Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 15:02

This shows much imagination, clarity of form and well-chosen words to express the mood and the tone. I find the last verse a bit convoluted, not sure which noun goes with which verb. The 'glass' stanza is interesting to denote the passage of time. Am I missing something else intended?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 14:44

The second verse is 'quotable', the highest praise I can give. I'll never forget the first time someone said that to me.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 14:25

You wield a strong pen, Augusta, and you do it with compelling technique. The subject matter is fair game (so to speak) as art imitates life here. In my opinion, this poem addresses a particular which does not connote the general, nor intends to. I think it is unnecessarily biased to have specified 'France' or even Roman Catholicism. Surely it is of greater significance to appreciate such sexual tastes are universal in all social arenas. The last line stings deep, partly because the chosen words are so beautiful in themselves. For me, the issue of celibacy is of no concern in this poem.

In this venue, I think comments should stick entirely to the poetry, and nothing else. Contentious conversations should have a private airing in another place.

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 14:08

to the tune of darkly aging noire
the lamp danced shadows to the wall
as busy as the decor of a welsh woman's flat

all ornament and pottery and floral thing and tat
in all its ugly gordiness the principle still holds
we attach to things precious life like pirates horde gold
when that life is just the memories in the objects that we kept
when we grow old and our footsteps are echoes in the hall
the lamp dances shadows to the wall
that show that time goes by

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 13:56

Stefan, (and Win) you are so right, of course. 'What is poverty?' is likely the biggest question in the world because it transcends just the physical, and must be applied also to the mental, emotional, social and spiritual realms. This poem tried only to use some 'specific' situations to indicate the 'general' in our privileged Western society. I am not the least surprised by your reaction; it was mine too, because I am a global citizen. I am puzzled by the official definition of the 'poverty line' in the UK.

I do have the answering companion piece called 'Joy Is'.

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John Coopey

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 11:25

hello Winston
Yes, thanks for the Ronaldo poem - I don't think I caught it first time round.
The joke went (you've probably heard it) that Real wanted their £80m back when they heard that you could get big girl's blouses in Primark for £2.99.

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ray miller

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 11:22

I thought this were great, especially "this living photo-album" and "the inner shame of the finishing line". I'm just off on a family camping holiday and even now I'm holding on to the vision of that finishing line.

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 10:33

another Great poem Augusta. I don't think I'll get drawn into arguements about paedophilia - done that + got the T-shirt!! ouch ! B

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 10:00

I love this one Dave. It sounds like everyday life in my house - except more often than not the dishwsher goes unstacked and the cup would rather spit at me.I won't comment on the toilet roll overly or it could spiral into another poem. Suffice to say that having lots of females in the house doesn't help.

The poem has a lightness of hand and something in it that anyone could identify with. Love the personification of the cup x

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Greg Freeman

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 09:32

I take my mum home today!

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Alison Smiles

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 09:07

Thank you for your kind comments, much appreciated. Still so new to putting my stuff out there, I anxiously await my babies' acceptance in the wide world!

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Thaumaturgically Charged

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 09:05

German Philospher, I think, therefore I am ;-)
..TC XX

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 08:58

Made me smile! ;-)

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 08:44

I enjoyed this Alison - the structure reflects the reflective mood and the nature of the perplexity. What is life without hope? Very well written.

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 07:56

Loved it, great bit of fun!

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 07:44

Welcome to WOL. I think your poetry is really impressive. I have never studied rhyming schemes etc, but I can see that you are combining complex rhyming with stuff that's happening here and now, and yet it doesn't seem forced in any way. That's pretty clever! Hope you get more feedback on here. Good to see your blogg.

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Ann Foxglove

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 07:38

These are really magical poems. Really lovely. Have a nice day! ;-)

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Isobel

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Mon 5th Apr 2010 00:01

Good evening Augusta,

I seem to recall that when WOL poets came out in force to deride politicians over the expenses scandal, you came out in their defence, saying that many of us would act in the same way, given same set of circumstances – feathering our own nests being a very human failing. In that case, maybe the very many dishonest members of parliament are an accurate reflection of their very dishonest electorate.

