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Dark and Mystic Waters

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Fire frosted sting and tingle

Stars alight in the twinkling of her eye

Comes she softly then upon a feathering dawn

Blinking into the risen edge of day

A chilling kiss before the first birdsong

Before the jangle tangle of the wetlands

 Before bejewelled webs spirit curling mists

Before dark and mystic waters

Where she waits within rush reed banks of dream

Calling out my name in her ethereal sleep

Calling out my name

Calling out

 

Calling  

 

Calling

 

Painting - By Gus Jonsson

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Cate Greenlees

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Sat 8th Jan 2011 12:48

Magic and mystical... and bewitchingly chilling.

Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Fri 7th Jan 2011 20:15

I like the feeling of this, the aura; not sure if I'm wafting through a sex metaphor or not. I especially like 'Where she waits in rush reed banks of dream'. Are you writing from a man's point of view, or are you a fay obeying a Druid mistress?

Augusta Darling

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Fri 7th Jan 2011 16:17

I thank you so much gentlemen, for your extremely warm and encouraging comments.

Many thanks once again.
Augusta x

John Aikman

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Fri 7th Jan 2011 12:07

Note to self *I must change my signature Gif...I must change my signature Gif*

:-)

This is a lovely poem A. Nice that you still post. I had a go at some more erotic offerings myself (remembering our 'spat' of 2009)I'd love your critique of them. I mean that most sincerely.

Anyway, thank you for the lyrical sensuousness of Dark Waters.

Cheers

Jx

Greg Freeman

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Fri 7th Jan 2011 10:37

Lyrically rich. As a slightly obsessive Dylanologist I appreciated this line in particular - "before the jangle tangle of the wetlands" - which made me think of both Mr Tambourine Man and Sad Eyed Lady of the Lowlands.

andy n

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Fri 7th Jan 2011 08:17

Enjoyed this Augusta in particular the reference to calling at the end... Gus's painting goes really well with the work gotta say too - bet he really enjoyed this piece too x

Philipos

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Thu 6th Jan 2011 19:53

Nice feeling to this Augusta - stirs the imagination of the kind we get hot-flushed about when we brush with nature

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