Fri 19th Sep 2008 02:15
HI Zuzanna, Love the poem.xx clarissa
Comment is about THE PHANTOM (blog)
Original item by Zuzanna Musial
Thu 18th Sep 2008 23:17
Sorry to hear of your loss. You've done your friend proud. Some lovely lines - "decreasing circles" especially.
Thanks for your comment on my slam win in Ireland.
Comment is about our treasured friends (blog)
Thu 18th Sep 2008 20:45
i love the poem , the life i didnt choose perhaps ,,
Comment is about I'd like to live in a French Film (article)
Thu 18th Sep 2008 20:28
popped along to thank you for commenting on my profile. Glad i made you laugh.
One thing i hadn't noticed before in your cv.
What a great idea about a poetry boat to the isle of man. One amongst many places i've yet to visit.
I know there are a few people on this site who also live there. How about it wol?
Comment is about Shelley Ann Dwornik (Poet profile)
Original item by Shelley Ann Dwornik
Thu 18th Sep 2008 20:19
Thanks for your comments on my recent blogs.
The two suffragette ones were written with performance in mind and went down quite well at Wigan.
Pardon my ignorance but i really have no idea who Makowski is. I googled it and it gave me far too many Makowski names to choose from.
I'm a hopeless case i know.
Comment is about Rodney Wood (Poet profile)
Original item by Rodney Wood
Thu 18th Sep 2008 20:11
Thankyou very much for your comments to my recent blogs. It's always good to receive the kind of feedback you give, with an explanation of what you see and feel from what you read.
lots of love, peace and light to you.
Comment is about Zuzanna Musial (Poet profile)
Thu 18th Sep 2008 18:27
Thank you so much for your comments about my 'When I'm Down' poem, it was one that I wrote fairly easily through experience. I did write it a few months ago after a few difficult years. Don't worry though, things are a lot better now, although sometines its relevant.
Appreciate your concern though, take care, next one will be a bit chirpier (I Think!) Jeff X
Thu 18th Sep 2008 16:07
Richard, Thank you!
Thu 18th Sep 2008 15:46
Mysterious goings on are happening all the time, everywhere. To actually feel the presence of a spirit can be very scary. Especially when it's cold.
Hope this isn't a reality poem from you.
Thu 18th Sep 2008 15:29
Reality bites hard sometimes.
Comment is about Unanswered Questions (blog)
Thu 18th Sep 2008 11:23
I really do admire your poems, obviously written from the heart. I can feel your loss. Take care
Wed 17th Sep 2008 19:32
cheers for the comments Julian.i will try and get to the library night...any comments both positive and constructive are much appreciated
Comment is about Julian Jordon (Poet profile)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Wed 17th Sep 2008 08:15
Hi Jeff...thanks for your comments...it only took me half an hour to scroll down through your comments in order to leave one! I shall send you the bill for my damaged index finger ;-) x
Comment is about Jeffarama! (Poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Tue 16th Sep 2008 23:25
You have some great lines in your writing. I particularly like th eopnein gones:
all the wild in it's wisp and brood.
fly nature in and scented skin.
fell silently her silk new bloom.
rolling tanks will lose their steel.
cut to the essentials - true poetry.
Comment is about david sobieralski (Poet profile)
Original item by david sobieralski
Tue 16th Sep 2008 23:20
Hi David (Dzien dobry)
Welcome to the site. We did have a night going in Oldham and will probably have one again in the new year. Write Out Loud has an open mic coming up at the library on 9th October and you are welcome to take part. We are very newcomer-friendly.
Tue 16th Sep 2008 23:13
Jeff, you always take the time to read our work and I'm happy to see you developing in your confidence and writing. I enjoy your work especially because of your musical passions. I am more inspired by good song lyrics than poetry, but then I think good song lyrics are poetry. I think that quality musicians and bands have a lot going for them in terms of poetic influence. Take Roger Waters for example.
Thank you for your kindness and sincerity and understanding.
Its of no surprise that you have so much love here Jeff.
Look forward to seeing you soon. I may get t the green rooms this Thursday.
Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:56
Thank You, Dear Poetry Friends
Darren, Tim, Moira, Clarissa, Melissa and Jeff
For you wonderful comments!!
Your comments inspires and motivates to improve in getting better with writing.
Comment is about WHO WAS SHE? (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:25
Hi Belinda, hope you're okay over there!
I like this, it sounds like your mind is still stuck in the rat race of japan, well thats how it came over to me, great stuff!