I think what rattled you a little was the ‘bandwagon’ effect of the media. Don’t you appreciate that the same thing has happened with the question of paedophilia in the church? I would be the last person to condone anything or anyone that threatened a child – you should know me well enough by now! I think much of what the church has covered up is appalling. Anyone guilty of such crimes should not only be defrocked but castrated to boot and I would happily administer…

I still refuse to believe that these individuals represent a majority. I’m with you on the fact that celibacy in the priesthood is a nonsense. To be honest with you – if a priest did like indulging in the odd bit of S & M – it wouldn’t bother me overly – just so long as it didn’t involve children and was consensual.

It is possible that our two minds won’t meet – not to worry – it is always fun thrashing it out...

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Isobel

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:55

Good evening Augusta,

I seem to recall that when WOL poets came out in force to deride politicians over the expenses scandal, you came out in their defence, saying that many of us would act in the same way, given same set of circumstances – feathering our own nests being a very human failing. In that case, maybe the very many dishonest members of parliament are an accurate reflection of their very dishonest electorate.

I think what rattled you a little was the ‘bandwagon’ effect of the media. Don’t you appreciate that the same thing has happened with the question of paedophilia in the church? I would be the last person to condone anything or anyone that threatened a child – you should know me well enough by now! I think much of what the church has covered up is appalling. Anyone guilty of such crimes should not only be defrocked but castrated to boot and I would happily administer…

I still refuse to believe that these individuals represent a majority. I’m with you on the fact that celibacy in the priesthood is a nonsense. To be honest with you – if a priest did like indulging in the odd bit of S & M – it wouldn’t bother me overly – just so long as it didn’t involve children and was consensual.

It is possible that our two minds won’t meet – not to worry – it is always fun thrashing it out...

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winston plowes

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:44

Alison... fab this one. A strong rhyming scheme but not forced. Great Win :-)

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:22

Hi John, Thought you might like this. It's obviously from a while back -

Will Ronaldo?

Will eighty million pounds
Be too much for an arrogant kid?

Or will Ronaldo be crowned
As top scorer at Real Madrid?

Or will his talents be found
To be lacking and they will get rid?

And will Ronaldo be bound
To return to us, heaven forbid?

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Augusta Darling

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:17

Good Evening Isobel

Whilst I am the first to agree Isobel, many a fine and upstanding man of the cloth exists within the main body of the churches establishment, but they are far and few between. The farcicality of chastity for life , in my view the catalyst for this plague of violation and abuse, is main cause for this most unpalatable tainted ministry, in my view the evidence is over whelming.

Take the dishonesties and hypocrisy of our fine upstanding political representatives in parliament. If an honest man or woman be there let them be named, for the life of me I can not identify them.

This hypocrisy and theft of children’s innocence together with relentless avarice and manipulation of guilt has been aside the poor and ignorant for centuries and neither is it localised to the UK. This elitist poison has been with us world wide since we first vacated the caves and formed tribal communities.

‘A House Called Heaven’

My poem, however, does not really highlight the extent of my own views and feelings it is a simply a poem addressing a fantasy brothel called ‘Heaven’ and the type of cliental that would be attracted by such a heavenly establishment..

Augusta xx

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Augusta Darling

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:17

Good Evening Isobel

Whilst I am the first to agree Isobel, many a fine and upstanding man of the cloth exists within the main body of the churches establishment, but they are far and few between. The farcicality of chastity for life , in my view the catalyst for this plague of violation and abuse, is main cause for this most unpalatable tainted ministry, in my view the evidence is over whelming.

Take the dishonesties and hypocrisy of our fine upstanding political representatives in parliament. If an honest man or woman be there let them be named, for the life of me I can not identify them.

This hypocrisy and theft of children’s innocence together with relentless avarice and manipulation of guilt has been aside the poor and ignorant for centuries and neither is it localised to the UK. This elitist poison has been with us world wide since we first vacated the caves and formed tribal communities.

‘A House Called Heaven’

My poem, however, does not really highlight the extent of my own views and feelings it is a simply a poem addressing a fantasy brothel called ‘Heaven’ and the type of cliental that would be attracted by such a heavenly establishment..

Augusta xx

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John Coopey

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 23:03

Wow.
This makes my rather trivial effort on Sheds look a bit lightweight.
Very evocative Dave.
"theatre of dreams... 11 black bags...shed as broken as our hearts" - I can smell it too.
It made me think back to my uncle's shed, also transported (I think) from the grandad's. It was probably about 12ft * 8ft but I recollect it as being the size of a tennis court.
(Thanks for the post on Man U.)

