Wed 13th May 2009 12:13
Never expected such a reaction! Wrote it as a homework exercise. Ie. to write a piece in imitation of, or responding to the work of Walt Whitman, it being his 190th birthday this May. He wrote a piece called Salut au Monde. I thought I’d see what would happen if I didn’t mention Whitman in my blog. Found it very hard to get my head around his style, fortunately the safe delivery of a little grandson provided some inspiration.
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Wed 13th May 2009 11:12
Sorry Steve, i forgot to thank you for commenting on 'Imagine that' - cheers
Comment is about Steve O'Connor (poet profile)
Original item by Steve O'Connor
Wed 13th May 2009 10:46
Thanks for commenting on my wonderful poem, I appreciate it
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Wed 13th May 2009 03:22
Thanx 4 feedback madamme and nice to convere with you. I am kinda positing thought as primary activity here hope you good and being creative at this hour. and thank you again for your affirming feedback
Comment is about SouL oF the earTH (blog)
Original item by Chris Jam
Wed 13th May 2009 02:15
Very nice Chris! There are so many theories, out there, as to how the earth is doing, how we are doing, how together we destroy eachother. The temps gettting hotter/colder, it can make a person dizzy, and if they only listen to one side, can make them crazy.Balance is the only answer. Then while reading your poem I pick up on a sort of one world thinking, as in positive thinking can heal the earth, and I believe in that to a point, however much evil must be over come, to make the positive a reality. I have heard we are like a parisite, but I try and think positive, and feel compelled to believe we are called to much greater then we have done so far. But then whats the value of theories? Nice poem!
Tue 12th May 2009 22:14
Hmmm... well you may be out in nature, but your mind is definitely elsewhere ; )
Comment is about SOMETHING LOVELY....(short poem) (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 22:07
Nice as it is a bit elusive... and I like that she alludes to the fact that not everything is what it seems...
Comment is about Dave's Bird (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Tue 12th May 2009 21:55
John... This right up my street ...love the very pants off it... superbo!
Tue 12th May 2009 21:52
This says so much and rhymes so well too... very powerful Shane...
Comment is about SAD SYMPHONY (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 21:11
Its a difficult vicious circle to escape from, until that is, you realize that there is a lot in life worth living for, and investing in. I been a binge drinker myself occasionally. Not no more, eventually the need to forget came with tools and knowledge gained to address my past and my difficulties. I hope, that you find a peer you CAN trust in, who will pass on the knowledge and insight you deserve, to be able to address this. As you are worth it, all are worth it who can contemplate the dilemma they are in. And even those who have drunk so much, they no longer know what brought them to this situation, need help too. You have to seek the positivity, and writing helps enourmously. You are creative, and you will get through these times, and when you do, you will find yourself a lot stronger than you thought, for having endured all the problems you have, and still be alive with a good future ahead. Dont give up hope. Be well.
Comment is about Binge drinking (blog)
Original item by Sarah Clark
Tue 12th May 2009 20:57
Fantastic, it is short yet descriptive in so many ways, and the end, a poingnancy that is subtle yet clear and bright. Nice one John.
Tue 12th May 2009 20:54
Brilliant yoshman, you can tell by the sombre undertone that this is a more thoughtful piece. And to be honest it is for its honesty and attitude, a lot more louder than some of your previous material. There is, as always, truth here that not many have the balls to state 'out loud', Nice one for having the balls. I really like this one from you.
