Fri 27th Jun 2008 13:37
Thank you Richard.
the word 'emanate' means to emerge from or 'beam from' as though a ray of light emanates from the sunshine.
some of the words are 'automatic' together with the fact they rhyme, when I say automatic I just mean the next word that came into my mind. It is part of a way of discovering your inner feelings as you know, automatic writing. I think that if you supress emotion then automatic writing is very beneficial.
I wanted to connect with the feelings in another lifetime of being in the war zone or battlefield and imagine the soldiers very own 'automatic writing' but in a ghostly way, as though he appointed me his own ghost writer.
thanks again for your support and I'm glad you enjoyed it, I really enjoyed reading it back a second time.
Comment is about Vietnam diary (soldiers automatic writing in therapy) (blog)
Fri 27th Jun 2008 13:23
Love this poem, this should be poem of the month. A very hard and shocking poem with alot to say and could hear the rythem very easily. I particulary liked this section You are the wife’s of acrobats
You are the dingbats and misunderstood
You are the perfectly believable killers
You are the soldiers and the communards
You roll on
P.S what does this word mean 'emanate'?
Fri 27th Jun 2008 11:37
Hi Val. Thanks for your comment on my poem, spirit island. I 've tried to explain the last line in a comment on my blog if you wish to take a look at it.
I've read some of your work previously and enjoyed much of it. It's very easy on the eye and senses. Well written in my view.
I have no great literary experience but i do know what i like to read. love Janet.xx
Comment is about Valerie Cook (Poet profile)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Fri 27th Jun 2008 11:16
Thanks Mirna, Which probably explains the shiver down my spine.
Heaven and hell is a place on earth.
I see now that your poem reflects feelings of love in general and not with one person in mind.
Very individual style of writing which i do enjoy reading. Better still when i can ask about what i can't see in it.
Thanks for your very kind response to my request. Janet.x
Comment is about I’m Gone (blog)
Fri 27th Jun 2008 11:05
Well done for your bravery.
I loved my first time. Fortunately for me, there was a really friendly bunch of people there who were very encouraging before and after my performance.
Hope you enjoyed losing your "virginity."
Comment is about Open, Mike (blog)
Original item by mr stephen
Fri 27th Jun 2008 10:59
ps. why does Minerva scare you? She really wasn't meant to turn your heart to stone.
Comment is about The Victim (blog)
Original item by Daniel Hall
Fri 27th Jun 2008 10:57
Flippin' 'eck Daniel, you had me worried there for a minute. Until i got further into the storyline.
Love the ending. Brilliant write.
Loads of imagery. Imagination caught right from the off!! Lots love, Janet.xxx
Fri 27th Jun 2008 10:55
Congratulations .Your a star
Fri 27th Jun 2008 10:38
Well if i'd known you were on your own i would have gone. Still, if there's a next time, i'll come see you. Hope it went well by the way?love janet.xx
Comment is about A simpleton's guide to Wimbledon (blog)
Fri 27th Jun 2008 10:26
Did your paper shake and your voice stammer? ...Did you sweat a river while your throat emulated a desert? ...Did warmth run down your leg? Did you make it back to your chair without your legs collapsing?
All are symptoms the open mic virgin must overcome. Well done you for getting up and speaking. I shudder remembering my first time. It was similar to the first time I had sex.
Fri 27th Jun 2008 09:52
Well done Mr Stephen!
Fri 27th Jun 2008 09:34
Thank you Janet, well for me,It’s all about things that can only be felt.
How each one understands love; and how love sometimes can be received as hate, doubt, fear and aggressiveness, you can feel it every time you’ve been held, every moment you look through the eyes, in time of silence where showing love has totally disappeared; it's about what lies behind paradise, might be hell for real.
Fri 27th Jun 2008 09:19
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment is about Daniel Hall (Poet profile)
Fri 27th Jun 2008 08:29
Thanks for coming back Janet ... It's amazing how small fluffy creatures bring out the "awww" factor. Poetry that educates and stirs the emotions, can;t do better than that. Might have to go for pure violence next. Incidentally rabbit is fantastic in a stew.. yum yum.
Comment is about Alvyn and Pete (blog)
Thu 26th Jun 2008 23:50
Sounds like fun sort of Festival in the city like...?
Not sure as each Country has its own fun in the summer time. Your poem has good reflection on the event. Although, I found it a little on a dark side; thank you for sharing.
