Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:54
thank you Jacqueline for your comment . Glad you like it.
Comment is about PERFECT DAY (blog)
Original item by bernadette herbertson
Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:51
thought provoking poem and like youself I too hope they were in love... x x
Comment is about loves parachute (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:48
Love the twist in this Bernadette, brilliant idea.
Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:20
Hi Greg I like this one and what interests me is the sound play in the lists. Obviously alliteration, but there are more subtle effects with the vowels chiming with each other. I don't have a problem with lines 6 & 7, but maybe line 5 is a little flatter than the rest for my ears and needs a tweak.
Comment is about Something for Everyone (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thu 8th Jul 2010 13:06
This is such a sad poem but the saddest thing is that it actually can be a stark reality of the finality of someones.life....
Comment is about And finally... (blog)
Original item by Steven Kenny
Thu 8th Jul 2010 12:13
Oh yes - we bother because of the middle verse ! :)
Comment is about trouble & strife (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Marianne Louise Daniels
Thu 8th Jul 2010 09:59
"They say that nothing is that bad.
They say alot now it's over,
and I find that very sad.
They didnt say anything
two days before.."...nearly broke me in two! I was deeply moved by this piece..so poignantly you have expressed the distance between humans and how the bridges are sometimes hastily put up much too late...
Thu 8th Jul 2010 09:41
Thanks for the comments...
I did think this was more of an accessible piece - the title 101 should make you think of where I have taken it from...
I do not want to infuriate the reader but i also don't want to dilute. hmmm...! It never offends Graham but does make me wonder...I think it is just my natural style, I wrote it straight up on site and so appreciate any feedback. I am not really a fan of explaining work too much, a book can't do that to you, obviously that is a little bit different as the narrative would be more straight forward (although I have been aproached there about this too!) but I like the idea of some poetry biting you on the bum with its message and others leaving you jumping with lots of tiny flea bites, wondering why they chose you to feed on...erm, ahem,I am becoming vague again, but I appreciate the way you say you like it. thanks again.
Comment is about 101 (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thu 8th Jul 2010 08:43
Makes me glad I'm all on my own! Why do people bother? Nice poem by the way! xx
Thu 8th Jul 2010 07:54
Hi Bernardette - thanks for the reply in "my profile"
Blue Velvet - synchronicity at work eh?. A great film for me - but you might hate it ! all the best.B
Comment is about TEARDROP (blog)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 06:11
Well Rodney, the poem is about something we can all relate too. I wonder if you ever write anything positive? If you can't have constructive criticism (which is a very useful thing) I'd keep my trap shut.
Comment is about Hopeful Recovery (blog)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 06:09
A lovely open hearted poem Bernadette-thank God for all animal life!where would we be without them? keep the poems coming girlie! thanks-Stef-xx
Comment is about START OF A NEW DAY (blog)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 06:07
Very sweet Bernedette, and thank you for your comment on one of my poems too! In the early spring I can never believe how tiny the baby rabbits are - they remind of little brown velvet buttons. I was going to write a poem about them - maybe next spring! x
Thu 8th Jul 2010 06:04
A very early good morning Bernadette-re your little prob of where to put comments/replies etc-it is usual for replies to go on the poets blog-and comments on the poem itself-but a lot of people have been putting replies as well comments on the poems in question-no one seems to mind? hope that was a help? just off for a jog now-to the loo! haha! catch you later Bernadette-warm regards-Stef-xx
Comment is about bernadette herbertson (Poet profile)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 00:58
please explain your distinction between resources and posessions. the travellers i mixed with in cornwall would rip off anything that was not bolted down...which was hypocritical behaviour to say the least for a bunch of people swearing to the value of a posession free lifestyle. they just considered other people s posessions to be free for all and of course this is an example of civil unrest but at the time i foolishly declared that my detachment from posession allowed me a spiritual detachment from anger. i was full of shit and should have torched their trailers.
im interested in your 7 communities in britain...do tell...ive visited a few.
the point about the ferry is I find it a bit ironic that you spend your last dollar upon the luxury of a ferry.
no we havent always travelled...your a farmer arent you? are you going to sow a few veg patches around europe and then return for sustenance in the form of a bit of lettuce?
are you going to live on a nudist colony? or will you weave a smock from sheeps wool on a loom hand fashioned from a tree? you like music...will you be forming a band of naked hairy men to play a whittled flute or possibly jews harp?
i see that your phone is not included in the child soldier wars of sierra leone as it is a 'personal posession' mmm
buddhist monks are the closest ive ever met to people genuinely living with out posession...you can find them in todmorden and wont have to worry about contribution to the capitalist enterprise of cross channel travel...
they dont go in for growing weeds there...they dont value mind states that alter from their true vocation which is a peace of body heart and mind. i interviewed a nun during my work as a journalist. She quite clearly stated it was considered a distraction from their godhead, gautama himself was never known to smoke a spliff x
Comment is about The Pot & The Kettle (blog)
Original item by Trky Cairns
Thu 8th Jul 2010 00:52
thank you for your lovely feedback to my blog entry...Growing Family.. I am still finding my way around and not sure where to put what so my full reply to my recent blog entries is on my entry pages. so would be nice if you read my reply please... thanks Bernadette x
Comment is about Banksy (Poet profile)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 00:44
I like this one it oozes a realistic side of life that we choose not to think about but know exists ..
