Wed 29th Apr 2009 07:07
Thank you for your comment, and very useful because I struggle with punctuation, so thank you for that :)
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Wed 29th Apr 2009 06:52
Hi Pete, starting open mic at 8.30 at latest so anytime before that (got you down for open mic slot) cheers Jeff
Wed 29th Apr 2009 01:38
I have always gone off to secluded places to be alone with my thoughts...
Comment is about Scar (blog)
Wed 29th Apr 2009 01:17
Merci for taking the time to read my poem 'You Led Me Astray'...
I only started to write again about a year ago.
I really want to become more versatile...
Wed 29th Apr 2009 01:10
This is lovely...
And I must say, of all your poems - my favourite...
It is reminiscent of past and present, written with insight and sensitivity : )
Comment is about Sharing A Dawn (blog)
Tue 28th Apr 2009 23:08
Hi Ktd. This is a very touching poem. I do feel that a little more work needs to be done with punctuation, as it can sometimes interrupt the flow. I will give you an example of a stanza that could work better:
'The mourners raise a voice as one,
Their faces turned towards the sun
And scattering lily's where she lies;
Sing a sleep with lullabies.'
I feel this could work better. But it's your poem. Its a damned good poem but its fluidity could be a little better. Nice one!
Comment is about To bed, For Life (blog)
Original item by KtD
Tue 28th Apr 2009 22:25
Wonderful Wonderful and.....Wonderful
Just love it love the picture play at the end
Deborah R Jordan
Tue 28th Apr 2009 22:17
oh dammit, i just realised what I wrote, i can't write about soul and the letter R, the 2 aren't compatable, in polite conversation, but my chosen middle name is that of which i write, maybe i should write inner self instead...sorry..
Tue 28th Apr 2009 22:02
I like this, very whimsical at the end but nice.
Comment is about Losing you (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Tue 28th Apr 2009 21:51
Nice! Im a fan of Dylan and like The Who.
Comment is about With Dylan on the Moor (blog)
Original item by Ralph Dartford
Tue 28th Apr 2009 21:39
Hi Mike, it's more protection of soul, what the R in my name stands for. thank you for reading it and your kind comment. Deb R
Tue 28th Apr 2009 21:31
I really like this one Deborah. It is a nice story. To me, it signifies the protection of the heart. A heart that has been broken. I wish I could write like this sometimes.
Tue 28th Apr 2009 20:10
thank you for your kind comments on Springtide, sorry for the delay in responding, life and stuff getting in the way, deb
Comment is about Gus Jonsson (Poet profile)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Tue 28th Apr 2009 20:06
Hello Sian, thank you for your kind comments on Springtide, sorry to take a while to respond i haven't been able to be here for a while, thank you for taking the time to read it, deb x
Comment is about sian howell (Poet profile)
Original item by sian howell
Tue 28th Apr 2009 18:08
Stunning stuff Dermot.
Comment is about Dermot Glennon (Poet profile)
Original item by Dermot Glennon
Tue 28th Apr 2009 15:19
another wonderful piece...great sense of fun and joy...it sounded to me as if you enjoyed writing it too. Sian X
Comment is about Breathless at the Butcher's . . . or . . . The Sins of the Flesh. (blog)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Tue 28th Apr 2009 15:00
All Photos (c) Seamus Kelly, 2009 - but he is happy to provide full size files to you on request - please email: email@example.com
Comment is about Gordon Zola performs at The Old Boar's Head, Middleton, April 2009 (photo)
Tue 28th Apr 2009 09:13
Hi Francine thank you for reading my poem and making a comment, I know its sad, death is sad, thats why life is so precious, so hold no grudges with anyone, let it go, and become a stronger person, move on, forgive and feel the warmth from that, I try to. There is no one like Mum and Dad is there, a big gapeing hole when they gone, but there still here in my heart, no one can take that from me. Be lucky, in life, in love, and take care, nice to chat to you. June
Comment is about june slater (Poet profile)
Original item by june slater
Tue 28th Apr 2009 08:00
yes I can imagine this one being read out loud...it would have been good to hear it. It has a powerful punchy tone that demands your attention. Sian X
Comment is about A Tree of Life (blog)
Tue 28th Apr 2009 00:35
Merci beaucoup Gus...
I struggled a bit with that line and my only problem is too many so's
(I use it a lot!) and ending the previous line with 'you' and then starting the next with 'you'
Je ne sais pas... I sort of like a bit of a jolt in the middle... I have revised others so who knows - I may end up doing so eventually with this as well...
Tue 28th Apr 2009 00:18
Your poem 'MUM AND DAD' expresses the feelings of loss and grief so well...
These words echo my thoughts:
'If they can see me, in whatever form
I hope they see all the love and heartache I still carry
For no matter how long I walk and live
I would give anything to have them back here with me on Earth'
Tue 28th Apr 2009 00:06
Bienvenue à WOL : )
Your poem 'Another' is lovely... it has some mystery to it...
I absolutely love these lines:
'Wake me to the truth that their silence echoes louder in my ears,
reverberating from the edges of this moment.
Coming back to me from the farthest reaches of the sea
and the farthest corners of my heart,
to let me know that I am alone.
Save for another
Mon 27th Apr 2009 23:32
Really depends on what mood your in, I'm all for encouragement but mediocrity.. never... let the critic critique... thats what enables us to reflect, reappraise, ajudge in a reviewing light... As for the losening of inhibitions using the key of alcohol... well we all go there.
I don't want WOL readings ever to turn into a PC correct evening... a Readers Digest or Ladies Friend evening ...Good Bad and the Ugly... if something stings in the morning ..at least its made you think...
