Sat 2nd Apr 2011 21:21
Hi Anthony - Re; RIP thanks for commenting - true what you say about mankind sometimes we are not very nice - especially when loved ones left behind must pay the price in such a case as this
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 21:19
Hi Anthony - thanks for commenting - true what you say about mankind sometimes we are not very nice - especially when the loved ones left behind must pay the price in such a case as this
Comment is about RIP. (blog)
Original item by Philipos
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 21:16
I liked it from the line 'what is the stuff of life'. In fact it actually really works as a minimalist piece from that line onward as well.
I like the orientation of the answer and its gentleness.
Comment is about The Stuff of Life (blog)
Original item by Isobel
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 17:04
Thank you Graham - I'm glad it worked for you. I'd just like to point out that the line about acid/alkali wasn't intended as a pop at my ex at all. Acids and alkalis were being discussed during revision so I am staying close the true story. They are also total opposites which is quite an accurate reflection of our personalities - no-one being at fault for that.
The poem is looking at how curious it is when our children inherit different traits from our own. My son is not arty at all - sees the world in quite literal, concrete terms. There is always common ground somewhere though - I hope that comes across. x
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 16:58
This is just a bit of fun, posted for my cousins down south, who spent last week-end with me in the said hotel. It had to be experienced to be believed. x
Comment is about The Yeung Sing Hotel (blog)
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 13:26
ye we should be ourselves, but what is that when flooded with disabling emotions? we cant even look them in the eye.
i like this poem as in a few words it conveys all that awkwardness, but interestingly talks of 'love' rather than attraction. how can we love someone we cant walk on the same pavement as?
Comment is about innocence (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 13:19
thanks for the comments.
Ant - for me it was wonderful & terrifying at the same time.
yes, Rachel, I agree that people are far better off just being themselves & "cool" is indeed just an act after all. B
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:28
Clever title and witty take on the subject! Some good half-rhymes - reminded me a little of Wendy Cope. Enjoyed!
Comment is about A man after my own heart (blog)
Original item by Anna McCrory
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:24
I always feel as if I've strayed into another realm when reading your work. You have not only a unique way of seeing things, but also a very creative way of recording your thoughts. "Through a glass darkly . . . "
Comment is about Narci (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:21
Can I say that I think that you have an enviable abilities in both your writing and illustrations. Anything which complements the written word, dragging it from the dusty and sometimes inaccessible page is to be admired and welcomed.
Comment is about The Living & The Dead (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:17
I liked the "fairytale" quality of this. Aren't we all, as the song says, "Fools for Love"? Good rhythm and some clever internal/half rhymes. The only word that jarred was "schist" - and that's probably my fault as a reader - too close to another (entirely unrelated) word and tstanding out as non-English origin. (I realise that most of our language is imported!)
What inspired you?
Comment is about April's Fool (blog)
Original item by Graham Sherwood
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:15
ah this is really sweet.
sometimes all our words are strangled by these feelings of anxiety and a desire to look good. only rarely do events conspire to perpetuate the myth that i am cool and in control. usually i am tongue tied and twisted and say everything wrong. thankfully when i am in love i think everything they say and do is magic and am moved by their inadequacies, turned on by ineptitude and awkward fricton. no one is really cool, its a false concept .slick talking show offs are a bore. whats the point if they dont need you, and by whim, know exactly how to weave you into their web? i prefer a man who has rehearsed his lines and in the moment stares at his shoes and cringes...
i am going to put the fact that handsome men ignore me from the other side of street down to their crippling shyness :)
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 12:09
Ah - the rush to judgement and the rapid volte face. I'm sure we have all been guilty of this at some time or other. It's usually the territory of those with nothing better to do - idle minds = idle gossip etc. I think sometimes that the term "humanity" is a singular oxymoron. We are often not a very nice species.
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 10:49
When I write, I just hope that in the piece somewhere there can be a killer line/word/expression etc.
"To matter amongst the matter" Genius! Isobel
I also like your observation (easy for a mum) of his father's lips but your eyes. Well done Isobel, another well written piece.
