Wed 2nd Jun 2010 09:58
Ta for your thoughts on Brown Study. It reminds me now of Jane Austen TV adaptations. Mr Darcy!
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 09:27
Good to see you posting Steve.
You paint a thoroughly horrible picture here - not the poem, but the character. I'm hoping it isn't based on someone real - though you must have drawn your inspiration from somewhere.
I think the bit about the beer and breast cancer sealed it for me.
Liked the legal imagery you slipped in - it all goes to build a case...
Comment is about The joke that leaves a sour aftertaste… (blog)
Original item by Steve O'Connor
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 09:17
Yes - not easy to have fun or behave normally when you are in the public eye. I always remember that incident when someone in the crowd threw an egg at him and he tried to deck them one - was he the farmer? He was entertaining because he was more human than the average plastic politician.
Your poem illustrates that...
Comment is about 2 JAGS + 2 JABS + 2 SHAGS = LORD PRESCOTT (blog)
Original item by Peter Mowat Poetry
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 09:13
Great to see the comedy aspects of Pandora rippling on long after her official closure... such is life...
You sound a little like the white rabbit in Alice and Wonderland. You'll have to find something more worthy of puffing and panting over now Dave...
Andy - I'm a bit dizzy like that also. Got all dolled up for Sale on Monday night to find it was on Tuesday - a date I couldn't make!
Comment is about Pandora (late again) (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 08:53
Thanks Lynn for commenting on Gone. x
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 08:51
Maybe it's a First Aid Kit in Pandora's box Dave! Hope the grazed elbow gets better soon! And thanks for nice comments on Gone. xx
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 08:10
like your sentiment, Dave.. with me - it'd probably be more of the fact I'd forgot (done that before now with things and sent them in too late - lol)
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 08:08
Err.. regarding 'Just a note' - yeah, I suffer from Dyspraxia which does make sure nonsense does appear from me every now and then! Ooops! lol x
Comment is about Kath Hewitt (poet profile)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 07:00
I liked this too. It might be the scene after rain, which is a lovely thing to conjure up, but it's open for the reader to create their own interpretation.
Comment is about gone (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 06:55
I liked this Lynn. Will the story continue?
PS spelling of reins
Comment is about She Rides Again (blog)
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 06:27
Loved your take on Pandora and Zeus, Dave. Encouraged me to put my Genesis Garden Revisited one on, under Humour. Thinks: I'd better get on with it then.. Happy days, Mary Gillard
Comment is about Pandora's Box (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Wed 2nd Jun 2010 02:47
Ray - I took out the republicans and performed it tonight and it went down very well! I'll keep on tweaking it before it's in any sort of publication though. Thanks again!
Comment is about Red (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
Tue 1st Jun 2010 23:32
Please, tell me your opinion about my audio poems. With warmest wishes, Laura
Tue 1st Jun 2010 23:24
My dear Lynn! This is my first experience in posting the poem reading it myself. You know what? I've decided to send the rest of my poems with audio. Would you like to listen? With love, Laura
Comment is about What is love? (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Tue 1st Jun 2010 23:04
Deary me how did I miss this. Really excellent Cate!
Comment is about Pandora`s Box (blog)
Original item by Cate
Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:56
Enjoyed this one, Peter, made me smile.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:38
I enjoyed this poem, Ann. I like the thought of the moon being like a wise witch who knows it all. Good one.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:31
I really love this poem, Larisa. Warm regards, Lynn x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:21
Beautiful poem, Stefan, you done it again! lol. x
Comment is about Sixties to sixties girl (blog)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:14
Hi Anthony, yes, I'm enjoying WOL very much, thanks. I'm glad you liked "I thought of you". Racy? ha ha, well just a bit...!
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:17
What - no spotted dick? x
Comment is about Pandora's Box - Review (blog)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:12
...or a slice of that humble pie?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:11
I lived in Antwerp for a while - no-body (that I knew) drank Stella ...Cristal Alken, met Belga, alst-du-blieft! ... but of course I've given all that up now.
Comment is about Stella, you're a star (blog)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:02
And there was me, thinking this was about some woman - there is a Stella on the Liverpool poetry circuit...
My daughter has those glasses - they came with a pink feather bower...
Hello Ann. Glad you liked Brown Study. I should imagine there's too many people on WOL for a similar exercise to be successful.I'm not in touch with that poet any more. Her name is Suzanne and she lives in Finland. Not much help really is it!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 20:45
the return of the baxter! Blimely - beginning to think you had retired from here.. Welcome back!
