Tue 28th Apr 2009 00:18
Your poem 'MUM AND DAD' expresses the feelings of loss and grief so well...
These words echo my thoughts:
'If they can see me, in whatever form
I hope they see all the love and heartache I still carry
For no matter how long I walk and live
I would give anything to have them back here with me on Earth'
Comment is about june slater (Poet profile)
Original item by june slater
Tue 28th Apr 2009 00:06
Bienvenue à WOL : )
Your poem 'Another' is lovely... it has some mystery to it...
I absolutely love these lines:
'Wake me to the truth that their silence echoes louder in my ears,
reverberating from the edges of this moment.
Coming back to me from the farthest reaches of the sea
and the farthest corners of my heart,
to let me know that I am alone.
Save for another
Comment is about (Poet profile)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 23:32
Really depends on what mood your in, I'm all for encouragement but mediocrity.. never... let the critic critique... thats what enables us to reflect, reappraise, ajudge in a reviewing light... As for the losening of inhibitions using the key of alcohol... well we all go there.
I don't want WOL readings ever to turn into a PC correct evening... a Readers Digest or Ladies Friend evening ...Good Bad and the Ugly... if something stings in the morning ..at least its made you think...
Comment is about Seamus Kelly (Poet profile)
Original item by Seamus Kelly
Mon 27th Apr 2009 23:08
I've always wanted to be push up against the fridge... what a cool idea.
Thanks Sophie for your comments
Comment is about Sophie Hall (Poet profile)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:14
and I hope to read it sometime lol
Good luck with the revision,
keep in touch
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:09
Aye well I hope to hear you read at some point.
I am revising at the moment (Sort of) but I promise I will check out more of your work later. Hope you are okay : ) xxx
Comment is about Memoir. (Poet profile)
Original item by Memoir.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:07
Thankyou gus for your lovely comment : )
Im dabbling in free verse at last. xx
PS: I promise is brilliant - I wish I had it on my fridge. : Dxx
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (Poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:00
Thanks a lot, it's my most recent poem,
if your intrested in pieces like that,
I have another just posted in samples.
I think poems with humour are good and I enjoy your writing, well what I've read so far anyway.
I know what you mean, I didn't expect any young writers on here either.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:58
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:55
Hey there I really enjoyed your stuff - Meat pebble is fantastic use of words. Im a very jealous lady xx
Comment is about Ruth Hartnoll (Poet profile)
Original item by Ruth Hartnoll
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:54
Oh thankyou sweetheart thats lovely to hear. I actually look back on social services as being a bit crap and not that funny.
Ive had a quick peak at 'who will rescue me' and I think its brilliant! especially seeing as Im an atheist too. Youre writing is very profound where as I just try and be funny most of the time.
"I think god would be black-
and a woman.
She'd carry her voice so hollow
that you could hear the wind
deep in her throat.
She would sing
like Billie Holiday"
I love this bit. : )
And youre young! (im 19) - dont get to see many younguns around here - not that Im complaining - but it is nice and refreshing. You should definitely read somewhere : ) xx
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:50
Thank you for your comment :)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:49
Hi, I was just browsing your profile and wanted to say your poem 'Social Services', well I really enjoyed it.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:47
thanks for the comment about my work.
I really enjoyed your poem 'To bed, for life',
Hope to read some more of your work soon.
Comment is about KtD (Poet profile)
Original item by KtD
Mon 27th Apr 2009 19:31
I have been waiting patiently for this day.
Ladies and Gentlemen.....this is the return of Alabaster de plume. Not a moment to soon, summer looms and that means poets in parks, gigs galore, please Alabaster give me more.
YES YES YES he is here. The melting of the minds can happen once again, this is it its arriving - he is arriving
what words have been swilling about in his musical and poetic mind......the world awaits the grand entrance.