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:57

hi there , thanks for the invite and kind comments , I have something on around that time but I thank you a lot for taking the time to invite me , maybe sometime I will be able to attend one of your events and contribute somehow.
Spencer

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:49

you banksy and twO-sheds seem on a rail.
please come on the 7th. www.mycharitypage.com/Beulah

Ican say no more.

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Beulah

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:45

love it!

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:44

Posted again after watching the news - what a world , bloody insane

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John Coopey

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:43

Thanks for your comments on "Sheds" - my rather simplistic guide to marriage guidance counselling.
I do hope your reference to my red hot poker was not a masturbatory allusion! I would have you know that this was simply an adolescent phase I was going through for the rest of my life.

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Beulah

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:43

now if it was not a different elephant i, being i, would love this. Since it was a different elephant, i like it and love the humour-somewhat. nice story.

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Thaumaturgically Charged

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:37

A gentle sensitive poem,suitably quirky and imaginative, I instinctively like Peggy whoever she is ;-)
Luv TC XX

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:27

Try Ekchart Tolle 'The Power of Now' he's pretty much into that, pretty good stuff too if you can pull it off. I can't I keep slipping into the past and the future....
TC XX

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:27

does the land breed the people or the people the land?

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Isobel

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 22:09

Spot on for a tiny minority that unfortunately taint by association the rest...

I know some very beautiful priests who do more good than evil.

I agree that the poem is well executed though. x

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 21:44

Nice one John. The last stanza is spot on - so many non-Mancunians support Man U precisely because they want 'their' team to win all the time. Below which are some murky psychological depths

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Alison Smiles

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:57

Sorry, I'm spamming a bit this weekend!

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ray miller

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:56

Hello John. I used to think I was a Villain, but I learnt recently that I'm a Villan. Political Correctness, I think.I wrote a poem at the start of the season about mid-table inertia etc. that I'll post after we've lost to Chelsea next week. Try some Viagra, John.

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Isobel

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:45

Thanks for your comment Rachel. Where've you been?? You obviously don't have a serious addiction to WOL - perhaps I should take up smoking LOL.

Hope to see you at a venue sooner or later. I might even brave the dreaded Preston wordsoup, if not...

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kath hewitt

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:44

Hi,

Thanks for taking time out to read and comment on 'the me inside'. Much appreciated :-)

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:42

Howdy doody!
Thank you for asking after my daughter, she is much better now, starting to look like she's on the right side of things.

My mentioning that i disliked the colour you used was merely an afterthought really, it hadn't occured to me why but now it's explained it makes sense.:-)
The me inside is a personal poem and is something i battle with daily but it's getting easier-yay!
Thanks for taking the time to comment.
All the best
Kath x

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Isobel

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:18

Very sad but beautifully constructed and packed with original and very evocative imagery.

It leaves me wishing there was something I could do other than read and comment.

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jean lucy thompson

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:12

Lovely words Marc Welcome to Write Out loud

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Isobel

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 20:11

Very telly rather than showy - but I totally approve of that!!!

An interesting observation of how we interact. I'm not sure I would have given it that title or that last line but I do like your thought processes.

I'm pretty much with you on self revelation. I am suspicious of people who tell me their life story, unsolicited, in the first 5 minutes of meeting them. Also of those who want to know all about mine. That doesn't mean to say I'm disinterested or a closed book. I just need time to know who I'm talking to.... That inbetween time should be spent getting on with it or enjoying 'the now', as you put it.

A very original subject matter.

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 19:33

love this one rich...yeh he was like that and yeh he did look like that.
thanks for the easter party...so much better without him xx

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John Coopey

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 18:37

Hello Ray
Thanks for the comments about Man U. I take it you're a Villain? I follow the Mighty Spurs myself so we have something in common - we both know at the start of a season what we're going to win!
I really enjoyed "....Sex". My own recipe predicates on 30 years of marriage which turns the hot pursuit into a solemn procession.
Keep posting and hope we have the chance to boast between us after the Cup Final.

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Banksy

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 17:59

a great poem max

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Dogstails

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 17:34

Hey Andrea, hope your well, i,m quite hooked on this site now, thanks babes XX

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Francine

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 17:09

Carpe diem : )

Joyeuses Pâques aussi.

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Beulah

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 17:07

sounds like a man I recently met. Oh call me pleaseeeeee!ha ha
nice one and I like the title

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Francine

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Sun 4th Apr 2010 17:00

Very moving... so true.

Joyeuses Pâques : )
xxx

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