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 01:04
A remarkable and special poem. Almost inspirational in the vision it presents of lifelong enthusiastic love-making with one other. Some may find that unsettling or unconvincing, but I find it heart-warming
Comment is about The Other Side of Kenneth (blog)
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 00:32
Thanks for your comment Elaine - the poem is based on a true life moment, as you may have guessed. Kids are great for inspiring, aren't they?
Missed you at the Tudor last month. Hope you can make Aprils. x
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 00:26
You are right - I wouldn't have said 'why, no' - it sounded more poetic than 'no' though - the line needed one more syllable. The way we say things isn't always that pretty and I don't think it hurts to bend things a little in poetry.
I can't see myself on the South Bank Show any time soon - but yes, I am slowly growing in confidence - that's what it's all about really, isn't it? If I could gift anything to my kids, it would be confidence. I should write a poem about that...
I like the chair picture. It tells me that you don't take life/yourself too seriously. I would like to have seen a picture of you climbing up there also - that would have been funny! xx
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 00:16
I love this Anthony. I'm not sure whether such men exist but life could be perfect if they did. You managed to wrong foot me. I imagined Kenneth had a nasty side that no-one knew about but he was just a good lover at the end of the day.
Your poem reminds me that you can never judge a book by its cover. It is a lovely glimpse into an ideal world, tinged with sadness though.
I'm not going to comment on use of language - I can't be arsed when I just enjoy something. x
Sat 2nd Apr 2011 00:01
Congratulations on POTM! A celebratory and uplifting poems of what might be a dark moment in a life - well done! You go for it girl!
Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)
Original item by Valerie Cook
Fri 1st Apr 2011 22:15
Andy, this is fantastic - love it. The whole poem is like a sign of those times & also an expression of human nature. There is something of the belittling of the other - the view of the riot: "By all accounts / It was little more than a protest" - not your view but the official view & "Without even / A thank you for attending." The repetition of "all I could..." is really inspired - there is something about the way you are underselling the action here that makes it all the stronger.
Having heard your Moss Side poem I can really hear your voice in this poem. Good stuff - very vivid & powerful.
Comment is about Up on the Roof (Strangeways) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Fri 1st Apr 2011 22:01
So sparse & simple. It seems very Japanese with a hint of Zen Buddhism in there. The stanzas echo haiku. This could all be filtered through western eyes of course but I'm convinced!
Some of the detail is almost random but I like this - it paints a picture & helps to tell the tale. Very enjoyable.
Comment is about Plum blossoms in snow (blog)
Original item by Dave Morgan
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:51
Fantastic, great wit and such tight writing.
Comment is about The Student (blog)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:44
Ann, you have such a fine touch - another lovely poem. X
Comment is about foxheart (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:41
Interesting, Kealan. It's all still faith at the end of the day - knowledge is possibly just the coincidence of an agreement between some homo sapiens that our perceptions intersect. Or am I just over-thinking it all?!
You seem to me to be saying that holy texts have got nothing on lived experience anyway. Like it.
Comment is about How Can god Be When Spring Rains (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:23
Made me think of Hardy's novels and poems. A real feel of times past in the language and turn of phrase you have chosen. As Dave says, dream-like - mysterious. In form, it's nudging towards a sonnet - very close & quite tightly written. very enjoyable.
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:17
So very touching and made all the more so with the beautiful photo you have used for the illustration. You have written such a finely felt and loving poem, Ann, bless you. xxx
Comment is about The Tooth (blog)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:14
Enjoyed this - the "certainty of youth", great words. I love your son's answer very much - without carbon there'd be no love! Perfect. xxx
Fri 1st Apr 2011 21:00
I well remember feeling like this. That awful hormonal rush - without the knowledge or experience to make any sense of what I was feeling. Scary.
Fri 1st Apr 2011 20:46
Great stuff Greg. A poem to make everyone think - and there aren't too many of those about.
Comment is about Question 17 (blog)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Fri 1st Apr 2011 20:32
Sorry for the delay in responding; I haven’t had much time or inclination for the pen of late.
