Sun 20th Dec 2009 15:58
Beautifully expressed Shane!
I miss the snow, but you let me experience the affects of it again : )
'Mystical gentleness, and the silence is golden'
Comment is about THE SILENCE WHEN IT SNOWS..... (blog)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 15:38
Thanks for the comment, thats a good idea I think i will change it, thanks for the advice, much appreciated.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 20th Dec 2009 15:04
Thank you Rachel.
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Sun 20th Dec 2009 15:03
Thank you Stephen.
Comment is about stephen smith (poet profile)
Original item by stephen smith
Sun 20th Dec 2009 15:00
Thank you Gram.
Comment is about Graham Sherwood (poet profile)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Sun 20th Dec 2009 14:58
Thank you KC.
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Thank you Dave.
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sun 20th Dec 2009 14:57
Thank you CBT.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 20th Dec 2009 13:03
Methinks thou dost protest too much. Any poem with an intentional 'kick' is surely ironic (I would have thought, 'kicking' being its very essence). Moralizing is not always a bad thing. You are too good to be under-rating yourself. Who are you trying to impress - or dis-impress? (Ha! New word of the week.)
Comment is about Dave Morgan (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Morgan
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:46
Hi Isobel, Your comment on Win's "Decree Absolute" regarding '....it's all his fault' had me grinning from ear to ear. Nice dry touch. I've posted a follow up comment, too.
Dzien dobry !!
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:41
This is (for me) dripping with succinct cynicism and the ingrained human trait of judging by first appearances. I'd like to see you write another - from the busker's point of view. Nice one.
Comment is about The Busker (blog)
Original item by John Aikman
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:34
It's good to be able to slip yourself into a different persona now and again. I rather like the one you've chosen - she sounds like fun!
Comment is about a different sort of person (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:33
Yep - I like this one too Dermot - it is funny.
Comment is about Variation and fugue (blog)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:30
Indeed, "such a reverie in lingerie."
When will the video be available? ;-)
Comment is about Stockings (blog)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:26
Some carefully chosen words and phrases here; put together they perfectly illustrate the enduring pain and singular tragedy of such a loss. Very well crafted.
Comment is about Little Clock (blog)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 12:18
Francine, that's lovely. I'll write one later today and post it on here.
Sun 20th Dec 2009 11:23
Hi!!! Thanks so much for your comment i really appreciate it....i jus opened my blinds this morning and thought wow!! Inspiration! Lol....im gunna av a sneaky look at some of your stuff....thanks again i look forwarf to more of your comments!! :) x
Sun 20th Dec 2009 11:04
I really like this poem it captures just how I feel when it snows, it brings out the child in me ha ha...... It is snowing as I write this.... love it Christmas great!! ;-))
Sun 20th Dec 2009 10:23
I have woken up to fresh snow this morning so this was lovely to read.
I love the line 'God is in the snowflake', one of those "wish I'd written that" moments.
Sun 20th Dec 2009 09:38
Jeff, thanks very much for liking Don't Look Away. It's one of what I would call my postcard poems, ones I work away on in the hotel room in the early morning when my wife is still asleep. I think it has a lot in common with your atmospheric poem Napoli, particuarly looking at the picture. I also like The Journey of Your Life, because I'm a sucker for trains and stations. They just provide moments of such great drama, of life-changing movements, of reunion and separation. Best wishes, Greg
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Original item by Jeffarama!
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:44
Hi Sheridan,I'm very much like you in that I use my writing as a tool for sorting out stuff that's going on in my head or in real life. It's got to be healthier than it lying around in there like undigested food Poetry, like probiotic yoghurt for the brain Lol!Some very deep stuff in your samples. Brill!Rachelx
Comment is about Sheridan (poet profile)
Original item by Sheridan
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:36
This is fantastic. I am a mum of 4 too, Hard work isn't it? This was hugely resonant for me. Lovely lovely stuff
Comment is about It's hard to be a poet when you're a mum... (blog)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:20
....and having just re-read Tate Modern, I think the Last-Line title actually belongs to you! :)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:19
Thanks Graham for your comments, d'you know, I think this site is one of the most affirming things in my life at the moment.... May I pick your brains re freelancing at some juncture....or have I just destroyed site etiquette singlehandedly?
