Sat 5th Feb 2011 20:09
Tight, grey, fearful - all words not used but somehow summoned up by this poem, which manages to be both clever and a cry from the heart
Comment is about loneliness (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sat 5th Feb 2011 19:29
These words for me go really well with the pic Ann. A stone blanket. This would als be a suitable and interesting topic for a ghazal. Win x
Sat 5th Feb 2011 19:16
FB is Facebook - as if you didn't know....
You should try to make it to the Tudor again. Failing that I may venture up to Preston again - though I'd have to make sure I got there early! Hope you are ok. Izz xx
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Sat 5th Feb 2011 18:51
Ta very much.
BTW - the one about burning rubber - that's true, that is
Comment is about close to the edge (blog)
Original item by Banksy
Sat 5th Feb 2011 17:28
Interesting idea - loneliness as protective. I think familiar states can be comforting, when the alternative's scarey.
Sat 5th Feb 2011 16:18
What's FB? and yes, get back soon. Hope your psyche spring clean produces more fab poetry.
Sat 5th Feb 2011 16:05
The Eyeful Tear
Epitome of Gallic phallic.
Comment is about Come on in and have some fun! (article)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 15:51
Good to hear from you - I hope things are well with you. I haven't been around much of late; I am getting to grips with a new job, which doesn't leave me too much spare time unfortunately. I haven't lost interest and I've looked in (without logging in) from time to time, although only to read. As usual I see the great eclectic mix that is the world of WOL! I have a few bits of nonsense on the backburner somewhere - well, mainly in this addled noggin of mine if I'm truly honest. They're in there somewhere - it's the surgical removal that's the problem! I hope to be able to contribute again soon - watch that space. Class you said? Would that be the remedial one?
Take care and best regards,
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Sat 5th Feb 2011 11:12
Comment is about Philipos (poet profile)
Original item by Philipos
Sat 5th Feb 2011 11:11
Hi Dave, oh you flatterer! :)
Not writing much of any quality right now,seem to be stuck on a bit of psyche spring cleaning which is about as interesting to anyone but me as collating margarine tubs.
back soon, when I seasonally adjust :)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 11:09
I've not been on here because my head is up me arse again and I can (just about) cope with the level of vacuousness FB provides. Hope you're well, speak soon...we should meet up. I need some entertainment!
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Sat 5th Feb 2011 10:11
I think this is great! I love the "there was never any truth in that" line. x
Comment is about Plotinus and the Gnostics (blog)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 10:10
Hi Ann - thanks for your comments on Trio - ashes eh? The Royle Family Christmas programme was all centred around that subject this year don't know if you saw it - but amid the humour that comes from tragedy there was a positive message that eventually it is time to scatter the remains - which is a kind of letting go - as one famous poet said, 'it is only by letting go that we get them back' glad this poem resonated x
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 10:08
(Hi - I just moved this comment from the end of your Trio poem as it's a bit personal to go on there as a comment.) I like this Philipos. The tree caught my attention in the first verse. My dad left his body for medical research. After they'd finished with it (it takes about two years) they asked my stepmother what did she want done with his ashes. She never asked me or told me about it. A year or so later I found out that they'd been scattered around a tree in a cemetery in London. She hadn't wanted the ashes and so this scattering happens automatically. The tree had a number and I could go and visit it. I might this year. I know ashes are only what's left of the physical person, but I still have my partner's ashes. Until I was in this situation I could never understand why people kept them. But somehow it seems cruel to just let go of them. But maybe one day I will be able to. Sorry, this has nothing to do with your poem but it just struck this particular chord with me. xx
Sat 5th Feb 2011 10:03
Carolyn. Thanks for your comments on this and Kosher. It would certainly be more symmetrically pleasing with 8 or 10 verses. It's a poem I like. I'd like it better if it hadn't gone gradually from non-rhyme to rhyme in its course. Funny that. If I'd done it in reverse I could claim to be aping the band'd pretensions. But no.
Sat 5th Feb 2011 09:24
Thankyou Elaine, much appreciated.
Comment is about Elaine (poet profile)
Original item by Elaine
Sat 5th Feb 2011 08:47
This was written on 1.2.2011 and published in The Wear Valley Mercury on 4.2.2011. It is about me moving house, but it is a little deeper than that. I love the word cleansing.
Comment is about Keep On Moving (blog)
Original item by Jules Clare
Sat 5th Feb 2011 08:17
Yes, thank you Thom and very well done to Anna.
Comment is about Childhood Competition - And The Winner Is... (blog)
Original item by Tom
Sat 5th Feb 2011 08:13
I like this Philipos. The tree caught my attention in the first verse. The whole thing struck a chord with me. x
Comment is about Trio. (blog)
Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Sat 5th Feb 2011 07:48
thanks for the encouragement Elaine.x
Comment is about too much for granted (blog)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 00:30
Really enjoyed this. Especially the rhymes, which are very clever. I liked the refrain and its repetition. The whole poem has rhythm and beat. Excellent
Comment is about Kosher (blog)
Sat 5th Feb 2011 00:19
I really enjoyed this poem, it's very nostalgic and I thought the repetition of the line, 'There was never any truth in that!' really worked. However with nine stanzas, it doesn't scan perhaps as well as it would have done if there had been eight or ten. Great poetry
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:46
Hmmm... Can you say paranoid?
