!
Now pass along whatever it is you have... xx

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Patricia &Stefan wilde

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:11

hope the 'town halls'have recovered Mike..10/10.xx

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:05

loved where this is coming from Mr.H. xx

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John Coopey

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:05

Hello Shirley,
Glad you liked "The Rhymes They Are A-Changin'" and that it made you smile.

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John Coopey

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:04

Thanks for your comments on "The Rhymes They Are A-Changin'", Harry. I bet you take some frightening.

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:03

in our 47 years together
it almost goes without having to say
that although we have had quite a few
'love murderings'
the 'funeral' has so far,been put off-haha!

enjoyed!xx

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:02

Hello MC,
Glad you enjoyed "The Rhymes They Are A-Changin'".
Again, another one I wrote for Bob Dylan which he never used!

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John Coopey

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 23:00

Hello, Izzy,
Thankyou for commenting on "The Rhymes They Are A-Changin'". It's only when I came to write this I realised what a clever and unusual rhyming scheme (aaabab) Dylan used. And harmonically, the penultimate line is a cliffhanger of the dominant chord, its 7th, its 6th and then the dominant again, all complimenting the single note melody.
Not just a hat-rack, that Dylan.

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 22:53

Thankyou for your thoughts on "The Rhymes They Are A-Changin'", Francine. I suspect it may not be my last parody!

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Katypoetess

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 22:30

Thank you for your comment Jane, glad you enjoyed!

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Katypoetess

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 22:28

Hi Dave, my Lilith is a recurrent theme of the first wife of Adam in the bible and also the prostitute, and the vampire that runs through some of my work in this collection to try and make my work more accessible by using characterisation that a reader can identify with more easily. Who knows whether it actually works or not!! It is also very personal and I have collier's Lilith on the wall of my bedroom which inspires me as I write : ) thanks for your comments on my work, really appreciate them, Katy

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Isobel

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 22:02

Beautiful poem Jane - lovely delicate imagery - a definite feel good poem!

I'm amazed no-one else has commented - I think it's all this sun that's driving people away from their computers - perhaps they're all fusing in those dew dangled threads...

Lovely to see you back posting! xx

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 21:58

Awww - how could I not love this?

In answer to the issues you have raised, it IS possible to love that which is alien... perhaps it's the 'otherness' which makes for the compelling attraction.

Great audio Ian and I liked the idea of having a second person come in on harmony - it should have been a woman though!

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Ian Whiteley

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 21:04

That's how the ladies see us Harry - I thought you would have realised that following your 'praise' query :-)

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Harry O'Neill

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 20:59

Ingenious Ian,

Although the picture somehow compels it to be read in `space-man` space rather than in incompatable, and emotionally human, space.

Like I said...ingenious.

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 20:39

Hiya Kath

I'm liking this a lot - it's got a nice, simple rhyme pattern and builds a vivid urban picture. It reminds me a little bit of 'that's entertainment' by The Jam - which Weller has said was a simple, yet effective piece and I think the same can be said for this :-)

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 20:23

Hi Dave - thanks for the comments on the sound/audio stuff I've been doing with a pal of mine here in St Ives. I think it might be my way forward. I seem to have stopped writing poems these days - and I miss it! But been writing some songs and now this more experimental stuff has come along. I'm wondering about putting it here on WOL. Might be fun - and bring me back into the fold!

Hope all is well with you! :)

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Harry O'Neill

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 20:19


Kath,
I like this very much and agree that it is (mainly) smooth and pleasurable.

I think lines ten and fourteen should change places.

I can see the intention of `Cacaphony` in that last (noisy?) stanza but feel that the word itself is too strong and `startles` the poem too overpoweringly.

Much better that most of the `list` poems.

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Ian Whiteley

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 11:27

as you say Butterfly - something a bit different - and I like it - a bit more hard edged and pithy - lets have some more like this please :-)

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 11:21

Hey Butterfly :-)

What a lovely compliment, thank you. And for your comments too. My use of capitals is purely down to my laziness when I move my writing from word to here! I get 'told off' a lot for not giving my work a title too ha ha

Hope you're well xx

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 11:03

We all (all of us) start of perfect, and then go on to be influenced by the good and bad things in this wonderfully diverse world.
I would prefer to keep my powder dry until little George is seen falling out of the 2026 version of Bougies at 3am pissed, until I make my judgements and of course record them in verse!

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 10:16

We could do a little anthology of all these and send them to him on his 21st birthday. Perhaps the newly-elected President of the Republic of England-south-of-the-Tees/Exe-line could present it to him?

