Wed 4th Mar 2015 19:44
Love this. The wisdom of time :)
Comment is about Looking back in Anger (blog)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
Wed 4th Mar 2015 19:41
The world of depression summed up so well poetically x
Comment is about Small World (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Wed 4th Mar 2015 19:38
I really like this Smash, I like how it does the full circle and ends hopefully. Just one little suggestion and that is to change the pass to passed. :)
Comment is about Seasons (blog)
Original item by Smash Lee
Wed 4th Mar 2015 16:48
Brilliant - 'nough said
Comment is about Dexteram Patris (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Wed 4th Mar 2015 15:31
I'm smiling like an idiot that you called Raycharles a 'piece.' If I was pretentious I'd describe it as a satire of found poetry, but it's really literally a personal conversation copied, pasted, and reformatted to make it readable. But it is verbatim: it was a bad night with a good ending.
Sometimes my life feels like somebody's making it up, and when I'm talking to someone my mouth moves like I'm an actor, before I even have a chance to think about what I want to say.
If you want to know more about Raycharles, there are some other things way way way back that I wrote like loveletters before I was on WoL that I imported onto here. They are all named 'Ray Charles' followed by a number. http://writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=45923
Just went over your new pieces. I would love to hear R.A.M. recited -- I, too, suffer the malady of a drifting mind. The problem is finding the surface again, sometimes.
Lady Spodden is simply fantastic -- very well paced and the language is fucking perfect. genuinely, i'm impressed and humbled.
Comment is about Jacqueline Phillips (poet profile)
Original item by Jacqueline Phillips
Wed 4th Mar 2015 15:29
What a lovely poem. I really enjoyed the feeling it conveyed. Thanks for sharing.
Wed 4th Mar 2015 15:15
Hi Jojo - great twist, I was expecting it to be about falling in love but then I guess that's what you intended. :-)
Comment is about Self Love (blog)
Original item by Jojo
Wed 4th Mar 2015 15:12
Hi Zach - It has taken me far to long to comment on this. I read it as soon as you put it up but have since been caught up in my own writing frenzy.
I would be interested to know if this is a 'based personal experience' thing but you don't have to share that info if you don't want.
I love the story this piece tells and found that by the time I had read it to the end I had a fully formed characterisation of the two conversationalists in my mind. It would be interesting to see this format used for a full novel.
Comment is about Ray Charles 0553 (02/28/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Wed 4th Mar 2015 14:43
I like that `fat raindrops falling`and also the
`dropped pennies` as rain.
But feel that the `slate` and `puddles` (though descriptive of the weather) constricts the space of those excellent last five lines.
(I think what I am trying to say is that it muddies the
needed listening space and clarity).
The rest of it all `fits`
Comment is about Tartan Beret (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Wed 4th Mar 2015 14:30
Hi Emma, like the wine glass, your post resonates. One large vodka raw against the throat and all your itches are scratched. Until the throat itches back. Tommy
Comment is about Breathing Liquor (blog)
Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling
Wed 4th Mar 2015 11:25
Hi Gray, thanks for taking the time to read & comment on The Tree House. I love If I Were a Proper Poet, can really relate :)
Comment is about Gray Nicholls (poet profile)
Wed 4th Mar 2015 11:18
Hi Andy, thanks for your very kind comment on tree house xx
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Wed 4th Mar 2015 11:01
Hi Graham, I really enjoyed this one, you capture a moment beautifully, thanks for sharing it :)
Wed 4th Mar 2015 10:24
re 'the more important conquest'I think 'that one'will never come about.
But it won't be for the want of trying!
Enjoyed the poem,people.x
Comment is about Darkside (blog)
Wed 4th Mar 2015 10:18
Hi Giovannie.This is my kind of poem.Short,and cleverly composed with the use of simple words.
Enjoy the site.x
Comment is about just craziness (blog)
Original item by giovannie
Wed 4th Mar 2015 10:12
Pleased and very thankful for your comments,Patricia,Stef,Gray and Harry (to who in particular,I say)yes indeed,there ARE more things in heaven and earth Mr'O Neil than in OUR philosophies
But I thank those very heavens and all the gods that go with them,for poets from the planet Liverpool!
If that isn't grovelling for future comments,I don't know what is!x
Comment is about Out of the ordinary (blog)
Dave D Poet Rhumour
Wed 4th Mar 2015 07:07
Lovely lines Harry. :)
Comment is about For my love on Valentine`s day (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Wed 4th Mar 2015 05:20
Jackie Phillips, I'm glad it caught your eye! I had been debating for a while on whether or not to post it, but I'm certainly glad I did!
Andy N, Thank you very much! It means so much to me that you enjoyed it!
Comment is about In The End (blog)
Original item by .L.m.P.