Comment is about his first time (blog)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 00:37
Thanks Ann for your positive comments .If you go to my blog entries you will see my full reply . I am still finding my way around the site and am not sure where to put what ! thanks..x x Bernadette Herbertson
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Thu 8th Jul 2010 00:33
Thank you Lynn for your positve comments.I am not sure where Iactually post my replys so if you bear with me I am still finding my way aronnd.I you go onto my blog entries you will see my full comments ..thanks x x Bernadette
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:52
Thank you all for your positive feedback,with me being a novice and amongst such talented poetics on WOL I am inspired by your comments to create more poetry. My previous entries in 2009 were more sombre but I am at a better time in my life right now which is reflected in my poetry.I dont know " BLUE VELVET " but the idea of the world being filled with robins & filled with love sounds real nice to me. it's strange but I was out last night and actually had the last dance to the song "BLUE VELVET" ! x x
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:29
thank you so much for your welcome comments Ann and Stef glad you liked my poem and I too hope the swallows have fledged. best just to think that they have x x
Comment is about A GROWING FAMILY (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:23
Cheers Lynn, glad it gave you a laugh
Comment is about She (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:22
Graham, no it's not but it helps along the way
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:14
Hi - many thanks for your kind comments. B
Comment is about over & out (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 23:04
yes i agree so much said in so few words and last three lines well said...good work this one
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:55
This is very sad, moving too in a very real and melancholy way.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:47
W A N K is a fitting description,for the leach ridden, blood sucking, parasitic, money grubbing merry go rounders RANT RANT RANT ha ha I think you have been more than charitable to them.
Comment is about What About The Bankers? (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:30
Super last three lines Banksy.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:28
This has a quality about it Marianne but I hope I don't offend by saying I rarely get your work. I read it and understand the words, but I like it like I adore Italian Opera without understanding Italian.
It is not my place to request that you make your work more accessible, but I sure as hell wish it was.
Great piece, keep up the high standard.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:22
Money isn't everything, clever piece.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 22:20
Strong piece Steven and just the right length. Wonderful irony and the thought of a multitude of little breaths is eye-catching.
Alison Mary Dunn
Wed 7th Jul 2010 21:02
"The gravity of your movements
Swells the tides of my emotions"
Comment is about The Sea At Night Does Not Rest (blog)
Original item by Tom
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:51
Ha ha very good, love the twist at the end!
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:44
Made me smile too, and I think bankers deserve the 'w' word!! Good one.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:25
Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comments on "Enough's Enough", much appreciated. Most of it is legal actually, but shouldn't be. Thanks again, Lynn x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:15
Cynthia, I only work part time, thank goodness, but it involves 2 longish days. Believe it or not, it's all legal except that we should have been notified of the changes in advance, and of course the lack of breaks. Thanks for commenting. x
Comment is about Enough's Enough! (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:13
Stefan - What at my age? Ooh young man!! Nah, hubby just laughed, he's a pussy cat, it's me you have to watch! Lol. Don't actually see the boss often as she runs the business from home, which is why I've been going in a skirt and sandals and taking more short breaks. I shall get caught some day soon, I expect! Thanks for comment. xxx
Wed 7th Jul 2010 19:10
tha's pretty brutal..very sad too. i like the retrospective view.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 18:54
I can so relate to this, makes me go red just reading it, if only you knew, good one.
Comment is about The Wretched Book of Face (blog)
Wed 7th Jul 2010 18:52
I like this, made me smile, but being middle aged, the w' word was too rude for me, but I love this it's very funny.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 17:03
Thanks for taking the time and for your comments
Comment is about I AM (blog)
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Wed 7th Jul 2010 15:41
Sounds too close to a full-time wife-housekeeper-stay-at-home mother with three small kids, the tyrant being 'necessity'. Good observations, Lynn. Not sure how legal they are.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 15:34
Needs to be read at least 100 times to catch all the nuances, like 'debris' in a cyclone centre. It is the stuff of greatness, I think. 'death as placid as math'; 'Every sunrise is a bird recording' - superb lines of so many. You are writing a bit differently lately, giving us more of a 'life line' to hang on to, in your irrepressible ocean of words.
Title is hilarious.
Wed 7th Jul 2010 14:38
it is indeed open-ended Lynn-till the issue is resolved-no way to treat people at all-and certainly will affect the viability of the firm in the long run-show this great poem to your boss-but stand near the coat rail! lol! shame I,M not still running my decorating firm-you could have worked for me as a ......(its to do with removing old wallpaper)dare not say the word-you might have a cage-fighter husband! lol! later sweetie-Stefo-xx
Wed 7th Jul 2010 13:27
Written last week, added to this week, feels like it's open ended!
Wed 7th Jul 2010 12:52
Thanx 4 that Andy, I take it as praise indeed from a man that has stood against as many bars as you!!
Thanx again...C U soon!!
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Wed 7th Jul 2010 12:50
Thank you for your most encouraging comments.
I hope u r enjoying WOL
Comment is about Jacqueline King (Poet profile)
Original item by Jacqueline King
Wed 7th Jul 2010 12:46
I still have nights like that... and being sober and stayin on soft drinks don't help...in fact it's worse ... least ways when ur pissed you think you sound like Casanova... when you're sober you realise you don't even speak Italian.....??? what am I goin on about..
Thanks again C U soon!!
Comment is about Jeffarama! (Poet profile)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Wed 7th Jul 2010 12:36
Thank you so much to you all... The subject of barriers and delineation has always fasinated me the rest is years of experience gained by leaning up against bars ....and barmaids for that matter!
Comment is about Katie is a Barmaid (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Wed 7th Jul 2010 12:28
So true... 'sometimes we have to let it all go'
Comment is about Humanity (blog)
Original item by Hayden
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