Sat 27th Mar 2010 13:30
Yes, me too.
I love visiting places such as this.
A very 'atmospheric' poem.
Comment is about Pompeii (blog)
Original item by Dave Carr
Sat 27th Mar 2010 13:11
this reads like you been cracking too many fortune cookies. :-)
or could it be your modern take on Solomon Grundy?
An easy read and very enjoyable pace.
Comment is about Paper (blog)
Original item by John Togher
Sat 27th Mar 2010 12:59
Agreed. There is something quite eerie about the ruins of Heculaneum and Pompeii. Even in the boiling sun surrounded by tourists, you can still feel the terror and shock they must have felt as their world disappeared around them. The double meaning of the last two lines is both clever and haunting.Cate xx
Sat 27th Mar 2010 12:16
Yep, drones are boy bees. This is the boy bees love song to his queen you muppet! ;-)xxxxx
Comment is about the drone's lovesong (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sat 27th Mar 2010 10:18
Whatya tryin to say Simon...
I'm just big boned
Great poem loved it!!
Comment is about All The Pies (blog)
Original item by Simon Rennie
Sat 27th Mar 2010 10:15
Sorry to drone on but they are boy bees are they not? Of course in these enlightened days nothing stopping him being a Queen...
Sat 27th Mar 2010 09:53
Agree with Isobel's comments, and I, too, have a fascination with the place.
Have you read Robert Harris' 'Pompeii'? I would definitely recommend it.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:54
Dear Ms Foxglove, I'd like to invite you to a Mass Euclidian Moony Wedding, Yours in anticipation, Diana. x
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:52
A mind is a series of points of view shoved out of the mouth/dispersed by a number of gestures. What's not to like? You have such an ease with language it's loveable.
Comment is about Isobel (Poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:50
I did keep bees for a while. Got stung too. Poor little bee came off worse than me. I remember the first time I got stung I realised I was in the middle of nowhere, no one around and it suddenly struck me "I wonder if I'm alergic to bee stings?" But I wasn't!
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:45
Hope your colony doesn't collapse.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:21
I take it you have never been stung then? Honey again....you must like it a lot.
'somnolent with pleasure' - I like that expression.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:17
Love this one Dave. You are proving yourself a very versatile poet. I visited Pompeii many years ago - it is a fascinating place - and Heculaneum.
There are so many wonderful touches in this poem. The fact that we could be so immortalised in death - the play on the word petrified is superb.
The eery sadness that underlines the matter of fact expression. I love it.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 08:13
I see your point now. Yes - picking on something totally unrelated would kind of prick the bubble of the whole thing.
I remember a teacher once asking the class what was attractive in the opposite sex. When I ventured 'nice teeth', everyone laughed but I was being serious...
I don't think he appreciated it for some reason - perhaps his were on the way out.
Comment is about spelling . . . . (blog)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 07:58
I think you are misreading the banter between TC and me, Rachel. He is my bro - we insult each other all the time! That's the problem with flat mediums - as Chris says! I'll introduce you if you ever co-incide at the Tudor - you can clock him one from me! LOL
On the other hand I am now wondering if you were joking with your comment Rachel- you did post it at 1.30am - had you had a few? LOL xx
Comment is about Beautiful Minds (blog)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 07:37
I've never swum with dolphins
Except in my imagination.
I did once swim with crabs against
My doctor's recommendation.
Comment is about Brrrh! (blog)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 06:11
Guess my poem is on the opposite subject Isobel! xx
Sat 27th Mar 2010 06:06
Thanks for comments on Spelling. . . I guess the spelling issue was supposed to imply a more general lack of communication between two people, not on the same wavelength type of thing, maybe if you were trying to distance yourself from someone you're attracted to. But I'm not very good at spelling anyway! And I agree you wouldn't fall for someone cos they were a good speller! But that's the point of the poem maybe? And it's based on someone I know. xx
Sat 27th Mar 2010 06:04
Um. I guess the spelling issue was supposed to imply a more general lack of communication between two people, not on the same wavelength type of thing, maybe if you were trying to distance yourself from someone you're attracted to. But I'm not very good at spelling anyway! And I agree you wouldn't fall for someone cos they were a good speller! But that's the point of the poem maybe?
