NIGHT SIGHTS.
Monday 6th February 2012 9:56 pm
suburbia's quieter hours
this town centre thrives
odd weekend social mix
smiling students stroll
unwed mums patrolling
on wobbly stiletto shoes
hoping for a bonus shag
want some
a tall girl asks
men smoking outside
she wiggles hips
almost tripping
on slippery ground
heads twirl around
troublemakers in
different spots
blighting the lot of men
drivers of asian cabs
town centre police
arrive like blow flies
scenting dung
bouncers guarding doors
out leak bustling sounds
from macdonald’s and
burgher bars where
greasy food is served
to irritate the sturdiest gut
of youths who strut
civic centre car park
now thinned out
only mice at large
which forage
for abandoned crumbs
commuter's droppings
on concrete floors
in shadowy parts
a vagrant lurks
hoping for a coin's
windfall silvery glint
the alchemy of trade
sustenance for another
long cold wintry night
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Sun 12th Feb 2012 14:11
I do like this, like an intricate social-scene painting to the minutest detail. Maybe I find it a bit too 'intricate' with the 'mouse' lines which seem more suppositional than observed. Only because it is titled 'Night Sights', which begs the noise from the 'burger bars' too. I am being very picky, because the actual imagery is really good.