Interesting piece! One to think about somewhat but nice one! x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:55
Thanks for taking the time to read "Visiting Neil" and Neil's story. I realise that it can never be writing that you can say you "enjoy" reading - that's not the right word. But, if it moved you in some way, then that was entirely my intention. I hope you are enjoying your introduction to WOL - there's certainly plenty to read - and people to meet.
p.s. Your "I Thought of You" is a little bit racy I think? Liked it though!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:32
Cruyff on a bike, Antonionioni!
Comment is about One Nil (blog)
Original item by Nash
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:17
Cringing! Did you say cringing? How very dare you, I've never been so affronted. (Reminds me - must get out more!)
Great fun, good banter lots of people talking and commenting with each other, studying things perhaps in a little more detail, the chance to compare the merits of different approaches and individual styles, dropping in on poets you might not otherwise see, no fisticuffs on the discussions, (for ages - you lot all wimped out?) peace, love and harmony. The Woodstock of the world of WOL (without the drugs - unfortunately - or the "FREE LOVE" come to think of it . . . )
And I almost forgot, some interesting and surprising poems. Well done all.
Are we formally requesting that Isobel sets another "theme" for the month? Raise your right hands . . .
Regards (and thanks to I & F xx)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 17:12
not just you was taken in,
with lie to my face to hide their sin.
as if I would as if I could
invite you here and use you so
we'll kiss and cuddle when you go
you will be fooled and look so stupid
whilst I with fatso give thanks to cupid
no one will beleive you anyway
it doesnt matter what you say
you silly blind deaf aging fool
an alibi a complying tool.
Comment is about They told me I was paranoid (blog)
Original item by Richard Seddon
Tue 1st Jun 2010 16:31
True, true. I'll give it an edit :).
Tue 1st Jun 2010 16:22
Trouble with republicans is that it means one thing over here and another over there. Summat to bear in mind when you try to conquer the States.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:50
Ray - I think you might be right about the nee-norrs although when I read it out loud there's a long emphasis on the 'nee-norrr' so it's not as obvious.
I quite like the republicans comment purely as a throw-away statement: juxtaposing the roses and socialism - but again you might be right. I think I might perform it tonight and see what happens.
Isobel - thank you so much! :)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:47
I liked this, it doesn't mess about. By capitalising GORE you've got me thinking, Al Gore, Gore Vidal,at first, so not sure about that.This bit's very good:
It’s all the different types of blood
we’re not allowed to give.
Are dog-litter bins red? Depends where you live I suppose. Think you need two nee-norrs. Maybe
"socialism roses and all the guts spilt" -leave out republicans?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:43
I don't like cake - can I have a vol au vent ?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:33
hi both. loved this competition, isobel and francine thanks for taking time to run it.
i was inspired by its title as i do so love the greek myths and although i reference them in my poetry- till now had not thought to write on one story as a theme...my poem just came out with the religious theme, there are many different explorations of this topic one could work with, as weve seen in the poetry produced and its diversity..like opening the box and million ideas fly at you...perhaps we could have a greek myth theme running each month? i say we do the one about saturn eating his children next...nice x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:28
I enjoyed this one - it isn't obvious but there are lots of unusual images that gel together well to paint a picture. For me it is a woman avoiding the issue...
A different situation entirely, but I was recently invited for coffee at the house of a friend, who proceeded to do her ironing and odd jobs whilst talking to me. I shan't go there again!
I particularly liked the 'ubiquity of moss' line.
Comment is about Brown Study (blog)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:17
This is a really powerful one Max and one that I can imagine performing well because it is passionate.
Some emotions I can identify with, having once been a teenager and now living with teenagers. Other parts I can only imagine. You have done a great job at expressing the frustration and the rage...x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 14:47
No that wasn't cock, Ray - though I'm always happy to give you my opinion...
Heaven knows what would happen if we tried that on this site! The mind boggles!! I bet I would like the poet's work who you are "spoofing". Are you allowed to tell me who she is?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:53
Thanks Ann. It's a bit of a spoof, really.I wrote it for a competition on another site, where we all posted poems anonymously and the winner was the one who guessed correctly the most authors. So we ended up pretending to be each other. So I'm consciously emulating another's style. She was thrilled with it!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:44
Best Male Cop Out!I'm assuming cop has been misspelt or misheard. I'm thrilled to bits.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:41
Peter, quite right - but it was the first thing that came to mind...better than the Ronaldinho Flip-Flap!!!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:37
Ann...dreadful! : )
I was only being cheeky, Peter! Thanks, though!
Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (blog)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:32
just wanted to thank you for commenting agin, though it was a little confusing at first, i got there in the end!! ;-)
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:27
I love the way you described me!
Gotta say - I would have hated to have to choose a outright winner from this lot as there was tons off excellent, first rate pieces.. Well done everybody!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:12
Wasn't having a go mate. I just came over a bit Spinal Tap there. It is a witty poem. I liked it.
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