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:27
Deep sadness hidden under the deceptive light touch. Well put, Stefan.
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:20
Ann, love this haiku, very amusing and good fun! x
Comment is about why do bananas (blog)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:06
hee hee have to say i'm chuffed despite telling myself mine wasn't half as good as the others!!
Thanks to all of you who voted for my poem and congratulations to Anna.
Well done to everyone involved :-))
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:03
Thank you re 'my childhood rainbow'.
Glad to see it making an impression.x
Comment is about Tom (poet profile)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 21:00
Laura, thanks so much for your comments on my latest offering. Real lol on the born agains observation!!! As you know, so many,many thanks to you - you are pure inspiration. xxx
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:57
I know someone like that as well - high on the scale of pessimism - down to the smelling of smoke leading to scans etc - trouble is they're real events in their mind and nowt will convince them otherwise - well written piece this
Dave, many thanks for your comments on my latest blog. Very much appreciate your support. x
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:41
Areet - well, the original was a lot different, but had similar ideas. Baptism was born from that, then Crucifixion. Sounds a bit wanky that dunnit? ;D
And salt being used to wash blood out of clothes is why I included it in the first place :) Women who bleed usually (in my experience) know how to best get the stain out
Cheers ears :)
Comment is about Banksy (poet profile)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:28
I think 'PHWOARR' sums up my feelings on home-grown, roasted tomatoes. Roasted with garlic..in its skin...mmmMMMM :D
Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)
Original item by John Aikman
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:23
Yup, salt - all of those things :) I love how you pick up on all that - but salt has always removed stains...in a real physical sense. Unless it's mixed with hot water, of course ;D
Good to see you back btw.
Thank you for your considered comments - very much appreciated
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:18
It was most definitely home made passata...we even have a tomato press...and an allotment filled with, mostly, tomatoes...and my roasted veggies are legendary.
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:13
BTW - I think you are right about not being too precious. I have had some of the best feedback for poems which I thought barely worthwhile posting... and yet, when I re-read them I could see what it was that others had liked. B
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:09
just at the moment there seems to be quite a few good poems on WOL but I really loved yours - first rate. B
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:06
No, I've not kept up with the discussions tbh...they're usually so slow moving I only check in once a week, if that.
Anyway, loved bums and peas :D
Fri 4th Feb 2011 20:04
Home-made passata? Did you roast the tomatoes? mmMMM :D
Glad you put it up John - it's a celebration of love
Comment is about Love is a Stranger (blog)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 19:41
Thank you for all the kind comments. I posted this twice before and then removed it instantly because I thought it was too cliche driven...maybe I've learned through the feedback that I shouldn't be so precious?
Also, I've just edited it....it was 'passata', not 'pasta' that lead to love on the kitchen floor. Home-made passata at that!
Fri 4th Feb 2011 19:24
Félicitations à tout le monde !
Yes, the themed poetry competitions are interesting and fun!
Merci Thom : )
Fri 4th Feb 2011 19:10
thanks for the votes for the joint 3rd ..well done Coey. Anna and Kath congrats. I found the poem my childhood rainbow particularly moving and beautifully written.
Fri 4th Feb 2011 19:03
How true! Poignant and yet life-affirming! Or should I say love-affirming! x
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:55
What do you get when you mix cliches with rhymes, John? Crimes. Or sometimes riches. As in this case.I liked the purse and pockets stanza. Been there and done that.
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:46
Cynthia thank you very much for your suggestions - I agree a little tweaking would not go amiss and have done so to some improvement I think x
Thank you for your feedback on my last Blog. I was wary of posting it 'cos I thought the whole vibe was a bit of a cliche...and you know how much trouble I've got into criticising other folk's cliches.
If I have succeeded in adding a little moisture to that withered piece of desiccated jerky you call your heart...then my job here is done!
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:40
Thank you Greg - your comments are always much appreciated - some sa ones in the pipeline too
Cynthia - thank you for your suggestions too - I agree a little tweaking would not go amiss and have done so to improve it I think
Comment is about Moods. (blog)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:37
Comment is about Hampstead Heath (blog)
Original item by Dali
Glad you liked 'Love is...' I actually blogged it twice before and then instantly deleted it because I felt it was so cliched...and you know how much trouble I've got into here by criticising cliches. :-)
Dealing with cliche minefields like 'love', 'the moon', 'shagging' etc. is almost the point of poetry...how to say it again, but differently. That's poetry.
Thanks for the lovely feedback.
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:35
Thanks for your comments on the Gnostics poem, Jules. Do I remember Jilted John? I'll say.One of my favourite songs and I'm a big fan of John Shuttleworth. In fact, I play bridge with his sister. There's posh!
Comment is about Jules Clare (poet profile)
Fri 4th Feb 2011 18:34
I love this - I dont think I've said that about many of yours, but this feels like you poured your heart & soul into it. Brought a little sniffle to this cynical old heart :)
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