Just one thing, I thought the line 'Got to do this and that' would sound better with the meaning and rhythm of the poem if it was 'Got to do this, got to do that' - see what you think, to alter login, click edit on your poem, amend it and then update entry.
Hope that helps, I've added a deep one today! hope you like it, let me know, take care Jeff X
Comment is about Constant (blog)
Original item by Belinda
Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:15
Hi Zuzanna, beautiful choice of words as always!! thanks Jeff hope you're ok over there!
Comment is about LOST IN YOUR EYES (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:11
Hi Mirna, good to see you back with some thought provoking poems, best wishes Jeff
Comment is about Hidden World Unknown (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 17:09
Hi Richard this is good stuff, very sad obviously, no surprise there!!
Some great lines here and unfortunately I can identify with the sentiments.
Anyway, something spooky, I was reading this listening Echo and the Bunnymen. It was the album 'Evergreen' and as they say on there funnily enough - 'Nothing ever lasts forever', which I think I'll have for my funeral!
Don't worry I'm okay, although you might not think so when you read my latest poem! 'When I'm Down' - Hope you like it, keep up the good work, Jeff
Comment is about Are We Forever? (blog)
Original item by Richard Brooks
Tue 16th Sep 2008 16:51
Good to see you at Wigan, I really enjoyed it. As I said then WOL has helped to change my life after after the last few years. I'm getting more involved now and know lots of others on the site as you know. I'd like to get involved more, like compering which we had a chat about etc.
I went to Sale on saturday with Paul and the others to help promote the Sale WOL night. That guerilla performing was more nerve wracking that my gig that night!
We got a few interested though, cheers Jeff
ps must do that email feedback to Paul about the profile/blogs/poems issue!!
Comment is about Whence Write Out Loud, and Whither? (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 16:08
Hi Shelley, great poem, love the twist at the end, was looking forward to seeing you on the telly! Jeff x
Comment is about Stand-alone intelligence (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 16:00
Hi Steve, so true and a wonderful tribute, Jeff
Comment is about A Girl Like Faith (blog)
Original item by Stevie Turner
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:46
Hi Moira, beautiful description here and love the way you've linked, blood, ink, lies and the dry parchment, thought it was going to be another sensual one at the start! thanx Jeff X
Comment is about Ink lies seeping (blog)
Original item by Moira Eribenne
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:35
Hi Richard, I like a lot of this, the concept etc and some great lines but I couldn't really get into it.
Not sure if too long, or if it needs to be 2 poems, before and after. Maybe me being too symplistic, i don't know, hope it helps and like Janet, I know you can make it better!!
Comment is about Repetition (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:15
You are the master in a maze of choice -
Love that line and its an interesting concept or paradox, as you say if it doesn't exist could you write about it?
yours, confused, Bolton
Comment is about Fate (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:11
Very good Pete and I think we can all relate to this, very amusing, but I think you should get an early night!!
Comment is about Confessions from a bad hotel (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:08
Hi Pete, just catching up with stuff, been busy!!
Really like this, straight to the point and vividly reflects the effects of depression but also the harsh world faced by sufferers who also live in the dark world of prescription drugs and its fears.
Brilliant as always, see ya soon, Jeff
Comment is about your ten minutes is up (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:05
I really liked this poem. We are too quick to judge in this world, and so very fickle, especially the media as you point of very clearly in your poem.
Thank you for this.
Tue 16th Sep 2008 15:02
Okay Gabby, I'll give you another ring! Good fun and i like the last stanza and last 2 lines, nice one Jeff X
Comment is about 6284 (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 14:58
Hi again, looks like a catchy song, give it a whirl if you havent! cheers Jeff X
Comment is about I LOVE YOU. I LOVE TO LOVE YOU (blog)
Tue 16th Sep 2008 14:56
Hi Gabby, I'm just catching up with stuff, really like this, lovely idea, simple (the way i like it!) and effective.
If I can say one thing though its the 2nd and 3rd lines in the 6th stanza, the former too long and the latter too short. Would it look and sound better if it said something like -
It's like music, heart felt music
unchanged or synthesized.
Only a thought, great stuff though Jeff X
Comment is about I READ YOUR POEM (blog)
Mon 15th Sep 2008 20:16
I've never been on that site before.
Your poems look great. Some of which i have read on wol.
Comment is about Poems published (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Sun 14th Sep 2008 22:18
sorry, i missed this one as you posted it the last day of august.
Lovely to see your poetry here again, and with a beautifully written, very deeply heartfelt piece.