Sat 27th Mar 2010 01:39
i want to say again that this is a trulely beautiful poem and i personally am not into negative criticism from any kind of man about a poem as sensitive and brave as this one. I am not amused.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 01:08
Missed you too. Been a funny time for me of late - not funny ha-ha. My comment wasn't meant to be cryptic. What I meant was that it was about time you allowed others a chance to reward your talent and be suitably WOLOPed. Like your latest too - although I'm not going to say why publicly for fear it gets me into trouble - as usual. Beautiful minds are rare, whether male or female. Beautiful words it seems these days, rarer still.
Sat 27th Mar 2010 00:59
Noticed this earlier on f/b - it's a lovely study - does it make sense if I say it has the quality of a painting about it? - not sure that it does .... perhaps 'evokes'? Anyway - I know what I mean!
Comment is about Go Hug Grandad (blog)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 00:56
Thanks for your comments on my 'War' poem Simon .... my first ever Siren comment! And I'm enormously flattered to be even mentioned in the same breath as Auden - made my day.
Comment is about Simon Rennie (Poet profile)
Sat 27th Mar 2010 00:53
Thank-you Cynthia for your comments on my 'War' poem, I'm glad you liked it. You always give such good feedback and your comments really mean a lot to me.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (Poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sat 27th Mar 2010 00:39
You know I do, and didn't say it was not funny, still..... it is really an exceptionally beautiful poem. XX
Fri 26th Mar 2010 23:55
Well Ann - I must confess that spelling has never drawn or repelled me from a man so that is a new one on me! I guess that some level of literacy is nice to have though, especially if you are of a poetic disposition. Just so long as he knows how to use his dictionary...
Fri 26th Mar 2010 23:46
Sod of off with your Worst Poem of the Month TC! I thought you had a similar sense of humour?
Ann - is eating a honey sandwich nach a euphemism for something? It sounds pretty gross to me - I've never liked honey much - if only I did...
I don't think I've ever managed to laugh a man into bed - maybe I could laugh one out?
I think the observations we have all made are fascinating. I find the differences between the sexes immense in so many areas.
If a man can make you laugh it is a huge attraction for women. Having said that, I'm not sure I could ever have fancied Ken Dodd or the one who told all those horrid mother in law jokes.
The bottom line is that women don't just want brawn. They want the whole package - brain - something they can connect with chemically and a laugh chucked it.
Many men are happy to take a body regardless of what is inside it. They are also happy to leave it when it becomes inconvenient.
My jaundiced view on life of course.
Thanks to all for commenting. xx
Fri 26th Mar 2010 23:39
Thank you for the kind comment on Sculpture Cynthia. The spelling has been corrected!
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:44
Good poem,again Kath,albeit possibly personal.Bloody men eh?
I,m no Saint,and it did take some time for common sense to kick in-thankfully-believe me,in most cases,people who dish cruelty out,get later re-visits of guilt-unless nothing kicks in.If I could go back and tidy up-what a gift that would be-obviously same for lots people-You sound very independant now-best regards-Stefan.