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 10:12

well, that's me told, and well! Thanks Alan. Perhaps you could put this on a blog on here? Have you stuck it on the Guardian site?

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 08:10

Hi Ann

It's been a long time since you posted. Has the house move accounted for all your creative energy? Perhaps you are posting elsewhere. The one piece I accessed via FB was remarkable.

Dave

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Dave Bradley

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 08:02

Thanks Marksy, I like yours too. Your profile poem is a cracker.

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kath hewitt

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 01:53

'if I could swim in your eyes and not drown' - just lovely :-)

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kath hewitt

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Sun 28th Jul 2013 01:50

Thank you :-)

'and Morecambe weeps' - lpvely even in it's heavy sadness x

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Angela France

Sat 27th Jul 2013 22:16

Guest poet: Penelope Shuttle

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Greg Freeman

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 20:49

A measured, balanced response, Alan ... with "Some plankton-brained hack is on a hackneyed quest" one of the most resonant lines for me!

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Simon Marks

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 20:08

Loving your stuff Dave - makes you think, which is the whole point of this, isn't it?

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Simon Marks

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 19:53

Many thanks Dave, I work in the journalism profession and have had, in the past, to tolerate Mail sympathisers, so my heart goes out to you. But cheers for the kind comments.

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Alan Wolfson

Sat 27th Jul 2013 18:28

Looks like baby George will have to write his own bleedin poem. It's called I don’t want it

I miss that muffled bass beat,
the soothing heartbeat
that pulsed about my
lazy warm malingering
before I got expelled.

Crikey! – I’m absolutely shattered -
All that traumatic clattering
and clamour, It’s hardly glamorous.
But lo and behold how the bells do ring!
that herald a baby’s plight to be king.
They’ve already got it in for him .
Can’t even put up a fight, poor thing.
Apparently it’s hereditary. . . .
Oh shite – it’s me!

It turns out I’m third in line to the throne – Well I knew
this had to be Britain, I’m already in a queue.
There’s this complex hierarchy, and this here new kid
is born to be the lid on the pyramid.

Well,
I don’t want it
I want tit.
I want to piss and shit.
I want to gurgle and posset.
You can keep your sycophantic adoration,
and all your republican vilification,
and your obsequious infant adulation.
I just want instant gratification



Some plankton-brained hack is on a hackneyed quest
about ‘bottle or breast - What’s best for the kiddy?’ It’s
obvious to me - I’m surrounded by idiots
with all the language of praise and contempt to conjure.
Call me national treasure, or benefit sponger,
or prince, or parasite. The nation is torn.
Look - This is your crazy planet - I’ve just been born.
I can’t figure this archaic construct out.
I don’t know if I’ve come up trumps or lucked out.

No,
I don’t want it
I want tit.
I want to piss and shit.
I want to gurgle and posset.
You can keep your sycophantic adoration,
and all your republican vilification,
and your obsequious infant adulation.
I just want instant gratification.


So when the gushing and fawning and fuming and spite
is over, and the last plaudit and insult’s been hurled
Ask yourself
What’s blue and green and covered in parasites?

I think you’ll find the answer’s - The world.

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jane wilcock

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 16:55

great poem. I like the Queen but I see the world as you do in this poem. Never mind royalty, we each have our blame.

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jane wilcock

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 16:51

I like the rhythm of this peace, it sends me thinking forwards.

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 16:47

Nigel so sorry to have missed your comment! When is the next WOL meeting I could bring some copies then?

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Dave Bradley

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 14:12

Another very strong poem, Katy. Raw and gutsy. Lilith is a fascinating figure, understood in many different ways. It would be interesting to hear your take on her, although it's fair to ask whether there is more than one Lilith.

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Dave Bradley

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Sat 27th Jul 2013 14:05

It's one of the sadnesses of my life that there are Daily Mail readers in the family (so I do get to read it occasionally). It's particularly annoying that it includes odd bits of good journalism along with all the subtle brainwashing, peddling of indignation and skewed, prejudiced reporting. Anyway, it deserves every word you've written Marksy. Thank you.

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Julie Rose Clark

Sat 27th Jul 2013 13:46

Love poem to my hands

paint speckled
with white gloss
matt purple nails
hills and valleys
rounded fingers
5 ravines
type me a lovesong
bend touch teach me
show me evidence of
scalding water
talk to me of life
bend me a riverful
point me to joy
paint me a number
lie still
push my buttons
talk for me
cover my face
place my crystal earrings
sleep for me.

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