You sure know how to hit all the right notes.
Comment is about Expressions so Deep (blog)
Original item by Alison Mary Dunn
Sun 14th Sep 2008 18:56
Now wouldn't that be fun.
Asking all the women in a pub to tip out the contents of their handbags, just to find something to write about.
Comment is about I do like your bag, Lynda (blog)
Sun 14th Sep 2008 18:54
The only way is up Pete.
As long as you're upside down, you're ok.
Trust me, i know.
Those people we see?
They only go away if we tell them to.
Comment is about slowly closing down (blog)
Sun 14th Sep 2008 18:49
this is a very sexist poem.
Sounds like mine!
filled with beer and wine.
White of course, cos i'm into tryin' reds at moment. How cheesy is that?
Oh well, back to the glass. cheers.
Comment is about man fridge (blog)
Sun 14th Sep 2008 18:44
thanks for your comment on suffragette writer.
How do you know it comes across lovely live?
Were you hiding in a corner somewhere at the Tudor last thursday night?
Or could it be you imagined how my voice sounds while you read it?
See you soon, hopefully.
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Sun 14th Sep 2008 16:10
great writing Emma,this is a poem everyone can familiarize themselves with.
Comment is about A poem - I borrowed you (blog)
Original item by Emma
Sun 14th Sep 2008 15:31
I wouldn't mind having a go at compering certainly, Julian but I am new to the W.O.L. crowd (although not performing as I have done loads off readings) so would need to get to know people a bit more yet if you know what I mean!
Sat 13th Sep 2008 22:42
Yeah - I think I read it elsewhere on your profile about rap.. I can see it there.. Good stuff! Have you tried working with beats and stuff yet? I reckon your style maybe not with this piece thou would work with it!
Sat 13th Sep 2008 22:05
If I was…
:) and thrice :)
Comment is about Clare Kirwan (Poet profile)
Original item by Clare Kirwan
Sat 13th Sep 2008 22:04
I love this, "lost in your eyes... forever lost in your eyes...heartbeat near mine...slow dance/dancing trance. Really captures the 'allness' of breathtaking love and so much of the 'loving and feeling' arcs in a bridge between lovers eyes so that one can be truly lost and found in the 'other.'
Thank you Zuzanna, moved me and made my eyes well-up! Beautiful sentiments.
Sat 13th Sep 2008 11:12
A lot of true sentiment to your lines.
That's society for you.
Well done on the foreign language translation too. Very clever.
Comment is about An Cailín Bocht Marbh / The Poor Dead Girl (blog)
Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Sat 13th Sep 2008 11:07
Oh, my heart, my love. It's my dream.
Lovely sentiments in your beautiful poem.
Ooooh, i've gone all gooey.
Sat 13th Sep 2008 04:14
Thanks so much. I am just checking in. Seems I cant stay away from this place. Your poems are very nice.If you get a chance to go to a poetry gig with Peter, I know he would like it very much. Boys need there Moms. I hope someday to get back to England for a visit and Id love to have some lunch and tea with you. I was there about 4 years ago. It was nice but so cold and rained all the time. I guess I came at the wrong time of year. I got to visit Manchester and Southport and a few other places. Was nice, in ways I felt at home, except for the cold and rain. Im off to watch for bad weather now,we are told to expect rain and high winds as hurricane Ike is about to make land fall. Im about 5 hours away from the coast, to the north, in Texas. In a city named Dallas. Hope you stay well and have a nice fall season. XX Clarissa
Comment is about june slater (Poet profile)
Original item by june slater
Sat 13th Sep 2008 03:03
Very interesting and imaginary write; I like the poem it is very different from many have been reading lately. It inspires with your flair of the ink...Great write!!
Sat 13th Sep 2008 02:47
Your poem does not sound if it was written yesterday. It applies to now days too. Still you did not stop dreaming and the circle of life progresses. I do see a lot of feelings and emotions running in your poem. This is natural and I thing the writer is more sensitive to any life events as the nature is more gentle then those who do not create an art in writing. I like your style. It shows deep feelings. Keep them coming. Nice poem indeed.
Thank you for commenting on my latest poem 'Who Was She?'
With my best wishes...:)
Comment is about Tether (blog)
Sat 13th Sep 2008 02:19
I like your poem; it has many mysterious lines that it makes the reader think what the writer wants to tell in those metaphors...Great Job!!
Anything with brain I love it!!
Imagine if we could not think. When brain cells die we are the Veggies... :)
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