Janet Ramsden

Wed 4th Jun 2008 12:07

Re your comment on my blogs.
No yes yes no? sorry, not with you there.
I told you the reason i decided to delete all my blogs. To wipe the slate and start again.
but here's one just for you. 'coz angels are not just for christmas either.

A mind awash with painful thought.
Hazel eyes that sting as a
misty glaze takes over
all the good intention.
Aims and targets, wasted time.
A river tautens my skin.
Then, the river runs dry
and leaves me still and calm.
Lol.x

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Pete Crompton

Wed 4th Jun 2008 03:17

Hi Phil
Yes Im up for it.

Pete

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Sandre Clays

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:45

You know I love this site and all you readers.

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Sandre Clays

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:44

A beautiful poem. Love the ending.

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Sandre Clays

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:39

I suppose it's a bit like 24 hour drinking in Wigan.
Hey, we get by.

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Sean Stanley

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:34

*Melanie

Also Jordan - These Hands

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Sean Stanley

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:29

I suggest Melanice Rees - Little Man Melancholy

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Sean Stanley

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:28

Thoroughly enjoyed Melancholy Man, I could imagine him looking like a Sinatra/Hemingway cross. An ode at its finest.

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Jeff Dawson

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:04

Hi Jordan, this is excellent, really transported my mind to a different plain, cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 22:00

Very thought provoking A, where did you get the photo!! cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 21:57

Hi Sandre, never knew soup could be so exciting!! Wonderfully described, will have to call in for a bowl! Cheers, good to see you at Wigan last week, Jeff

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:34

Hi Sandre, remember me? I'm the one who held your hand and told you about Stonehenge and mixed the runes. It was flowing very nicely when we were interrupted because it was half time. Time for the show to start again.
Love the poem. My alphabet soup is still swimming around with a huge question mark in the middle. Nice to see you in wol.x

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:21

I'm just a little weed. A bit like the one in the childrens programme "Bill and Ben."x

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:18

Bless.xxx

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:15

We live in the universe. Once we learn how to tap into that, all things are possible. Thanks, Janet.xxx

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 20:08

I gazed at this picture and "saw" the trolley rolling towards me. As it slowly rolled down the steps, i was there waiting with my loving arms outstretched, and wanting to scoop you up from the floor. Just like i did with that book. (my book of angels).
Does that sound too dreamy?

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 19:54

The only song which sprung to mind was "smile, though your heart is aching. Smile ,even though it's breaking."
I did search the computer library but i didn't see anything by David Gilmour.xx

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 19:18

no

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Jordan Saxby

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 16:32

Very clever poetry, beautiful use of metaphor.

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Jordan Saxby

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 16:24

Love the poems! especially little man melachony, it poetryfied a mindframe i keep having where i enjoy the sadness, but you can never enjoy melancholy.

Very good,
Have fun,
Jordan

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David Franks

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 13:58

Hi Anna: my favourite is October, and I noticed you have similar subject matter to me.

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Alison Mary Dunn

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 13:40

Melissa, as ever your words are beautiful. Time's 'grains of sand' on the wooden floor and 'wings of dreams'. It's all there, a powerful reflection of how we feel when we reach for our true potential. Keep pushing the boundaries, for I've no doubt you will take us with you when you do.
Ally x

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 12:40

HIya

Thanks for the your kind comments on my page. I am now thinking of putting together a poetry book of romantic poems and on move in general.

Greetings from Sir Knight born upon noble steed
Tear of joy knowing its my poetry you read
I Sir Cumference, must go, but'll be back soon
I'm off to write to Mills and Boon

C ya

Phil

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Philip Golding

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 12:06

An extremely evocative write. Strong imagery of lifes struggle and the despere often felt as we are drowned in this rat race

Well done

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Sandre Clays

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 09:02

Hi, a wonderful attack on religious fundamentalism. Extremism in any form to me has the devil's fingers in it. Well written.

Sandre

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Tue 3rd Jun 2008 03:20

Hi Pete, I looked up the song, it reminded me of some other songs, by others. So as you know I did take the time to listen to the song and read the poem. Its really very good! I can see how you could connect the two together. The song in a way brought the poem more alive, made it deeper! Dont we all hold on to those little things, from past loves? There is always that "special" one, or two "special" ones.That if given a chance, it could have worked out.Many times for me, a song has made a poem live within me and I put it to paper. I guess the music of Lorenna Mckennitt, may have produced the most poems from me, an almost hypnotic effect, as if spirit leaves flesh. strange I guess, but thats me! great poem.Never feel bad about trinkets/memories, they are woven into your heart and in part made you, who you are!

