Sat 23rd May 2009 04:43
J'adore la photo...
j'étais tellement concentré sur toi que je n'avais même pas remarqué le dessin à côté... tout de suite...
Tu me fais rire - tu es marrant ; )
Comment is about Apparantley, the penis is the centre of the universe (blog)
Sat 23rd May 2009 03:58
and a bit scary for some children who are exposed to these 'games' at a young age...
how playing these types of virtual games can desensitise them to real life violence...
Comment is about Remote control killing (blog)
Sat 23rd May 2009 03:28
You cover it all quite well here I think...
Very sad when you've seen or have been touched by someone who is affected by alcoholism...
Comment is about alcohol (blog)
Sat 23rd May 2009 03:24
Hi Malcom, well do tell! The scum need to be ratted out, they are evil! Im glad you wrote it!
Comment is about For The Love Of Little Children (blog)
Original item by Malpoet
Sat 23rd May 2009 02:30
Hi Melissa,I really like this poem! Hope you have been well. xx
Comment is about Rhyme (blog)
Sat 23rd May 2009 00:32
Hmmm... Sex bag????
Comment is about what’s in your bottom drawer? (blog)
Sat 23rd May 2009 00:28
Hi Winston, Thanks for commenting on my poem. Just wanted to let you know that I wasn't criticising Malpoet's poem. I thought it was very clever - I just found it really hard to read. I have 4 very beautiful children - so I find stuff like that really hard to deal with. Perhaps i didn't explain myself well enough. I totally agree that it was a well crafted poem.
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Sat 23rd May 2009 00:09
Well - I was going to comment on another vibrator poem that you wrote but I can't find the jigger. It was probably something you wrote years back I stumbled upon. Both poems on this theme are good fun. The poem obviously resonates for many people and works on many levels. I have to say though - when push comes to shove, you just can't beat a bit of skin on skin - regardless of the outcome...
Fri 22nd May 2009 22:00
Eh bien... je ne sais plus quoi dire...
Je crois que tu sais bien expliquer ce qu'il faut faire pour le désir et le plaisir personnel ; )
Comment is about 'simple pleasures flick super switches' (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:36
I really like the spiritual quality of this...
J'ai tout compris sauf ces deux lignes:
'and the grown man grows stems
to use as inserts'
Pourrais-tu me les expliquer s'il te plaît...
Comment is about a slight spiritual tugging (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:33
You must have done a lot of rummaging in people's drawers Pete - some very amusing observations. I guess this must be 2/? in your 'what's in your....' series. I will finish my version one day - have penned a few lines - it languishes unfinished.
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:16
Awww... c'est triste.
Comment is about find the bastion (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:15
Awwww and I was so looking forward to a good fumble!
Comment is about It's just so frustrating. (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:12
Dearest Gus, looking forward to the audio, got a week off in July that I can pencil in to spend curled up with your whisperings. fondest regards from softest lips Vix
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Fri 22nd May 2009 21:04
It would be fantastic if anybody would like to come and join us down here in leafy Warwickshire! - There are a few people who are coming just for a day trip, so if you're interested and would like a lift, or can offer one - please email me.
Comment is about PGR at Leamington Spa (article)
Fri 22nd May 2009 19:50
I love this on the strength of the title alone!
Can you tell people I wrote it?
How do you compose such a poem?
Comment is about How to Like Pretentious Music (blog)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Fri 22nd May 2009 18:56
I adore this poem.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 22nd May 2009 18:28
I wonder how many women would lacerate men with small penises?
Comment is about Fat Bird, Small Tits. (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 18:12
Sebastian, don't waste your talent on being sensationally rude about someone's physical appearance. It's a waste of poetic energy. In terms of any human's real worth, there can hardly be anything less important than physical appearance. This poem came across, whether intended or not, as mean-spirited. It's only my opinion, but save poetic ire for more deserving targets.
Fri 22nd May 2009 18:07
Hello Sebastian – decided I’d take your argument one step further:- I could write a poem looking through the eyes of a paedophile, demonstrating to the world the kicks I get out of tearing young bodies apart. I could later justify that poem by saying I was just sending up paedophiles and that I should have freedom of speech and I might be right. You have to ask yourself the question though – why? The point could have been made in a hundred different ways that didn’t distress the 99% - those saddos who really didn’t get it.
