Mon 2nd Feb 2009 19:07
I removed my earlier post of this and edited properly (even added punctuation this time) before reposting). Good advice, Gus.
Comment is about The Water Sprite (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 18:43
Don't come. Don't strut your stuff. (?)
Comment is about Events Cancelled Due To Weather (article)
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 17:40
These two poems together with thirteen others have been published in the book Poets Centre Stage volume 2 by Cauliay Publishing of Aberdeen and is obtainable from Amazon £7.99
Comment is about Jim Wild (poet profile)
Original item by Jim Wild
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 15:48
Hi there Anthony
Was just going to write "Great rhythm and love the punch lines (shorter lines) then read the footnote and had to read / sing it again. LOL
Original comment still stands great stuff.
Comment is about High-life-low-life (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 15:23
Just read your three recent offerings. Had to work a little to prise out the detail of the story (I thought that was a good thing) which each time started with striking imagery and ended with no loose ends.
Comment is about EsmondJones (poet profile)
Original item by EsmondJones
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 15:18
Have you written any new poems recently
Comment is about Bill Brierley (poet profile)
Original item by Bill Brierley
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 15:06
These three beautifully crafted sketches miss little detail...superb observations.
Comment is about Brazen Skunk (blog)
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 13:03
Thanks for your visit/Comment:
By "trad" I mean traditional; by "metre" I mean the rhythm of a poem.
Comment is about Belinda (poet profile)
Original item by Belinda
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 12:16
I have visited Kyoto, Tokyo and many other places in Japan, and there are still many places to cover. I hope to do some more travelling in Asia, whilst living in Japan.
Excuse me for asking, but what do you mean by, Trad and Metre? I am only just starting to develop my form and style in writing poetry and any new terminology still kind of throws me.
Many thanks for your encouraging words. Bel
Comment is about David Franks: Walkabouts Verse (poet profile)
Original item by David Franks: Walkabouts Verse
Alison Mary Dunn
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 11:51
"Walls! The more I pound
The more the concrete surrounds".
"hands are clasped,
Seeking answers from a universe
You have an intense power in your poetry that affects me greatly.
Do you like art? I wondered if you might like the work of a favourite artist of mine 'Kris Kuksi' http://kuksi.com/ His work is challenging to human kind, religion, war, death.
Comment is about UNPROFOR (blog)
Mon 2nd Feb 2009 10:11
Thanks for your comment... the sound of the love heart beating...beating ..was an intended structure.
Thank you once again.
Sun 1st Feb 2009 21:39
No Sex crazed wicked vamp step mothers.....no hey ho hey ho... not even a frog or a prick in the finger.... this fairy tale is Grimm!
Comment is about A Portrait of Love (blog)
Original item by Tim Linton
Sun 1st Feb 2009 15:44
Lots of strength in that piece Lauretta. Transported me for a while to that hyper-sensory harsh world of. Neon, Noise and faulty couplings. Glad to be back however.
Comment is about Scouting for Girls (blog)
Sun 1st Feb 2009 11:04
So true and so funny at the same time! One thing I'm beginning to notice also is the number of poets inspired by the worldview of the "fabulous" Daily Mail! Haha!
Jonboy from Wigan
Comment is about Asylum Seeking Daleks (article)
Sun 1st Feb 2009 08:56
Armpits aside, Jennie, I like your use of trad. metre and rhyme.
Comment is about Jennie B (poet profile)
Original item by Jennie B
Lauretta de Mar
Sun 1st Feb 2009 01:32
an awesome example of performance poetry.
worthy and complete
my idea of the genre of performance poetry encapsulated.
Sun 1st Feb 2009 01:12
This one could get people going!I think the moustache was funny looking. As for his art, he was very good, and its to bad no one gave him the time of day.Had the man been given any kindness in his miserable life, and pats on the shoulder for his art, he may not have been the monster that he turned into. Prats are made everday, by an unkind world, with no concern for others feelings.Many times the world gets exactly what it gives and makes.Sure he was a nutter, sure he was sick, but he was not born that way.Im not sure about the comedy, but he sure needed some.
Comment is about Hitler (blog)
Original item by M C Johnsonburger
Sun 1st Feb 2009 01:00
HI Dermot, nice poem, statistics always lie!
Comment is about Variation and fugue (blog)
Sun 1st Feb 2009 00:38
Calculator poem number 6 add up to 177,329 exactly (including title). See you monday.
Comment is about Freda Davis (poet profile)
Original item by Freda Davis
Sat 31st Jan 2009 19:01
Sat 31st Jan 2009 18:52
rubbed the right way
heres not wishing to label or brand
hard not to
when investigating hands
they can have it all
on a night out
must be the messages
to fit in.
Sat 31st Jan 2009 18:44
Not too keen on being sanded or branded. Rubbed could be alright.........
Sat 31st Jan 2009 18:23
Thanks for submitting to WC, it takes courage and it is a service to every poet who reads it although there may be only a few who post in that area.
As I have said time and again, the appreciation of poetry is subjective and my opinion is of no more worth than anybody else's. I have read several of your poems and I like your work although your style is very different from mine.
Others will think very differently as Lauretta has already shown.
If you want to put any questions to me directly or tell me what you think about my comments please feel free to do so on this profile or in an e-mail. Thanks again for contributing and keep up the work.
Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)
Original item by Malpoet
Sat 31st Jan 2009 18:11
a discussion could open up into the psychology of Hitler. Would be interesting once we get beyond the stereotypical responses I mean (which such debate would surely invite if open), I never knew about him doing comedy, is that right?
Sat 31st Jan 2009 18:04
Looks good will try and attend if work permits, whip us all!
Comment is about Blood and Glitter In Liverpool (article)
Sat 31st Jan 2009 17:34
Hi Mr Malpoet
thanks for reading and analysing at such length my poem in Write club. A lot of your comments I agree with, others I think I need to explain. Some I don't agree with. But I am really grateful of your time and effort spent on it. Winston
Sat 31st Jan 2009 15:19
Val: I'm happy you like this one! from Lauretta
Janet: CJ may read it, my voice is a little hoarse this week ;-)
Comment is about (blog)
Sat 31st Jan 2009 14:37
gloom and grime has its place
and must be said
it feels right to
exorcise it Janet
x x x thank you for reading!
Comment is about Marilyn (blog)
Sat 31st Jan 2009 11:04
I usually feel that I have left too many words in and I feel that about this one. It doesn't seem finished to me.
As people are always saying, poets have their own 'voice'. I love your style which I could not see fitting into my terse kind of approach to the few subjects that I treat at all seriously.
Humour seems to require more words. You always manage to bring tenderness, readily understandable human feelings and sometimes strong passions to what would otherwise be mundane. Like shopping or kebabs or whatever. That is a real talent. Apart from your lovely delivery of course.
Comment is about Crunch (blog)
Sat 31st Jan 2009 10:46
Hi Andy. Comment left in News Reader Blog area
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Sat 31st Jan 2009 10:43
One of my best friends is called Marilyn. True!
Love the poem Lauretta. The bathroom and stairway created some fantastic imagery, if not a bit gloomy and grimy.
The title surprises me somewhat because i thought the poem was going to be about the singer of the same name.
Loving heroine has two connotations which again creates confusion in the mind and made me go back and read it again.
Sat 31st Jan 2009 10:18
Thanks Andy for your recent comment on Imogen.
I can always rely on you to comment on the beat and rhythm which is most appreciated.
Sat 31st Jan 2009 10:16
thanks for your comments to my recent blogs.
I did have some trouble with Imogen. I'll work on it and re-blog when i have a little time to spare.
Thanks also for comment on " Suzanne."
Hope she didn't keep you awake.
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Sat 31st Jan 2009 00:40
i try and write this gritty stuff but end up overblowing it, the minimal ah the minimal
I like the 'trainspotting' feel of this.
Sat 31st Jan 2009 00:38
love your stories,poems and travels mate!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment is about On the 250th anniversary of Robert Burns' birth (blog)
Sat 31st Jan 2009 00:30
I think this is a change in style for you, tone but carries a lot of power! Good Stuff!
Fri 30th Jan 2009 22:06
A departure for you? - definitely somewhere over the footbridge! Like it.
Fri 30th Jan 2009 12:28
Good to see you on here.
Comment is about jason t richardson (poet profile)
Original item by jason t richardson
Fri 30th Jan 2009 11:51
Yes. A mighty and beautiful wall of chalk being the liberation from confining walls of mould. Maybe too poetic for such tragedy, but you can see the draw of the place.
Comment is about Redundant (blog)
Fri 30th Jan 2009 11:41
very good ...moving but short of over sentimental i enjoyed it,,,j
Comment is about Richer, tomorrow (article)
Fri 30th Jan 2009 11:17
Totally knocked out with your poem... very strong imagery...felt like having a hot shower and a bowl of soup after reading it!....Small wonder they use Beachy head for the final leap
Fri 30th Jan 2009 10:10
For a long time I have been preoccuppied with the way people sometimes do awful things under pressure without intending to do them. In this case it is a short walk to the shop that turns into an inability to return, but there could be many other outcomes from an unlimited range of pressures.
Fri 30th Jan 2009 09:51
Yes Pete,this is different there is tenderness, I love the last verse your perception of life is quite remarkable.
Fri 30th Jan 2009 07:28
mmm - it's about time someone moved that bloody no smoking sign - it spoils the shots...
Comment is about Jeffarama at the Old Boar's Head, Middleton January 2009 (photo)
Fri 30th Jan 2009 02:44
I agree; the last three lines are very powerful.
The despair of the first two stanzas put me in mind of the song 'The Beaten Generation' by my favourite band 'The The'.
Fri 30th Jan 2009 00:05
A fresh slant on things in this interesting little offering. Thanks for posting. really liked it
Comment is about crippled script (blog)
Original item by Emma Roy- Williams
Fri 30th Jan 2009 00:02
Comment is about Melanie Rees at the Howcroft Inn, Bolton September 2008 (photo)
Fri 30th Jan 2009 00:01
This is a powerful poem for me. Few words on each line but a strong image on almost all of these brief lines. The rhym at the very end drove the message home.
Thu 29th Jan 2009 23:17
Thanks for your comments on SNAFU. To me, it felt angry - perhaps it's all in the eyes? :-) I'll work on sounding angrier!
It really is appreciated when you, and others, take the time to read & give feedback. I was verynervous about posting that soundfile - I recorded it at least a dozen times, trying to get it right; in the end I thought, post ithis now! - because I knew I was getting to the stage where I'd think oh I'll leave it for today, and so it would go on.
Anyway - nice to hear from you.
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
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