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An inoffensive old man

An inoffensive old man

Sits down and contemplates his situation

While the years have scored his forehead

Intimidated by the gaze

Of over-complicated fear.

From an early pose his neutrality

Falls away from the shackles of home.

Far from domesticity, flung away

From fear and intimidation of peers

So devoid of attachments.

But he sips warm milk.

 

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Dave D Poet Rhumour

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Thu 23rd Feb 2012 22:23

Interesting piece as mike said. I thought that title might describe me - but fortunately the last line conclusively proves I wasn't the inspiration - I don't drink milk. ;) Best wishes, Dave

Noetic-fret!

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Mon 23rd Jan 2012 23:28

Interesting piece. The last line......hmmmm! Makes me think of the old mans attachments or, his agedness. Very clever how it imbues upon the reader to go back again and read it, just in case you missed something the first time round.

Actually, i think i enjoyed this piece more than at first thought.

Nice work

keep posting

best wishes

mike

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