Sat 21st Mar 2009 19:11
I wouldnt be too sorry, noone wants to see me when Im being 'loud and hairy'. : D You got any coming up soon in my fair city,Winston?
Comment is about My first open mic! (blog)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Sat 21st Mar 2009 19:09
Loud and Hairy ! I am sorry I missed this. Winston
Sat 21st Mar 2009 19:06
Hi Daniel. Really felt the desparation and internal pain in this. the locked lock, the photo in the mind you cant ignore, liked the idea of the prison that is the wierwolf / zombie body. Not sure about the title. Thanks for posting this one. Winston
Comment is about endless living death without you! (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
Sat 21st Mar 2009 17:19
Oh its you! Well done for sniffing me down.
I dont just do conversational - I have many melodramatic 'descriptive' poems - Im just having a 'funny' phase at the mo which apparently involves many inverted commas. Yes - Ive never been before, and I think I may have just missed one! But I'll be at the next one and think your poems are great - espexially The York's Prayer : )
Comment is about Simon Rennie (poet profile)
Original item by Simon Rennie
Sat 21st Mar 2009 17:15
Great conversational style you've got going on there. Keep it up, and hopefully see you at Inn Verse. Us MMUers are getting about a bit aren't we?
Comment is about Sophie Hall (poet profile)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 16:35
A hearty breakfast by the way - is a fave of mine
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Sat 21st Mar 2009 16:33
Well thankyou and I very much like you for saying so : )
You have so many poems that you will probably break my mouse scrolling wheel - however I think the ones Ive read so far are exceptional and make me want to bleed new words out of my eyes to somehow defeat you in literature-war.
For now though - I will simply nod and say bravo, you wordy creature. : D x
Sat 21st Mar 2009 16:21
Thank you Mike for your comments and experience regarding ORMS, this will be an ongoing study for me. June
Comment is about A Simple Case of Child Hate (blog)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 14:21
Bolton Man is a powerful piece of work. I can't say that I like the subject matter (no reflection on your choice I hasten to add) but for me two short pieces shouted out to me.
"real tans, nice smiles, clean hands" is a really high quality statement as is "someone who's seen better days and better men".
Search out more of these and the work wil be stunning. Regards, Graham (for some reason I can't call you sis like the others, sorry)
Comment is about Sister Solstice (poet profile)
Original item by Sister Solstice
Sat 21st Mar 2009 14:08
Julie, look no further than the words/songs of Leonard Cohen if you need to justify songwriting.
If you haven't heard his "everybody knows" then take a peek at it.
Comment is about Julie Booth (poet profile)
Original item by Julie Booth
Sat 21st Mar 2009 14:06
This was based on one particular friend of mine. I did not want to use his name for obvious reasons, and he happened to live in Bolton, hence the title. No generalisation intended.
He's a nice guy, but a product of his primary socialisation and society. This poem is not suppsed to be judgemental, but sympathetic; hence the insights as to what he really wants, compared to what he actively pursues through habit or expectation.
Like 'Salford' the subtext is not pejorative, but is actually critical of society that allows these situations to occur, and not the individuals who are, indeed victims of circumstance.
I hope that explains it a little more clearly. I don't write anything that is meant to be taken literally; there is always a secondary and usually compassionate message.
Comment is about Bolton Man (blog)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 13:58
Great image, diddymen and the Bluebell girls performing together.
Comment is about Boring (blog)
Original item by Malpoet
Sat 21st Mar 2009 13:08
Tops! Very moving, enuff said.
Comment is about Loose Ends (blog)
Original item by sian howell
Sat 21st Mar 2009 13:07
Hello Janet, Steve, Jane and Michael. Thank you so much for your comments. In answer to your question, yes, Oysters can be cooked on the Barbeque and they're delicious. Here in Japan they love Oysters and the festival I attended was by the seaside, and there was a rock band playing too :)). Thank you again for taking the time to read my effort.