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:15
Thanks lotsly for the comments Isobel, they're hugely appreciated. Glad you put your stockings on (virtually) with me....now then, people seeing this comment who haven't read my poem will be Sooooo Intrigued by that comment won't they? tee hee!
Thanks again, and glad you enjoyed the poems,
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:11
Me too Ann, me too! I'd have leopard skin knickers on me washing line! :)
Sun 20th Dec 2009 00:10
Hi Ann, thanks again for 'looking after' me and leaving lovely comments. It's truly very much appreciated.
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:32
Hi Melissa, great writing here and a lot of truth -The cruelty of mankind
is to be blind to innocence
love this line, cant argue with that! best wishes Jeff X
Comment is about Blind Innocence (blog)
Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:29
Wonderful bit of writing Sian, nice one Jeff x
Comment is about Hopes and Dreams (blog)
Original item by sian howell
Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:26
Hi Andrea, really enjoyed this and wives and girlfriends, very amusing see ya soon Jeff X
Comment is about Present Moment (blog)
Original item by Andrea
Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:10
Hi Augusta, its been a chaotic week gigging in one way or another but finally got round to reading this. Despite the cold weather I had to open a window or two but coped ok as you thought!
I'm not getting into any arguments, its obviously wrong if it is rape, but I'm sure you knew posting this would get understandable reaction, one way or another, as its such an emotive subject, with the victim coming off worse.
I think you may have swayed from one way to the other to ask questions that make the whole issue a nightmare to sort out and lead to many incidents not being reported, suppose there could be lots of issues involved that complicate matters, and of course I'm sure you're not trying to say its okay if forced.
It does start as poetry in my mind but longer it goes on it becomes a passage of prose, and I actually felt like I was reading a Shaun Hutson book to be honest, he would probably be proud of it in the context of how he writes his books, if you have read them you will know what I mean.
Anyway, keep writing, don't think all your work will get this number of comments but I'm sure it will continue to be well read as its very good! Jeff X
Comment is about Voyeur On The Wall ( Date Rape ??) (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Sat 19th Dec 2009 23:09
A long poem is difficult to read off the internet (as opposed to off the printed page) but then large themes - such as the stars, which have fascinated poets, mystics and philosophers since the dawn of human existence - are worthy of long pieces.
Cynthia, this is a great poem, spiritually charged and written with appropriate passion.
I gazed at the starts the other night in the garden of a hotel in Chester. I saw their majesty, and the hope they offer to humanity at this downbeat time in Earth's history, and I too was filled with awe - and with resentment that we can no longer see them properly in the over-populated, light-polluted territories where most of us reside.
The world is full of cynicism, and the poetic community is heavily afflicted by pretension and clunky (failed) attempts to be clever.
But you have taken a big theme here and delivered on it poetically, describing beautifully a powerful epiphany. All power to you.
Comment is about Star Songs (blog)
Sat 19th Dec 2009 22:58
Hi Sian, how ya doin? enjoyed this gritty determined number best wishes Jeff X
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Sat 19th Dec 2009 22:21
Sat 19th Dec 2009 22:19
You have a tremendous talent for tempting us with warm thoughts before stabbing us with icicles Rachel.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 19:59
I'm just following Ann around cos I'm lazy like that. Another super poem though.- great use of language - I'm putting those stockings on with you! Love the ending also - sensual but not overdone. So good to see a felmale tackle erotica - so subtly done...
