Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:59
Thanks Mate, practice makes perfect !!!!! lol
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:58
Glad you Liked it Cynthia.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:57
Thanks Antonionioni for your comments.
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:56
Thanks Cynthia for your comments.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:53
Thanks Cynthia for your comments on "curtains and it happened one night"
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:50
This is beautiful, i have to keep re-reading it because theres so much to take in.
Comment is about Et Vera Incessu Patuit Dea* (Blog entry)
Original item by Neil West
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:49
Hi Neil, I was in the Brit Army for 22yrs and then worked in International Aid for ten years, so I worked in a lot of conflict/post conflict and disaster striken area's, so that is where quite a lot of the stuff I write comes from.
Comment is about Neil West (Poet profile)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:45
Hi Isobel, thank you for all your comments on my poems, you made me realise i might need to try my hand at writing a happy poem! I really like your poem 'Words'
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Original item by Isobel
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:42
this is lovely, real passion and romance, great.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:41
Hi John. I enjoyed 'The Waiting' very much, I can tell you're a proper poet, it reminded me of when I tried to read Ulysses (a bit of it anyway).
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Original item by John Togher
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:37
Hi Jessie, 'whisper so softly' is beautiful, such a moving little poem.
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Original item by Jessie
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:32
Thank you for the music? Thank you for the poem, Black Sabbath don't get mentioned in poems enough. I'm disappointed you don't like Iron Maiden but you seem to not like them so much it's quite charming if that makes any sense. You've brightened my evening again - thanks!
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:24
Hi Nicky, it was kind of you to tell me more about your interests, I think we must come from similar backgrounds and experiences (Catholic upbringing, interest in Romanticism, teaching career), even the four kids! My brain feels like it's coming back to life again after ten years of CBBC!!! I feel a poem coming on where I'll tell you what the bloody story in Balamory is so you don't need to keep asking (ha ha).
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Original item by Nicky Burrows
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:16
Hi Janet, I'm pleased you're updating your profile and adding new work, you are a woman of mystery (or is that intentional?). Thank you for reading my work, I appreciate your honesty and I'm quite flattered that people take it seriously enough to offer constructive criticism. I won't pretend to understand everything in A Gentile Ripple, I just enjoyed allowing the rich imagery to wash over me, as it were!
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:12
This is beautiful. I begin to feel quite dreamy as i read it.
Comment is about Porous (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:08
Thank you for reading my work, I am pleased you found it interesting. It led me to read your blog, it's the joy of this site to keep discovering new (to me at least) creativity and talent. I find your writing very brave in parts, do you write about conflict from your own experiences, it's very powerful.
Deborah R Jordan
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:07
sorry, i got confused, thought this was an earlier one I just found on your profile page..
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:05
this is lovely Jessie...sorry i didn't find it until now..you have to keep tapping this side of yourself....there's rich sweet sap under your bark..
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 20:03
i love this Jessie..i'd be proud of a daughter with such traits..so long as she was happy.. .Deb x
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 19:57
and he never even noticed you were looking at the stars...
i agree with Steve..excellent Janet..
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 19:53
i could fit in your cupboard under the stairs...or in the boot of your taxi and just hope you went my way... thank you for the offer - if - you - lived -nearer..i have strange eating habits tho.. i just had mackerel and hummous in a pumpkin seed bun...it was really nice..debz xx
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 19:49
Merci Francine, tu est tres gentile...am i confusing languages again?.. i am tired from walking the hills of Hebdonia..deb xx
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 19:48
ta tonionions...before Feb?..oh..it ryhmes..ha ha..i was distracted by your glasses..have you shrunk? they seem a little oversized..shudda gon 2... u know the rest..
saw a couple of nice places today so hopefully...
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 19:43
Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comment on HebDeb, I'm more suprised you thought it was poetry because it is real, I am looking for a place to stay In Hebden. I'm not yet homeless unless he indoors gets finally tired of my manychangingmoods and random ramblings and says Oi, enough, get thee gone silly woman, but until I find somewhere down here I have a lot of rail travel ahead of me. I saw a couple of nice places today..but so hilly..but that's Heb, beautiful but hilly..thanks again, debz x
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 16:20
Super poem, Deborah. It runs with vitality and the stuff of 'real life'! I hope it's only poetry. If not, anyone would be blessed to have you with them, to enjoy your personal sparkle.
Comment is about Hebdeb (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 16:16
Excellent - ideas strung together with brilliant imagery, and joined coherently enough to follow like heartbeats to a climax.