Tue 12th May 2009 20:49
I like this poem Melissa, not only because i can identify with the character walking the concrete mile while all around seem oblivious to your pain, but also, it gives a hint of foreboding, an intuition that seeks its freedom from a future not altogether clear of pain. Nice touch, however, as win says, there are rainbows, and all is not lost while the sun shines when rain pours. Nice one melissa
Comment is about Concrete (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 20:35
Loved it Jeff a drama - an you being soooooo old must remember it well when the old timers isnt settin in...tee hee xxx
Comment is about Manchester Ritz (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Tue 12th May 2009 19:46
Nice one Jeff. saw Peter Green here a few years ago now. Got Cozy Powells autograph (Yes I am that sad) and 1 week later he died! Great poem, not so great a place. Winarama
Tue 12th May 2009 19:39
no we'll always find a slot for you !
see you saturday
Comment is about Sophie Hall (poet profile)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Melissa R. Mendelson
Tue 12th May 2009 18:04
And the rain was pouring a week ago as my heart was crying, but there seemed to be a faint rainbow now in the sky. :)
Tue 12th May 2009 18:03
The 1st stanza getts your attension and the last leavesyou with a message. complete
Tue 12th May 2009 18:02
Strange and interesting this one John, liked it. 1st stanza especially. Didn't expect the end either. A compact poem this. Win
Tue 12th May 2009 18:01
I'm sorry to hear about your loss, Alison, and you're right. Poetry takes centre stage, shedding light on all the pain and love that we hold inside.
Keep your poetry flowing.
Comment is about Alison Mary Dunn (poet profile)
Original item by Alison Mary Dunn
Tue 12th May 2009 17:59
Welcome home. (You are allowed to have a bit of time off of course) A real sense af drifting seperation in this latest piece. A friend of mine on the phone just now said he was looking for rainbows. I think we all do that, its just that they need rain to make them happen. Win
Tue 12th May 2009 17:56
Your dreams reach the skies, and your passion burns as bright as stars. Congrats on Acoustic and Poetry, Jeff. You inspire me to take flight with the pen in hand.
Comment is about Jeffarama! (poet profile)
Tue 12th May 2009 17:53
I hope all is well with you, and I wish you all the very best. :)
Comment is about Zuzanna Musial (poet profile)
Original item by Zuzanna Musial
Tue 12th May 2009 17:51
I would like to apologize for disappearing here to all my friends. A lot has been going on at home, and I lost a good friend of mine. But writing is helping me to push forward, keep going, and I know my work finds home here. Hope you are all doing well.
Tue 12th May 2009 16:18
Thanks, oddly enough, this is one of the few poems I've wrote actually based around events of my life, glad it was up to scratch.
Comment is about Affliction and Restoration (blog)
Original item by Joshua Van-Cook
Tue 12th May 2009 15:57
Thanks for reading Francine - you picked up on the most important part. The rest of the poem is just a build up to the end, the Opera House being an allegory for the failure of a grand design or plan. The poem was inspired by Steve Regan's 'Half a world and a lifetime away...' which deals with emigration amongst other things. Emigration can be a way of escaping - a vision of freedom elsewhere which doesn't always really exist - instead we swap one penal colony for another... To find real freedom you sometimes have to take more drastic steps.
Comment is about Sydney Opera House (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Tue 12th May 2009 12:46
wonderful ...love the way you have used language here.
Would look at punctuation throughout, but content is great . Really like it.
Comment is about Kevin's Gloves (blog)
Original item by stephen smith
Tue 12th May 2009 09:20
So, have you always been so charming? Thank you for the comments, i've long ever wondered if it were possible to meet someone so charming who writes poetry too, maybe im wrong but i think i might be on to something x
Comment is about Tears (blog)
Original item by sian howell
Tue 12th May 2009 08:59
Sarah, very touching. Some may identify strongly with the bingeing although the personal experiences may be so different.
Tue 12th May 2009 03:32
I can't seem to let it go because I feel that I need more of an explanation...
'somehow lose a certain quality in the creative sense'
Tue 12th May 2009 03:03
HI Mike, Im not a pro, and dont get paid to read anything. But I enjoyed this, was a bit confused at times, but then Im an American, so whatever.I will say, it spoke to me, Im not a racist, but Im not blind either. I have been the beaten, due to my color in the 60s. I have forgiven, but others dont, and many persons have chips, that should not be there, but they place a burden upon themselves, for lives now past.I dont know how to take this one.No matter what I say, as an American Ill be roasted. I almost dont care anymore. HIstory is written by the winner of the war, lies are as deep as the ocean, and who gains by division? xx good poem!