Fri 22nd May 2009 15:29
A creative idea Emily. It has produced a disjointed poem that is grounded by the explanation of the title. Enjoyed it. Win x
Comment is about The People in My Phone Book in No More Than Three Words (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 15:26
I found one really good poetry nite near to where I live but there aren't all that many places for live poetry in north wales either unfortunately. Luckily i'm not to far from liverpool so I venture over there when i can & i'm moving to London in sept so I'll hopefully find a few nights down there cos ye performing in front of people is amazing. i get nervous as hell every time but I love every second of being up there and so to win a slam the other night was absolutely brilliant. was a huge pat on the back and has really encouraged me to carry on writing and performing.
I think that this site is a brilliant way of sharing your poetry and reading other peoples stuff though I have just gotten lost for several hours reading other peoples poems and comments and should really get on with something productive haha. I have read your sample poems. I thought they were really good and could imagine them lending themselves to a performance really well.
Thanks for leaving a comment is always good to hear from somebody who has a passion for poetry. good luck with it and keep in touch.
Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)
Original item by Rodney Wood
Fri 22nd May 2009 15:09
thank you for your nice comments. I have had a quick read of a couple of your poems and think that you have written some really good stuff.
My poems are all just recorded sat at my laptop in my bedroom and so hopefully they come alive a bit more when i'm on stage performing. I look forward to seeing you at the north west regional heat if you are going. Are you performing?
Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Fri 22nd May 2009 14:24
Great suff this. Funny and the quirkyness helped by the 1) 2) 3) numbers. something new to me I think (not the on / off scenario, I think we have all been there). Keep posting
Comment is about Mixer Tap Madness (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Fri 22nd May 2009 14:06
Hi Gus, Just read your comments on my comments on Mal's poem. Thank you. I totally understand your anger and lack of words. I will write about this one day for you and for everyone else who feels strongly. This is a powerful site for people with things both difficult and beautiful to say... lets keep it that way. Win x
Fri 22nd May 2009 12:46
A poem that makes very hard reading but I guess that is why a lot of this was ignored - just too hard to hear or read about.
Very very painful and sad.
Fri 22nd May 2009 12:37
Winston has made a very powerful comment... which I am, for the most, in a agreement with. I too am angry.. no thats not strong enough an emotion, but I am unable to be wordsmith of my emotions here... my return of serve to such vile acts of hypocrisy is uncontrolled and becomes a hysterical rant of the vigelante. well done Mal
and well done Winston.
Fri 22nd May 2009 12:01
I have read this several times. It is a topic so serious and sensitive to tackle in poetry and it is difficult to keep on the right path without appearing over angry on the one side or failing to make a point and being weak on the other. I have read some of your previous poems which have attempted to make social or political comment and for me they have not struck a chord (This sort of poetry is not normally my bag anyway) This piece is different however, maybe because the subject is intertwined with my own life. It pulls no punches and stikes right at the sorded heart of the whole secretive business. It cleverly reveals how lies can be consealed within religious practices and how young people may be led into a discraceful and damaging world. A world within which the practices should be of love and care. Some people will consider that others all to ready to be judgemental on these organisations which no doubt contain many many well meaning and honourable people. But should the comments stop when we are given more and more examples such as this one. The structure of the poem, a stark choice of words which describe religion, childhood purity and strongly hint at sexual deviance make this such a powerful piece. These words and the structure of the poem seem to help you realise how these practices are justified and twisted into something which is fine and even to be rewarded. It made me cry this Mal with tears of anger and pain in equal measure. Thank you for posting. Winston
Fri 22nd May 2009 11:29
I am but a lowly writer, not to be compared with yourself, a published professional. I just don't understand how it is radical.
Why don't you take a look at my blogs and IF I decide I want you to publish me, I will allow it :-)
Good health to you, Sir.
Comment is about Alan Corkish (poet profile)
Original item by Alan Corkish
Fri 22nd May 2009 10:55
I don't see how any of this is radical.
Fri 22nd May 2009 10:46
Yeah, I know what you keep in your drawers!
Fri 22nd May 2009 10:34
"In your case is it about satirising the vile sexist attitudes of a male minority or is it about freedom of speech?"
It is about both, actually.
I don't believe I have to offer an explanation before or after I write a poem. It is far better for me to just write it and be happy with what I have done (regarding content and reason for composition, which I am happy with both).
