Mary Braithwaite

Thu 12th Nov 2009 05:29

this sounds a lovely place in the sun, although of course it is now nightime. After the heat of the day, the beauty of the night...

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Mary Braithwaite

Thu 12th Nov 2009 05:14

GONE?....your poems gone

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Francine

Thu 12th Nov 2009 01:35

Touching, Graham...
How appropriate, as it is Veterans Day here today
(still is 11/11/09 in USA at this hour).
Love the analogy with the flower.

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Andy Williamson

Wed 11th Nov 2009 22:27

Hi Kealan.

Thanks for your comments on "A Day in the Life". I just came back from Gentral America, where I penned a sequel. I posted it on here a few days back. Complete antithesis !!

Take care, Andy

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Andy Williamson

Wed 11th Nov 2009 22:24

Hi Jeff
Thanks for your comments.

I live where the Glastonbury Festival takes place, and so I understand what you mean by the vivid picture you paint of the festival site. Maybe you're just 'trench' weary. Hope you decide to make it next year.

Take care

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Francine

Wed 11th Nov 2009 22:13

Hi Steve, glad you liked my poem 'Taken'...
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

What ever do you mean by this?
'It's a bit durrrty though!'
Hmmm... Does this reveal something about what's in your mind?
Because... I could have been describing the thrill of a dance (dance)... ; )

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Graham Sherwood

Wed 11th Nov 2009 19:35

Steve thank you for your kind comments on eleven/eleven. I agree with your view on reportage.
strangely I had these few words in my mind "we break our men" for over a week. It wasn't until I suddenly thought of the juxtaposition of poppies (as in Flanders and Afghanistan that the other words came.

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Francine

Wed 11th Nov 2009 19:23

Thank you Winston for your comments on my poem 'Taken'...
always greatly appreciated.

I did read Andy N's (as you had suggested) and commented.

I really like your latest, but a bit confused by the ending, so I am reading it a few more times...

Moi x

p.s. Is the typo in the title of your poem on purpose?

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Francine

Wed 11th Nov 2009 19:14

Thank you so much Dave for your insightful comments on my poem 'Taken'...
You always seem to understand/express my intent quite well : )

Moi x

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Steve Regan

Wed 11th Nov 2009 18:30

This earthly life, this vale of tears, this testing ground for passions, this seed-bed for great poetry. You should be really proud of this one, Isobel. New Brighton salutes ye!

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Steve Regan

Wed 11th Nov 2009 14:12

Thoughtful and thought-provoking, and (yes!) beautiful, Graham. But I am uneasy with alll the media-whipped emotion that's around about the conflict in Afghanistan. Private grief is right; public gnashing of teeth is not. I don't mean your poem, which is good, I mean all the reportage which is sapping morale,

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winston plowes

Wed 11th Nov 2009 13:35

going ?

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winston plowes

Wed 11th Nov 2009 12:23

Another great one here Marriane. Started with a great title. 'Proteus' is such a great word. After reading the first 4 lines my mental imagery was already dancing on hot coals not being alowed to settle. Forging on, my journey became ever richer until the closing passages when the piece seemed to resolve itself, the waves calmed and my boat sank gently to a calmer if sadder place at the sea's bed. Sorry if this assessment is a bit unusual your work defies to be described in simple terms. Win x

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Wed 11th Nov 2009 12:05

brilliantly composed piece. Every line is a poem in itself.
Good work!
Marianne.

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John Darwin

Wed 11th Nov 2009 07:26

Hello Iso :-) No it wasn't me, it was Orhan Veli Kanık, a far better poet than me, and nearly everyone else. Of course, I am better looking, naturally.

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Francine

Wed 11th Nov 2009 02:45

Merci toi pour tes commentaires sur mon poème 'Taken'...
Tu me fais toujours rire!

Euh... MOI un singe?! ; )

Moi xxx

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Francine

Wed 11th Nov 2009 02:27

Merci beaucoup Gus pour le compliment sur mon Poème 'Taken'...
Tu ne peux pas savoir à quel point ça me fait plaisir : )

Moi xxx

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Gregory Nussbaum

Wed 11th Nov 2009 01:34

Thank you for the warm welcome Michel.

I do hope to furnish you with poetry that is 'divine' in the coming winter months.

I read Oblivion and the words explore the title well. A bit too gratuitous for my sensibilities but extraordinary and powerful idiom you have. 'blithe oblivion' 'lamenting crimson' 'demonic expiry'. I wondered if the variation on elipses length of five dots and four dots expressed any more than had you used large gaps to signify time passing? but that's a mystery I shall have to take to bed with me this evening as I'm sure it is too late for you to respond tonight.

I look forward to reading more from the Francois canon in due course.

love

Gregory S Nussbaum.

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Gregory Nussbaum

Wed 11th Nov 2009 01:19

Good evening Winston,

Thank you for the welcome to Write Out Loud website.

I read a few of your poems and enjoyed them: For some reason I was reminded of Cathy Grindrod with some of your rhyme schemes. She is really good as I'm sure you'll agree. So I do hope you take that as a compliment.

I look forward to reading more of the Winston canon in the coming winter months.

love


Gregory S Nussbaum.

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Dave Carr

Tue 10th Nov 2009 22:08

Hi Jeff,
Thanks for comment on my stuff. I like your Glastonbury poem and Cemetary Gates. Also enjoyed your JCC recital last month at the Tudor.

