Manda Lee

Thanks everyone for your feed back. Have edited some of the the's out Cynthia, as you are right they are not needed. Will need much more work to cut it down any further though. Will have to think about that one. Guess we all get to that time of life Katy after having a few years of knowing who we are, having to adjust to new situations and start finding who we are again.
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lovely stuff - particular like the second stanza. reads almost like an identity crisis to me when I had my son.

I like this subject too, a very common realization that will appeal to many readers. I do think it could be tightened up to provide much more impact, perhaps by a third. Usually, articles like 'the' etc. need to be carefully culled. In the first stanza, the 'face' idea is split by the 'laughter' idea. IMO, this weakens both images. I think that a few strong, well-considered words are better than a string; the more that you expound roughly the same point, the less emotional impact you have on the reader.

Thought you seemed a bit different! Enjoyed this Manda and like the twist at the end (mind you the feeling sounds familiar), obviously seeing Joe Silva supporting the Alarm has taken it's toll! Good stuff X

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