Comment is about Seamus Kelly (Poet profile)
Original item by Seamus Kelly
Mon 27th Apr 2009 23:08
I've always wanted to be push up against the fridge... what a cool idea.
Thanks Sophie for your comments
Comment is about Sophie Hall (Poet profile)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:14
and I hope to read it sometime lol
Good luck with the revision,
keep in touch
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:09
Aye well I hope to hear you read at some point.
I am revising at the moment (Sort of) but I promise I will check out more of your work later. Hope you are okay : ) xxx
Comment is about Memoir. (Poet profile)
Original item by Memoir.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:07
Thankyou gus for your lovely comment : )
Im dabbling in free verse at last. xx
PS: I promise is brilliant - I wish I had it on my fridge. : Dxx
Mon 27th Apr 2009 22:00
Thanks a lot, it's my most recent poem,
if your intrested in pieces like that,
I have another just posted in samples.
I think poems with humour are good and I enjoy your writing, well what I've read so far anyway.
I know what you mean, I didn't expect any young writers on here either.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:58
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:55
Hey there I really enjoyed your stuff - Meat pebble is fantastic use of words. Im a very jealous lady xx
Comment is about Ruth Hartnoll (Poet profile)
Original item by Ruth Hartnoll
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:54
Oh thankyou sweetheart thats lovely to hear. I actually look back on social services as being a bit crap and not that funny.
Ive had a quick peak at 'who will rescue me' and I think its brilliant! especially seeing as Im an atheist too. Youre writing is very profound where as I just try and be funny most of the time.
"I think god would be black-
and a woman.
She'd carry her voice so hollow
that you could hear the wind
deep in her throat.
She would sing
like Billie Holiday"
I love this bit. : )
And youre young! (im 19) - dont get to see many younguns around here - not that Im complaining - but it is nice and refreshing. You should definitely read somewhere : ) xx
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:50
Thank you for your comment :)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:49
Hi, I was just browsing your profile and wanted to say your poem 'Social Services', well I really enjoyed it.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 21:47
thanks for the comment about my work.
I really enjoyed your poem 'To bed, for life',
Hope to read some more of your work soon.
Comment is about KtD (Poet profile)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 19:31
I have been waiting patiently for this day.
Ladies and Gentlemen.....this is the return of Alabaster de plume. Not a moment to soon, summer looms and that means poets in parks, gigs galore, please Alabaster give me more.
YES YES YES he is here. The melting of the minds can happen once again, this is it its arriving - he is arriving
what words have been swilling about in his musical and poetic mind......the world awaits the grand entrance.
His come back
the waiting is over
Comment is about Alabaster DePlume (Poet profile)
Original item by Alabaster DePlume
Mon 27th Apr 2009 18:32
Hi Sian, yes I've had the odd one or two in my time! As you live in Somerset its unlikely I'll bump into you very soon, which is a shame! But if you're up here let me know and of course keep reading, writing and in touch! Jeff X
Mon 27th Apr 2009 14:30
nice to meet you last night at Middleton and i enjoyed your reading of this poem.
I felt a kind of hollow silence afterwards, albeit a very short one, it was there to be noticed. :-)
Mon 27th Apr 2009 13:22
Thanks for reading 'Requiem' - glad you enjoyed it.
Mon 27th Apr 2009 12:54
Hi, I really like your work...fantastic style, especially in 'a world I know.'
Mon 27th Apr 2009 08:19
It riases my spirit to find a kindred one!
Thank you for your comments about "Love Book".
I too can relate to "Being Led Astray"
The Lost Poet
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:50
It can be... I suppose - but in what way if she appears to be so feminine?
Especially in this poem - how is she virile???
And why this choice of a word?
Am I making you think too much ; )
Comment is about Richard Brooks (Poet profile)
Original item by Richard Brooks
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:45
Re 'poet and his muse' thanks for the comments, not sure how to elaborate, can virility not be a feminine quality?'
Mon 27th Apr 2009 00:13
Love your profile! So funny...
and your poem DEFYING GRAVITY
(amongst other things)
I can so identify with these words ; )
'take the law and ditch it
and draft one of
Comment is about Bill Mitton (Poet profile)
Original item by Bill Mitton
Sun 26th Apr 2009 22:28
Il y a du sens dans ce que vous dites...
plutôt dit: Est-ce que c'est pour le mieux ou le pire?
Sun 26th Apr 2009 19:00
In the second last verse of this poem chime several chords of meaning ...resonant of loss.
Comment is about Tears Upon a Damsel Stricken (blog)
Sun 26th Apr 2009 16:17
Hi Jeff, I live in somerset...where the cider comes from ! Sian x
Comment is about Jeffarama! (Poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Sun 26th Apr 2009 14:14
Hi, I wouldnt mind listening to some of your work. Just been introduced to your good self, will spend more time reading up. Goona blow the now. Be well.
Sun 26th Apr 2009 13:34
Great line: "comforting and dirty as bathwater."
Really vivid image that lasts - nice one. :D
moxy casimirs Keg of Curiosity
Sun 26th Apr 2009 10:44
'avioswineproof bivouacs with perspicacious windows for them to look out on the world.' I'm on the case. Patent's just been applied for, am looking at mulched bank-note papier mache life casts they can trot around in (photo-realistic portraits on exterior) with charcoal air filter and state of the art biocide fumigation rumpus.
Comment is about Malpoet (Poet profile)
Original item by Malpoet
Sun 26th Apr 2009 10:20
Hello Sirrah! It's scary being back but fortitude is everything. Well, it's something and it's nowt.
PS I spotted a dalmanda in a bivouac.
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