Tue 1st Jun 2010 22:14
Hi Anthony, yes, I'm enjoying WOL very much, thanks. I'm glad you liked "I thought of you". Racy? ha ha, well just a bit...!
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (Poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:17
What - no spotted dick? x
Comment is about Pandora's Box - Review (Blog entry)
Original item by Isobel
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:12
...or a slice of that humble pie?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:11
I lived in Antwerp for a while - no-body (that I knew) drank Stella ...Cristal Alken, met Belga, alst-du-blieft! ... but of course I've given all that up now.
Comment is about Stella, you're a star (Blog entry)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 21:02
And there was me, thinking this was about some woman - there is a Stella on the Liverpool poetry circuit...
My daughter has those glasses - they came with a pink feather bower...
Hello Ann. Glad you liked Brown Study. I should imagine there's too many people on WOL for a similar exercise to be successful.I'm not in touch with that poet any more. Her name is Suzanne and she lives in Finland. Not much help really is it!
Comment is about Ann Foxglove (Poet profile)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Tue 1st Jun 2010 20:45
the return of the baxter! Blimely - beginning to think you had retired from here.. Welcome back!
Interesting piece! One to think about somewhat but nice one! x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:55
Thanks for taking the time to read "Visiting Neil" and Neil's story. I realise that it can never be writing that you can say you "enjoy" reading - that's not the right word. But, if it moved you in some way, then that was entirely my intention. I hope you are enjoying your introduction to WOL - there's certainly plenty to read - and people to meet.
p.s. Your "I Thought of You" is a little bit racy I think? Liked it though!
Comment is about Lynn Dye (Poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:32
Cruyff on a bike, Antonionioni!
Comment is about One Nil (Blog entry)
Original item by Nash
Tue 1st Jun 2010 19:17
Cringing! Did you say cringing? How very dare you, I've never been so affronted. (Reminds me - must get out more!)
Great fun, good banter lots of people talking and commenting with each other, studying things perhaps in a little more detail, the chance to compare the merits of different approaches and individual styles, dropping in on poets you might not otherwise see, no fisticuffs on the discussions, (for ages - you lot all wimped out?) peace, love and harmony. The Woodstock of the world of WOL (without the drugs - unfortunately - or the "FREE LOVE" come to think of it . . . )
And I almost forgot, some interesting and surprising poems. Well done all.
Are we formally requesting that Isobel sets another "theme" for the month? Raise your right hands . . .
Regards (and thanks to I & F xx)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 17:12
not just you was taken in,
with lie to my face to hide their sin.
as if I would as if I could
invite you here and use you so
we'll kiss and cuddle when you go
you will be fooled and look so stupid
whilst I with fatso give thanks to cupid
no one will beleive you anyway
it doesnt matter what you say
you silly blind deaf aging fool
an alibi a complying tool.
Comment is about They told me I was paranoid (Blog entry)
Original item by Richard Seddon
Tue 1st Jun 2010 16:31
True, true. I'll give it an edit :).
Comment is about Red (Blog entry)
Original item by Max Wallis
Tue 1st Jun 2010 16:22
Trouble with republicans is that it means one thing over here and another over there. Summat to bear in mind when you try to conquer the States.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:50
Ray - I think you might be right about the nee-norrs although when I read it out loud there's a long emphasis on the 'nee-norrr' so it's not as obvious.
I quite like the republicans comment purely as a throw-away statement: juxtaposing the roses and socialism - but again you might be right. I think I might perform it tonight and see what happens.
Isobel - thank you so much! :)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:47
I liked this, it doesn't mess about. By capitalising GORE you've got me thinking, Al Gore, Gore Vidal,at first, so not sure about that.This bit's very good:
It’s all the different types of blood
we’re not allowed to give.
Are dog-litter bins red? Depends where you live I suppose. Think you need two nee-norrs. Maybe
"socialism roses and all the guts spilt" -leave out republicans?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:43
I don't like cake - can I have a vol au vent ?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:33
hi both. loved this competition, isobel and francine thanks for taking time to run it.
i was inspired by its title as i do so love the greek myths and although i reference them in my poetry- till now had not thought to write on one story as a theme...my poem just came out with the religious theme, there are many different explorations of this topic one could work with, as weve seen in the poetry produced and its diversity..like opening the box and million ideas fly at you...perhaps we could have a greek myth theme running each month? i say we do the one about saturn eating his children next...nice x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:28
I enjoyed this one - it isn't obvious but there are lots of unusual images that gel together well to paint a picture. For me it is a woman avoiding the issue...
A different situation entirely, but I was recently invited for coffee at the house of a friend, who proceeded to do her ironing and odd jobs whilst talking to me. I shan't go there again!
I particularly liked the 'ubiquity of moss' line.
Comment is about Brown Study (Blog entry)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 15:17
This is a really powerful one Max and one that I can imagine performing well because it is passionate.