Comment is about The Fun-Fair (blog)
Original item by Steve O'Connor
Thu 26th Jun 2008 23:28
Hi Robbie, I really like this and I think it really puts things into perspective how we or others think we are hard done to because we have to go to school when its raining for example!
There really are worse things going on. I felt a bit like this when I wrote about Genocide (in my blogs for May) after going to the KGB museum in Vilnius Lithuania. Have a read anyway, see what you think and keep writing! thanks Jeff
Comment is about THE SCHOOL BOY POEM (blog)
Original item by Robbie Hurst
Hey Daniel. You raised a storm with this one didn't ya!
Well done but i bet you're gettin' tired of explaining your motives. ha ha.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 23:25
Your poem really is very deep, so deep that i couldn't get into what lies behind the words.
To be honest it sent a shiver down my spine, very unusual. I've read it about six times and the same thing happens each time.
I don't suppose you could see your way to explaining a little could you? I'm intrigued.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 23:17
Hi there, i like the content in your poem. It conjures up images of "flying objects", some of which are invisible. The general dodging and weaving we all do to get through or past obstacles in our way.
I'm sure there's more where this came from, practice the lay-out and your work will appear better on the page.
Nice job though i think, for what it's worth.
Janet.x ps the little girl looks like a little star.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 22:14
Wow, I loved that.
Comment is about The Hare (article)
Thu 26th Jun 2008 21:42
Wow. Cool thank you very much.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 19:41
Thanks for confirming my feeling.
There is a certain amount of emotion in there, particularly in the last 4 lines.
I'm just one of those people who pick up on the sensitive issues within peoples writings. Some think that's a bit weird and it's got me into trouble on more than one occasion when i've opened my mouth to those who can't understand how i do it.
Keep up the good work, you'll go far.
Comment is about Unborn Child Of The World (blog)
Original item by Richard Brooks
Thu 26th Jun 2008 19:24
I've always loved the funfair, but this does show the darker side of it.
My neice was killed on a local fairground ride 14 years ago at the age of 15. It hasn't put me off but does make me more aware of the dangers.
I think i enjoyed reading your poem but it brought mixed emotions for me.
Take care, love janet.x
Thu 26th Jun 2008 19:19
your very right Janet, it is written a long time after something which happened within the family which is why it might come across as having 'less emotion' I still intedned for there to be some however, but I guess you could say there is an acceptance in the poem that one would not have if a child had only recently been lost. Thanks for taking time to know the real meaning of the poem Janet
Thu 26th Jun 2008 19:13
If this poem is relates to a personal incident, i find it a little odd that i didn't sense the emotion one would expect. My feeling is that it was written long after an event to which you have respect for. eg; a friend or close relative.
I'd be interested to know if my "feeling" is right.
There's more to this than what shows up in the first couple of readings.
Thanks for your comment. love janet.x
Thu 26th Jun 2008 18:54
Hi Jeff, thanks agai for the your kind words. I'm glad you used the word tribute because that's exactly what i wanted it to be, not just to the unborn child in my family but to anyone that has experienced it. Thanks again and keep writing bud
Comment is about Jeffarama! (Poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Thu 26th Jun 2008 18:51
Hi Daniel, thanks for reading and commenting again, always appreciated. It wasn't one of mine personally but someone in the family. When I wrote it, i tried to write it as a dedication, a sort of eulogy to the unborn that families never forget
Thu 26th Jun 2008 18:47
Hi Richard, it's a very sad and poignant piece of work, and my sympathy to you or the people involved if this is personal, but I have to say it's a very well written tribute, the last few lines say it all... thanks Jeff
Thu 26th Jun 2008 18:40
Hi Steve, really like this, the stark reality of most funfairs.
Did you read my 'Funfair' this month. It's more of an ideal world funfair but hope you like it! Jeff
Thu 26th Jun 2008 18:25
Hi Zuzanna, thanks for comments, fair enough about your poem, did like it.
I appreciate your interest in whats going on over here, and what I've written about. The Glastonbury festival takes place near stonehenge every year. Its a 3 day music festival, bit like the Isle Of Wight festival that just happened where the Police and The Sex Pistols played. People go for the music and other entertainment and a good time as you can imagine!
I've been a few times, ended up drunk most! It's being covered by the BBC so you may see some of it on TV, even on the news if it throws it down again! Take care Jeff
Comment is about Zuzanna Musial (Poet profile)
Original item by Zuzanna Musial
Thu 26th Jun 2008 17:59
Richard is wrong, neither the poet nor poem have been chosen as poem of the month on this site before this month - check the list.
