Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 13:01

I absolutely love this. It throbs with everything that makes poetry personal, powerful and fine art.

Do you always think like this, or do you foster a 'special poet's place' in your head?

'toeing' is unusual. I'm sure it's exactly what you wanted, but 'different'.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 12:42

Very interesting, because it could be almost 'anything' that is recognized as the ultimate calling card. I did find 'terror' and 'resignation' in the same face quite challenging. But no more than 'fear' and 'joy', I suppose.
Death is a common theme in your poetry.

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nick armbrister

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 12:41

your poems have a dark/gothic quality Sarah, i like them!

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nick armbrister

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 12:37

hi i like your poem Places I Remember it has a hypnoptic affect, you have a way with words.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 12:35

I enjoyed this conversational style. The poem has some marvellous, novel images and thought associations.

'Am i writing in a really abstract way?' Marianne, you have to be teasing.

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Andrea

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 11:46

Thanks for taking the time to read my poem 'Pulling a Sickie' Dave! I will look forward to reading more of your work :-)

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stefan wilde

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 10:44

Good morning Graham-ta lots for taking time to read and comment on my poem'home' your observation is very helpful.thanks-Stefan.

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Andrea

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 10:13

Thanks for taking the time to make suggestions on my mouse poem Ann! I shall take your comments on board.

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winston plowes

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 09:56

Hi Ann.
You know when you get an idea for a theme and structure of a poem and it really works, well you have that here Ann. 1)The serpent theme. 2) The repetition in the first line 3)The undercurrent of sex?! 4) The punch line. I would be proud of this. If there is an improvement it may be in the 3rd and 4th lines of the first 3 stanzas which you might want to tweak. Nice Win :-)

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 08:15

Wait til you get to my age! ;-) Really liked the first verse. Then it got a bit difuse and complicated maybe! xx

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Ann Foxglove

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 08:12

What a cruel twist!

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kath hewitt

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 03:53

I have to say that i'm not entirely sure what this is, other than me thinking how my mind is sometimes, i suppose, I don't know,anyway............:-)

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Francine

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 03:10

You capture the sentiments of longing well Mirna...
I think that many can relate to this - I know that I can.

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Francine

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Wed 3rd Mar 2010 00:27

I totally agree with Cynthia that the first verse can stand alone as a poem.

The idea you have expressed takes my breath away : )

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winston plowes

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:44

Hi M... fantastic this one W X (One for Sorrow. Will there be a sequell?)

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:16

The alliteration spread over two lines is a lovely touch and works really well.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:16

thankyou!

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:14

It is really clever and very dense (in a good way) I think I may have said it before, in a Dylanesque way.

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:12

Welcome to WOL Sarah. Loved the Freudian slips.

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Marianne Louise Daniels

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:12

Ha! thats ok. Am i writing in a really abstract way? I sometimes worry its too much but then i know exactly what I mean when i write and so i think "ahh, sod it!" However, this is not good if nobody can understand or get anything from it...

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Graham Sherwood

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 23:07

Marianne, reading your work intrigues me but I just can't decipher it well enough. It's like buying a posh new camera that has lots of cool functions that you don't know how to use. You know its good, but not really how good. Believe it or not this is a compliment but I don't get it?

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Mirna Arabi

Tue 2nd Mar 2010 22:04

Francine Louis........ Thank you so much,I Am happy that you liked it :)

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Dave Bradley

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:20

Only just found this John. Cogent, punchy and something to always bear in mind. Well done

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Francine Louis

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:16

Exquisite!
Beautiful images... especially the last verse.

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Isobel

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:15

If only I'd known that ladies - I've been messing about in the wrong place - will have to do a recky. A super poem Ann - totally original!

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Francine Louis

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:11

Mmmm... Moi aussi j'adore l'endroit derrière mes genoux ; )

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Isobel

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 21:10

I would agree with Cynthia there - particularly on the first few lines. I think it would add to the eerie, ominous sense of what is coming.
From wavering snakes to the jaws of lions - your poetry shows such versatility Graham!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:57

Good one, Graham.
In my opinion, I would take out a few adjectives that are not really needed, and thus give this really tight descriptive power.

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Francine Louis

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:56

Oh là là... Que tu es vilaine !

