Sat 4th Sep 2010 06:01
I cannot believe Ive been up all night doing this Dave!!! But when youve gotta write youve gotta write.Ive had somewhat of a literary wasteland recently.... thanks for getting my literary flow going again!Cate xx
Comment is about Biting The Bullet (Blog entry)
Original item by Cate
Sat 4th Sep 2010 05:01
Thanks for your comment missus. Funnily enough I thought about your style as I finished the poem off. I did something odd with the tenses which seemed to feel right but was odd - it reminded me of your poetry - it's funny how we can all be a little influenced.
Comment is about (Poet profile)
Sat 4th Sep 2010 04:56
I think you should post the comment you posted on my profile here. It is good to have historical background - it helps to understand the poem. I find it amazing that a foreign country should honour our boys like that on such a regular basis - particularly when we don't. x
Comment is about bite the bullet (Blog entry)
Original item by Banksy
Sat 4th Sep 2010 04:54
Wow - the Edinburgh thing sounds great. You should write about it and send it to features - they've run a few things about it. I'll be mortified if you tell me you already have - I forget to look there - but always make the effort to read the work of people I feel I know.
Comment is about jane wilcock (Poet profile)
Original item by jane wilcock
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 23:21
Funny, but"Oh, I can't..." sounds a lot better to me than "Ah, I can't....". Here's the best bit, I think:I can own the shame
the neon phallus, the drink,
the scars on my fat white wrists.
It lingers in my insecurity
the worry I will wrong foot myself somehow
dragging the heavy curtain,
beaded with little leads
down around my ears.
Lies I’ve told, scurrying round my feet,
waiting for the scant light,
the unsteady step
to trip me.
wrong-foot needs a hyphen,the lies around your feet is clever. I think the ending, last 7 or 8 lines, is letting the poem down. It is self-indulgent and messy.Rest is good, though.
Comment is about Self Indulgence. (Blog entry)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:44
really good this Isobel some smart ideas, i like time/space theories. brilliant x
Comment is about Biting the Bullet (Blog entry)
Original item by Isobel
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:42
great poem mike...the imagery in this is so vivid and the pace racy capturing that brief moment of flurry...excellent x
Comment is about Side show (Blog entry)
Original item by mike watts
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:30
Enjoyed the poem, Graham, the one bit that jarred was "stopping in my tracks". It seems an ungainly and unnecessary phrase. Should there not be a "me" before in my tracks?
Comment is about Starlet (Blog entry)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:20
Many thanks, Alison and Graham. It's Bardo, not Bardot, a stage in the afterlife according to The Tibetan Book of the Dead.I always have to smile when I see poets referred to as brave. It's not like the Poetry Police are gonna come round your house and stop you from
Comment is about Exhausted (Blog entry)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:07
A very special good evening to the most loveliest of all Mrs Dyes! thanks for your comments'n'concerns-I,m only feeling good-if you and yours,including foxchops(Mr B) are m'dear.thanks Lynn-xx(B-xx)
Comment is about True vision (Blog entry)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 22:01
No, my youngest is moving out, as a student, leaving myself and David. I will miss the noise of "children." I took a children's poetry show up to the Edinburgh Fringe for 8 nights with Jenny and her friend, Grace, performing. It was all,very exciting.
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:57
Salut! Thanks for your comment - glad you liked it. Hope they are not working you too hard - try throwing chalk a them - or is it all whiteboards over there too? x
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:55
Thanks for your comment on my bullet poem - you picked some of my favourite bits - if only I had the time to polish it better. Are you going to write one? I love reading themed poetry - am not always able to do it - have to be fired up at the right time - it's nice when it comes though. x
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (Poet profile)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:52
Hello you! Thanks for the comment. Must try to make the Howcroft this month - it's been too long. I expect, like me, you are enjoying kids being back wherever... x
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:40
Hi Val, This is a lovely evocative poem and I agree entirely with your sentiments. Why successive governments have ignored walkers and cyclists is a mystery to me.
Comment is about The Child I Used to Be (Blog entry)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:38
Beautiful, Stef, and I didn't guess the end either. :) Hope you are well, Love, Lynn xxx
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:28
absolutely. This should be on the inside of buses and trains!
Comment is about Play On (Blog entry)
Original item by Dave Carr
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 21:20
great poem and true as well!
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 20:17
Hi - bullet - many thanks for the comments. I went once many yrs ago when me & my friend were camping nearby. Having biked all day, I really didn't want to ride the 7-8 miles back into town, but had my arm twisted. It was totally unreal - at 8pm ALL the traffic stopped, Everyone stood still & it was absolutely silent, then he played. If I ever hear the last post or reveille now, I cant help blubbing, because they were paying tribute to us - the Brits - in a city centre in another country, and they do the exact same thing every night. I dont think anyone could not be moved by it. Thanks. B
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 19:32
Thanks for your comments folks. Yep - it was another quick write - I'm getting better at it!