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Janet Ramsden

Tue 3rd Jun 2008 00:14

I'm not sure if The song is in my collection, it's like looking for a needle in a haystack. However, i'll search and let you know. It's one i'm not familiar with but might know it when i hear it.
I'll get back to you! x

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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:41

p.s. thanks, it's just an opinion, that's all. it's up to us how we react to any given situation.
Sometimes we have to make a stand or we get walked on, or worse still, trodden on.
thanks again great write. janet.

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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:34

Whooh! I see what you're saying, i think ?
A lot of what i write includes God. Such as giving thanks asking forgiveness.
Every day is a new day and each and every day we learn something different.
For me, God means good and lives within, all around, above and below us.
On that princicple, surely it's possible that the devil does too?
The mistake we make is thinking of god and the devil as a person/persons. It's people who cause war, disillusion etc...

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Jeff Dawson

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:26

Hi Mel, thanks for your comment about 'New Model Army' - it's the effect I was hoping for so feedback like that is really appreciated, Jeff X

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Jeff Dawson

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:22

Tremendous Pete, blimey you did need to write! really enjoyed it, cheers Jeff

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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:20

I feel this was written about me.
Thanks Mel for putting it straight. love Janet.

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Jeff Dawson

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:18

A few great lines here mate! cheers Jeff

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Jeff Dawson

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:15

Hi Melissa, this is quite beautiful and more experienced writers than me have already told you that, I feel quite tranquil after reading it, thanks Jeff

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Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:09

Hi Jeff
Loving the new stuff
always great to read, better to see you in real life performing these punk ette pieces

great!

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Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:07

"The hybrid parasite kicks out with leg" bloody hell thats good.

It reminds of Brett Anderson Lyrics.
he wrote a line once 'bitch of an itch' and it reminds me of some of your stuff.

but yes 'hybride parasite' I like it.
this is also very lyric like and would suit a song.
It also reminds me of the style of early Human League, in particular, the song 'Life Kills' (from the travelougue Album)

great.

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Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 23:01

Its very special and moving for me to know this poem has stirred amotion ad hopefully brought joy if only in a melocholic but romantic way to all of you.
My appreciation goes out to you, and Mel and Antoni, so much thanks for what you say.

Ive tweaked this one. I think its one ill always be slightly fiddling with, its carved

If you wish, why not try reading this poem and perhaps play the song which helped its creation. its a lovely ballad by Dave Gilmour. 'smile' from his new Album.

I would like to know if it works for you or at least if you could connect with the song...

I'm very interested to hear from you about this as I am very much into interaction with other art forms. I especially like to know what stirs and whether any new ideas or feelings come forward.

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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:22

I had to read this poem several times. The repetition gives it a very hypnotic quality and the energy and fire comes through in every word.

Mel
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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:19

I read this poem before and liked it.

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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:17

This is a very intriguing poem Sean...it somehow leaves me wanting to read more...

Mel
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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:15

Oh and i repeat...you old romantic Mr Golding...you should read this poem clad in a knight's armour and have bluebells in your hair. Lovely.

mel
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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:13

i think the format of this poem is just lovely Daniel. The content is poignant and not at all nettle-like...very, very delicate.

Mel
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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:10

I echo Zuzanna's write...what a wonderful poem.

Mel
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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:09

What a powerful opening first line of a poem. Wow. "The pain of life climbs upward in a line". it really draws you into the poem.

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Melanie Rees

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 22:06

A truly beautiful poem Pete...emotion simply drips from each line. I think the curve of the rhythm and your line endings are simply stunning.

Melx

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Pete Crompton

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 19:17

Thanks Janet, Zu and Clarissa
I will remove some perts of this poem and compact it a bit, I'll be careful to keep the ride going.

x thanks

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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 19:16

Hi Phil, this is really is a most beautiful poem. Somehow "beautiful" seems too hard a word but for the life of me, without searching a dictionary, i'm struggling to find the right word for perfection? Ooh, maybe that's the word, see, it was there all the time and just when..
ps i have to admit to being sad enough to have read this at 3 am. The Dawn chorus is getting a bit repetitive now. janet.

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Janet Ramsden

Mon 2nd Jun 2008 19:02

Haaa! pity me then. For the most part,i enjoy it but the wanting of time out breaks are becoming extremely frequent. Hence my economic depression looming !!!
ps. if that is a safestyle window, you must be on a better screw than me 'cos i couldn't afford them. Oh police! ha ha.

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steve

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 18:45

is that a safestyle window?

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Richard Brooks

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Mon 2nd Jun 2008 17:14

I find depression to be a real inspiration! You've mastered your sonnets, ive never attempted one, maybe I will! Am I right in saying that shakespearian sonnets ended with a rhyming couplet? What ae the rules around sonnets?

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