His come back
the waiting is over
Comment is about Alabaster DePlume (Poet profile)
Original item by Alabaster DePlume
Mon 27th Apr 2009 18:32
Hi Sian, yes I've had the odd one or two in my time! As you live in Somerset its unlikely I'll bump into you very soon, which is a shame! But if you're up here let me know and of course keep reading, writing and in touch! Jeff X
Comment is about sian howell (Poet profile)
Original item by sian howell
Mon 27th Apr 2009 14:30
nice to meet you last night at Middleton and i enjoyed your reading of this poem.
I felt a kind of hollow silence afterwards, albeit a very short one, it was there to be noticed. :-)
Comment is about A Tree of Life (blog)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 13:22
Thanks for reading 'Requiem' - glad you enjoyed it.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 12:54
Hi, I really like your work...fantastic style, especially in 'a world I know.'
Mon 27th Apr 2009 08:19
It riases my spirit to find a kindred one!
Thank you for your comments about "Love Book".
I too can relate to "Being Led Astray"
The Lost Poet
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:50
It can be... I suppose - but in what way if she appears to be so feminine?
Especially in this poem - how is she virile???
And why this choice of a word?
Am I making you think too much ; )
Comment is about Richard Brooks (Poet profile)
Original item by Richard Brooks
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:45
Re 'poet and his muse' thanks for the comments, not sure how to elaborate, can virility not be a feminine quality?'
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:13
Love your profile! So funny...
and your poem DEFYING GRAVITY
(amongst other things)
I can so identify with these words ; )
'take the law and ditch it
and draft one of
Comment is about Bill Mitton (Poet profile)
Original item by Bill Mitton
Sun 26th Apr 2009 22:28
Il y a du sens dans ce que vous dites...
plutôt dit: Est-ce que c'est pour le mieux ou le pire?
Sun 26th Apr 2009 19:00
In the second last verse of this poem chime several chords of meaning ...resonant of loss.
Comment is about Tears Upon a Damsel Stricken (blog)
Sun 26th Apr 2009 16:17
Hi Jeff, I live in somerset...where the cider comes from ! Sian x
Comment is about Jeffarama! (Poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Sun 26th Apr 2009 14:14
Hi, I wouldnt mind listening to some of your work. Just been introduced to your good self, will spend more time reading up. Goona blow the now. Be well.
Sun 26th Apr 2009 13:34
Great line: "comforting and dirty as bathwater."
Really vivid image that lasts - nice one. :D
moxy casimirs Keg of Curiosity
Sun 26th Apr 2009 10:44
'avioswineproof bivouacs with perspicacious windows for them to look out on the world.' I'm on the case. Patent's just been applied for, am looking at mulched bank-note papier mache life casts they can trot around in (photo-realistic portraits on exterior) with charcoal air filter and state of the art biocide fumigation rumpus.
Comment is about Malpoet (Poet profile)
Original item by Malpoet
Sun 26th Apr 2009 10:20
Hello Sirrah! It's scary being back but fortitude is everything. Well, it's something and it's nowt.
PS I spotted a dalmanda in a bivouac.
Sun 26th Apr 2009 00:08
Instant Classic...what higher praise can I ever need...especially from yer goodself...
Thanx once again
you're a pal
Sat 25th Apr 2009 20:33
Bonjour Francine! Love lives in your poems... and you Romance the profound. There's a stillness at their core which is astounding and delightful. Encore! Encore!
Sat 25th Apr 2009 20:27
Hello Pete! What a riotous poetry-dandy you are, with your tailored fillips and fiery fandangos. All joy to you and your Muse -- you have the whoosh and wham of Blake about you!
Sat 25th Apr 2009 19:29
Loud, loutish lover, treat her kindly
(Though she needs you
More than she loves you)
Stephen Patrick... golden years Pete - golden years
Comment is about I know it's over (The Smiths) (blog)
Sat 25th Apr 2009 18:43
Hi Sian, which way to turn? Follow your heart - or maybe not that doesn't always work! Ha, thanx for your comment on Crossroads - I think I'm just going with the flow I think and its kinda nice! Where do you live? It doesn't say on your file, be nice to bump into you at a poetry event sometime! Jeff X
Sat 25th Apr 2009 18:22
Hi Graham...great fun this piece made me smile...which is much needed...thanks for your comments by the way...spot on as always. I am trying to write something more uplifting at present but my heart isn't in it. Sian X
Comment is about Arab in my carpet (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Sat 25th Apr 2009 10:47
Garibaldi cannot be beaten except by a fig roll. Leave those soggy bourbons behind. Howdy doody Cayn. I see you're still a solar-powered million watt powerhouse poet!
