Fri 11th Jul 2014 02:48
Wow Stef, I can see your Dad. Your keen description takes me there with you...very nice :) And thanks for your comment on "write your own lines".
Comment is about Digging Dad (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:47
I like the fact that this is straight to the point. I also like unravelling and one night stand. Your use of words in both of these pieces is great. look forward to seeing more.
Comment is about God Knows I Try (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:25
Comment is about Write Your Own Lines (blog)
Original item by Candice Reineke
jan oskar hansen
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:24
thank you Cynthia Buell Thomas
Comment is about contemplation (blog)
Original item by jan oskar hansen
Patricia &Stefan wilde
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:16
wonderful poetic slice of history.
Comment is about For Jeffrey Hudson (blog)
Original item by David Cooke
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:13
very much heartfelt lines.We loved it.
Thanks Hari Das.xx
Comment is about Desperate (blog)
Original item by Hari Das
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:09
aw sorry Natalie!you are bringing tears to our baggy eyes now-lol!
-spooky! we were just reading and putting a comment on your latest poem-very good piece-
-indeed! Thank you so much.
Patricia and Stef.xx
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:07
A moment in time. A moment in thought. It's like a peek into a private world. I LOVE this.
Comment is about Letters and Chops (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:06
Love this poem. Simple beauty. The last four lines are my favourite.
Comment is about Six-fifteen on a Rainy Evening (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:05
welcome to the club!-not sweet(obviously)
-but oh so succinctly neat!
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:02
Made me cry. Very raw and real and beautiful at the same time. x
Thu 10th Jul 2014 20:00
Hi Dominique, thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I read your profile Biography and poems and nearly cried! I use poetry and singing and dancing in the same way. As an expression and a release. You are so very honest and your words are very real and beautiful. Just wanted to let you know that you touched my soul and am sure you are inspiring many others to have more courage to be real in this world. x
Comment is about Dominique Smith-Bryant (Poet profile)
Original item by Dominique Smith-Bryant
Thu 10th Jul 2014 19:12
very nice good one good analysis of neighbors house and i personally welcome u to the world of write out loud post your good works as well read others poetry too so that tit for tat u can also get comments by the peoples of our community be happy best of luck ....thumps up for the work
Comment is about ray m (Poet profile)
Original item by ray m
Thu 10th Jul 2014 19:05
wow superb very nice but but i think it can be developed more for more sensations .....best of luck good work
Thu 10th Jul 2014 19:03
Be happy Dominique u had written well that mirror reflected with a punch of philosophy got it what u feel'd....best of luck
Comment is about Those Days (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 18:55
Enjoyed very much.
Or who rides the wave
in a depndent haze - dependent?despondent?
The answer to everything.
I'm not auditioning - quite a motto.
Comment is about Everyone's a writer these days... (blog)
Original item by Edie Hope
Thu 10th Jul 2014 18:45
Lovely poem. Perhaps you don't need buried. I'm sure we'd get the drift.
Thu 10th Jul 2014 17:21
Very good. It's honesty at its core without the frills and fanfare. Good piece!
Thu 10th Jul 2014 16:58
The white feather treatment meted out in those days was harsh indeed - and often a sign of
the mob effect on those whose situations were
invariably unknown to the perpetrator(s).
However, I admit ambivalence on the subject of
conscientious objectors. I can understand
their loathing of taking life but don't see why
they cannot serve - as stretcher bearers etc.
Otherwise, they seem unwilling to take part
but ready enough to enjoy the results of the
sacrifice of others even unto death once the conflict is over.
That is beyond my understanding or sympathy.
Comment is about White Feather (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:35
Thank you Natalie, you're very kind. I'm gald to hear you've read it aloud - that's by far the best way.
Comment is about THE SMALL HOURS (re-post). (blog)
Original item by Travis Brow
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:24
I hardly need to explore this further, the poem itself is so well presented, and detailed, but I shall. Thanks for a mind-opening subject.
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:20
You have a deft pen, Ian, and the searching mind to go with it - a far-reaching, effective combination.
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:12
This is lovely. I'm not sure what I understand, but it's still lovely - in a gets-into-your-head kind of way, and your feelings.
Comment is about The Astronomer and her star-gazer. (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:05
This is a universal theme, but always new to each one of us. The thoughts here are honest. I especially like: 'a well-kept grave place is for the living.'
Thu 10th Jul 2014 15:01
A very fresh take on a very old theme, with imagination and skill. The concluding lines are excellent.
Comment is about The Circus of People (blog)
Original item by Twilbury Wist
Thu 10th Jul 2014 14:44
There are no neat guidelines to this kind of 'prosetry' except identifying a condensed moment, first by seeing the whole and then its parts. It follows the exact 'formula' for short story development: plot; place setting; sequencing; character development; imagery; interesting ending, using all the normal methods but in minimum words. So the crux is vocabulary at your finger tips, and the poetry skills that come into play with the writing of good poetry in any genre. Rhythm is vital.
This 'style' requires great discipline to put the maximum effect possible into a nutshell of content.
IMO, a sense of humour is a requisite.