Cierra Breeze Potts
Wed 4th Mar 2015 03:28
Wed 4th Mar 2015 03:19
Comment is about It takes (blog)
Comment is about stranger (blog)
Wed 4th Mar 2015 03:14
Thanks for commenting Harry. :) Best wishes, Dave
Comment is about THE FAMILY - an Acrostic poem (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
David R Mellor
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 19:48
ahh thank you Mamta pleases me no end that you found it touching
Comment is about YOU STOP TIME (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 19:47
thanks Rose yes that works too and glad you like it
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 16:40
You are way up in the stratosphere now Rose.
(I`ve just been reading a scientific article on quantum mechanics which states. `In essence quantum mechanics dispenses with the commonly held notions of absolute position and absolute momentum, and replaces them with absolute notions of a sort having no analogue in common experience`) -After that one, where do we go for honey?
Actually you`ve got your feet solidly on the ground.
(As Shakespeare said`-there are more things Horatio...)
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 15:01
Thanks for your comments on my Tewkesbury poem, John / Zach. Appreciated.
Comment is about Zach Dafoe (poet profile)
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 13:21
I don't usually reveal my sources, Frances. But in this case thanks are due to Mr Graham Sherwood for letting us know about this. Graham has put one of Leonard Nimoy's poems up on the blogs, too http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=47255
Comment is about Farewell Leonard Nimoy, actor, director - and poet (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 13:01
R.I.P.Mr. Spock. I didn't know he wrote poetry. Thanks for this Greg.
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 12:54
excellent work, ian. not a word out of place there i think
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 12:53
the open ended ness of this poem works well for me rose. good stuff
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 12:43
we love the thoughts these words inspire Rose.Quite an open ended kind of poem.xx
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 12:40
your comments say it all Rose.And thanks,re your last line.(P)xx
Comment is about Every days dying menu (blog)
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 09:42
there but for the grace.
One cannot begin to imagine what terrible suffering these poor people have to go through.
Very simple,but powerful piece of writing Mrs.W!x
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 09:39
(thanks mateys)heres hoping none of this ever becomes reality eh?
Comment is about Hara-kiri (blog)
Tue 3rd Mar 2015 00:02
'shadows no longer acknowledge the sun' wowser line-wowser poem!xx
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 23:57
The female half of two old duffers,says thank you,Tilly,Rose,and a very much welcomed back young Stevie boy!xx
Comment is about Settled (blog)
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 23:28
Many thanks for your observations, Harry.
It is a little while since I myself was "Standing proud and standing tall". My own observations of the last 2 lines are based on hearsay and, regretfully, not on personal research.
Comment is about INTERNATIONAL WOMEN'S WEEK (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 23:27
Nicely put together, I like it Patricia,
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 22:51
Very true Dave
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 22:44
I am surprised at the comparative lack of response to your worthy attempt to revive such a classically approved and applauded poetic form as the anacreontic.
I am sure - in today`s relaxed attitude to describing bodily parts- that your choice of phrase to describe the female essential gender was fully appreciated by the sisterhood as the universal gateway through which all of us tiny little males and females enter into the world.(even those even tinier males and females who do not quite make it as far as personhood)
I am sure that your `Standing proud and standing tall` will eventually be appreciated by all of them John.
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 22:38
Really nice work Ian. Last four lines perfect.
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 22:10
A very moving and poignant poem, Ian.
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 19:47
This is so beautiful I wrote this panic poem about fear and death aswell
He’s coming, death
He was lurking around and he is here
They call for a savior
And pretend that he has arrrived
But this is true why am I afraid to go outside
What If I go outside and there is a cat
And you walk up to the cat
Because cats are nice and cuddly like pillows
But out of nowhere the cat turns into a monster
And says “I’m god you’re going to die”
And you are like "fuck you god, Im scared because of you”
Comment is about My fear precedes me (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 19:32
thanks so much for commenting on 'st. valentine's day mascara' very kind of you - I appreciate it. Welcome to WOL hope you enjoy the ride
Comment is about Pixie (poet profile)
Original item by Pixie
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 16:12
lovely combination of poem'n'picky,my friends.x
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 15:54
a MASSIVE,MASSIVE,thank you girls and gent.x
Comment is about Illicit (extended) (blog)
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 12:37
if my memory is correct, jeff. this is defo somewhat angrier than the first part, but it should go down fairly well i bet on the live circuit..
am i right in thinking you had your john cooper clarke head when you wrote this?
good stuff as always m8
Comment is about Why don't you get a life! II (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 12:34
short but certainly not sweet.
lot said in a few lines.
Mon 2nd Mar 2015 12:33
interesting... enjoyed this for its shortness.. particularly like roads in my eyes.
© Copyright Write Out Loud 2015 CIC. All rights reserved.