Sat 18th Sep 2010 00:31
Dear Mr. B-I am higly honoured that you should ask-no probs at all-but don,t expect anything at Christmas! at th'end of day it was polished somewhat brighter by thy good self-its my pleasure therefore to oblige-best regards young man-Stef.
Comment is about Loves Store (blog)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 23:24
Hi Stefan - do you think I could include this poem on my website under "favourite poems by other authors" ?
It's starting to read like a who's who of WOL, but this one is too good for me not to ask. If you don't want to, I'll quite understand. all the best. B
Fri 17th Sep 2010 22:56
#And you dear Lady dear Lady
And you dear Lady
dear Lady-and you#!
(and Benji-of course)
Comment is about If only (blog)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 22:41
Hi Dave-I did a poem similar to this one,called'Laughatory'..great minds'n'all that jazz-ta-Stef.
Comment is about Gents (blog)
Original item by David Mac
Fri 17th Sep 2010 22:36
Good evening lovely Larisa-boy! you continue to amaze me! this is excellent! you should be proud of yourself-I sincerely love this poem-please keep them coming,a pleasure to read-my love to you-Stefan-xx(M-xx)ps-Sharyn Owen was spot on when she commented that 'you have a gift for joyousness'-you certainly do!
Comment is about Words, Words, Words..... (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Fri 17th Sep 2010 22:28
Snap! I,ve been to 'where gulls come to be lonely' as the great 'D.T.' described Milkwood as being i.e. coastal town-burying my grandsons-in sand! unfortunately,I had to dig them up again-lol! lovely poem Ann-would,nt dare ask you to include 'brown' at the beginning of the last line..hee hee! my day was spent in Benllech bay on the Island of Anglesey-boy I love that place! I found that giving the seagulls the 'death stare' keeps em off yer cornetto! lots of apostrophes! today!-best regards lovely Lady!! Stef!!xx!!(G-xx!!)
Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Fri 17th Sep 2010 21:33
Lovely poem, Dave, enjoyed this.
Comment is about How To Mend A Broken Heart (blog)
Original item by Dave Dunn
Fri 17th Sep 2010 18:52
I think I'm feeling a little too Fragile for these silly comments - but I'll Relay them to someone who's a little Closer to the Edge.
Yes - a great band in their day but IMHO had done their best stuff by Fragile - CloseTTE had good parts but was defo getting a bit pompous by then. Call it Fate - call it Synchronicity, call it Cobblers - but Fragile is on my deck right now - one of my favouritest albums ever. Saw them twice at the Apollo.
In your case, did you ever like Focus as well then ? - still my all-time favourite band: I play one or the other or both almost every day - sad, isn't it - but for me, music never really got any better - although I do like all sorts of other stuff as well, these are at the top of tree. xx
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 18:45
I think I'm feeling a little too Fragile for these silly comments - but I'll Relay them to someone who's a little Closer to the Edge
Comment is about passengers (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Fri 17th Sep 2010 16:49
With Sade and lakes of beer, maybe? Lol xxxx
Fri 17th Sep 2010 16:48
Nice work Ann. There are some good words and images here. Love the Labrador nosing towards America (could have been Labrador though), the black castanets is good, the seals head rock, absolutely great. I found myself thinking of a Van Morrison song "Coney Island" when I was reading it.
Fri 17th Sep 2010 14:11
Yes! Are they in there too? I'll be Your Roundabout etc - I LOVE Yes!
Fri 17th Sep 2010 14:03
I used to have an imaginary Paul McCartney - he was only about an inch tall. I don't remember what I did with him though!
Comment is about Imaginary Friends (blog)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 14:00
God Larissa - you are a genius! And in a language that is not your first one too! I can never think of things like that! (or that that!) xx
Comment is about a complex complex complex complex (blog)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 13:29
Would agree with Cate - love the pathos of the £5.90 an hour closure on it. I share the same niece - there are some funny stories to tell also - like the full term baby she delivered to a couple who had no idea they were expecting... perhaps she suffered extreme constipation/diarrhoea/indegestion/near death experience on a more regular basis than most of us!
Comment is about Ambulance Meditations (blog)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 12:49
Thanks Thom, much appreciated.
As to the meaning - I asked a (very bright, highly literary) friend to read it and asked her if she got the meaning, she said 'I'm not sure; it could be a steamy but illicit romance, or possibly your recent visit to the dentist'.