In my opinion, I am happy 1% have got it. It just means to me that 99% have to try a bit harder and look at the poem more objectively.
Fri 22nd May 2009 09:05
'Seeking home, But only finding hotels'
- excellent line!
Comment is about The astral hitchiker...(short poem) (blog)
Fri 22nd May 2009 06:23
Think I let you off the hook too easily last night! LOL Was tired and not articulating well. Want to add the following.
Before you write a poem I think you have to be very clear about what its purpose is. In your case is it about satirising the vile sexist attitudes of a male minority or is it about freedom of speech? If it is about the former, in my opinion you have failed if 99% of your audience don't get it. You need to offer them some guidance and I don't see what is wrong with that. If your purpose is expounding the importance of freedom of speech, then you should write a poem about it, not fat women and small tits. In this poem, I think you are sacrificing one to the other and causing hurt and outrage in the process. I don't want you to come back to me on this cos I think we've both nailed our colours to the wall and are unlikely to agree. I just wanted to make my point better. What I felt more than anything last night was relief.
Fri 22nd May 2009 01:32
Awww... merci Gus...
Sois toujours complètement honnête avec moi : )
Fri 22nd May 2009 00:55
My sister Norman wired her Vibro into a streetlight...wasn't a light on in Accrington for week.
Fri 22nd May 2009 00:36
Ooh... this is a bit naughty... mais je l'aime : )
Thu 21st May 2009 23:54
Isobel, a wonderful responce!
Comment is about You (blog)
Thu 21st May 2009 23:51
I think you could have appeased WOL byadding a few extra lines.
'I love you small tits, fat belly
I love you big tits, small belly
I just love, love, love you.
A simple poem, which makes its point very economically. I think your fiancee is a lucky lady.
Thanks everybody, for your input.
I have to stand by my work though. It was as I felt it needed to be an I am happy with the work.
Pete, all fair points and I take it on.
Thu 21st May 2009 23:46
Of all your poems, my favourite - a simple message delivered beautifully.
Comment is about Flirting (blog)
Thu 21st May 2009 23:43
Poignant - I thought so the first time I read it but couldn't be bothered to post a comment then! LOL Wish I could have a similar memory of my father but I just can't.
Comment is about Sitting On Me Dad's Shoulders (Re-write with Winston Plowes) (blog)
Thu 21st May 2009 23:40
Love every other poem you wrote but would half agree with Pete on this one. Think you need to explore different ways of saying the same thing.
Thu 21st May 2009 23:31
hey yosh man, you aint lost, your poetry is finding its speed pitch rythm volume and, its readers. Your words speak volumes here and your prose is getting better. Be well blue.
Thu 21st May 2009 23:07
oh leave the lad alone i think he is a sweetie !
Thu 21st May 2009 23:03
Thank you once again Vixi...sorry about the little ugh creature... still made a point... now about the whispered audio for you private collection... can acually put a compilation together... which should keep you curled up in bed for a week.
Love ya to bits
Comment is about vixichick (poet profile)
Original item by vixichick
Thu 21st May 2009 22:48
Thu 21st May 2009 22:36
freedom of speech is important but sensitivity should override our private thoughts. The impetus of the poem could be better harnessed and addressed in a more subtle way. Its pointless alienating readers . The poem would work on a comedy night, frog and bucket style. I have heard worse from Bernard Manning and Chubby Brown, both sucessfull comedians in thier field. The poem does succeed in this genre but I reckon that its more important to be aware of its impact on sites such as WOL. Again its contradictory of me as I enjoy poetry especially in the raw performance style, but etiquette Seb, its needed in order to integrate. Waves are easy enough to make as it is. Harness the skill and energy you have and choose what not to say let the reder fill in the rude gaps, dance on the edge but dont tip over it. These are thoughts. Debate within the poem, offer a way out, or illustrate a reason for the outrage, mitigate yourself, leave the raw for the alcohol hours and the working mens club. Discuss? (not criticising , trying to guide) Pete.
Thu 21st May 2009 22:23
Such a contrast to your last poem. It seems inconceivable that the same poet could have penned the two. I like this one.
Thu 21st May 2009 22:20
I'm not going to explain myself, I am just going to re-state that Chris was wrong in her assumptions.
Think for yourself, just don't be so lazy about it.
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