Some emotions I can identify with, having once been a teenager and now living with teenagers. Other parts I can only imagine. You have done a great job at expressing the frustration and the rage...x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 14:47
No that wasn't cock, Ray - though I'm always happy to give you my opinion...
Heaven knows what would happen if we tried that on this site! The mind boggles!! I bet I would like the poet's work who you are "spoofing". Are you allowed to tell me who she is?
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:53
Thanks Ann. It's a bit of a spoof, really.I wrote it for a competition on another site, where we all posted poems anonymously and the winner was the one who guessed correctly the most authors. So we ended up pretending to be each other. So I'm consciously emulating another's style. She was thrilled with it!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:44
Best Male Cop Out!I'm assuming cop has been misspelt or misheard. I'm thrilled to bits.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:41
Peter, quite right - but it was the first thing that came to mind...better than the Ronaldinho Flip-Flap!!!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:37
Ann...dreadful! : )
I was only being cheeky, Peter! Thanks, though!
Comment is about TIME OF THE MONTH/FOOTBALL POEM (Blog entry)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:32
just wanted to thank you for commenting agin, though it was a little confusing at first, i got there in the end!! ;-)
Comment is about Andy N (Poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:27
I love the way you described me!
Gotta say - I would have hated to have to choose a outright winner from this lot as there was tons off excellent, first rate pieces.. Well done everybody!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:12
Wasn't having a go mate. I just came over a bit Spinal Tap there. It is a witty poem. I liked it.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 13:11
The Cruyff turn did not need to be expressed in haiku form. It was pure poetry in itself. It had never been seen before. Beautiful. When I try one I often end up on my arse.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 12:54
Most Hopeless eh? Can't argue with that! :-)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 12:42
Hello! Just stumbled onto your profile, love the War to the Assylum poem, I'll have to keep an eye open for more of your stuff!
Comment is about Citizen 67 (Poet profile)
Original item by Citizen 67
Tue 1st Jun 2010 11:21
I love this Ray. It seems to be about something or someone in particular, and so remains a mystery to me, but I like mysteries and the language is great. I love the last verse especially.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 11:18
Oh Cruyffs, that's that dog show isn't it? Maybe you should embrace the springer? hehe x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 11:16
Hey Anthony - did you mean a tampax? ;-)
Tue 1st Jun 2010 11:12
Shoeless, AE & Peter - er, what? Not sure, lukewarm is the best thing anyone's ever said, but I'll take it on board. Cheers, chaps!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 10:07
Francine and Isobel I think you've got this just right.
After all, perhaps going for an outright winner would just open up a can of worms (or should that be pandora's box) some hopes!!
Tue 1st Jun 2010 09:14
Hi Andy, thank you so much for your kind comments on "I thought of you". I'm glad you enjoyed it, and am considering your advice.
Just been reading your samples and can honestly say I love them all, especially "Perfect Place"
Tue 1st Jun 2010 09:03
Wow, you've worked hard! My only wish is that Hatta had entered! I'm sure her take on Pandora would have been truly incredible! x
Tue 1st Jun 2010 08:30
Hi again, Anthony. Just been reading the story of Neil Moss, and I found your poem beautiful. Moved me to tears. Thanks.
Tue 1st Jun 2010 08:17
really enjoyed Liam, must admit but i did find some of your line endings a little curious and also the use of the third line which possibly isn't needed as if you delete that, and then jump into a new stanza.
Sweet, ephemeral light is lovely too..
Comment is about In The Course of Time (Blog entry)
Original item by Liam Jones
Tue 1st Jun 2010 08:13
for a short piece, kath.. i think this does carry some impact. would like to move wrote like this.. keep em coming! x
Comment is about Just a note (Blog entry)
Original item by Kath Hewitt
Tue 1st Jun 2010 08:11
This has a real song like quality to it, Lynn which makes it really easy to enjoy and love.If I am honest, I am not wild on the use of your last line even though it starts your piece off. I would perhaps even remove it totally or put something else after it like slightly re-writing Stefan's favourite line:
'I thought of you again today
It made me shiver in the heat'
Either way, I enjoyed reading this a lot x
Comment is about I Thought Of You (Blog entry)
Mon 31st May 2010 23:00
Hi again Stefan, thanks for your kind comments. Particularly love A Building of Togetherness. Warm regards Lynn x
Comment is about Patricia and Stefan Wilde (Poet profile)
Original item by Patricia and Stefan Wilde
Mon 31st May 2010 22:49
Hi again Lynn.very romantic! I especially love the lines
'you saw me shiver
in the heat'
Mon 31st May 2010 22:43
Good evening Lynn-thank you very much indeed for comments on 'building-etc' and 'call for awareness'very pleased that you liked them-hope that you are enjoying the wonderful poetry on the blogs today.thanks a lot-Stefan-x
Dave Dunn aka Rhumour
Mon 31st May 2010 22:42
Hi Ann, thanks for commenting upon my sub-aqua fairy tale :) Glad you enjoyed it - best wishes, Dave