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BOTTOMS UP.

 

i wonder

through the

jewelled eyes

of cats

what vistas

are beheld

a trouser leg

the pleated skirt

or clumsy feet

which darken out

an azure sky and

tread too close

 

such thoughts

abound on

cooler nights

when car hoods

still bear heat

for veteran sorts

while summer sees

us loll luxuriantly

grooming ourselves

with supple paws

or peering upwards

through citrine eyes

 

egyptians

knew us best

believing us

powerful gods

and so we held

them trance-like

today by crafty means

traffic remains in lanes

reducing pile-ups

simply because

our peepers deflect

luminosity at night

 

◄ LUMINANCE.

NOT GUILTY AS CHARGED. ►

Comments

stella jones

Mon 6th Feb 2012 17:18



Ah clever Philipos. I enjoy your ideas very much..

Philipos

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Wed 1st Feb 2012 17:51

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your constructive comments on Bottoms Up. Sorry my response was so long coming. Hoping to get back into the swing of things with one or two hurdles out of the way. CHEERS.

Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Sun 22nd Jan 2012 17:31

I do like this, Philipos. I finally read it in full sentences and got the drift, after some lame attempts to sort it out. But, IMO, I don't see why you couldn't have wound up simply with:

'our eyes deflect
light at night.'

which stays with the 'cool' tone - short and direct, punchy. 'peepers' and 'luminosity' were my undoing.

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