Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:45
Tghs is really good, I had never heard of it but will visit it now.
Comment is about A meditation - the Sun Goddess of Bidston Hill (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:44
The photo is a perfect match for this piece... I am sure I have seen her image before..
The changing text really keeps you on your toes which is how it should be with this edgy poem- it gave me jolts as I wondered what was coming next and I was left me wanting more. Sian X
Comment is about Claire (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:43
Weaving your prose around the chords of Rachmaninoff? I expect your story to be quite a grandiose, maddening experience...
Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:40
I enjoyed this too. Mancunians are all Rain Gods.
Comment is about Northern Rain (blog)
Original item by Carmine Grimshaw
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:36
Hi Cynthia - your words of praise for mine, were the ones I would have chosen. Can't do better than that, can I! In return I cite your 'Fly in the Butter'. When the title spikes up the poem - bliss.
Comment is about Just Three Thoughts (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:24
Mr Singleton, this is powerful. You wield 'clever' like a whip, dripping with healing irony. The last two lines are outstanding.
Comment is about DISTANCE (blog)
Original item by Barrie Singleton
Tue 12th Jan 2010 20:23
I agree with all of the above contributions...this is beautifully told and not only in story form but carefully poetic too. thanks for your comments you were spot on by the way re liberation ...thats what I was trying to convey....most of my stuff has 'hidden' meaning so it's lovely when someone spots it...thanks Sian X
Comment is about Force Seven (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:52
Callie, this is quite interesting. '-a look preserved in pixels' is a great poetic comment. Also 'fully witted fully dressed'. I got somewhat side-tracked in the 'snow on the steep hillside', which seemed, for me, just a bit too much, and did not add depth so much as diversion. The last line is an excellent closure of the whole concept.
Comment is about Nameless and Shamed (blog)
Original item by Claire Alexandra
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:48
So. Did you finally give it a blast then? Poetry performance or fireworks display, it's very colourful in its own way.
Nice, very nice poem Sian.
Comment is about The Long Fuse (blog)
Original item by sian howell
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:38
Kealan, perfection might not need praise. Encouragement to continue, i think is neat. Recognition for the talent of any human being, again.. might not be necessary for one who is complete. Acknowledgement, i think is neat.
Sorry if i broke into a conversation between the two of you and hope you don't mind my input. :-)
Comment is about in praise of a fellow poet (blog)
Original item by michael shepherd
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:36
Hi Augusta.Such a deeply soft,dark choclatey poem.More than worthy of endless acclamation.A pleasure to read again and again.Best wishes.Stefan
Comment is about Oh! Darkly You are Lovely. (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:22
This is really quite deep in social behaviour and human trials regardless of age.
Love the last stanza.
Comment is about Serenicity. (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:17
Yet another great poem from you.
I too love this and hope Kealan does too. It's brilliant to have someone who champions another poets work.
Comment is about The Aged Poet. for Kealan if (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:02
Hello Sian HNY to you. Thank you for commenting on Happy New Year. I unfortunately was one of those in last night's clothes. Have just read The Long Fuse. Will comment after a couple more reads. Always necessary with your work. I'm looking for the clever bits that you hide so well. Graham
Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:55
This isn't cricket Tommy?
Comment is about Art House (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:25
...well the rhythm is better but the line's meaning is madder than a bag of frogs.
Comment is about House Porn (blog)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:24
...and the additional 'to'...to go with the flow...
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:23
If you will give the dog a bone...
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:17
Nice one this, Sian with a positive end. you have a strong voice. win x
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:03
I am entranced by the ethos of this poem, it's atmosphere and how it alludes to the value of a worthy life well spent.... great.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:02
"if anyone can help me slip in the word fellatio"
If you say sho!
(well, it's hard to talk with your mouth full)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 17:54
notice the extra brackets Rachel!
Tue 12th Jan 2010 16:43
Logged in specially to say I love this! Moving, life enhancing (like poetry sometimes is!) Simple and lovely.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 14:45
thank you for the advice, it is good advice. as long as my fingers can hold a pen i will continue to write.
Comment is about michael shepherd (poet profile)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 14:25
I love the way you use langauge. Beautiful, lyrical and sexy. (Should either without or with be deleted in "a starlight waits without with its angels"?)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:57
Simon, I feel the pain of being ignored by Sir Jimmy myself, also having neglected to send in the letter asking to be a ballerina for a day or whatever it was. I did have him as a friend on myspace some years ago though.
I liked your samples a lot
Comment is about Simon Lee (poet profile)
Original item by Simon Lee
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:50
Kealan, we're all 'fairly shit' -- in our own eyes or those of others, but so what. 'Poetry will teach you poetry' -- that's all we need to remember.
So the greatest tribute we can offer to each other is this, as from me to you -- 'Keep writing..you have something to say..'
Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:45
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:41
Kealan, thanks. 'Hanque O' writes a series of 'Mid-West' down-home monologues under the title 'Regina's poems' on Poemhunter website, whose 'imaginative sincerity' I'm just in awe of... discipline in poetry and joyfully 'ornery' with it... I was about to write and praise; then felt uncouth.. and wrote this poem instead..
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:25
Ha Ha my sister has a heated loo seat that sprays your bum, perfumes it and then dries it, does that count for a WOW factor heh heh?
Comment is about The WOW Factor (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:12
i hope whoever this poem is directed at got what they deserved. no worse redemption than the sodomizing of an enemy
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:11
unfortunately there will always be sensationalism as long as there is journalism. It is our own fault (by us i mean the general public) because stories about a bereaved family member just doesnt sell.
Comment is about Front Page Impact (blog)
Original item by Frances Macaulay Forde
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:06
good piece, i think i understand what you meant... perfection needs no praise?
Tue 12th Jan 2010 13:03
thanks for your comment johnny
Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)
Original item by John Darwin
Tue 12th Jan 2010 12:51
I love the sound of your voice Annipoo..... sad but heart wrenching poem though, I hope it isn't about you.
Love TC XX
Comment is about If you can read this . . . (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 12:49
Most of us have slow burn fuses.... ;-)Fun though when the fizzing stops and BOOM.. ha ha.....great poem ;-)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 12:33
Graham, pleased to meet you here. Some of my work now on my profile. have a look! /A
Comment is about Graham Sherwood (poet profile)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Tue 12th Jan 2010 11:46
Goodness, cheers Chris (I'm actually 'Chris' too, but not Aloud to be atm)
You're conviction and appreciation is..er..appreciated, and I'm sure that we could speculate regarding you observations *winky wink wink*
I welcome you potential amendments, clearly demostrates that you gave it a good going over - which is both rewarding and flattering.
However I don;t actually proof, re-write or revisit (in the main) If I did then I'd probably replace 'who's' with 'those'.
Hell, I think I'ma gonna!
That pic give me the bleedin creeps, nice one.
All the best.
Comment is about Joy to watch (blog)
Original item by Christopher Dawson
Tue 12th Jan 2010 11:27
I can't say I've met many poetic Christians myself! I have more recent ones to upload as a matter of fact :)
Comment is about S.J. (poet profile)
Original item by S.J.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 11:19
Good morning Frances.Do I thank you for this deep,and humanely thought out writing or join in your sympathies?a lot of both doubtlessly.I too carry everyday rememberings of other peoples sufferings,as my lengthening prayer list will testify.forgive these heartfelt comments being accompanied by my profile picture.I am at heart of the same ilk as your good self,I can assure you.Thanks also for your great work on this site.Best wishes-Stefan
Tue 12th Jan 2010 10:46
This is excellent, Sian, imaginative and emotive,with very concise, expressive diction. It tells a great story of personal liberation and courage. And a 'catchy' title too, one that is almost a three-word summary as well as an introduction - very hard to do.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 10:36
Great poem, Sir. At least Africa is treated here as a massive continent with major individual countries, and not the local county as in "going back to 'Africa'", a phrase so often tossed about sincerely but meaninglessly. I do challenge the 'mature leadership' finale of the poem. By inference you must be referring to every country. Is this just?
Comment is about fruits of failure (blog)
Original item by jabulani mzinyathi
Tue 12th Jan 2010 10:30
Me, too. Once again an excellent poem, Frances. Do you think you might be enjoying more readership here than in your published books?
Tue 12th Jan 2010 10:26
Mr Turner, you are right, of course, about grammar and punctuation being optional in poetry. And Rachel's meaning is very clear. I stand chided.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 08:25
I liked this Graham and as always you are on form and very much a strong writer coming up with a different slant to the familiar New Year theme.Breaking the stereotypical ideas...which as you know I also like to do. Sian X
Comment is about New Year's Day (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 06:37
I've felt this many times. Often in the descriptions used rather than the photos.It can be a heartless world. But a heartfelt poem Frances.
Tue 12th Jan 2010 05:43
Polish it? Tommy I think it's succinct and achingly resonant just the way you did it. You ought to post it 'as is'. Rachel
Frances Macaulay Forde
Tue 12th Jan 2010 02:31
Thank you both, Janet and Cynthia. (The 'an' is to emphasise but I will consider.)
The poem was written while waiting to meet my first love again, after 30 years and another life, apart. We shared many, many words before I would let him fly over to touch my hand again...
Comment is about Scissors (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 02:02
Did you listen to the YouTube reading Cynthia? I'm just testing out the idea and would greatly appreciate feedback.
Comment is about My Car (blog)
Tue 12th Jan 2010 02:01
Again, thanks Cynthia. Have you looked at my webpage here: http://francesmacaulayforde.com ? I have more examples on there, also on my three blogs I've just started to talk more about my inspirations for writing, poems and screenwriting: http://www.blogger.com/profile/12121383700089833300
Comment is about Boxes (blog)
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