Deborah R Jordan
Sun 16th Aug 2009 09:10
ok, you love him, but why this title i wonder?
Comment is about Newcastle accent (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:58
Hi Jeff, reminded me a bit of 'Noise of the night' I did recently, nice work keep it up mate! Jeff
Comment is about Alone..... (blog)
Original item by JEFF.W
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:57
thanks for taking the time to read and make comment on my poem
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:55
not ninjas then? ; )
Comment is about I love Bill Hicks (being tickled) (blog)
Hi Janet, sounds like you're up to no good Ha! Love this it says so much in a few well chosen and lovely words, Jeff xx
Comment is about The Beauty of Love (blog)
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:52
Great stuff Cayn, bit different and good to see you in action mate, hope you're keepin well! Jeff
Comment is about They Only Come Out At Night (blog)
Original item by Cayn White
Atilla, I have never read Swells, now I will.
Your poem made me smile, your thoughtful tribute made me sad, but also brought home the vital role poetry plays in connecting people.
I hope your brave mum finds the peace she desires. x Carol
Comment is about RIP Steven 'Seething' Wells (article)
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:49
Very poignant, some lovely sentiment Jeff
Comment is about Always there never to be forgotten.... (blog)
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:48
Hi Soph, hope you're well, love this and the change in rhyming structure, nice one, you had me in orbit.. as always of course Jeff X
Comment is about Music of the Spheres (blog)
Original item by Sophie Hall
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:39
Well thats cleared that up! Ha, nice one Jeff, welcome to WOL good to see you writing, cheers Jeff
Comment is about Questions Or the Answers (blog)
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:22
hi Emma, yeah be lovely to meet you, will be at Freed Up this thursday. Yes most of my poems do rhyme, the rhythm (all the hard words lol) helps when I'm performing live to remember them, well sometimes anyway!
I'll keep an eye out for any work you do, the feedback does help, just be careful with the spelling, it can make a massive difference and if its wrong it stands out mile and can ruin an otherwise good poem!
I even wrote a poem last year 'Queens English RIP' because of number of people who get you're and your mixed up, drives me mad! JeffX
Comment is about Emma Roy- Williams (Poet profile)
Original item by Emma Roy- Williams
Sun 16th Aug 2009 08:14
Welcome to WOL. A good start. This works just as well on the page as it did at the Tudor. You make the reader feel the dilemma of choice - the complexity of possible outcomes, history, emotional hunger and more. Do keep posting
Comment is about Second Chance (blog)
Original item by Yolande
Sun 16th Aug 2009 07:49
Thanks for reading and commenting on Shhh - glad you liked it.
I do like 'We would be' - it's rather mournful. Look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment is about Michèle Vassal (Poet profile)
Original item by Michèle Vassal
Sun 16th Aug 2009 07:41
Thank-you for reading and commenting on Shhh - if I tell you - I'm glad you liked it, it's cos I am. ;-)
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (Poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Sun 16th Aug 2009 07:36
Thanks for reading and commenting on Shhh - glad you liked it. Trusting someone with those little bits of your life/thoughts etc that have the capacity to hurt, can be scary - one reason, I suspect, that so many of us choose to do it through poetry!
Comment is about Dave Bradley (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sun 16th Aug 2009 07:28
Thanks for readding and commenting on Shhh - glad you liked it.
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Sun 16th Aug 2009 00:45
Dear me - drugs, sex, rock and roll seem to have passed me by in Ibiza - how sad is that? Forgot your stick of rock - will have to go back there. Any suggestions on my new poem welcome. Thanks. Isobel x
Sun 16th Aug 2009 00:16
I love Bill Hicks
Sun 16th Aug 2009 00:11
I watched his piece on gays in the military but it was enough. i didn't really understand if he was having a go at 'gays' or the american military both or what. just not my thing, ok rant at me all you guys, tell me he's not this or that, maybe it's all too ironic and i just don't get it or maybe all the commments i read are right and he was a homophobic mysogynist. i don't know all i know is that i don't get it and maybe i'm in the wrong place here. i can't get my head around it and i don't think watching another hour of him will make much difference. i don't like discrimanation of anyone there's enough crap going on in the world without having a go at someone for thier sexuality or gender.i just don't get it and i'm not a christian or a gideon my tenets are if it harm none, do what you will.