Comment is about Oysters (blog)
Original item by Belinda
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:34
right speed on mine too , i saw the diddymen and the bluebell girls when i was young , very young
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:29
Thanks Steve. I am a demented diddyman, but the clip plays at the right speed on my computer. Don't know what is happeining I'm afraid.
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:27
This is a difficult piece to comment on. While I understand the pain this refers too, i can also understand the suicide, who feels guilt or shame, or despair, or perhaps the infinity of depression circling his/her life. I been there on one or more occasions. I dont know the full history of the experience you refer to. But if the protagonist can gain help, life can get better. Life can improve, as for those who feel the hurt, forgiveness is a brave and strong virtue not often realized. It may seem life piece - meal. But the society we now live in affects all, and some lash out, some try to opt out. Many conform and lose something of themselves. Top poem though bro, thought provoking, sincere, and with depth and pain. Nice one.
Comment is about HOW DARE YOU (blog)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:19
Malcolm, that's a lovely, sly poem, but are you aware that your audio clip is running fast? Makes you sound like a demented Diddyman. That's a shame because I just know you'll read the above really well. Can you re-load your MP3 or whatever?
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:14
there's a lot of truths in one particular mind-set of some characters in our species in the poem.
I love the 'dead end' photo which enhances the theme.
Not so sure the Bolton lads would agree with you on all points. After all, this kind of character could be anywhere in this country. :-)
Good stuff though.
Beachside tucker is cool. Havent been able to do it much but the few occasions I have, have been memorable. Never tried oysters though.
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:10
not all experiences in life can be explained ,, yet
Comment is about ORBS (blog)
Original item by june slater
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:09
I like this poem Graham. Cannot really add more than that. It's just a really thoughtful poem despite its brevity.
Comment is about Memorama (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Sat 21st Mar 2009 12:04
Hi june, i was very interested in the paranormal when i was younger. When things began to go bizarre in ma life i got a little scared, and tried to distance myself from what is, unexplainable. However, I seen an orb for the first time about 6 weeks ago, floating serenely and silently outside the window above the garages where I live. I watched it float for a full twenty - thirty seconds before it disappeared through the top of the garage roof. I neither was fearful or aghast at the appearance. It was in fact beautiful to see. It was the size of an orange and was like a white light. Not many will believe me given my sufferings, however, perhaps you will. They are real, and I think of them as a privelige to see.
Sat 21st Mar 2009 11:46
Horrible slimy things. How anyone can call them aphrodisiacs i honestly don't know. Prefer the champagne myself. :-)
Have i read this wrong only i never heard of oysters being cooked before.
Nice imagery and love the scents of cut grass and the barbecue charcoal adds a touch of warmth on what feels like a cool day beside the sea. :-)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 11:39
I can give you lots of information about orbs and if you use my email address on my profile page, i can direct you to a couple of websites which are specifically for questions like yours.
Sorry i cannot help you on here though. :-)
Sat 21st Mar 2009 11:20
have you rewrote this a little? seems a bit different, but still carries a heck of a lot off power!
Comment is about This ball and chain. (blog)
Original item by Sarah Clark
Sat 21st Mar 2009 09:00
no edit button , so i changed it back :)
Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)
Original item by Steve Regan
thanks steve , love the cool and sexy photo ;)
my poem came back to the top of the listings by default i was trying a change and didnt like it ,
Sat 21st Mar 2009 00:39
HI June, You know, ORBS give me one problem, no biblical scripture to back them up. But I love them, its as if they call you to see them! I have pics of my kids with orbs. I find them very exciting. Part of me really wants to believe they are my loves that have gone. How are you? Im ok. Trying my best to stay faithful and happy, and keep all the kids happy.xx take care, love the question and poem
Fri 20th Mar 2009 19:57
YOu're quite right....I'm only dreamin Thats why I'm a poet...Its only make believe...
