Tue 22nd Mar 2011 15:06
Great amusing poem< what is that "missing argument" all about?
Comment is about warningwolverine (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:54
Thanks for your comments Laura on "Twisting Knives" - it's one of my darker pieces, thought I'd put one up, I have one or two (ha ha) as you can imagine! But at least it has hope at the end...
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:48
Thanks Anthony and incidentally< what would you prune? ;)x
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:37
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Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:34
Excellent - love this. Favourite lines:
Digging deeper, the truculent fractures imply
rupture at further delving.
Blood drips onto gray striations
slides slick over senses; a red poison
robs will and numbs emotion;
and 'cannot afford this poverty' - oh yes, I know that all too well.
Comment is about Twisting Knives (blog)
Original item by Petrova C Fairhurst
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:31
I liked that line too Elaine :) I've had nights like that myself
Very sad at the end, obviously - but better to have loved etc
Comment is about alpha et omega (blog)
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 14:30
Ooo, I like how you put the dream in purple! Enjoyed this Anne - more dreams!
Comment is about on waking (blog)
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 13:12
thank you Elaine for your kind comments on Ward 11.
: ) I was just reading your Moon poem. I love the imagery,frail ancestral bone riddles with holes. I often stare at the moon(probably unwisely)but now will have your images in mind and see it in a new 'light' Did you see the perigree moon 2 nights ago? It was a lovely pale saffron colour. thanks again, Deb x
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 13:07
Thx Mr Philipos (god goes walkabout)- This isn't really a poem as such - I was just recounting a true story that happened to me. This girl on reception turned around & was unusually pretty & could have been a model were it not for the fact that she was covered in fine blonde hair - including all her face - very shocking & it seemed even more cruel that she WAS so pretty if you get my drift. it seems nature is v cruel sometimes - still makes me sad to think of it. B
Comment is about Philipos (poet profile)
Original item by Philipos
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 13:04
hi - thanks for the comments. This isn't really a poem as such - I was just recounting a true story that happened to me. This girl on reception turned around & was unusually pretty & could have been a model were it not for the fact that she was covered in fine blonde hair - including all her face - very shocking & it seemed even more cruel that she WAS so pretty if you get my drift. it seems nature is v cruel sometimes - still makes me sad to think of it. B
Comment is about God goes walkabout (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 11:11
And thanks for your comments on "alpha et omega."
Some very "surgical" references here, ending on a shred of hope.
"suture each severed nuance"
I'm a sucker for sibilance!
I think you could possibly do a little judicious pruning/tidying - but hey - they're your words!
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 11:01
Thanks to you both for supporting me.
Comment is about Eager Beaver - The Book (blog)
Original item by Jules Clare
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 10:42
Phil, I knew you had an impressive literary CV but - merchant seaman! Joseph Conrad, Jack London, Jack Kerouac ... I know there are loads of other writers who went to sea. I'm in awe. Hope there are plenty more poems where Mal De Mer came from. Greg
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 10:04
Hi Greg - tis true I was a merchant seaman in my youth - thanks for commenting
Comment is about MAL DE MER. (blog)
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 10:02
Hi Greg - re; Mal De Mer - tis true I was a merchant seaman in my youth - thanks for commenting
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 09:56
Thanks for your comment on the Betjeman poem, Elaine. I really like your Moon - the way you dissect it.
Tue 22nd Mar 2011 09:40
A storm-tossed tale indeed, Phil. I would have said it reminded me of the Ancient Mariner, but you're far too young ... Sounds like some cruise!
Mon 21st Mar 2011 23:34
I think we forget too easily the years of adolescence and the pain some go through in finding a straightened path - it would be wrong I think to choose a favourite line as all gel beautifully together - well done
Comment is about Criminally Fragile (blog)
Original item by AJ McKenna
Mon 21st Mar 2011 23:27
Thanks for sharing this Jules - I managed to read My Big Northumberland Adventure (brilliant) and made a note to self to dip in to the rest at leisure - congratulations
Mon 21st Mar 2011 23:23
I agree with Francine - elusive but compelling at the same time and richer for the mystery
Comment is about Summerset (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 23:18
This is very powerful but it also makes the reader want to know more about the character in the final journey - which is the hallmark of a great reality poem
Comment is about Ken (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 23:10
Was reminded of Sasha Moorsan's 'Jewels in my Hand' when reading this - not quite sure why though - enjoyed it
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:48
lovely,lovely,lovely-who is the best Odessa poet Larisa-could it be someone we know I wonder? lotsa love-Stef.xx
Comment is about World Poetry Day (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:38
hi Jules-wowsers! going to need some time to digest this-good assortment-get back to you-cheers.
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:34
Lost for words here, Ray - I can only come up with tried and trusted comments - VERY powerful poem. Makes me think of the Albrecht Duerer portrait of his father (ah! something original to say!). Seriously - the painting is so alive the sitter is almost breathing - that's the way I feel about about how you have "drawn" your Uncle Ken in this poem.
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:26
Appreciate that you have written this poem, Adam. Lines like "the rift between her body and the things she wants to feel" tell me that you know what you are talking about. Just a small question: would people generally get "EBD"? Very perceptive poem with strong images.