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (Poet profile)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 23:59
Welcome to WOL - so glad you made that leap. If you get one fraction of the pleasure from poetry that you get from music, it will be very worthwhile.
Comment is about Yolande (Poet profile)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 23:57
A very heartfelt poem Yolande. I understand the background and surrounding scenery to this poem so it speaks to me. You performed this beautifully at the Tudor and Darren was right to comment on your near perfect diction!
Sat 15th Aug 2009 23:52
You paint a great picture here Cynthia - I love the nostalgia, the humanity and the reality of it all. How many times was I all 'squashed and squabbly' during my childhood - the youngest of six!
Comment is about Singing To Grandma's House (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 22:59
I would love your suggestions Anthony. I struggled with the last line of the first verse, wanting it to be one syllable shorter but not managing it without losing the meaning.
Your lesser known nursery rhyme is incredibly sad and curiously insightful...
Comment is about Words (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Sat 15th Aug 2009 21:53
steve G. The people who produce a version of the bible
Sat 15th Aug 2009 21:51
Deborah you have been...totally misinformed.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 21:25
who the fuck are gideons anyway?
Sat 15th Aug 2009 21:00
never heard of him so, i googled him. seems he was a mysogynist homophobe or have i been misinformed?
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:39
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:29
Thanks Cynthia on your comments on "Fish"
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:28
Thanks Cynthia, I was thinking along the lines of some very pretentious people who think they are "Deep Thinkers" lol
Comment is about Fish (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:25
Thanks Cynthia for your comments on "Bad Day in Heaven"
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:24
gays in the military...
Well thank you very much Cynthia.
Comment is about A Bad Day In Heaven. (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:23
Anthony thanks mate for your comments on "Imagine"
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:20
Janet, Anthony thank you both for your comments.
Comment is about Imagine (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:18
An excellent piece of work Cate, loved it.
Comment is about Our Gramps (blog)
Original item by Cate
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:15
Tommy thanks for your comment?
Janet thank you for your comments and I agee this could be taken further
Comment is about Sister Mercy (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:04
A good Hard write Cat, from my point of view I would not change much with this.
Comment is about No love lost here (blog)
Original item by Cat P
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:02
Liked this a lot Cynthia, you created a nice picture here.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 20:00
Good one Tommy , topical and not so funny I think.
Comment is about waa waawaaa (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 19:48
The picture Cynth is of me in hospital 15 years ago. Had an operation on my neck. Sounding off as usual.
PS the tag line: 'Here's Tom with the weather' is a loving borrow from Bill Hicks.
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 15th Aug 2009 19:45
You're very funny! And great picture.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 19:40
Bernie, could be a fish in an underground cave river, like those who have lost their eyesight completely.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 19:28
Really good, Cate. I enjoyed it. Reminiscences are always delightful. I am going to springboard off this poem with one from my 'archives'. Hope it's OK with you.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 16:34
Janet's right - this is punchy! I think it would perhaps benefit from a careful re-read and a little judicious editing (most poems do), but maybe you want to keep that raw/straight-off-the pen feel.
Sat 15th Aug 2009 14:59
Sat 15th Aug 2009 14:57
hi AE thank you for that observation. I concur!
Sat 15th Aug 2009 14:25
because i've heard and seen you perform, i had the advantage of being able to imagine you reading this one. I love the repetitions and think they would work really well for performance, especially with your accent.
Comment is about Crystal Kids (blog)
Original item by Gemma Lees
Sat 15th Aug 2009 14:21
Without imagination how would we create such meaningful poetry?
Reality can be harsh but the imagination softens the brutality and no bad thing sometimes.
Comment is about Imagination (blog)
Sat 15th Aug 2009 14:18
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