Thanks again for you comment
Comment is about Carol Falaki (poet profile)
Original item by Carol Falaki
Fri 20th Mar 2009 15:59
Hi Belinda, a nice evocation of nice times by the seaside. Oysters, I love 'em. I used to work in Colchester and Whitstable - which are both big oyster towns
Shane alexander stanisauskis
Fri 20th Mar 2009 10:30
Hey sister! Fanx 4 the reply! I was jus wondering how i go about gettin my word out as ive been writing for years bt hav no idea were to start! How did u go about it?Lol.....Bless x
Fri 20th Mar 2009 09:27
Thanks Carol, I just wish I had taken the time to write something more conventional, but then, perhaps, I might have failed to get my point across -which is probably a reflection on my poetry skills? And you are right, we are all part of it. I like your plea for Burma, short and to the point.
Fri 20th Mar 2009 00:04
And firstly, thanks for your generous comment on "The Gift."
Liked this very much, there are observations that all of us will identify with here (or at least those of us who have ever cast off our armour in the cause of love.) I echo Winston's comments re favourite lines. Maybe we need to keep those hurtful memories as reminders not to repeat our mistakes, although I have to admit, the technique has never worked for me! Clever, pithy, true. Good work.
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:53
So true. But you're lucky to have a suitcase. I seem to have degenerated into armfuls of frayed and ragged carrier bags. Must remember to recycle.
Comment is about Head-case (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:51
It was lovely of you to say so
Many thanks for that Sian
Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:48
Some neat links and undercurrents in here - blink and you miss them! Thoughtfully constructed and cerebral; like others have said makes you think, a prerequisite for interesting writing.
Comment is about Barbarossa v Barbarella (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:44
Yes, I was never a an old Tom but she was a bit of a hell cat as I recall...happy days!
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:43
Great soundtrack to your life! An enduring "Desert Island Discs" of a poem. You got me thinking - what would I choose? Nicely put together and neatly rounded off. Enjoyed the read.
Comment is about Mi-tunes are emotional (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 23:09
Hi Graham ...yes, well it's been a hard week ...this is reflected in my poem and possibly you are right about the end, maybe I should be slightly stronger. Sian X
Thu 19th Mar 2009 22:27
Crikey Sian, this is an awkward piece of work to get into. I understand the pain from reading it. I get the plaintive requests and the sheer anticipation of arriving somewhere better. The final statement is a flash of defiance, but sounds half-hearted? Anyway a thinking work for sure. Always good to read your work. Graham.
Deborah R Jordan
Thu 19th Mar 2009 21:48
“We come spinning out of nothingness, scattering stars like dust”
Jalal ad-Din Rumi quote
“We all of us deserve happiness or none of us does”
"Happiness always looks small while you hold it in your hands, but let it go, and you learn at once how big and precious it is." Maxim Gorky
"Follow the stream, have faith in its course. It will go its own way, meandering here, trickling there. It will find the grooves, the cracks, the crevices. Just follow it. Never let it out of your sight. It will take you...".Sheng-yen.
You are good enough to live and be happy.
Comment is about NOT GOOD ENOUGH. (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 20:15
Thanks Christine and Sian.
This is an old one I found in the loft along with a whole bunch of poems I wrote years ago and forgot about.
I still can't close the lid though, nothing changes.
Thu 19th Mar 2009 20:11
Thanks Sian, I've not done any audios, but I might just give it a go.
Comment is about Matching Pairs (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:49
Absolutely! - and to add insult to injury they always slap a label on mine saying 'Heavy load - bend knees when lifting'.
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:47
Comment is about Sky Iron (blog)
Original item by Deborah Jordan
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:44
Very good work,
Comment is about Awakening II (blog)
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:39
Interesting, and very different. Felt the reading would've benefitted from a change of pace at some point.
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:26
Great piece , very enjoyable read. Have you thought to do an audio with this one, I bet it would sound great. Sian X
Thu 19th Mar 2009 17:25
Excellent. Still the same dirty old town, it seems?
Comment is about In Salford. (blog)
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