the butcher's wife
Posted on Friday 25th April 2008 7:09 pm
this is really new and very unfinished- if anyone has the time or inclination to offer me any criticism it'd be really really appreciated! specifically what you think about using internal rhyming- if its too clumsy, if it helps the poem to communicate at all, or if its just rubbish!! ok thanks, sally xx
The Butcher’s Wife
What can I do for you mate?
you ask, and my arms ache
to pull up the leg of my neat,
monday-pressed trousers
and reveal to you the ankle beneath,
where tan gossamer threads contour
my close-shaven ankles so beautifully.
It is muscle memory, in my mind
I have done this a thousand times.
I wish you could see me, pretty
in my stocking feet.
And though we are both too old,
my ridiculous notion of a womb
swells and blooms
to think of bearing you boys.
Boys we could raise thick and strong
on your good cuts of lamb
and my golden apple pie.
Like the one that I brought you,
saying my sister had made too many.



Tai Mahmud
Wed 13th Aug 2008 23:50
Hey Sally,
Yh i ma indeed. This is my myspace page, more stuff on there. Thanks for your comments, always means alot :)
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