Comment is about Phillip Kelly (Poet profile)
Original item by Phillip Kelly
Thu 10th Jul 2014 14:04
Hi Tonya, do read my poems and I would love some feed backs from you x
Comment is about Tonya (Poet profile)
Original item by Tonya
Thu 10th Jul 2014 14:01
Well written Charlotte x
Comment is about 355, Flat 2, at 21 (blog)
Original item by Charlotte
Thu 10th Jul 2014 13:04
Wow! Amazing imagery. I too loved that line about the mirror. Like some ancient fairy story. Very powerful.
Comment is about Lovebird (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:47
Thank you for your lovely comments on my work! Enjoying reading yours too! Your poetry is very honest, I like that xx
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:45
How beautiful! :) x
Comment is about ANALOGY OF BEAUTY (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:30
Am in love with your poem. It has such a lovely rhythm and sound and such atmospheric imagery - I just had to read it out loud to myself. Beautiful.
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:24
Thanks for your recent comment Travis. Really enjoying reading your poetry. Loving 'Run for your Life' above - I can completely relate.
Comment is about Travis Brow (Poet profile)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:21
Your poems speak to me! Awesome! :) x
Comment is about Don't Put Me in Your Box (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 12:16
Really love this poem. Gave me goose bumps and strangely needed to read this today! :) xx
Thu 10th Jul 2014 11:11
Haiku... You write the first and never know where the flow will go. I think I ended up with the songs from 'Junior Choice' meet the scenes from 'Midnight Express'!
Glad you got it and liked it Martin. Much appreciated.
Comment is about WANDSWORTH WUFFIAN (blog)
Original item by Ged Monks
Thu 10th Jul 2014 09:50
Comment is about culture (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 09:02
Thu 10th Jul 2014 09:00
Our thanks to you Dominique.We love 'Those days'
-great poem! And may we say,with all respect we don't see you as a 'walking contradiction'but a lovely looking and lovely minded lady.
Patricia and Stef.xx
Comment is about Closure (blog)
Thu 10th Jul 2014 03:35
Just finished reading this and it's brilliant.
Comment is about Poet Nathan Filer scoops £30,000 Costa award with first novel (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 9th Jul 2014 23:19
Welcome to Write Out Loud.
I hope you enjoy the site. We're really looking forward to reading some of your work and I know that you will be warmly welcomed by other WOL-ers too.
If you haven’t already added a picture to your profile please try and do so. It’s good to see what our fellow poets look like.
Have a good browse around, there’s lots going on and if you have the time to make some comments about the work of other poets please feel free. It’s the best way to get some constructive feedback about your own work too.
There’s always someone who’ll help you out with a problem, so just ask and someone will get back to you. It’s a friendly place, so welcome once again.
Comment is about Jesse Gordon (Poet profile)
Original item by Jesse Gordon
Wed 9th Jul 2014 19:37
Thanks for your comments on the red chair M.C.
I also realised after posting this that I had forgotten about the buzz of the electric cutters.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (Poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Wed 9th Jul 2014 19:33
Very clever Daniel I like it. I can't imagine many people whistling his tunes now.
Wed 9th Jul 2014 17:27
Thank you sincerely for your very kind words.
I just want you to know that you have a wonderful blog of work.
Anyone who has ever been smitten by love should be able to relate to your work 'On the Influences of Love'... delete 'dime store' and insert 'poundshop' for the people of the UK.. but it is great as it is.
'The Slow Boy' is a beacon of hope for anyone, regardless of gender, with confidence and self-belief.
"It's amazing what that boy achieved
When he failed to listen, but believed...
I hope that somebody more articulate than I could read, comment and maybe analyse your poem 'A River' (after first reading your preface 'I thought to try something different').
It is indeed a most beautiful piece of work.
I am humbled that you like my stuff! Thank you.
Comment is about James Roper (Poet profile)
Original item by James Roper
Wed 9th Jul 2014 15:01
An unusual topic that brought back my own childhood and memories of big red chairs with
those foot levers that barbers used to raise & lower the infant customer...part of a long-gone
premises opposite Paignton railway station in
South Devon. You had to walk through a shop to
get to the barbers at the rear...a strange
place to a child: full of men and their talk, cigarette smoke, and the smell of hair lotion.
And, of course, that sinister hiss of a strop
razor expertly wielded behind a recipient's
uneasy reflected stare.
Comment is about The red chair (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Wed 9th Jul 2014 14:42
I really like this poem. It's an interesting perspective on aging that I can appreciate and understand everyday I get older and look back decisions and actions made when I was younger than I am now
Wed 9th Jul 2014 14:33
This is really good. It makes me want to sit back and enjoy and take part in the little things that sometimes make all the difference in your day. Great job!
P.S. Thanks for the comment :)
Wed 9th Jul 2014 13:28
Woops! - found the theme; it's "grit"...
OK OK I shall go away and stop causing trouble....
Comment is about Stockport WoL (Poet profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Wed 9th Jul 2014 09:31
many thanks for your comment on "Landing" a real pat on the back. It's a craft indeed, and good to share the enthusiasm here.
Wed 9th Jul 2014 08:40
Thanks for the positive reinforcement Daniel; I think it is people like you that make something like this work.
Comment is about Ged Monks (Poet profile)
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