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:22

For me, Thomas, this is more of an indulgent poem. Would you consider pruning out one third to a half of it? So much is so good. I offer this comment sincerely, because you have much of value to share. It is only my opinion which can be tossed in the bin naturally; but! would you try it? I'm itching to know what you would do.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:15

You know how I admire your thinking and the expression of it. I believe all you needed to say in this poem is in the first verse which is rich enough to stand alone.

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Ann Foxglove

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:08

Nice interpretation Cynthia. I was thinking plain or milk, but I guesss you may have hit the nail on the head (as usual!)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 20:08

It's one of the most sensual areas of the body, like the palm of the hand; funny that, the obvious and the super-shielded. This is a beguiling piece.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 19:59

So - not an 'Othello' thing? Reminds me of the classic black-white sexual fantasy, and quite beautifully crafted too.

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Ann Foxglove

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 18:23

Mmmm. Made me fancy a Magnum - pity the shop's shut! xx

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Isobel

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 18:19

I must admit - I'm not overly fond of long locks on an aging man or woman LOL but whatever does it for you Dave! On your head be it. A fun poem, celebrating the need to determine one's own life - be it back hair or head hair - the choice is yours... I can identify with this. x

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Dave Bradley

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 17:32

Lovely. Lucky man.

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Cate Greenlees

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 17:29

Hi Beula, thanks for taking the time to comment on If I Could. I was trying to make the point that everyone has the right to make their own choices in life whether they be right or wrong. Its so easy to try to protect those you love, but in the end you cant live their lives for them.
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 17:25

Hi Anthony, thanks for your lovely comment on If I could. Much appreciated.
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 17:21

Hi Winston, many thanks for your lovely comment on If I could. Much appreciated.
Cate xx

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Cate Greenlees

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 17:19

Hi Rachel, sos Ive only just got round to thanking you for your lovely comment on my last poem... Ive had a horrid bug which has laid me up for the last few days. How amazing that you wrote your poem when you did.. like you say great minds!!!!! Although truth to tell theres nothing really new, just our own interpretation of how we see things. Sometimes something we read of others inspires us to write in a similar vein. I know this happened to me with the first poem I ever put up here called "My Little red haired laddie" {still one of my favourites} A poet called Nabila, dont think you ll remember her, shes left the site now, wrote a beautiful poem called "Green Eyes" about a family gene in Afghanistan which produced green eyes. It got me thinking about hereditary, and my little grandsons red hair which came from celtic ancestors generations ago and inspired my favourite poem! Sos I cant say yours did cos I hadnt seen it!! {My psychic link doesnt run to telepathy!!! lol}
Cate xx

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Augusta Darling

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 16:30

Yes I agree ... Knees must...

Love it Its very sensual.

Augusta x

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John F Keane

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 15:40

Chris

The Chaviad music is by Clint Mansell. It is a remix of a track called 'Requiem for a Dream', which is used in the cult movie of the same name. He has composed a lot of Hollywood film scores, but this is his best.

A remarkable piece!

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Ann Foxglove

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 14:10

A sad one Thomas. Well written.

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Ann Foxglove

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 14:08

Lovely poem Thomas

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Chris Dawson

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 13:32

Hi there,
Just heard 'Chaviad' on the poetry jukebox - absolutely loved it. Very inventive.
Can you tell me what the music you used is, please? I recognise it but can't place it.
Cx

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Chris Dawson

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 11:58

Oh - I really do like this, well done!
Cx

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Nichola Burrows

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 11:09

You grow that hair long Dave!! make a stand, think I may try dreads!! haha - retirement no excuse for me yet - maybe more mid-life crisis.xx

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Greg Freeman

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 10:37

Hi Rachel, I have a problem with poem titles too. I sometimes don't hit on the right one for several years! I assumed with Protection Poem that it was an undercover job, so to speak, ie that you'd sent it off somewhere with another title and were disguising it here, as discussed recently on a thread. It's a long time since my kids were that age, but I can still identify with that fierce feeling. Good luck with the competitions and magazines. After a year with the comps I decided that mags were a better bet in view of the odds, publishing between 25-50 poems an issue, as opposed to 1st,2nd,3rd, and possibly ending up with nothing in print. There is the chance of cash with the competitions though, I agree! Greg

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stefan wilde

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Tue 2nd Mar 2010 10:25

I love this Kathryn.And I love people who note the little things in life,which in a lot of cases are far more interesting.Thanks-Stefan.

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