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 21:07

Good stuff Andy and gets better at the end, cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 21:05

Hi Nicky, just catching up, really like this,mainly because I don't think I would ever dream of writing it, brave writing and left me with an uncomfortable feeling in a way, suppose you meant that - the feeling of restriction, anyway good stuff, hope to see you soon Jeff X

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 21:00

Hi Len, really nice reading hope youre well cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 20:56

Hi Janet, great description, I could have been there! hope to see you thursday Jeff X

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 20:55

Hi Andy, just catching up as usual, hadn't seen this, like it, nice ending, could have been a film sequence, cheers jeff

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 20:51

Hi Soph, love this, great to see you at henden and loved your performance Jeff X

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Francine

Tue 10th Nov 2009 20:33

Hmmm...
Selon mon dictionnaire français (Larousse)
Bêtise nf 1. Manque d'intelligence. 2. Action ou parole bête. 3. Chose sans importance, futile.

So... yes, it does mean stupidity, as in lack of intelligence, as well as in things done or said, and things of an unimportant or futile nature.

Je l'ai trouvé vachement intéressant ; )
Hey, it made me stop and comment.

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 19:17

Hi Dave
thanks for your recent comments. actually normally my Skoda too is very reliable. Coming up to 100,000 N reg Felicia (Not the one in the pic) Just had a new starter motor and its not spot on. lol Win

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:47

Hi there, Thankyou so much for your comments on my latest blog entry, more detailed comments left on blog page. Winston

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:47

Hi there, Thankyou so much for your comments on my latest blog entry, more detailed comments left on blog page. Winston

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:46

Hi there, Thankyou so much for your comments on my latest blog entry, more detailed comments left on blog page. Winston

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Ron Scowcroft

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:46

Hi Neil - Thanks for the comments on 'Age Concern'. I have the suit in my wardrobe but I'll keep the location of the charity shop a secret!

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:36

Hi Isobel. I am now part of the WOL web team. My role is that of New Members Organiser. Its great that you take time to meet and greet new members already, just carrying on doing that please if you can and this will help a great deal Winston

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Isobel

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:27

Hi Winston - is this 'New Members' manager a new WOL position or are you self appointed.... I've always taken a healthy interest in new members.... would be happy to assist you in your meeting and greeting - tee hee.xx

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Isobel

Tue 10th Nov 2009 18:25

Glad you changed your pic John - that last one really wasn't you...

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kealan coady

Tue 10th Nov 2009 16:22

this is great stuff, and i admire it's dark and resigned nature especially the last line. Also the isolation was worked well and did justice to the overall layout. Good stuff, looking forward to hearing more.

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Louise Coulson

Tue 10th Nov 2009 16:14

Thanks Mary. Wow it is like your painting. I took this photograph yesterday morning at Leverhulme Park in Bolton.... spooky x

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Ivy Alvarez

Tue 10th Nov 2009 15:41

Thanks so much for including this. :-)

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 14:41

Hi Dave. thanks for your comments on The Silver Surfer poem. It is waky and unusual but the content does mirror the life of this fictional fellow. cheers Win

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 14:40

Hi Cynthia. Thanks for your comments on The Silver Surfer poem. It was fun to write and came together rather quickly, didn't realise this style was en vogue however. Win

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 14:38

Hi John, thanks for your comments on The Silver Surfer poem. I have been fascinated by this characters tortured soul and immense power for some years. Ireally tried to get a good rhythm in this piece so glad you picked that out. A saxon poem...now that would be different indeed. Winston

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Marianne Louise Daniels

Tue 10th Nov 2009 14:11

I meant faint

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steve mellor

Tue 10th Nov 2009 14:08

Hi Bernadette
Enjoyed your entry to life on WOL. I'm a great believer in choosing the rainbow every day.

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michael shepherd

Tue 10th Nov 2009 13:31

Cynthia --

this is how I wrote and posted it -- I didn't spot until today that the website had thrown all the last part into a heap... maybe Julian can explain this.. There have been other glitches, but this is a new one.
I think this one owes something to Samuel Beckett and Last of the Summer Wine.. now there's a thought..

Michael

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michael shepherd

Tue 10th Nov 2009 13:20

Cynthia, thanks for your thoughtfulness (he spat...):
I'm sure you're right; if you yourself had written it...(he smugged)...
but for me, the first is an internal rhyme, and the second a reverse assonance -- 'leave'/'veale'

However, I shall reflect on your remarks over a cosy cup of organic bitter aloes...;-)

Anyway, thanks for the time you spent on this, away from ironing poetry flat...(hey, that's a joke..)

Michael

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 10th Nov 2009 13:10

faint' was what you meant, yes? Not 'feint'? Just checking. I'll be back.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 10th Nov 2009 13:05

This breathes such a sense of place and intuitive immediacy.
But: I seriously would delete 'and snow', and also 'now revealed'. For me, musically and visually, they serve no purpose not already clearly captured. Aren't I daring!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 10th Nov 2009 12:59

Liked the 'verse' formation much better. This feels like getting buried in words while struggling for the twisty ideas.

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steve mellor

Tue 10th Nov 2009 12:42

Hi Gus
WOLOP - Congrats
I demand a recount, though how one could recount zero I don't know.
A sour loser
Anon

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winston plowes

Tue 10th Nov 2009 12:05

Stark poem Geraldine. Puts life into perspective. Lotsto think about beyond the words you have used here. Keep postng. Winston

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