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:21
Connections are what get us through. Look at us all here, blogging away! The darkness in life illuminates the light: doubt and despair, although undesireable, are part of the human experience, hence it's faith: "for now we see through a glass, darkly". Well, that's what your poem made me think about, Dave! Getting late - that deep-thought time of night approaching!
Comment is about No point; point (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:18
Ah, I read this when it was blogged and wasn't sure of how I felt, after a re-read I feel it's deeper tones, perhaps I'm in a different place now and understand how the dream can often seem better & more real!
Wonderful images Kath, especially liked,
"the swell of corn yielding to a late breeze
made him think of home, the gentle waves
almost lapping at his feet" and
"knowing it was useless to dream,
he slowly started to flake.
Layer by layer he would wither away
until it was too late, until he was drained
of all goodness and he lay,
blackened and wasted on the ground"
Comment is about Dreamer (blog)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:14
Painfully poignant and I echo Andy, leaving "Forgotten" to stand alone is very powerful.
Comment is about i disappear (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:11
Finding this late in the day I know but glad I found it - so much to identify with. However no sooner have I written a poem and aired it in public than I am deeply unsatisifed and need to move on to the next! The right response for the right time is what it's about - patience to wait and listen doesn't come easy to us humans though - especially not the listening bit! x
Comment is about The Poem (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:10
Some lovely pieces on your profile David, especially liked "Black Night Thing" and "somewhere the Sun"
Liked "Stay with me till morning" too. Wasn't keen on "The Bluest Blues" but then you can't please every one ;) I'm going to have to pop back and have a look at more of your pieces... x
Comment is about David Mac (poet profile)
Original item by David Mac
Mon 21st Mar 2011 22:01
I like the elusive quality of this... very intriguing.
Hi Paul, two great pieces here, you could do with some help with layouts and spelling but your words carry a lot of weight with beautiful images and interesting thoughts.
Stick at it with the computer, it'll get easier & I look forward to reading more.
Comment is about griff (poet profile)
Original item by griff
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:55
Wow Elaine, thanks for your comments I thought I was been rather self indulgent, glad it came across. Win XX
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:52
Thanks as always for the kind comments.
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:51
Hi Augusta, can't decide what to make of this, is he a nursing home angel of death, injecting a poison to steal her last breath? She the hapless, witless victim or is something even more sinister at work?
Interesting imagery nevertheless and some discomforting emotions settle around several phrases - thought provoking!
Comment is about A Ragged Paper Rose (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:50
Hi Julian - many thanks for your kind comments on my 'endless talk of floods poems.' also thanks for the typo change- i'm very bad a scanning for these sort of mistakes.
Comment is about Julian Jordon (poet profile)
Original item by Julian Jordon
Hi Isobel, Many thanks for the comments on my 'flood' poem.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:48
An enigmatic, perfect moment in time you have captured here. xxx
Comment is about the perfect word (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thanks Elaine - actually what I was thinking was that no matter the atrocities mankind inflicts on one another - nature will be the one to have the final say
Comment is about Nagasaki Shadows (blog)
Original item by Nash
So nice to have you back posting, Anthony!
I also love the title to this wonderful, passionate poem. Of course 'smoke signals' is my favourite part, even though 'to ashes' describes vividly the emptiness of lost love.
Hi Cynthia. Many thanks for the kind comments on my poem. In response to your question - it was 50/50. The majority of the poem came out quickly but several lines took a long time to finish. I'm not sure I ever got it right.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:42
I like the way you pull the reader in, Dave.
I agree with Petrova... I too was asking myself 'What do they know?'
Comment is about Our secrets (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:30
very nice. i couldn't help but read this in cohen voice + slow synth drum backing.
Comment is about Clown (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:29
Hi Elaine, thanks for the feedback on "Twisting Knives", much appreciated.
With regard to "When nothing expected..." it's deliberate, "nothing's" is too neat & proper & I wanted this piece to be anything but that. Also the line is more like nothing ever than simply nothing is.
I absolutely love this. It reminds me of an early Jo Shapcott poem, though I forget it's name, and actually I prefer this.
The imagery is lovely; very astute with regard to lost love.
Comment is about the quality of silence (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:18
Hi - thanks for your comments Elaine (ammonites, etc)
all the best. B
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:17
I loved the understated way your poem addresses the horrific recent events. "I too am sharpening my pencil" is superb - pen mightier than the sword and all that.
Comment is about Endless Talk of Floods (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
This is lovely:
"The puny concrete cap
The draining salt bath saps away
And reveals the rods that sweetly sway
All happy upon their release"
Very provocative and very effective, i would say.
Would love to hear you read it.
Oh and it reminded me of Threads too. Terrifying.
Comment is about I am Mox (blog)
Mon 21st Mar 2011 21:00
I like the fact that your poem is short yet packs so many references in. Am I being picky / dense perhaps but it seems to me the waves aren't something benevolent that can wash away the horror. Would "wish" put a different spin on it rather than "think"? I guess the subject matter is going to evoke very personal responses. I very much like "cherryspit".
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