Comment is about Cayn White (Poet profile)
Original item by Cayn White
Sat 25th Apr 2009 08:26
yes please , mail it to me if you get the time or the inclination :)
Sat 25th Apr 2009 07:29
Francine I appreciate your comments on my poems,we appear to share the the same approach to poetry.It always feels good to get approval from a kindred spirit. Thanks x
The whole essence of this wow number is:
I know it's over
And it never really began
But in my heart it was so real
And you even spoke to me, and said :
"If you're so funny
Then why are you on your own tonight ?
And if you're so clever
Then why are you on your own tonight ?
If you're so very entertaining
Then why are you on your own tonight ?
If you're so very good-looking
Why do you sleep alone tonight ?
I know ...
'Cause tonight is just like any other night
That's why you're on your own tonight
Sat 25th Apr 2009 07:15
What I was struggling to say was,
How well you are getting to know me... is that for better or worse...I wonder?
Do you know it does not really make alot of sense in English, well it did at the time.
I'll change the picture back ..just for you.
Sat 25th Apr 2009 04:22
Awww... 'Love Book' is so adorable...
'Love Book - The Finale' not so much : (
'This Love' is Beautifully written...
Comment is about The Lost Poet (Poet profile)
Original item by The Lost Poet
Sat 25th Apr 2009 04:02
So many nicely written poems...
I especially like 'Bliss'
'I move close
Gently kiss his lips.
His eyes open and look deep into mine.
Arms draw me into his embrace,
We both smile.
Mmmm... it is Bliss : )
Comment is about Valerie Cook (Poet profile)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Sat 25th Apr 2009 03:42
Really like your poem titled 'The Poet and His Muse' has a sort of fairytale quality...
She seems so feminine in every way so this line I find interesting in that I don't understand it's inclusion 'Virility her virtue.'
Care to elaborate?
Sat 25th Apr 2009 03:24
Really like your poem 'special delivery.'
It is well written - ending came as a bit of a sad surprise though... even after reading your bio!
Comment is about the other woman (Poet profile)
Original item by the other woman
Sat 25th Apr 2009 02:58
Je vous corrige un peu...
'Oh oui, ma Francine chérie,
Vous finissez par me connaître meilleur.' (mieux)
'Est-ce que ce pour le plus mauvais j'est de la merveille ?' Je suis désolée, mais je ne comprends pas du tout ce que vous voulez dire...
p.s. I liked the first picture much better as it was more mysterious and showed the tower... ; )
Sat 25th Apr 2009 02:42
Lyrics are moving...
For me, these lines capture the essence:
'I know it's over
And it never really began
But in my heart it was so real'
'Love is Natural and Real
But not for such as you and I, my love'
Fri 24th Apr 2009 18:16
Oh oui, ma Francine chérie,
Vous finissez par me connaître meilleur.
Est-ce que ce pour le plus mauvais j'est de la merveille ?
Merci de nouveau de vos commentaires merveilleux.
Fri 24th Apr 2009 17:21
Hi Francine; just a quick one, thanks for thinking of me. I'm currently relocating to London from Manchester, and down most of next week for interviews and sorting things out. Had nearly finished the poem before it all happened, so will try to find time to finish it and check in more often. I hope all is well with you too.
Comment is about Sister Solstice (Poet profile)
Original item by Sister Solstice
Fri 24th Apr 2009 11:30
I find that the shoe is often missing . . :) but for me the pipe work pie . Why dont we have space travel yet . . . I have been promised aliens and transporter rooms all my life
Comment is about totally random dream trashing (blog)
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