Take your pick :)
Comment is about Tom (Poet profile)
Original item by Tom
Fri 17th Sep 2010 12:33
Very graphic and well written David. My niece is a paramedic so I know this just about sums it up pretty well.
Fri 17th Sep 2010 12:13
Heh - I specialise in holding contradictory opinions, so this is right up my street.
I like how it could be read as the 'code' that people use when they talk to each other, but also as one person actually holding those opposite ideas/opinions, at the same time and/or at different times.
(would add something smart-arse but Rachel beat me to it. Grr)
Comment is about Double talk (blog)
Original item by Antonionioni
Fri 17th Sep 2010 11:48
'I dream of crawling
Ten miles with toothache
To have my balls removed'
That made me laugh out loud - in work! :D
And 'I rewind' - god, we've all been there. Quality!
Comment is about Fun and games (blog)
Original item by mike watts
Fri 17th Sep 2010 11:11
It's not really a case of being embarrassed-just a bit tentative. Anyway, it's done now.
Comment is about Gill Lambert (Poet profile)
Original item by Gill Lambert
Fri 17th Sep 2010 09:17
You hold nothing back and keep it straight and hard.
Keep 'em coming.
Comment is about mike watts (Poet profile)
Fri 17th Sep 2010 09:09
a shit poem that wasn't shit!
Raw and vicious.
Fri 17th Sep 2010 07:26
Dear Cynthia, thank you for your encouraging comments, it was a bit of a bad experience to be honest, but I sit on the fence really, I don't think you need to go to church to have faith anyway :)x
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 17th Sep 2010 06:39
hey john...abdul was rather disapointed today to discover that you are 'man' and either potentially my boyfriend or an unsuitable match for him. in my feeble attempts to invite him to wigan, where you could meet him and do me a big favour of interpreting for me, i think i managed to convince him that you are in love with him and would like to make beautiful poetry with him :) please provide appropriate turkish phrase that means stuff john, stuff poetry,stuff wigan, stuff conversation, lets go back to my place and fuck while the weathers good :)
oh and what is turkish for 'unlimited free car wash' just so he understands the transaction. ;)
Comment is about John Darwin (Poet profile)
Original item by John Darwin
Marianne Louise Daniels
Fri 17th Sep 2010 05:59
i watched a documentary about 9/11. it was made up of amateur footage from various different angles and distance and in every image, the office paper seemed to take a haunted presence; pirouhetting desperately through the air and swamping the ground. these images were accompanied by some of the firefighter, policemen, paramedics etc radio exchanges. I got lost in all the paper.
I shall think over the aliteration. thanks for considered comment. take care.
Comment is about Where The Paper Falls. (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
Thu 16th Sep 2010 23:14
That would be before they are all splinted and broken of course... x
Comment is about Banksy (Poet profile)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 23:04
Yep - I'm sticking with my interpretation thank you very much. And Ray - I wouldn't say that your Heavy Make-Up poem was the easiest to follow LOL xx
Comment is about Bite the Bullet (blog)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 23:03
Brilliant, Larisa & it makes perfect sense as well.
I'm not quite so sure about Tommy's - any ideas?
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:59
"A few comments i get on here seem to be of the vein that sometimes my poetry is not that easy to follow, and i could go arund the houses abit". Run that by me again.
Did you know that that that that that boy used was incorrect? lol
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:57
Gus you are incorrigable - but very funny! I happen to be very glad that Alan Gray turns up to most venues - not many poets know how to give all round entertainment and there are only so many long dirges that any audience can be expected to sit through.
That isn't to criticise this poem at all Jefferama. A trip down memory lane often makes you grateful for just what you've achieved... We used to have a plastic gold Tuthankamun bust type picture (in 3 D) over our chimney breast. My family have always been a little odd. My mum painted the stripes in alternate blue and gold - just to be authentic... It sat upon shiny lime green wall paper - blackened by the smoky fire - it was a delight to behold. Never had any peacocks but we did have ducks and geese that were slaughtered for dinner on a regular basis. It never did me any harm...
Comment is about Way Back When (blog)
Original item by Jeffarama!
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:56
"passengers" - Yes, well spotted, that's dear ole Gordon & Yes, also - a great description of his "managing" the economy :)
you win a biscuit of your choice - maybe a fig roll? or a kitkat?
BTW - do you know the diffrunce between a northern lass and a kitkat??
Yep - you only get four fingers in a kitkat
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:53
and I violently hate going to the dentist!!!