I was trying to convey the idea that before we ever bite the bullet, often we have to wake up to an unpleasant reality. That is a hard thing to do - much nicer sometimes to bury your head in the sand. We are all heroes in that life dumps shit on us all the time and we are always having to pick ourselves up and carry on.
The very rare moments of true happiness that you get inbetween all the dross are what keep us going. That's the vacuum that it would be nice to freeze so we could enjoy it over again and it would have no end.
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 19:26
Wow - this is a powerful one Banksy and so different to your usual stuff.
That's what I love about the themed poetry things. Sometimes, if you can make the effort, you end up producing things you would never have thought possible.
I like this a lot. All those unknown soldiers deserve remembering forever. x
jean lucy thompson
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 14:12
Yes one of my favourite birds they are so fast too :)
Comment is about Greg Freeman (Poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 14:03
Hi Francine, thanks for your sensitive and thoughtful comment on my latest blog. It describes how I was feelig at the time, lots of digging in the dirt...messy but necessary xxx
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 14:01
Thanks a lot for the comment on 'Self Indulgence' Andy, it was sincerely appreciated :)
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 14:00
Thanks Greg, yep, a cheery little number my last one wasn't it? I'm not sure it was wise to post it at all but when was I ever wise? :) I'm much more chipper now!
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 13:56
Sorry about the last poem being not terribly nice. I'm afraid it did exactly what it said on the tin :) It was the way I was feeling then, today I'm full of Jolly robins... Love Comet Tails, truly stupendous xxx
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 13:53
Aww, is that a real pic of you and your mum? Fabulous. I loved the poem too, it's absolutely lovely. Makes me sigh in a nice way xxx
Comment is about comet tails (Blog entry)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 13:28
Really like it Mike - a photo couldn't capture it better.
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 13:25
Yes, we are all flesh & blood + mortal - very well observed.
Dave - can the words "heroes" and "football" even co-exist in the same sentence ??
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 12:26
Thanks very much for your warm comments on Climbing the Malverns, Rach. Have to admit I found your latest a tough read, but it must have been important to you to write. Take care! xx
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 12:12
Glad you liked Kingfisher. I haven't seen it for a long time now. They're so elusive and magical
Comment is about jean lucy thompson (Poet profile)
Original item by jean lucy thompson
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 10:21
Good morning Larisa-your beautiful poem and singing were very very much appreciated I can assure you-yes I understand that you don,t like to be called Aunty-its just that I regard you virtually as family almost-but I shall refrain from adressing you in that way in future-since you are such a darling,maybe that name would suit better-thanks for letting me know about your Grandson and gorgeous McCoy-what an absolutely beautuful dog he is! lots of love from me-and I sincerley hope you have a great day today and everyday-will look out for all your poems and lovely singing-thank you Darling-Stef-xx(M-xx)
Comment is about But Anyway I Still Love You (Blog entry)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 10:11
I love this Rachel - it has the wonderful feeling of late summer about it. I love the crisp whit bonnets image. Blackberries all down the lanes here. XX
Comment is about Jelly Babies (Blog entry)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 10:10
I find this almost too painful to read Rachel. Very powerful stuff! But so full of loathing. xxxx
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 08:20
Maybe just the cream will hit the fan! P'raps I've lost me credibility! GREAT!!! x
Comment is about Banksy (Poet profile)
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 08:11
I see you've posted it - brilliant ! now you wait for the proverbial to hit the fan :)
I sincerely hope you're going to post Tommy Cooper as well?
just cos we all like "serious" poetry as well don't mean there isn't room for a joke or two.
well done !
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 08:04
the last two lines gave me shivers (you have written something extraordinary there) - then I read Greg's same comments, so I'm not the only one: Brilliant.
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 07:59
You mean Neo can die? Oh no, surely not.
Remarkable and powerful, Izz, especially in the time available. Yes - often when heroes are 'chosen'(England footballers?) they let us down, and everyday heroes get little recognition.
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 07:57
Well just maybe I will! I didn't think it scanned very well though!x
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 07:52
I dunno - you're missing out on posting some great stuff - you never did post the last "private" one you sent me either - you really should - they're both great & would add a little spice to the proceedings - only my 2 cents & much appreciated anyway - but I think they're so good they deserve a wider audience IMHO - I wish I could "write to order" like that XX
Fri 3rd Sep 2010 07:19
We'll run up those
apples and pears
and you can peel your banana.
I'll squeeeze your plums
and you can caress my melons
then there'll be cumquats
The Horny Bint (this is a joke by the way!)
With lots of cream!