When winners are asked to chose the next poem of the month they are given a list of previous winners and instructed not to chose a poem by any one of them to be the next poem of the month.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 16:25
The loss of a child is very hard to deal with. I hope this wasn't one from personal experience. Hard to comment on a piece that comes over as such a personal statement.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 16:20
A poet can find inspiration in a sugar cube, that a conflict full of emotions and personal tragedy inspires is not such a surprise.
Not a bad poem by the way... keep it up!
Thu 26th Jun 2008 14:00
This poem was 'inspired' by the on going conflict between Israel and Palestine. Never thought that I would refer to a situation like that as 'inspirational'.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 11:49
Hi antoni, once again, very up to date with the sports. I do like wimbledon, so you have a chance of comments here.
Good luck for tonight in wigan! my home town.
( i'd like to have been there but i'm sorry, i'm just not brave enough to walk in to tudor when i don't know anyone else i can sit with.) Hope you have a great time, it's a nice pub. love janet.xxx
Thu 26th Jun 2008 11:39
Hi zuzanna, thankyou so much for your positive remarks on my poetry. It really is encouraging when we receive good comments, though i don't mind useful hints and critique as long as it's given in a helpful way and not hurtful.
I'm sure most writers would agree.
If you would please read my blog again "spirit island", there's a comment i put on there which you may be able to clarify as to whether what i was told is accurate. Thanks again, love janet.xxx
Thu 26th Jun 2008 10:26
..what else rhymes with "art"?
Comment is about Mia Darlone (Poet profile)
Original item by Mia Darlone
Thu 26th Jun 2008 10:14
Poem 148 of 230, walkaboutsverse.741.com: AUDIENCE LOST
I returned, again,
To what they pen -
The free-verse poets:
Deep prose in sets...
I could read, again,
Of Mice and Men.
(C) David Franks 2003
Comment is about Gaia Holmes (Poet profile)
Original item by Gaia Holmes
Thu 26th Jun 2008 10:01
Good poetry, Estelle...where in India are you teaching?
Comment is about Estelle Zaire (Poet profile)
Original item by Estelle Zaire
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:56
Just enjoyed this sample of your "emotional disclosure" and "political rant", Morag.
Comment is about Morag Reid (Poet profile)
Original item by Morag Reid
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:43
Thanks for reading my poem "Cream judge" - it isn't about anything just playing with words - try reading it and getting the rhythm going
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:42
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:34
Thanks Jeff and Ant
Of course I don't mind you saying Jeff. I positively delight in comment of almost any kind and yours is not at all unwelcome.
I am interested in the observation about tangents because, for me, it is a single piece. It is political polemic drawing on social observation Of course I am taking examples at the outer limits of groups who are usually stereotyped quite differently from the ways that I present them. The reason for that is to jar anticipated reactions and, hopefully, bring about re-reading and questioning either of attitudes or the poem.
Comment is about Deprivation (blog)
Original item by Malpoet
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:10
The sworded underbelly of the fun fair. I find them so depressing... perhaps it's just me.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 09:06
Well I hope you get to walk in the rain again. I love being out in thunderstorms and torrential rain.
Great to see you posting again.
Comment is about JUST WALKING IN THE RAIN (blog)
Thu 26th Jun 2008 08:55
I'm with Jeff .... *grins*
I expect a win by lose commentry for the rest of the tournament now!
Thu 26th Jun 2008 08:45
Zuzanna ... The rabbit was already dead. The desease is terminal. It was only the manor of it's passing to be decided. I have no problem with killing animals as long as it is done with respect and for a prupose, not simply in the name of "sport". Thank you for commenting.
Thu 26th Jun 2008 07:35
Excellent commentator you are. Loved the poem about that match!! Thank you for sharing.
Comment is about Roast Croatia (blog)
Thu 26th Jun 2008 07:32
Have been following the Zimbabwe problem lately and here you are with your poem. Excellent write, about the political system there. It is not good to be there right now. There is a turmoil and unrest. The Mugabe seems in trouble. Excellent history write.
Comment is about God Save Mugabe (by the Pistols) (blog)
Thu 26th Jun 2008 07:20
This is partially dark poem as you have killed that poor rabbit! I am against killing, poaching etc...Thank you for the interesting twist in your write.
I thought you done it with an excellent creativity.
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