Sat 19th Dec 2009 19:54
Wrenchingly sad. Every mother could identify with the pain this woman would feel. All of the images of the imagined child are acutely recognisable and beautifully depicted. I've never lost a child but this poem gives a haunting insight into that sadness.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 19:48
A cooly sexy poem, you are your own voyeur. Some unusual descriptions (of the lace and satin particularly) make it more interesting too.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 19:44
A really sad and moving poem Rachel, subtly told. The title is just right too. The most heartrending image I think is that she shows the print shyly. It would not be the first word one would think of, but it is so touching and so right.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 19:22
Cynthia I'm dead chuffed when people see anything of value in my work, thank you. I never wrote it as purposely ironic, more as an entertainment (typical pub poem, lots of swearing etc) with a kick. Symbolism has always been wasted on me, I was brought up in a concrete world with concrete language and I invariably fail to spot the hidden or abstract moral, message or reference, in any poem or story. Probably why I can't take to the "greats". The Buddha under snow just happened to be my only photo with a seasonal reference ie snow, I would have preferred one of a drunken orgy. Now you point it out it suddenly makes me seem like a moraliser. Didn't expect to have to think about my own work! Have a lovely yob-free Christmas.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 16:04
Cynthia, 'Conversation' is a wonderful poem subject. I can imagine the 'greats' such as Herbert, Donne, Shakespeare, Browning, oh the lot, taking it to wonderful places -- you too ?
Mozart and his librettist make a great duet out of love and law at the end of Magic Flute. I guess it was strong in Freemasonry at the time.
I do a lot of spiritual reading with poetic inspiration in mind. This one's from Hinduism specifically, Advaita Vedanta.
Comment is about barely-rhymed sonnet : Love and Law (blog)
Original item by michael shepherd
Sat 19th Dec 2009 15:55
Nice point. Hindus manage without grief (or so they claim) : just moving on to another appropriate life.
I wrote two sonnets about bereavement. Maybe I'll post one here. Poems about grief get more hits than any on themed look-up sites; people seem to want to know how to deal with that 'surprise'.
Comment is about For Kit, Justin, Leon, Crispin (blog)
Sat 19th Dec 2009 15:42
Michael, where do you spiritually roost, I wonder. This is an insightful poem, beautifully presented, rhyming no problem.
The expression of 'Law' and 'Love' used almost interchangeably isn't new. Browning adhered to it. Mary Baker Eddy trumpetted it. Plato too, up to a point?
Only recently I read again that the word 'universe' in its original use literally meant 'law'.
With whom do you ever actually have conversations? I asked a United Church minister that question once and he looked at me piercingly, suspecting sauciness maybe. Then he must have recognized my sincerity and said: 'No one.'
I didn't think there was an omission.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 15:26
Or: 'then grief would have no place'.
The essence of grief fascinates me. Is it that, no matter what the circumstances, death always takes us by surprise?
Sat 19th Dec 2009 15:15
Had been intending coming over for Sunday, but having seen the early start; the guest spot; the quiz; the music, and thinking there'll be a large turnout, with open-mic in first half only, I'll be staying at home.
Have a good time
Sat 19th Dec 2009 14:54
Many of these images are superb eg. 'let the cold wind in on this concrete evening' .
The whole poem is well-crafted, and provokingly harsh. The last line is masterful.
Give a tiny thought to 'Silence again On Tonight's street Smell of fate ..etc. ' The soft 'c' making the 's' sound just flows into the consonance of the final verse. Nothing wrong with 'Silent' though.
Comment is about Accident on Tonight's Street. (blog)
Sat 19th Dec 2009 12:51
Thanks for the comment Jeff, not sure if it would get into the octagon but sure all I can do is try. Yeah I think I might keep goin with it and see what happens.
Sat 19th Dec 2009 12:48
Thanks for the comments, much appreciated and looking forward to hearing more from ya.
Comment is about Malpoet (poet profile)
Original item by Malpoet
Alison Mary Dunn
Sat 19th Dec 2009 12:12
This poem seems to resonate somewhere in me. I love the way you make reference to the skies mourning. It's kind of like when I travel back to Scotland. I suppose you're faced with looking at your life and where you've come to and the very place you grew up in seems to ask the question.
Comment is about Raining In Darlington (blog)
Original item by Tom
Sat 19th Dec 2009 11:49
Hey Thomas, a very warm welcome to WOL. I'm so glad to have read the poems you've posted so far. You have a gift and it's lucky for us that you're sharing it.
At the moment I like them all but 'Raining in Darlington' seems to have impacted on me most.
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