Comment is about The Life That Never Lived (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 02:48
very nice work!
Comment is about Rob Sherman (poet profile)
Original item by Rob Sherman
Tue 12th May 2009 02:37
HI Mike, Im not sure I understand all that is here. But God does not invent or create, what we see, in everyday life.We did.But then, I should say nothing,I feel of late, well for some time, that poetry, and poets, and my way of thinking dont mesh. Im sorry if I have offended you, with my beliefs in God.I will not change my mind.We may end up with asto-turfed graves. good one
Comment is about Rumble in the Jungle (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 01:55
Hi Mike... Liked the drum and electro piercing beat and internal rhythm / rhyme in this piece. Need the words printed out . Win x
Comment is about Why This Life (Second Wave) (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 01:50
Interesting, Im still in a state of confusion. I can kinda program a door on my secondlife game, or a pet animal, but I dont get it at all, what Im doing.
Comment is about CAT PROGRAMME (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 01:39
Sebastian... Post more stuff up on here.
Your profile is rather poetic - I open my mouth and words come out... etc.let's here those words whatever they are, however raw. Winston
Comment is about First Taste of Power (blog)
Tue 12th May 2009 00:46
Sarah - Powerful / Strong / Compelling. Don't stop believing in life, it is an unpredictable friend. Win x
Mon 11th May 2009 18:43
Lovely poem, Cynthia. Better in the two stanza form here than in one block on the blog. Great use of shortening lines to imply rhythm.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 11th May 2009 18:30
got a high metabolism ;) eat everything!
Mon 11th May 2009 14:27
Thank you I am much improved, just a little stiff, and that can't be a bad thing.
With regards to CAT Programming
My Cat ( Jake Bibble) is a complete enigma and continues to defy logic, he’s timorous of mice and helps when we feed the doves. His feline 6th sense and nine lives programme is completely overrun by Trojan Horses insofar as to slow him to a constant state of screen saver mode.
Mon 11th May 2009 12:18
Great stuff Pete. I remember my ZX 80. Blue flat keys. couldn't write a basic program now however, that was so ago. Win x
Mon 11th May 2009 09:40
mehndi is henna ...I just get bored with English words and like to add some masala mix for rhyme : )
Mon 11th May 2009 09:28
Very powerful, and beautifully performed. Particularly like the repeating motif that slowly expands. I do feel, however, that the written version would benefit from adding punctuation in line with the spoken.
Mon 11th May 2009 08:21
Hi again - reading your work it occurs to me that you might like the work of some 60s folk/protest singers - and in particular, Phil Ochs.
Ochs was one of the people that inspired other songwriters (most notably Dylan), as well as his listeners. He had a very journalistic style, and wrote with wit and intelligence - I think you'd appreciate his work.
Comment is about Joshua Van-Cook (poet profile)
Mon 11th May 2009 08:00
Just realised - my comment makes me sound like crazy cat lady, doesn't it? Ah well.....!
Mon 11th May 2009 07:58
Only one bug that I can see - who owns who? Daisy has asked that you be reminded: Cats don't have owners, they have staff.
Neither of us know whether it's a good industrial programme - neither of us care - it made us laugh. Well, me anyway!
Mon 11th May 2009 03:28
IMI ZBZ 3 K
Mon 11th May 2009 03:15
I truly appreciate and welcome your comments and suggestions Gus...
it means so much... and you are so right about your observations...
Mon 11th May 2009 02:15
I was cooking some Quorn chunks today and noticed that the frying instructions were quite poetic.Statistically this poem is 250% more popular than any other poem of the month.
Comment is about On a theme of Apollinaire (article)
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