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:52
Yes, well spotted, that's dear ole Gordon & Yes, also - a great description of his "managing" the economy :)
hee hee, I guess I am kind of taking the mickey out of myself. A few comments i get on here seem to be of the vein that sometimes my poetry is not that easy to follow, and i could go arund the houses abit. Bite the bullet so to speak is get to the point, so it is the tooth that packs the gun but the bullet has become hard to find, hence the little silver fillings. The salad referencing word salads, tossed in the air in every direction and quite hard to put them together without a good dressing (does this make sense, i am very tired...ha! i infuriate myself sometimes...) but yeah, i am also like the idea of challenging violence with my poetry.
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:44
I didn't really think about whether Spartacus was or wasn't a cliche. I wrote it quickly and just wanted something that expressed immense power and liberation. I loved the Gladiator film - think it's the only one I've seen where I actually found that Ozzie actor attractive. Maybe I'm born into the wrong era - I should be a blood smeared warrior or a mad Bodicea...
Deletion is empowering for all of 5 minutes. I imagine that is why lots of poets remove themselves from WOL. That is one step too far for me. Email is one thing, WOL another - think I'm bedded down here for good now - no matter how many clangers I drop or how many are dropped on me. Thanks for your comments. xx
Comment is about Deletion (blog)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:39
it it it it it!
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:38
Yep - that's funny - and you could imagine that happening in English down in those uncivilised Southern realms.Is that Gordon Brown sat on the right hand side? And was he the one speaking Maori? Perhaps he was talking about the economy...
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:33
Holidays can be exhausting - can't they? You should try it with a young pack in tow - it takes it all to a new level. Nice one. x
Comment is about Holiday (or – stop moaning ya daft bugger and get on wi' it) (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:31
Your poetry is never an easy read Marianne - but you give us plenty of fodder to chew over.
I'm guessing that Mr Incisor is the aggressive one - the tooth that might just pack a gun - a gun filled with lead rather than filling. The salad is a little herbacious for the carniverous blood thirsty canine so you are challenging violence with your poetry? If I'm anywhere near warm, I love the thought process.
Thank you dear Lynn for the comment on "Her Name Was Love". I respect and value your comments. They really help me and inspire. Every time I reread my poem I make some changes. I think today I made about 20 corrections in this poem. When nobody writes the comments I lose interest to this or other poem and don't look at it anymore. I think it happens with everyone. So, I would like to tell you once more: Thank you so much! With love and warmest wishes, Larisa
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:12
This is such a lovely poem, Larisa. You have great imagination, as well as the gift to write it. Love, Lynn xx
Comment is about Her Name Was Love (blog)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:09
ok Lynn...just turn the cold tap on...hee hee-ta chuck-Stef-xx(B-xx)
Comment is about Undaunted! (blog)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:03
AWWW! up norf Benji would be a 'right little puddin'....nice enough to eat!(metaphorically of course!)lotsa love to him'n'all-Stef-xx(B-xx)
Comment is about My Walkies! (blog)
Thu 16th Sep 2010 22:02
Graphic, very graphic - I feel for you...
I once had constipation which was pretty dire... Twas after an operation - never experienced anything like it before - I just felt like curling up and dying. You express the agony of bowel problems very well. x
Thu 16th Sep 2010 21:54
Hi Cyn - "black eyed susan" - maybe have another look, if you feel like it ?
Thu 16th Sep 2010 21:36
Really love the first part... I think you could have ended it there though.
It flows really well with the rhyming couplets too.
Thu 16th Sep 2010 21:33
OK - I'll give you a clue - black eyed susan is slang for a pistol - a six-gun - and if you read line eight and the last line ?
Comment is about black eyed susan (blog)
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Thu 16th Sep 2010 21:04
I think this poem is really good. It punches hard with clear, powerful images and cutting comments across a wide range. The 'chorus' effect of a typical 'religious rally' is emotionally excellent, as is the personal touch of 'the old lady' and her virulent opinion expressed so self-righteously. Surely you know what you speak of here; but I also really hope you may have other faith-related experiences. I thought your 'respect' for the congregation was very heartwarming, and calling them again 'your flock of sheep' insightfully clever.
Comment is about Jesus (blog)
Original item by Jacqueline King
Thu 16th Sep 2010 20:51
A deliberate cliche is a well-accepted poetry ploy, the more widely known the cliche the better. I really like your novel imagery with the 'egg' that can fling off into all kinds of ideas. An explosion of freedom much appreciated for its wit and its message.
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