Comment is about The End of the Affair (Blog entry)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 16:10
Really good, Emily. I always look for your work. You never disappoint.
One small (very small) suggestion: I would leave out the tag end 'you see'. It lengthens the line by two syllables, and the idea itself is totally understood in the concept of 'signs'. I think it jerks your flow unnecessarily. But that's me.
Comment is about you are now entering wales (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:38
Otherwise, a good observation, sympathetically and insightfully handled. Off the cuff, I take it. I give up - cannot think what 'spes...' starts. I'll probably feel real foolish.
Comment is about the Sadness of the Small Shopkeeper (Blog entry)
Original item by michael shepherd
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:35
Well said! ( that last comment you made that is ).
Comment is about Conversations About Miles Davis (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:28
- to finish my thought - and support this Hindu Law - so, naturally I receive service in a very gracious and friendly way - the circle thing.
Well put, Janet.
Comment is about A Thief in One's Own Home (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:27
Studied with you for a year and the first time I have heard the term 'toheresque' I have some comments on your poem, but need to look over it again.
Hope you are well.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:20
All assumptions are not wrong; that's the great thing about reading poetry.
If the poem works for you (the reader) based on an assumption and you enjoy the poem, that's great. I don't think authorial intent is the most important element of reading poetry; it can spoil it if anything.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:17
Comments crossed John, thanks for your reply but i won't remove my comment. It's a common theme on here to believe what the poet writes is based on someone known to them. Yours demonstrates nicely how wrong we can be when we make assumptions.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:12
Ah Isobel but i happen to know John is a very happy man in his marriage. Realism is a necessary part of a happy relationship. Personally i think that last line says that there's so much more could be said and the sadness smudges on the blank page are that which is within and cannot be portrayed on a piece of paper. Whatever is said/written here could be assessed as being either too much or not enough. Whether it is about his wife or not, it is an eloquent write delivering something very personal in a semi detached manner. Not an easy thing to do in anyone's book. (book of life or love).
I'm with Spencer, this would be a fantastic piece to enter into a book. A book about life or a series of poems on the theme of relationships and/or marriage. Wonderful.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 15:10
It's not about my wife, or anyone in particular.
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:38
Hi again Cat, like this too, think you've used words subtly together and mixed or juggled them in very cleverly
And sores seep
Words just slip
and the rest, marvellous keep up the great work Jeff X
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Original item by Cat P
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:34
Hi Cat, I must apologise for my behaviour lol, this is great but I don't really know why, I'm slow on the uptake, well with poetry anyway! Some great lines, its so strong, love it, Jeff X
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:23
Nice one Isobel, I have been saying similar to you for a while - although some of the POMs are great they're often by people who have posted nothing for ages!
In my opinion POM should be POM not a poem from months ago. The next months poem is then selected by the winner obviously who in a lot of cases (not all) won't be arsed about what has been going on recently on WOL.
Count me in, whoever wins I will sleep better knowing that POM is one from the last month from an active member Jeff X
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Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:15
Hi enjoyed this, first line sounds like a Coldplay song ! cheers Jeff
Comment is about I never said that it was easy. (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:12
well done Jeff for spotting the mistake
Comment is about I am the fly in your ointment (Blog entry)
Original item by Daniel Hooks
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:11
Hi Dan, is it prey or pray? Big difference, enjoyed it though and couldn't help singing the Wire song 'I am the Fly' Heard it? If not see if you can find online, similar theme! cheers Jeff
I enjoyed this poem for its honest fidelity to actuality.
Many years of 'art crit' taught me humility..though I never did understand why Tretchikoff's once ubiquitous 'Green Lady' was so green...
Comment is about The Peacock (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 14:04
Good to see a HALF EVIL number of blogs!
Comment is about Site Stats for August 2009 (Blog entry)
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 13:57
Love your creativity Deb.
It will all work out : )
Wed 23rd Sep 2009 13:54
Great comment Janet! Believe it or not I was seven when I was at sunday school and the guy who ranted taught me how to play and read music, I played lead cornet in the school band when I was 12. He was a good teacher.
I am besieged by sevens. according to the medium that my sister sees I am going to have seven children, have had five already but there are twins in the cards apparently. My husband is a twin and although they are supposed to miss a generation,I am keeping my legs firmly crossed!x
I have never seen a medium myself, I think the reason is partly because I have an addictive nature and partly because if they tell me something true about my past that they could not know, I would then worry about the future.x