“Haven” is a very old poem – although I still have a soft spot for her. Any fan of Coronation Street – or the shipping forecast for that matter, could probably date it fairly accurately. I freely admit to having no knowledge whatsoever of the musings of the celebrated Ms Cartland - the perils of using one’s imagination! As for the character, she may or may not exist; all I know is that she was somewhere around the misty periphery of my butterfly mind. I guess it was written to illustrate how we are able to isolate ourselves from the larger world, living in our own warm cocoons while life and its wild perils carry on regardless. Sometimes people seem able to do this without feeling the pain of loneliness.
Your own writing/performing seems to be going from strength to strength – deservedly so. (Yes I still read, even when I’m not writing!) Yesterday The Morton Arms – tomorrow The South Bank show! Who knows? You go for it. You know I admire the “directness” of your writing, and I suspect others do too.
“The Stuff of Life” is very clever by what it implies and leaves unsaid. A poem to read “between” the lines of. I think it probably says a lot about you. Just one word that I felt was superfluous – the “why” as in “Why, no.” I admit it’s not exactly the proverbial sore thumb – but I can’t for one second imagine a solid northern lass like yourself ever saying it in preference to the plain “no”! (Sounds a little too “Gone With the Wind” for your neck of the woods! But then you probably don’t give a damn!)
I have tinkered with my profile a little – and yes, that really is me on the big chair. (Or is it that the chair is normal and I’m really tiny?) I may change it all again soon – even back to the guy with his head up his butt – more me sometimes . . .
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:47
Lovely, poignant. Old people and their world of small things can arouse such strong feelings in us can't they
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:46
I like it too. There's something dreamlike about it
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:40
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:14
O.K.! I know when I'm beat!! But I still have only three days to do it!!!! :) (Brilliant, by the way!)
Comment is about Banksy (poet profile)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:12
Oi've been invoited to the Time Team Dig
Oi'm gonna have to buy a silly wig
Oi'll have to talk in a gormless voice
they basically said oi ad no choice
Oi'll 'ave to get me bum-crack waxed
or else me invoite might get axed
them ancient viewers don't want fluff
If they did they'd seek out Annie's muff
an so me stupid little ditty
is gonna end 'fore it gets too shitty
Oi'm off to see yon Blackadder chap
'e said me poem's fuckin crap !
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 19:11
I like this Graham - it makes me think of "Is my team ploughing". I know this is not the same story but the feel is there.
Fri 1st Apr 2011 17:54
I'm gonna write a Time Team poem - when I get round to it! But I will!!!!! :)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 17:42
You can't do that !
...as Jack Nicholson would bellow
"You can't handle the tooth"
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:45
Non... Tu m'as très bien cité : )
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:39
The doctor I saw was Dr Linnit so the title is meant to rhyme. Thnak you for your comments.
Comment is about My life Story, innit (blog)
Original item by Jules Clare
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:30
Congratulations Val, on Poem of the Month. I love it - it is one I can really identify with - the answer for me was YES,YES, YES!!!!
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:21
I really like this, Isobel... both the question and YOUR answer!
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:08
Yeah! But then they all go down the pub! I like to pretend they are all my friends! Don't you? ;)
... with friends like them, I really wouldn't need any enemies, now would I ??
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:06
Thanks Cyn - I only mention Africa cos there's quite a lot of Africans there innit ?
Comment is about The Colosseum (blog)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 16:03
HarHar - they have to catch me first !! (shakes fist)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 15:13
Comment is about Transmission Error (blog)
Original item by Matthew Sergison-Main
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Fri 1st Apr 2011 14:33
cheers Mr Freeman for comments on 'Tynonidae'I had left a line out by mistake(listens intensely)pardon late reply-just back from hols-thanks Greg.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 14:31
belated thanks Mel for comments on 'Tynonidae'-just back from hols-to discover I had left a line out(listens intensely)doh! ta lots.xx
Comment is about Melanie Coady (poet profile)
Original item by Melanie Coady
Fri 1st Apr 2011 12:15
'I used this as team name in a pub quiz once. ha ha!'...I used the name 'wet wet wet' in a quiz at a summer camp- there were three in the teem and we all got drenched (tents) then 6 months later a Scottish band emerged with the same name!
Comment is about Marianne Daniels (poet profile)
Fri 1st Apr 2011 12:05
Photograph by Michael Crowley
Comment is about Rachel Bond Studio Poetry The Studio Liverpool Mar 2011 (photo)
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