Comment is about New found freedom (blog)
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:41
Hi Lisa ;-) thank you for taking the time to read my works, yes I am inspired by the magical, mistical, the Golden Ratio, the interconnectness of everything, A Universe like a multi dimensional jigsaw puzzle in a cosmic dance, maybe I will get to write a poem about it one day ;-)TC XX
Comment is about Lisa Milligan (Poet profile)
Original item by Lisa Milligan
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:30
I agree with many of the others it is a beautiful poem, with a naff last line, in which I percieve the hand of deliberate mischief making !! I should know, I have witnessed it's scribing's in prior times. I am going to make a new award... WPOM 'Worst Poem of the Month' and nominate you in 'Poetic Juctice' ha ha for your naughtiness ha ha Much love TC XX
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:06
Hey up 'Gladders! wherfore art thou-get thy blogs blogging-pretty
Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (Poet profile)
Original item by Rachel McGladdery
Fri 26th Mar 2010 22:01
Good evening Jean Lucy Thompson-wow! what a title! are you blue blooded or are you just cold-ha! thanks a lot re'Spoofer'-perhaps not as good as Avatar!and you get popcorn with that-unless with the 3D glasses on,you can,t see properly,and spill it all over the floor! i,ll skip any further more comment-might lose a new friend-only joshing! lots of love and thanks-Stefan-x
Comment is about Mel Brooks-eatcha spoofin' heart out (blog)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
jean lucy thompson
Fri 26th Mar 2010 21:26
Well I wont say play it again cos I was wonderin if there was an end to it Hehe good though all the same I must concede to admit that you managed to actually make me titter
Fri 26th Mar 2010 21:03
the dolphins said
to ride a wave
was much more fun
when done with Dave!
the dolphins said
to please come back
it's more fun when
you're on their back!
Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:59
Or a just a little bit misguided? Or too romantic for her own good? Or just plain daft!! (The latter I suspect!)
Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:46
I completely agree with this statement Isobel, in fact I just recently said this to a very special friend of mine.
'I would say that on the whole, the beautiful mind is far more important to a woman than it is to a man.'
I agree with you about the laughter too ; )
Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:34
A tortured soul.
Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:15
Just posted my take on the same subject. "Spelling . . "
Fri 26th Mar 2010 20:14
My answer to Isobel's poem perhaps?
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:44
Thank you for your comments on "Bye Mommy". I was very focused on the structure because what I wish I could do is be a songwriter and I wrote this as lyrics - but I barely have any original music in my head, so the way I wrote it was to a vague tune I could hear. I think if it ever were a song, it would be more concise if a young man and an older woman sang the different verses, which of course would probably mean a major rewrite. But I don't have any musicians knocking down my door, so I'm probably safe on that one!
Comment is about Dave Bradley (Poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:39
Cheers Simon re 'Unfailing'That I should remind you of the fantastic Mr, Hopkins! wow! what a compliment indeed! thank you Sir-Stefan.
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:27
Just eating my dinner (a honey sandwich natch!) when I thought - a man is often said to be able to laugh a woman into bed. Does it work the other way round? Just going back to the attraction thingy (which I WISH I understood!!!)
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:04
Dunno Graham - the words just dripped off my honeyed tongue ;-)!
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:02
How can you be thinking of this stuff at 6pm on a friday night?? Acacia yeeeeesssssss!
Fri 26th Mar 2010 19:00
I don't think we can ever be "wrong" with our own poems Isobel. Do what you want to do. Go girl! xx
Sorry, crumpled paper bag of pears is a super line.
Comment is about Life's Spark (blog)
Original item by Augusta Darling
Fri 26th Mar 2010 18:54
I agree with everything you say about humanity Chris. However, I do think that very many people in this world are sad because they are alone and cannot find that mate in body and soul for whatever reason. In that respect animals have one up on us - though I wouldn't want to have the attendant lack of consciousness.
I am not at all offended by your comments. I have been very frank about your poetry and appreciate honesty so long as its sole intent is not to insult.
In order for that last line to cause any kind of reaction comical or otherwise, the rest of the poem had to be authentic - and I guess to me it was. Those are characteristics that I look for in a friend or partner.
Was I wrong to be flippant at the end? Was I wrong to seek to entertain? That is a matter of individual opinion. I am glad that the poem has made us both think at any rate. xx
Fri 26th Mar 2010 18:38
Apart from the obvious pathos of this piece, eloquently by other already,can I just say that there is nothing funny about distended scrotums. You girls have wonderbras and all that stuff. Us chaps just have bruised knees!
Fri 26th Mar 2010 18:06
I think this is marvellous, Ray, high-spirited and exhilarating! Greg
Comment is about Unexpected Steps (blog)
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